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Jennifer finding Wonderland
I was lost inside "We are all mad around here." Just the worst fucking way to be.
I ran right down that bunny hole to hoard the fuckmeup treats.
Alice, was turning into a trick,
some Johns sweet little thing.
The Mad hatter no longer talking jive, was making perfect sense to me.
And that damned grinning cat,
no twisted insight,
just howled all night in heat.
I cut up the Queen of Hearts roses,
hoping she'd have my head.
The bitch invited me to tea.
I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me.
But you know how those stories usually end,
All the same players,
wind up to be in some not so real dream.
I fought hard to just wake the fuck up, and ran back to Jennifer's good crazy mad Wonderland Reality.
I ran right down that bunny hole to hoard the fuckmeup treats.
Alice, was turning into a trick,
some Johns sweet little thing.
The Mad hatter no longer talking jive, was making perfect sense to me.
And that damned grinning cat,
no twisted insight,
just howled all night in heat.
I cut up the Queen of Hearts roses,
hoping she'd have my head.
The bitch invited me to tea.
I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me.
But you know how those stories usually end,
All the same players,
wind up to be in some not so real dream.
I fought hard to just wake the fuck up, and ran back to Jennifer's good crazy mad Wonderland Reality.
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Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 1:24pm
so i'm bringing my famous devils food cake to this tea & anyone who says there's too much frosting gets spanks
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despite the air of whimsy herein, there's a chaos seeping through... tendrils of mist from tea cups that can't be disguised as steam...
"I cut up the Queen of Hearts roses,
hoping she'd have my head.
The bitch invited me to tea."
^^^^^
was a stroke of damn genius there
... for how long can one try to run both from & towards oneself, i wonder
cheers for a most excellent read this afternoon, miss jen, always nice to be left pondering the betweens of the lines
xoxox
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despite the air of whimsy herein, there's a chaos seeping through... tendrils of mist from tea cups that can't be disguised as steam...
"I cut up the Queen of Hearts roses,
hoping she'd have my head.
The bitch invited me to tea."
^^^^^
was a stroke of damn genius there
... for how long can one try to run both from & towards oneself, i wonder
cheers for a most excellent read this afternoon, miss jen, always nice to be left pondering the betweens of the lines
xoxox
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Re: Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 1:47pm
Ah right on Katja. You have made me doubly happy this a.m. and gave me a tickle. And absolutely hit my nail on the head lol thank you doll. You have a couple im eager to read. After ☕ coffeee. ⭐
😻😻
Jennifer
😻😻
Jennifer
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 2:19pm
The Mad hatter no longer talking jive, was making perfect sense to me. Lol when people you think are crazy start making sense is when your in trouble .I been there before. A very interesting twist on Alice's wonderland.great job with this piece.
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3rd Sep 2015 2:22pm
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
Anonymous
3rd Sep 2015 2:38pm
Delightfully twisted. Am I dreaming I resd this story? Perhaps I live in Jennifer's reality and the dream is merely its continuum. Or is it the beginning, or are we in both places at the ssme time? I will stay for tea.
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Re: Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 2:51pm
Please stay Frederick. Id love to be in both places at the same time. Always inspiring kitten.
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J
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J
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 3:17pm
lovely Jennifer this is so delightful the mad hatter always makes sense doesn't he?
loved this part..
"Alice, was turning into a trick,
some Johns sweet little thing.
The Mad hatter no longer talking jive, was making perfect sense to me.
great spin on a classic :)
love this ink..
with love Brenda
loved this part..
"Alice, was turning into a trick,
some Johns sweet little thing.
The Mad hatter no longer talking jive, was making perfect sense to me.
great spin on a classic :)
love this ink..
with love Brenda
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Re: Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 3:21pm
Thank you love. And i read one from you in competition that i am gonna sink my nails into again after about my third cup of brew! In ghetto life comp. So good. I read your stuff and say ok, this is my fav and then Damned if im not sayin it agin next time.
Be good to be bad queen of heart ons lol
Luv u
Jen
Be good to be bad queen of heart ons lol
Luv u
Jen
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 5:35pm
Reality is tricky enough to handle, at least for me. Still can't resist twisting it a little now and then. I love the way you take this story and adapt it to your own life with such a sense of humor.
"I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me."
Same here. I never did catch up.
Makes me think a little of Jefferson Airplane's "White Rabbit" with its exhortations to "feed your head." But your take's more grounded and a lot funnier. And it has a happy ending!
Really enjoyed this! Just "remember what the dormouse said..."
"I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me."
Same here. I never did catch up.
Makes me think a little of Jefferson Airplane's "White Rabbit" with its exhortations to "feed your head." But your take's more grounded and a lot funnier. And it has a happy ending!
Really enjoyed this! Just "remember what the dormouse said..."
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Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 5:41pm
Feeeed yooourr heeeeaaad!!
Or...
Twinkle twinkle little bat, how i wonder where your at.
Lol baby bro played door 🐁 mouse in k production. That was his line.
Thanks Crow. Always happy to have you enjoy.
👀
Jennifer
Or...
Twinkle twinkle little bat, how i wonder where your at.
Lol baby bro played door 🐁 mouse in k production. That was his line.
Thanks Crow. Always happy to have you enjoy.
👀
Jennifer
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 7:16pm
Wow... I hadn't realized you were such a fine storyteller!! This was awesome n I loved every bit it :)
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Re: Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 7:22pm
Story telling is the life blood of the ozark hillbilly tradition. Its a fine art down here, how history was passed. Imigrants came, couldnt read or write. Would work dawn to dusk all week, but save a night on the weekends, gather at a general store, round a stove and cracker barrel. Tell stories and play fiddle, mandolin, guitar into the early dawn. Get on there horses if they were lucky, prolly mules, and set off miles to home. They would sleep on the backs of their mules, the animals knew their way home.
Read hillbilly lust
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Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
Anonymous
3rd Sep 2015 7:46pm
Wonderful! Wonderful! Fantastic!! I love this sorta x-rated take on Alice and her friends. Good to be back and reading you again.
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Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 7:54pm
Honey im so thrilled to see you back! Screw my poem, hug your neck!! Jerry, muuuuaaagh!
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Anonymous
3rd Sep 2015 8:49pm
L-o-v-e-d that hug . . . That was a keeper. Here's one back. (((((hug)))))
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4th Sep 2015 00:26am
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3rd Sep 2015 8:09pm
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
3rd Sep 2015 11:58pm
J. A jazzy poem full of fun, madness on lots of fuckery. The images are seared in my mind: Alice turning into a trick, the cat howling instead of grinning and the the roses snipped off at the top of them. But ultimately Jennifer's own world is the devil she knows and can't wait to get back to. Genius!
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4th Sep 2015 00:08am
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
4th Sep 2015 00:36am
Enjoy your prose every damn time! I adore the 'reality vs fantasy'..both being a chaotic fuck-all.
dittos there.. I seem to remember most these old tales being directed by dream to show extreme
parts of one's self.. & you define so much self in this fun ditty.
"I ran right down that bunny hole to hoard the fuckmeup treats."
~line of the year, any way you take it..
"I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me."
~this reinforces your 'running to the dreamed bunnyhole' to me. brilliant tie-together luvies!
Perfect twisty tell of a tale and my country heart knows the import of the story telling.
great set up and flow thru.. lil vixen of pen Jen that I loves.. *mwahs
~d
dittos there.. I seem to remember most these old tales being directed by dream to show extreme
parts of one's self.. & you define so much self in this fun ditty.
"I ran right down that bunny hole to hoard the fuckmeup treats."
~line of the year, any way you take it..
"I do not know what time the rabbit kept,
I was too busy running after me."
~this reinforces your 'running to the dreamed bunnyhole' to me. brilliant tie-together luvies!
Perfect twisty tell of a tale and my country heart knows the import of the story telling.
great set up and flow thru.. lil vixen of pen Jen that I loves.. *mwahs
~d
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4th Sep 2015 00:46am
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
4th Sep 2015 7:50am
Reality...who needs it;)...I fell asleep inside a dream,and woke up in reality...you know what your doin Jen
or I mean Alice;)-great read...
or I mean Alice;)-great read...
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Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
4th Sep 2015 8:03am
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
5th Sep 2015 1:47pm
This is such a good rendition of a classic tale <3 I love the twist to it!
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5th Sep 2015 1:49pm
Re. Jennifer finding Wonderland
Anonymous
24th Apr 2020 10:17pm
This is brilliant, I love it. And that picture is perfect. I wrote something on Alice in Wonderland a while back that I will need to search for, it is not on here. Anyway, this made me smile and I really needed that. I was an absolute wreck yesterday. I want some fuckmeuptreats please...
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24th Apr 2020 10:34pm