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Spiritual Love
I framed the day love tossed me
and he caught me,
in a catch that could be described as
‘the smile that cracked my normalcy’.
Mind beautifully messed-up from his
moist hello.
Sand seconds, sufficient time
to steal my voice and air.
His nearness validates my inebriated- stare
I toke his blue heaven,
a high justified by his carnal smile.
He captivated the pinnacle of my
mental symphony,
intrinsically eclipsing
my hope of what it genuinely means
to be in love.
Daydreaming…. at night
with thoughts of him beneath my skin,
as if I peeled back a layer
and allowed him to climb in.
(…..and his touch?)
His touch restarts my heartbeat
when slowed with pain,
reviving its rhythm with a velocity
that would make infinity shame.
A love that tasted spiritually inspired,
as if cherubs were in attendance-
ripped love from his appendage
and made me consume it whole.
I became whole,
complete, full on him.
He’s the liquid strength
that fills my cup
and I’ve been
slowly drinking him...
steadily
Rain~
(for comp. A.Haze influenced)
Written by
rain1courtel
(RainC)
Published 5th Dec 2015
| Edited 1st Apr 2016
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Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 4:41pm
First rate Rain! The love seems both healing and habit forming, interestingly enough.
"His nearness validates my inebriated- stare
I toke his blue heaven,
a high justified by his carnal smile.
He captivated the pinnacle of my
mental symphony,"
And I become intoxicated just reading these lines:
"He’s the liquid strength
that fills my cup
and I’ve been
slowly drinking him
every since"
One detail: When you say "every" in the last line I think you mean "ever." Other than that this is beautifully worded, a keeper if I ever read one. Fine work!
"His nearness validates my inebriated- stare
I toke his blue heaven,
a high justified by his carnal smile.
He captivated the pinnacle of my
mental symphony,"
And I become intoxicated just reading these lines:
"He’s the liquid strength
that fills my cup
and I’ve been
slowly drinking him
every since"
One detail: When you say "every" in the last line I think you mean "ever." Other than that this is beautifully worded, a keeper if I ever read one. Fine work!
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 4:48pm
....good lookin' out darlin' Thank you for catching that!
I'm so happy you enjoyed the content, my goal was to show the mental impact he had on me before I fell in love.....
Thank you crow! I appreciate you keeping her. :)
I'm so happy you enjoyed the content, my goal was to show the mental impact he had on me before I fell in love.....
Thank you crow! I appreciate you keeping her. :)
Re. Spiritual Love
Anonymous
5th Dec 2015 4:48pm
such divine connectivity
this poem reeks of it..
'His touch restarts my heartbeat
when slowed with pain,
reviving its rhythm with a velocity
that would make infinity shame.
A love that tasted spiritually inspired,
as if cherubs were in attendance-
ripped love from his appendage
and made me consume it whole.'
..when heaven and earth
occupy the same space..
libations poured in thy holy grail
healing magnified through
the most sensuous trauma..
yeah Rain..this poem inspires
poetry..
..
'nuff said
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
"..when heaven and earth
occupy the same space..
libations poured in thy holy grail
healing magnified through
the most sensuous trauma.."<---I'm so peanut butter&Jel-ous that I don't have the skills to create such power in words, like you Naajir. Damn this was deep! :) Thank you for the pen love, and shelving her in your cyber bookcase
occupy the same space..
libations poured in thy holy grail
healing magnified through
the most sensuous trauma.."<---I'm so peanut butter&Jel-ous that I don't have the skills to create such power in words, like you Naajir. Damn this was deep! :) Thank you for the pen love, and shelving her in your cyber bookcase
Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 4:58pm
i don't who he is dear Tara but he's one hell of a lucky dude! I just hope he appreciates your soft, expressive sensuality. Exquisite write this.
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 6:19pm
...I think I'm the lucky one, Tony! ;) Thanks luv, appreciate you so very much!
Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 5:43pm
pens down biatches, this is how you write a feckin' love poem
oh my stars [&] garters, lady rain you've written a piece of sheer transcendence
adored this
xo
oh my stars [&] garters, lady rain you've written a piece of sheer transcendence
adored this
xo
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 6:32pm
lmbo...... blushing...
#stoked.com by your comment beautiful! Thank you dancedoll!
#stoked.com by your comment beautiful! Thank you dancedoll!
Re. Spiritual Love
Gorgeous Rain...with the pic..i might think you were talking about a child of yours..and the special intamacy..which you always produce in your words, and with your reader..a nice affect of a poet.
But iiii dont think so..
Too sensual.
I use incorrect grammar a lot..its how my tawlk is lol but you do not..your tongue too refined. Ever at the end..should be every.
Other than that..another fucking phénomène piece darlin!
I dont know, read it again...is it? Your son...
Love
Jen
But iiii dont think so..
Too sensual.
I use incorrect grammar a lot..its how my tawlk is lol but you do not..your tongue too refined. Ever at the end..should be every.
Other than that..another fucking phénomène piece darlin!
I dont know, read it again...is it? Your son...
Love
Jen
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
Well shit, is it ever or every....? lol... I had 'every' but read Crow's critique and thought he was correct. Jeez,. yall got me questioning my own damn speech. I'll just fix that with another word. Yes Jen, the way you talk does reflect incorrect grammar, has me scratching my head sometimes, but I know it's often done purposely because you're a very smart individual. Also, my pic seemed motherly to you? Don't see that at all, don't see how you think this is a child with the content of the ink.....Wow! Gonna change the pic now...
Thank you Jen for the comment and critique.
Thank you Jen for the comment and critique.
Re. Spiritual Love
Anonymous
5th Dec 2015 6:41pm
Miss Rain, as always, your work is not only meaning, spiritual, influential but inspirational. I wish you the best of luck in the comp;)
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 7:10pm
Thank you so much beautiful Devlin, a sweet comment you've left me.
I only enter comps that challenge me, hoping to feel personally victorious once I've pressed post. Anything after doesn't really matter. xo
I only enter comps that challenge me, hoping to feel personally victorious once I've pressed post. Anything after doesn't really matter. xo
Re. Spiritual Love
Anonymous
5th Dec 2015 7:12pm
Oh boy, Rain, you went and stirred my innards,
and then some . . . I devoured your words, they
entered my soul and rested there for awhile so
moved was I by them I began to experience a
feeling somewhat like I was a Peeping Tom, so
I reread it a couple of times in order to get all
out of it possible. And I did just that.
and then some . . . I devoured your words, they
entered my soul and rested there for awhile so
moved was I by them I began to experience a
feeling somewhat like I was a Peeping Tom, so
I reread it a couple of times in order to get all
out of it possible. And I did just that.
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
6th Dec 2015 4:07am
...so happy this touched your soul, Jerry! I really wanted this ink to stirs the spirit. Pleased you liked it.
Thank you so much!
Thank you so much!
Re. Spiritual Love
5th Dec 2015 8:57pm
Now if only there was a Starbucks where I could buy a cup of that kind of love... I would get drunk every day!
That is one steamy brew... jj
That is one steamy brew... jj
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
6th Dec 2015 4:10am
lol........this brew is homemade, an original flavor.... Thank you jj....
Re. Spiritual Love
Anonymous
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6th Dec 2015 1:17am
Mmmmmmm Sexy Rain......what a delight to stop by your way again......be missed you......your writes are always soul touching.....I read you offline while I was gone......enjoyed this very much xo :)
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
6th Dec 2015 4:15am
....this was sexy to you?....lol.... maybe it does stir the flesh. ;)
It's good to see you back writing. I hope this is not a short stay...... Thank you for the ink love....
It's good to see you back writing. I hope this is not a short stay...... Thank you for the ink love....
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
6th Dec 2015 4:19am
...... thank you for sharing your opinion/critique. Though you may feel those lines seemed to be stuffed in, they were strategically placed there, intentionally with purpose.
Re. Spiritual Love
6th Dec 2015 10:31am
Gosh...it seems nearly impossible you could outdo your own work, but hey YOU OUT DONE your own work!! lol... Such a beautiful, passion laced spilling from a soul
that REIGNS supremely over 'mind' :)
that REIGNS supremely over 'mind' :)
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 8:06pm
aww.... that is truly sweet to say Rich! You flatter me....constantly! Thank you so very much...
Re. Spiritual Love
Anonymous
6th Dec 2015 10:55am
absolutely lovely. thanks for the read, rain xx
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 8:07pm
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 8:09pm
Thank you sonsista! Your ink support has always been appreciated by me.
Brings me joy whenever I feel your presence roaming my page. Xo
Brings me joy whenever I feel your presence roaming my page. Xo
Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 00:53am
Rain it is such a pleasure to read you ...
Such a Beautiful piece, Thank You ...
JeJe xx
Such a Beautiful piece, Thank You ...
JeJe xx
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 8:10pm
Hey Je! Nice to see you knocking at my front door! I'm doin' the happy dance! :)
Thank you sweety!
Thank you sweety!
Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 2:28pm
a celestial love lovely Rain..
love these lines..
"A love that tasted spiritually inspired,
as if cherubs were in attendance-
ripped love from his appendage
and made me consume it whole.
I became whole,
complete, full on him.
He’s the liquid strength
that fills my cup
and I’ve been
slowly drinking him...
steadily"
so very beautiful..
love Crim
love these lines..
"A love that tasted spiritually inspired,
as if cherubs were in attendance-
ripped love from his appendage
and made me consume it whole.
I became whole,
complete, full on him.
He’s the liquid strength
that fills my cup
and I’ve been
slowly drinking him...
steadily"
so very beautiful..
love Crim
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
7th Dec 2015 8:14pm
..... hey there Crim. Thank you sexy one! :)
Celestial would definitely be a word that represent this type of love. So pleased by your presence.....
Celestial would definitely be a word that represent this type of love. So pleased by your presence.....
Re. Spiritual Love
8th Dec 2015 1:19am
I've been
Slowly drinking him....
Steadily
Savoring the taste
Mark of a true lady
Who understands that love
Is a fire
It can burn too fast
Or die the the same
Long slow burn
Will keep the night chill gone
Till the end of days
Remarkable writing, your use of words are mesmerizing. I am always moved with your way with words
Slowly drinking him....
Steadily
Savoring the taste
Mark of a true lady
Who understands that love
Is a fire
It can burn too fast
Or die the the same
Long slow burn
Will keep the night chill gone
Till the end of days
Remarkable writing, your use of words are mesmerizing. I am always moved with your way with words
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
14th Dec 2015 1:19am
*my heart flutters*...... your words have that type of effect on me. Thank you G!
Re. Spiritual Love
9th Dec 2015 7:33pm
this poem is as beautiful as a blue heaven, supremely conveyed, get yo drink on babygirl...
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Re: Re. Spiritual Love
14th Dec 2015 1:21am
*melting*.... Dean, your comments are supreme..... thank you so much.....
Re. Spiritual Love
11th Dec 2015 2:16pm
Re: Re. Spiritual Love
14th Dec 2015 1:22am
Thank you sinisterpenz for stopping by to give my ink some love... :)
I'll be sure to check out your art soon....
I'll be sure to check out your art soon....