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All-sorts
i.
You want me dirty,
do you, Darlin'?
Dirty like a rough fuck in a back alley
where you've got me helpless, excited but emotionless
arms up, legs spread, back turned to kitty-stretch for easy access
I'm holding tight and the metal 'clank-clanks'
as you start with a lick on the gash and bite on my pearl
stand to pull my head back by my hair and rock me hard
(did I say 'emotionless'?)
and I can scream if I want
'cause it's not that uncommon
to hear a woman's scream in this part of town
ii.
You do want me backstage,
don't you, Baby?
Backstage like a post-show private dance after eyes connecting
all-night-glances locking then laughter, banter, re-decked
in my black lace lingerie and those naughty
red hot stilettos from the pole act -
but my hair's loosed just for you
and I'm giving up
to the simple honesty in one night's mutual admiration
your deep eyes stoke my usual desperation to feel something genuine
and I know you're only a special occassion
but tonight we're here, and damn right, we'll have it now
iii.
Let me close
won't you, Dear?
Close like a comfy make-out session on the couch
after too much alcohol
TV playing a music channel, low lights and grinding through jeans
till my panties are soaked, acting like teenagers
supposed to be doing homework when nobody's home -
sex tension rips at the rest until the test is over
and marks are born of blazing desires, not avarice by owner
We'll lose ourselves in each other's limbs and aftermath
until morning breaks our sleepy bubble
and it's time to take the day
iv.
Remember me
will you, Love?
Just like this, breathless, open on the back seat we share
once the rush is appeased and recedes from my cheeks, my chest
You had me revved by the taste of shallows on skin, taken in
by heady scent of wood smoke and the many tongues you're fluent in
bodies heaving rhythm, hips imploring, more desperate with every dip and rise
till you filled and kissed me calm, sore and satisfied
Remember us like this: late sky sending the sun down without us
whispering with heavy eyes we make no promises
and when mention of 'later' draws grins on our faces
only fools lips would speak the word, "love"
You want me dirty,
do you, Darlin'?
Dirty like a rough fuck in a back alley
where you've got me helpless, excited but emotionless
arms up, legs spread, back turned to kitty-stretch for easy access
I'm holding tight and the metal 'clank-clanks'
as you start with a lick on the gash and bite on my pearl
stand to pull my head back by my hair and rock me hard
(did I say 'emotionless'?)
and I can scream if I want
'cause it's not that uncommon
to hear a woman's scream in this part of town
ii.
You do want me backstage,
don't you, Baby?
Backstage like a post-show private dance after eyes connecting
all-night-glances locking then laughter, banter, re-decked
in my black lace lingerie and those naughty
red hot stilettos from the pole act -
but my hair's loosed just for you
and I'm giving up
to the simple honesty in one night's mutual admiration
your deep eyes stoke my usual desperation to feel something genuine
and I know you're only a special occassion
but tonight we're here, and damn right, we'll have it now
iii.
Let me close
won't you, Dear?
Close like a comfy make-out session on the couch
after too much alcohol
TV playing a music channel, low lights and grinding through jeans
till my panties are soaked, acting like teenagers
supposed to be doing homework when nobody's home -
sex tension rips at the rest until the test is over
and marks are born of blazing desires, not avarice by owner
We'll lose ourselves in each other's limbs and aftermath
until morning breaks our sleepy bubble
and it's time to take the day
iv.
Remember me
will you, Love?
Just like this, breathless, open on the back seat we share
once the rush is appeased and recedes from my cheeks, my chest
You had me revved by the taste of shallows on skin, taken in
by heady scent of wood smoke and the many tongues you're fluent in
bodies heaving rhythm, hips imploring, more desperate with every dip and rise
till you filled and kissed me calm, sore and satisfied
Remember us like this: late sky sending the sun down without us
whispering with heavy eyes we make no promises
and when mention of 'later' draws grins on our faces
only fools lips would speak the word, "love"
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By christ...
19th Apr 2011 00:05am
...the woman has let the door open.
A fine write. You have asked for critique, but I think your voice is very clear here, and wouldn't change a thing...I like the gear changes, each verse becoming more intimate...and could even have stood a fourth verse that went a level of intimacy further on the scale you have created...
A fine write. You have asked for critique, but I think your voice is very clear here, and wouldn't change a thing...I like the gear changes, each verse becoming more intimate...and could even have stood a fourth verse that went a level of intimacy further on the scale you have created...
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re: By christ...
it wasn't finished and i reeeally wanted that 4th verse then got tired and dropped it, so now i'm definitely working one to add in. aaah, thanks, hem! great big, stupid smile. [:
crazy cool
19th Apr 2011 00:46am
i think i like the second the best. the provocative nature of this piece is so well done. its not so trashy that its not sexy.. steller read. definitely provokes some wild images.
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re: crazy cool
19th Apr 2011 7:08am
thank you, different from my usual, i'm trying to bust out of my vein just a little lately. thanks for the comment! [:
re: ..
19th Apr 2011 7:08am
dear...
19th Apr 2011 12:21pm
hey, there's no need for the credits, it's all you. And I always knew you have such spicy mind, rarrr! :D Seriously though, sexuality is beautiful and it's empowering as well, (if used wisely...)
you did a nice job with this one, doll. :-)
you did a nice job with this one, doll. :-)
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re: dear...
19th Apr 2011 1:10pm
awesome
19th Apr 2011 10:58pm
re: awesome
20th Apr 2011 7:04am
well, thank you for the read, and for commenting! i feel privileged to get any feedback on posts in this genre. [:
Hello
20th Apr 2011 3:08pm
I loved the darkness in this line:
'cause it's not that uncommon
to hear a woman's scream in this part of town.
Wonderfully placed.
But, I have to say the entire third stanza was the best, by far. It was all at once so innocent, exciting, fun, adventurous, and illicit.
'cause it's not that uncommon
to hear a woman's scream in this part of town.
Wonderfully placed.
But, I have to say the entire third stanza was the best, by far. It was all at once so innocent, exciting, fun, adventurous, and illicit.
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re: Hello
20th Apr 2011 3:25pm
ooooh thank you! i'm so glad you caught that dark little snag in the first stanza, and the third is my favourite too, i think. muchas gracias, PTM. :D
wow
Anonymous
22nd Apr 2011 1:24am
oh hot damn this is awesome!
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re: wow
22nd Apr 2011 7:22am
haha, thank you, i'll take a bow for that! still needs its 4th verse though. [:
We'll lose ourselves in each other's limbs and aftermath
22nd Apr 2011 10:24am
I am absolutely loving it - the mixture of darkness and erotism gives this poem original beauty, brings up bright, real, sharp images who dance around the reader and whisper the words of seduction. great job
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re: We'll lose ourselves in each other's limbs and aftermath
22nd Apr 2011 10:34am
what an extraordinary compliment, thank you so much. it's wonderful to see some new work up from you as well! [:
Wow
23rd Apr 2011 5:25pm
I was just in the right mood to read this. I really like your first Vignette and your last one. Those I really connected to. Strong imagery and naughtiness without becoming crass and crude. Nice sensuality throughout this. Shows a strong woman who's not afraid of being vulnerable but having control at the same time. :D
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re: Wow
23rd Apr 2011 5:33pm
i'm trying out different styles so i'm very glad this worked. thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful comment. [:
review
26th Apr 2011 1:18am
your words jump off the page into the bloodstream of desire
The bite on my pearl line literally manifested a pearl in my mouth, I am thinking of having it appraised, it looks valuable
The bite on my pearl line literally manifested a pearl in my mouth, I am thinking of having it appraised, it looks valuable
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re: review
26th Apr 2011 8:12am
Man...
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4th May 2011 4:57am
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Excellent
9th May 2011 7:48am
Great piece, not over done, just enough imagery to engage but not the 'typical' erotica poetry. Just great stuff.
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re: Excellent
9th May 2011 9:42am
liked it
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18th May 2011 6:32am
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re: liked it
18th May 2011 8:23am
Dear anyone who might bother:
19th May 2011 1:02pm
i've added a 4th chunk to this poem and it feels significantly different than the rest to me, (probably because it was written so far out of the 'proper' time scale), but i'd like a few opinions on whether i should leave it, put it back the way it was, or maybe ideas for an edit if you have any. just throwing it out there. cheers. [:
re: Dear anyone who might bother:
19th May 2011 1:29pm
...you should leave it, I definitely love the fourth verse, lovely job dear!
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re: re: Dear anyone who might bother:
19th May 2011 5:17pm
Beautiful
19th May 2011 5:26pm
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This is a unique and extremely brilliant piece of work M\'Lady!
Perfect audio as usual!
Perfect audio as usual!
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re: ...
6th Jun 2011 3:50pm
aw, thank you, vi! i'm humbled, as your work is much more sophisticated. i appreciate it, miss. [:
jesus.
10th Jun 2011 9:16am
I know my comment is only another in this long list, but this was amazingly hot. I need a shower.
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re: jesus.
10th Jun 2011 10:29am
excellent
17th Jun 2011 10:00pm
re: excellent
17th Jun 2011 11:53pm
so.
2nd Jul 2011 9:00am
This is..
It's something like watching a wave. You see the swell, you can feel it building, inching closer to the shore, you know where it's going to end up but you can't look away, you have to feel it, every second of it, so it'll all matter in the end. That's what I feel when I read this, right up until the end, the crash, and I really wish it was a wave, cause I kind of need a cold shower as well.
Excellent write.
It's something like watching a wave. You see the swell, you can feel it building, inching closer to the shore, you know where it's going to end up but you can't look away, you have to feel it, every second of it, so it'll all matter in the end. That's what I feel when I read this, right up until the end, the crash, and I really wish it was a wave, cause I kind of need a cold shower as well.
Excellent write.
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re: so.
4th Aug 2011 3:40pm
Response
15th Jul 2011 8:40am
I would tell you what I like about this but it's hard to find the right words. Good job.
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re: Response
4th Aug 2011 3:37pm
amazing
Anonymous
4th Aug 2011 3:27pm
Now this is one of a kind!
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Re: All Sorts
Anonymous
4th Aug 2011 6:36pm
This is really Awesome! So glad you added the 4th. From the metal clank-clanks to only fools lips would speak the word, love - you wrapped me in your story and sent my senses soaring.
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re: Re: All Sorts
4th Aug 2011 6:56pm
WELL DONE
Anonymous
14th Aug 2011 00:09am
The feeling I get when I read this is that you are a poet who tries to experiment constantly and succeeds because you appear to work so hard on it.
All that hard work is coming to fruition.
All that hard work is coming to fruition.
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re: WELL DONE
i very much appreciate that you noticed how i care for the work that goes into poetry. [: i hope to get to the point (one day) where it looks a bit less pushed, but i have to keep experimenting, of course. [: thank you for stopping by.
Just As I Expected
28th Feb 2012 10:11am
See. I was going to stop on this poem and go to bed. Not sure how that will be possible now as I'm going to end up reading another... and then another. This may inspire me.
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re: Just As I Expected
28th Feb 2012 2:00pm
fuck it
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edited/erased after reading dismissed- last thing you need is another groveling artist to feed on!
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though my more decent self must tell you that your writing persona marvelously blends so many alluring elements, that its impossible to not be impressed by you
edited/erased after reading dismissed- last thing you need is another groveling artist to feed on!
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though my more decent self must tell you that your writing persona marvelously blends so many alluring elements, that its impossible to not be impressed by you
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re: fuck it
10th Apr 2012 8:12am
By christ...Hemi would have loved...
Anonymous
10th Apr 2012 7:58am
...the last verse he never saw...rounds the piece out juuuuuuuuust fine :-)
(and deep respect to Billy Von-bigbeard for leading me back here with his comments to view the addition)
DP
(and deep respect to Billy Von-bigbeard for leading me back here with his comments to view the addition)
DP
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re: By christ...Hemi would have loved...
10th Apr 2012 8:17am
he never saw it??
well, i'm glad *you* approve of it anyway. [:
my deepest thanks, DP, and of course, also B to the 3. [:
well, i'm glad *you* approve of it anyway. [:
my deepest thanks, DP, and of course, also B to the 3. [:
Gash, perals, lingerie...
Anonymous
1st May 2012 7:49am
...and love. And, not necessatily in that order. I do like the hard side of this....
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re: Gash, perals, lingerie...
1st May 2012 7:58am
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