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Angel
Your eyes are that of an angel
- vastly big and emerald -
eyes like these are difficult to read
especially when a strand or two
of your golden hair withhold
it from being fully seen..
- vastly big and emerald -
eyes like these are difficult to read
especially when a strand or two
of your golden hair withhold
it from being fully seen..
Published 1st Nov 2010
| Edited 25th Apr 2011
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Anonymous
1st Nov 2010 8:52pm
will you send me the original?
2nd Nov 2010 1:09pm
1st Nov 2010 8:59pm
I enjoyed the original But i didn't like how it was ultimately short it didn't fit right with it(In my own words) And Vertigo loved it you should have left it as it was I just would of liked more verses. You have good talent don't let criticism stop you make you turn around and re do a poem or make you not satisfied with the result of a good poem.
2nd Nov 2010 1:11pm
thank you for the advice. i don't usually take criticism to the worst i wasn't satisfied myself with the result that's why i rewrote it!
2nd Nov 2010 3:06pm
19th Nov 2010 4:58pm
the original.. but im sure that it was great, as all of your work that i've read before is :D
i really love this version however.
its truly beautiful.. and the shortness just makes it better.
i really dig it :D
i really love this version however.
its truly beautiful.. and the shortness just makes it better.
i really dig it :D
24th Dec 2010 4:42am
makes my mind turn with posibilities but enough to be satisfied nice job
24th Dec 2010 11:11am
