Opaque Rocket

Powerful feelings in this write DPW feeling for you..

love Brenda

Thank you Crim.

Trying to figure out the many undertones of this ink, starting with the title.  you have such a way with words...but even more than that, there is a lingering depth in your writes.  This one....melancholy.  

The title came as something moving, heading somewhere, but its not very clear where its going. But there is little that can stop the momentum without it crashing. Right? Thank you for your thoughtful response Suzanne.

I just hope the momentum doesn't end with a gun.  This is very bleak DPW, and I hope it doesn't accurately reflect your state of mind.

"The future is vaguely clear
It fails to show me why I am here
When my friends are no longer near"

"Vaguely clear" is just one example of your astonishing way with words.  Love the structure, rhyme scheme and theme, more thoughtful than opaque.  Fine work
 

The gun was more symbolic of death, nothing of a suicidal gesture. I thought it might be mistaken as that as well. But I hit the publish button in spite of the fact. I'm a rebel that way.

I appreciate your words, Crow. This was more of a reflection on things going on at the moment. Sort of like, the path that brought me here was illuminated, however, now it seems a dim bulb in the sky.

imagery suited to the emotion
is a feeling well dressed...

or in other words a poem...

really good!

Thank you dart. Needs a suit and tie on this one is what you are saying.

I loved the pictures this gave me in my mind when I was reading...loved it.  <3

Thank you mysterious. I am always glad when the ideas gets interpreted well enough into pictures.

Really enjoyed the write sir Play as always. So much imagery throughout; so many thoughts of the future. I am sure it will not be nearly as bleak. You have definitely stirred emotions with this write.

Keith

It may not be as bleak as the write. But the mind is not static abd it can transcend and it can descend. Appreciate your comments K2M.

the rocket travels quickly,
enjoy the wine & songs while they last.
well constructed...

Appreciate your comment and read JF. I have another bottle. Come and join.

Nice to see you taryn. Hugs are nice. Boners are better. Haha. Yeah. We are all having our trials. Something to work out on our own. But perhaps together.

Loooong journeys mean the colors of the day stretch out proportionally. I never catch fear in hearing the gray-sky kind of blues like this, because it's an illustration of right now... You can only produce stuff this distilled when you soak up every drop of the day's emotions, past the high impact points of struggle, relief, anticipation and pleasure. Good close glimpse.

Also I like seeing others recognize how temporary their own brilliance of magic, creation and experience is. It shows fortitude in that solitude. It's times like these that make you level up as a writer.

Loki, really appreciate your insightful comment here. Slowing time down is an art to make it intentional rather than through some agony we might be facing. But the colors last longer.  How much can we stand the color blue)

This touch'd my seams grandly
& deep..  I appreciate your
Opaque Rocket tour.

But thing is for sure, we have to
learn how to hear & feel of our
own musique.. so difficult ..true
but no one else will hear it unless
we abide unto first.

But, heck who am I to convey
such a comment. Life is challenging
we just have to face . Heart felt
share my darling one.


-Howlings