The Broken Bones of This World

Like a wisp of smoke, I dream to just fade out under this dull sky                
I can't start anew; the fire I've stoked all my life is burning up                
               
I want to watch it all decay                
I can't be a part of this anymore                
I feel like I'm crumbling from the inside out          
Just like Earth's heartbeat, I deteriorate                
All my life has been like clawing my way to the surface for a breath                
Just one single breath, before being dragged back down again                
               
I ceaselessly reach for the sky with my feet in quicksand                
I reach for the sky with my feet in quicksand                
And the more I struggle, the more it pulls me in (the more it pulls me in.. I couldn't care less)                
               
I am so far from what I should be                
You all put me here; you all dug my grave                
I can no longer push forward in search for a better day                
               
I'm waking up from this hollow dream; I'm waking up to see    
A world that can never cure the disease within me                
Just don't say you need me, don't say you feel me                
I never imagined it would come to this                
But now I see: I was doomed from the start                
I can't save myself; and I promise, I won't even try anymore                
               
The silence: deafening, the air: suffocating                
               
God, where are you now?                
Please quell this affliction 'cause right now  
I feel no comfort  
I see no hope                
I'm depleted                
               
So like a wisp of smoke, I dream to just fade out under this dull sky                
I can't start anew; the fire I've stoked all my life is burning up                
               
Welcome the blackness for it welcomes you                
It hungers for you                
The shadows on the walls                
Forever dancing, never smiling                
               
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What do you think of this? This poem is actually a song, but I really want some feedback, so feel free to comment! :)