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Out of Darkness
Written for a 300 word or less exercise the given theme was darkness.
Light the candle he said.
I groped in the blackness for it then found the matches. The Lucifer scraped into life across the sandpaper hissing, flaring. It hurt my eyes.
'Light the candle' he repeated.
I obeyed
'Now read the notice on the wall' he ordered preventing me from getting closer.
'I cannot' I replied
'Why not?' he asked
'There is not enough light the candle is not powerful enough' I told him
'It is' he stated 'read the notice.'
I held the flame closer screwing up my eyes 'I still cannot read it' I declared there still isn't enough light.’
'There is enough think what else can assist you?'
'I don't know. Thecandle is too dim and it can't be done' I snapped deeply irritated at being awakened before dawn on this my last day at home before going off to fight the Kaiser.
He sighed and took my shaving mirror from the dresser he held it behind the flame and the reflected light shone bright upon the message. Now I could see it clearly.
'Read it to me' he commanded.
‘You will always have enough light, enough power to see your way through any of life's dark moments' I read 'you just need to focus it.'
'Do you understand now?
'Yes father' I said gratefully
Light the candle he said.
I groped in the blackness for it then found the matches. The Lucifer scraped into life across the sandpaper hissing, flaring. It hurt my eyes.
'Light the candle' he repeated.
I obeyed
'Now read the notice on the wall' he ordered preventing me from getting closer.
'I cannot' I replied
'Why not?' he asked
'There is not enough light the candle is not powerful enough' I told him
'It is' he stated 'read the notice.'
I held the flame closer screwing up my eyes 'I still cannot read it' I declared there still isn't enough light.’
'There is enough think what else can assist you?'
'I don't know. Thecandle is too dim and it can't be done' I snapped deeply irritated at being awakened before dawn on this my last day at home before going off to fight the Kaiser.
He sighed and took my shaving mirror from the dresser he held it behind the flame and the reflected light shone bright upon the message. Now I could see it clearly.
'Read it to me' he commanded.
‘You will always have enough light, enough power to see your way through any of life's dark moments' I read 'you just need to focus it.'
'Do you understand now?
'Yes father' I said gratefully
Published 9th Oct 2015
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Very fine Blocat!
Interesting choice, Lucifer in this poem about focusing light.
Lucifer mentioned once in the Bible, not as Satan, but in reference to first light of Venus as star.
Lucifer's definition being light bearer.
Easily a "father" of your own understanding in this poem. But the term giving layers and depth of meaning here.
I brilliant the use of mirror, nessesity always the mother of invention if we open our minds and use the things we have as tools to face fears, listen to our consciousness or Higher power, we can use and brighten our light and way.
This also, made me think of the Pharos or lighthouse if you prefer of Alexandria, thought to be one of the wonders of the ancient world. Depated whether the technology could be had for such a thing to exist, collective theory held that a bright fire made luminous beacon (or weapon?) By mirror, guiding ships to safe harbor. Though deeper meaning in this piece, proving their is a way!
Loved this!
Need to take a few off my RL to make room for more, this might be on it, though I suspect when I read further into your work, I will find more I'd love to hoard!
A digression, I love your pro pic! What a charming happy smile coming from this intellectual, talented man, a light in itself.
With respect and admiration, a new fan.
Calamity of Jennifer
Interesting choice, Lucifer in this poem about focusing light.
Lucifer mentioned once in the Bible, not as Satan, but in reference to first light of Venus as star.
Lucifer's definition being light bearer.
Easily a "father" of your own understanding in this poem. But the term giving layers and depth of meaning here.
I brilliant the use of mirror, nessesity always the mother of invention if we open our minds and use the things we have as tools to face fears, listen to our consciousness or Higher power, we can use and brighten our light and way.
This also, made me think of the Pharos or lighthouse if you prefer of Alexandria, thought to be one of the wonders of the ancient world. Depated whether the technology could be had for such a thing to exist, collective theory held that a bright fire made luminous beacon (or weapon?) By mirror, guiding ships to safe harbor. Though deeper meaning in this piece, proving their is a way!
Loved this!
Need to take a few off my RL to make room for more, this might be on it, though I suspect when I read further into your work, I will find more I'd love to hoard!
A digression, I love your pro pic! What a charming happy smile coming from this intellectual, talented man, a light in itself.
With respect and admiration, a new fan.
Calamity of Jennifer
Thank you dear Jen,
I'm so pleased you liked my story. You are the first person to comment who has realised its full significance.
After reading some of your comments on the competition site I will certainly be reading your work. Lucifer, by the way, was also the name of a brand of U K matches popular during the first world war. I do love writing but, at the age of 73, I may have left it a bit too late.
The photo you were kind enough to mention was taken about two years ago on a dive boat in the Menai Straights between Anglesey Island and the Welsh coast. A very beautiful place to dive where the seals are playful and friendly. I did my last dive this year and sold my gear. UK waters are very cold. I will dive again when on holiday in warmer climes.
You may be disappointed reading some of my stuff as I love humorous stuff which seems to be one genre sadly lacking on this site. I do however write some serious stuff and some quite dark stuff, too. I liked your comments in the competition obviously you are a very deep lady so I look forward to reading commenting on your work. I'm quite busy at the moment as I've just finished my first thriller entitled "The Flames of Jihad" and let it loose on Amazon. If you want you can read the first two chapters free but it's not a 'ladies' book the hero is a grumpy old bastard who loves arse kicking drug dealers and thieves. :-)
Anyway I've rambled on long enough to put a glass eye to sleep. Here's the link if you want to look at the novel or ignore if not:
http://www.amazon.co.uk/Flames-Jihad-Army-One-Book-ebook/dp/B015JCQZL6/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1443776054&sr=1-1&keywords=The+Flames+of+Jihad
Luv & hugz,
Tony Poet
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I'm so pleased you liked my story. You are the first person to comment who has realised its full significance.
After reading some of your comments on the competition site I will certainly be reading your work. Lucifer, by the way, was also the name of a brand of U K matches popular during the first world war. I do love writing but, at the age of 73, I may have left it a bit too late.
The photo you were kind enough to mention was taken about two years ago on a dive boat in the Menai Straights between Anglesey Island and the Welsh coast. A very beautiful place to dive where the seals are playful and friendly. I did my last dive this year and sold my gear. UK waters are very cold. I will dive again when on holiday in warmer climes.
You may be disappointed reading some of my stuff as I love humorous stuff which seems to be one genre sadly lacking on this site. I do however write some serious stuff and some quite dark stuff, too. I liked your comments in the competition obviously you are a very deep lady so I look forward to reading commenting on your work. I'm quite busy at the moment as I've just finished my first thriller entitled "The Flames of Jihad" and let it loose on Amazon. If you want you can read the first two chapters free but it's not a 'ladies' book the hero is a grumpy old bastard who loves arse kicking drug dealers and thieves. :-)
Anyway I've rambled on long enough to put a glass eye to sleep. Here's the link if you want to look at the novel or ignore if not:
http://www.amazon.co.uk/Flames-Jihad-Army-One-Book-ebook/dp/B015JCQZL6/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1443776054&sr=1-1&keywords=The+Flames+of+Jihad
Luv & hugz,
Tony Poet
Read poems by blocat
Love Humorous, I do Humorous erotica a lot. Read melocholy Barbie my Halloween trick poem is a short joke.
And "an almost unbelievable tale of hillbilly lust"
I think I'll really enjoy all sweet,;! And I'll most certainly look at the novel.
Jennifer
And "an almost unbelievable tale of hillbilly lust"
I think I'll really enjoy all sweet,;! And I'll most certainly look at the novel.
Jennifer
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15th Oct 2015 4:12am
Hey babycakes, love the witty and creative way you’ve twisted our minds with a little suspense as to what the notice on the wall said. The message was sublime.
~nothing can dim the light that shines within~
love this my funnyman...xo
~nothing can dim the light that shines within~
love this my funnyman...xo
Thanks Tara you sweet creature. I hope you're well and full of inspiration. today I love your work.
Tony
Tony
