Poetry competition CLOSED 1st August 2023 10:02pm
WINNER
Jordan (D.O.C.)
Jordan (D.O.C.)
RUNNERS-UP:
slipalong
and Kinkpoet
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A new Rondeau? Yeah!
Poetry Contest Description
I would like to read/judge a new rondeau any subject of your choice but, no porn, please.
A new rondeau in the classic form ( in my view) of fifteen lines of three verses.
Verse 1, five lines.
Verse 2, four lines.
Verse 3, six lines.
(verse is also stanza)
The first 4 syllables of the 1st line (1st verse) makes the 9th line ( verse 2) and also the 15th line (verse 3 ).
Other than those lines in verse 2 and verse 3 I want 8 syllables per line.
No illustrations please.
If you need to see an example, to aid visualization of this ( classic )form, may I suggest Paul Lawrence Dunbar (1872-1906) " We wear the Mask "
I will judge... Probably.
Here's one I made earlier, for you, merely as a visual aid.
A rondeau's wrote with just three rhymes
three verses, total, fifteen lines,
the first line's first four syllables
echo, to fill the ninth line full
this first verse done, I'm doing fine...
As the ninth line nears, here's a sign
eight syllables per, by design,
the third rhymes here! The ninth line pulls,
a rondeau wrote...
There's a famous one (it ain't mine)
it's been around for quite some time,
" In Flanders Fields " where men got culled
where poppies grow, their sun was dulled,
as this ends, I think I've defined,
A Rondeau, wrote.
Verse 1, five lines.
Verse 2, four lines.
Verse 3, six lines.
(verse is also stanza)
The first 4 syllables of the 1st line (1st verse) makes the 9th line ( verse 2) and also the 15th line (verse 3 ).
Other than those lines in verse 2 and verse 3 I want 8 syllables per line.
No illustrations please.
If you need to see an example, to aid visualization of this ( classic )form, may I suggest Paul Lawrence Dunbar (1872-1906) " We wear the Mask "
I will judge... Probably.
Here's one I made earlier, for you, merely as a visual aid.
A rondeau's wrote with just three rhymes
three verses, total, fifteen lines,
the first line's first four syllables
echo, to fill the ninth line full
this first verse done, I'm doing fine...
As the ninth line nears, here's a sign
eight syllables per, by design,
the third rhymes here! The ninth line pulls,
a rondeau wrote...
There's a famous one (it ain't mine)
it's been around for quite some time,
" In Flanders Fields " where men got culled
where poppies grow, their sun was dulled,
as this ends, I think I've defined,
A Rondeau, wrote.
In The Sky Above
In the sky above, red birds drift.
Our hands to the air, birds ignore our trifts.
You step on my wounds, I fake feeling fine.
Love heals no wounds or maybe not this time.
Blood-red tears in face, I treasure as gifts.
The summer-hot wind blows and lifts
a despair of urgently lovestruck gifts.
Wings flocked together, they curl and twine
in the sky above.
Then, with a gust, the weather shifts,
killing those foolishly lovestruck trifts.
I hoped in vain a story like mine
could end in love, not a sky entwined.
Bloody feathers streak down cloud cliffs
in the sky above.
PAR
Our hands to the air, birds ignore our trifts.
You step on my wounds, I fake feeling fine.
Love heals no wounds or maybe not this time.
Blood-red tears in face, I treasure as gifts.
The summer-hot wind blows and lifts
a despair of urgently lovestruck gifts.
Wings flocked together, they curl and twine
in the sky above.
Then, with a gust, the weather shifts,
killing those foolishly lovestruck trifts.
I hoped in vain a story like mine
could end in love, not a sky entwined.
Bloody feathers streak down cloud cliffs
in the sky above.
PAR
Written by PAR
(PAULO ACACIO RAMOS)
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I shall work on it (maybe)
With apologies to Rew and her comp
Un rondeau to me sounds more
Like un rond d'eau... un plan d'eau
A small pool for kids
Or a bigger plan d'eau
In the middle of which you find
A superb three-tier fountain
Or more like the French Rondeau
''Une dance de Gascogne apparentée
Aux Branles de la Renaissance''.
The quest continues.
Shall I attempt to write one as per
Dear Rew's exigences?
I doubt I have such talent
Un rondeau to me sounds more
Like un rond d'eau... un plan d'eau
A small pool for kids
Or a bigger plan d'eau
In the middle of which you find
A superb three-tier fountain
Or more like the French Rondeau
''Une dance de Gascogne apparentée
Aux Branles de la Renaissance''.
The quest continues.
Shall I attempt to write one as per
Dear Rew's exigences?
I doubt I have such talent
Written by robert43041
(Viking)
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A perfect day at the beach
A perfect day at the beach
The ultimane tan to reach
Time is our hourglass
No good time to let go and pass
A perfect day at the beach
No time to waste on the Screech
No time to waste on Meech
Keep your eyes on the beauty with class
With her you could have a lot of spass
A perfect day at the beach
Go to her, no need to beseech
Hey, hello is a part of speech
Nice words work better than crass
Get moving, go see the lass
A perfect day at the beach.
The ultimane tan to reach
Time is our hourglass
No good time to let go and pass
A perfect day at the beach
No time to waste on the Screech
No time to waste on Meech
Keep your eyes on the beauty with class
With her you could have a lot of spass
A perfect day at the beach
Go to her, no need to beseech
Hey, hello is a part of speech
Nice words work better than crass
Get moving, go see the lass
A perfect day at the beach.
Written by robert43041
(Viking)
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Of Rarity
"Fool wishes, hopes, and dreams Queen Fancy court."
-- an age-old court fool
*
At Pheasant Farm the fairies fair
to summer blossoms sweet repair
bestriding bees and butterflies
upon a lyric zephyr's sighs
of rhymes and rhythms sans compare --
as foxtail ferns in formalwear
and fuchsia freesias debonair
to black-eyed Susans poetize
at Pheasant Farm --
till on the trumpet flower's blare
alight the derrières of air
while lo, a rich rondeau enskies
Queen Fancy whom each child espies --
in footing it to visions rare
at Pheasant Farm!
*
-- an age-old court fool
*
At Pheasant Farm the fairies fair
to summer blossoms sweet repair
bestriding bees and butterflies
upon a lyric zephyr's sighs
of rhymes and rhythms sans compare --
as foxtail ferns in formalwear
and fuchsia freesias debonair
to black-eyed Susans poetize
at Pheasant Farm --
till on the trumpet flower's blare
alight the derrières of air
while lo, a rich rondeau enskies
Queen Fancy whom each child espies --
in footing it to visions rare
at Pheasant Farm!
*
Written by Jordan
(D.O.C.)
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loves lost rondeau
Come autumns chill we lost loves gilt
so short the flash of spring times thrill
our stars were never quite aligned
our passion was so unsublime
All greenness gone no chlorophyll
each kiss that only spells peril
those golden times not worth a dime
come autumns chill
A pairing that was unfulfilled
the Ides of march, had there will
time for us was so unkind
fated to write an ode in rhyme
comes now a rondeau from my quill
come autumns chill
so short the flash of spring times thrill
our stars were never quite aligned
our passion was so unsublime
All greenness gone no chlorophyll
each kiss that only spells peril
those golden times not worth a dime
come autumns chill
A pairing that was unfulfilled
the Ides of march, had there will
time for us was so unkind
fated to write an ode in rhyme
comes now a rondeau from my quill
come autumns chill
Written by slipalong
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Now here's the thing - 1st of August - and 1 clear winner (to my mind)
I judged all on the form I asked for
But the big but is where do I go from here? There's no way that I can put, electronically, a trophy/medal next to someone's entry.
(I have to wait up till past 10 pm! To see what happens. So, while I wait...)
I can do this. -🏅 🏅 🏅 1st to " Of Rarity ". by Jordan (D.O.C.)
because I like it. A lot.
So if that got 1st prize a second prize must get this
🏅 🏅 2nd prize to " loves lost rondeau" by slipalong.
because I like it.
If there's a 3rd prize 🏅 this must be it " Rosy Rondeau " by Kinkpoet
because it followed the form and is interesting regardless.
A ⭐ and special mention must go to Robert43041 (Viking) for grappling with the way history (and the Brits?) have mangled the meaning of the french word " rondeau " thus making it difficult for them to get to grips with the form in their " A perfect day at the beach ". imho.
And a 🌟 and special mention to PAR (PAULO ACACIO RAMOS) for making the form their own with
" In The Sky Above. "
No one gets left behind no one gets left out
(10:22 pm. Now I know how the competitions run yeah! )
I thank you one and all for taking part. Truly.
I judged all on the form I asked for
But the big but is where do I go from here? There's no way that I can put, electronically, a trophy/medal next to someone's entry.
(I have to wait up till past 10 pm! To see what happens. So, while I wait...)
I can do this. -🏅 🏅 🏅 1st to " Of Rarity ". by Jordan (D.O.C.)
because I like it. A lot.
So if that got 1st prize a second prize must get this
🏅 🏅 2nd prize to " loves lost rondeau" by slipalong.
because I like it.
If there's a 3rd prize 🏅 this must be it " Rosy Rondeau " by Kinkpoet
because it followed the form and is interesting regardless.
A ⭐ and special mention must go to Robert43041 (Viking) for grappling with the way history (and the Brits?) have mangled the meaning of the french word " rondeau " thus making it difficult for them to get to grips with the form in their " A perfect day at the beach ". imho.
And a 🌟 and special mention to PAR (PAULO ACACIO RAMOS) for making the form their own with
" In The Sky Above. "
No one gets left behind no one gets left out
(10:22 pm. Now I know how the competitions run yeah! )
I thank you one and all for taking part. Truly.
