cry lonely

skillfully written, John,
expressively consistent
in its atmosphere of
despair...

HA! U are finally letting go, letting your emotions show!! I LOVE YOU JOHNNY! true story!!
I love  this raw emotionally charged roller coster ride of feelings, your feelings!!
NO not back to lonliness! Go out taste it, live it, and John,,,,  LOVE IT!!!
Always
Zazzles xoxoxo

My hope for the male subject you depict in your write, is that he finds someone decent, who's capable of nourishing his heart and tempering the storms that rage in the depths of his soul.

Unfortunately, decent is rarely found in a bar as they always become just another stab in the dark... touch & go.

I'll steal the above reference to bar pick up's being a stab in a dark purely to re-assert some validity in the statement for one so seemingly at a loss with the world of compassion or love.
The labour's of finding such happiness seem at times more troublesome than the labour of retaining it, that spark goes quickly for too many even when we think we have it secured.
Someone said skillfully written and I would agree, definitely the work of a poet here, and since when has a great poet found romance to be easy (no examples)
I actually find the 6th stanza to be the most depressing of all, the baseness of human nature becoming so consuming that it shows as little more than desperation.
I admire this as a poem
Though it's sentiments make me loathe aswell as pity the character portrayed.
Loved the read
(Great picture)

Truthfully? That was sad but awesome. It flowed well and spoke to everyones emotions! loved it.

As always John, you are brilliant and I agree with shadow starzzz ; )

'the price of passion
is paid with a dream'
you the best john.

Where is this place? ... A great dive bar has so many possibilities and you've outlined it all so well

Being lonely is such a tough thing...and you have described it here so beautifully JohnFeddeler...even to share that tender moment...that connection to another...only to part ways...makes you feel lonlier...who knew?

"a misty-eyed brunette
kinda leans into me
apologizes quickly
but I don’t let her leave"

Oh those misty-eyed brunettes which bump into you, and ensure the continuing populous of the northern climes!  Many a times I've been forced to flowery sonnet by those misty-eyed brunettes, when I ought to be composing odes of theology and metaphysic!


Good piece, captures it well!

Bloody hell if more men saw it this way
then they wouldn't be such pathetic crying
little babies!

"the price of passion
is paid with a dream " llove that line..Wonderfully crafted ink John..enjoyed!!!

Really felt the loneliness, the despair and hopelessness in this well written piece.

poignant & relatable Mister Feddeler. always a pleasure reading you

Beautifully written.  This seems like a departure for you regarding structure and rhyme scheme.  It works very well in service to your noir themes.

Mr Feddeler,a tip of my hat to you,always.

I love going out on the town with you, even if the joint is smoky and the motel is dingy. Your rhythm and rhyme are perfect -it makes for fast paced and feisty read. Enjoyed!- blue angel

the human touch is a wonderful thing John x

Sadly written but truthful all the way through. Another gem JF.
J

Like this alot,John.Nothin like a good escape.