Can't Face the Radio

Really liked this one, jess. You took a unique approach to a common topic.

My only suggestion would be to try and find a more concrete image for the second stanza, something more suggestive and memorable after the poem is read and done. The sentiment is almost too clear, you know what I mean? I wish I could word these things more properly, but I don't really know any "poetry terminology."

It is a great, heartfelt write though. "And our song kicked me through the radio." That line is perfect.

ah, thank you! yeah, i think i know what you mean. a more solid metaphor instead of stating straight out what it is that's allegedly going on. thanks for the input, i'll take a better look at it tonight. i do love a good critique. [:

this is pretty. A nice little piece of reverie and nostalgia sliding home easy...

thanks, hem, this one was a tiny bit of an experiment and gave me a severe case of word doubt, so i'm pleased it worked for you. [:

I'm sorry I missed this one.  It is AMAZING, J.  You have become quite the storyteller and I am honored to have witnessed the whole thing.

that is incredibly sweet, PTM. thank you so much.

"I saw your laugh on replay" That line will stick with me for a long time. Great read.

many thanks. this one's a little bit close for me. [:

You have some great phrases here -- "again for the first time" is my favourite, I think, and very fitting that it's in the first line.  I am also a sucker for lines starting with "and" if they're done well, as yours are -- close together, with relatively short lines, the "and" gives the feeling of breathlessness or sobbing, struggling to get words out coherently.  Not that your words are incoherent!  When grammatical structure enhances the metaphor well enough, every word works together in harmony.  This is great.

(On a side note, I just can't get The Angels' "Am I Ever Gonna See Your Face Again" out of my head -- I don't know if you're familiar with the song, it's a pub favourite here in Australia and the non-radio version has a very rude reply to that line...)

i'm the same with "and" lines, but i can never judge if i've done them well, so thank you, i'm glad you like them! i did mean for it to be a little breathless, but it must have come out of my subconscious; which is always nice. (natural) [:
 
i'm not familiar with the song, but now i'll have to go look it up. :D

its amazen how jus a simple song
can rebirth memories so vast & strong
it explains how Love remains all along
it neva dies...& da lost 1s wil cum bac 2 sting us....b it rite or rong....

thanks goodest. [:

Very good, your emotions bleed through your words. We all know the pain of memories.

'tis true, the memories can be the best and worst things for us sometimes. thank you for the read and the comment. [:

I loved this write, I enjoy the way you portray the powerful impact of something intangible yet deeply moving..I have felt the feeling-still do some times...I enjoyed the read, Peace, Miki

thanks so much, Miki. love to see these get some happy. [:

Nicely done Jestalessa.

Strider

appreciate you reading/listening, Strider. [:

lol, I guess It happens to all sooner or later, great description! ;)

guess so. haha, thanks Billy. [: