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Sunday Afternoon
A strong spring breeze
Flutters white curtains of an open window
rays of a noonday sun
brighten the room with a raspberry hue
Saturating it in honeysuckle scent
Read and discarded
Sunday’s paper scatters across the wooden floor
Suddenly a page takes flight, gracefully falling
Contrary with the soft sounds of smooth jazz
Soiled dishes , cold coffee
Silent flashes of cellphones
waits on the nightstand abandon
Beside an unmade bed
In delighted bliss
prone on the littered floor
a bead of sweat rolls
cool down an exposed back
Peacefully,
resting across a warm chest in sync,
The rhythm of one heartbeat
Sleep takes hold, drifting softly
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
no one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
Flutters white curtains of an open window
rays of a noonday sun
brighten the room with a raspberry hue
Saturating it in honeysuckle scent
Read and discarded
Sunday’s paper scatters across the wooden floor
Suddenly a page takes flight, gracefully falling
Contrary with the soft sounds of smooth jazz
Soiled dishes , cold coffee
Silent flashes of cellphones
waits on the nightstand abandon
Beside an unmade bed
In delighted bliss
prone on the littered floor
a bead of sweat rolls
cool down an exposed back
Peacefully,
resting across a warm chest in sync,
The rhythm of one heartbeat
Sleep takes hold, drifting softly
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
no one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
Published 21st Apr 2013
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Anonymous
21st Apr 2013 3:44pm
You made my Sunday morning with this lovely, well written and enjoyable poem.
Peace
Peace
Hey Kitty, I'm so glad
Thank you my friend.... Have a wonderful Sunday!
Much Love
G
Thank you my friend.... Have a wonderful Sunday!
Much Love
G
21st Apr 2013 3:57pm
You brought a very peaceful day to life with this poem, Glynis my dear...I can almost touch it. Hugs!!
21st Apr 2013 9:09pm
Hugs
Thank you my friend, always glad to see you
Have a peaceful rest of your Sunday....
Much Love
G
Thank you my friend, always glad to see you
Have a peaceful rest of your Sunday....
Much Love
G
21st Apr 2013 4:00pm
"Flutters white curtains of an open window"
That image gets me everytime Glynis, especially those old fashioned eyelet ones you find in the South.
Lovely darlin
That image gets me everytime Glynis, especially those old fashioned eyelet ones you find in the South.
Lovely darlin
How you know about those? LOL!!!
Those were the very curtains I had in mind, should have said in the poem.....but my grandmother had them, always kept the windows open, and when I was a child they let in the sweetest smells. I never lost that visual or the feeling of being at her home.
Spot on Maggie!! Have a great Sunday!
Thanks
G
Those were the very curtains I had in mind, should have said in the poem.....but my grandmother had them, always kept the windows open, and when I was a child they let in the sweetest smells. I never lost that visual or the feeling of being at her home.
Spot on Maggie!! Have a great Sunday!
Thanks
G
23rd Apr 2013 9:16am
Thought I would re-read this Glynis, and then read your response. *smiles*
This might interest you Darlin
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/82845-of-the-most-exquisite-color-here/
This might interest you Darlin
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/82845-of-the-most-exquisite-color-here/
Anonymous
21st Apr 2013 4:04pm
Such detail. A fantastic place to be - relaxed a bit just by the reading of. Glynis, your vision and description of this is beautiful. Loved it!
Why thank you Scat
I'm so glad you enjoy this, lazy Sunday rite...
and adding such a lovely comment....enjoy your Sunday
G
I'm so glad you enjoy this, lazy Sunday rite...
and adding such a lovely comment....enjoy your Sunday
G
21st Apr 2013 4:26pm
You took us right there with your wonderful imagery Glynis, so detailed, a beautiful write. :)
Thank you Magdalena
I'm glad the imagery came across....from my lazy eyes after an afternoon bliss ....and that you enjoyed it...
Have a great Sunday
G
I'm glad the imagery came across....from my lazy eyes after an afternoon bliss ....and that you enjoyed it...
Have a great Sunday
G
Anonymous
21st Apr 2013 4:47pm
A truly beautiful write..I can visualize it all and feel the contented coziness while ignoring the door.I love those lazy, breezy mornings.
I read it a few times and in my humble opinion the flow and weight of the lines sit better with a few breaks but that just may be me and how I'm reading it. I found it hard to explain what I mean so I edited it for demonstration but please know I mean it in a positive, critique way and I'm not trying to be cheeky :-)
A strong spring breeze flutters
white curtains of an open window
rays of a noonday sun
brighten the room with a raspberry hue
Saturating it in honeysuckle scent
Read and discarded
Sunday’s paper scatters across the wooden floor
Suddenly a page takes flight, gracefully falling
Contrary to the soft sounds of smooth jazz
Soiled dishes , cold coffee
Silent flashes of cellphones
wait on the nightstand
abandoned
Beside an unmade bed
In delighted bliss
prone on the littered floor
a bead of sweat rolls cool
down an exposed back
Peacefully , resting across a warm chest
in sync
The rhythm of one heartbeat...
Sleep takes hold, drifting softly
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
No one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
Either way dear Glynis, it's another great from your pen here..really enjoyed the read,
much love to ya!
I read it a few times and in my humble opinion the flow and weight of the lines sit better with a few breaks but that just may be me and how I'm reading it. I found it hard to explain what I mean so I edited it for demonstration but please know I mean it in a positive, critique way and I'm not trying to be cheeky :-)
A strong spring breeze flutters
white curtains of an open window
rays of a noonday sun
brighten the room with a raspberry hue
Saturating it in honeysuckle scent
Read and discarded
Sunday’s paper scatters across the wooden floor
Suddenly a page takes flight, gracefully falling
Contrary to the soft sounds of smooth jazz
Soiled dishes , cold coffee
Silent flashes of cellphones
wait on the nightstand
abandoned
Beside an unmade bed
In delighted bliss
prone on the littered floor
a bead of sweat rolls cool
down an exposed back
Peacefully , resting across a warm chest
in sync
The rhythm of one heartbeat...
Sleep takes hold, drifting softly
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
No one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
Either way dear Glynis, it's another great from your pen here..really enjoyed the read,
much love to ya!
Hey Miki
No need to explain yourself, I understood.... you are always positive from my point of view....besides,I asked, right?
I posted this without editing or anything really, the way you have it, is the way it should have been presented. However, I couldn't at the time....should have waited.
I'm glad you enjoyed this Miki and that you were welling to show me, my errors.
Much Love girl....have a great Sunday
G
No need to explain yourself, I understood.... you are always positive from my point of view....besides,I asked, right?
I posted this without editing or anything really, the way you have it, is the way it should have been presented. However, I couldn't at the time....should have waited.
I'm glad you enjoyed this Miki and that you were welling to show me, my errors.
Much Love girl....have a great Sunday
G
21st Apr 2013 8:18pm
A Beautiful perfect Sunday Dear Glynis!!!
True art of life's "perfect Moments", captured and transferred by Your pen!!!
So VERY wonderful!!!
True art of life's "perfect Moments", captured and transferred by Your pen!!!
So VERY wonderful!!!
Wow, thank you, Soul
Glad you came over to read my work and add your wonderful comment
Have a great Sunday
G
Glad you came over to read my work and add your wonderful comment
Have a great Sunday
G
21st Apr 2013 10:56pm
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nice snapshot...HD (hip-notic detail)
with enuff haze to make the daze as
memorable as
pictured
Sun Day
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nice snapshot...HD (hip-notic detail)
with enuff haze to make the daze as
memorable as
pictured
Sun Day
.
23rd Apr 2013 2:51am
22nd Apr 2013 00:56am
I delighted in this "easy like a Sunday Morning" piece into a very cool afternoon; the ending is awesome:
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
no one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
That's right...not letting "anything or anyone" get in between you and yours.:)
Charming, cute and a very nice layout (of events) for a Sunday Afternoon. I adore it!
a knocking at the door,
ringing of the bell
no one stirs to let the world
intrude on our Sunday afternoon
That's right...not letting "anything or anyone" get in between you and yours.:)
Charming, cute and a very nice layout (of events) for a Sunday Afternoon. I adore it!
23rd Apr 2013 2:56am
Thank you ryteoutlet
....ain't never letting nothang in between.....just a moment in time, on a Sunday morn.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this
G
....ain't never letting nothang in between.....just a moment in time, on a Sunday morn.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this
G
22nd Apr 2013 9:11pm
23rd Apr 2013 3:03am
Hey Rain!
Thank you girl, so glad you enjoyed this, and to add your stamp....I'm smiling all over the place...
Much love
G
Thank you girl, so glad you enjoyed this, and to add your stamp....I'm smiling all over the place...
Much love
G
22nd Apr 2013 9:52pm
My SIS!
How you be?
Girl, just a moment in time, feeling fine....that lingered... so I inked.
So glad you like it
Much love
G
How you be?
Girl, just a moment in time, feeling fine....that lingered... so I inked.
So glad you like it
Much love
G
23rd Apr 2013 11:32pm
I love, Love, love the simple sweetness of this piece, I want days like this again.
Red
Red
24th Apr 2013 2:47am
Hey Red!
I'm so glad you LOVE this poem....I know you will have them again... Soon my friend!
With your open-heart... The heavens are kind my fried.
Much love
G
I'm so glad you LOVE this poem....I know you will have them again... Soon my friend!
With your open-heart... The heavens are kind my fried.
Much love
G
