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… This is just a tribute!
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Poetry Contest Description
Write a poetic response poem to another DU poem
I’m gonna give Viddax the credit for inspiring this comp for me, as he writes some pretty awesome responses to poetry that I’ve been reading lately. Do go check it out.
… and maybe also listening to a little Tenacious D… which I’m also guilty of… 🤫
This comp is about writing your own response to a DU poem. Did a poem that you read here trigger your own write for you? See where it takes you.
Share it here!
Rules
• New writes only
• As many entries as you like
• Please post a reference to the poem that inspired you either on your entry somewhere or in your author’s note. This is required.
• Audio / visual / video entries allowed
• Although this is a response comp, please don’t use this as an excuse to sling shit at somebody else. Practice a bit of good form. General “don’t be a dick” rule.
Thanks all!
Anonymous
RevolutionAL
Alistair Plint
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Alistair Plint
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A Mostly South African Recipe In Author Notes
< A Memory Of Past, Present, Future>
Raymond, written across
a box, on my book shelf
-nothing fancy
just black permanent marker
on an old plain cardboard
shipping box
that had travelled 9 lives
before this
Had to open the box
took time to it
breathed it in
Cut through the sealing tape
Lifting a side
found a dried snake skin,
a pair of oven mits,
reams of paper
all with letters
written long-hand
in black permanent marker
The oven mits had baked
-baked more delectable foods
than most people
could fit into a century
each burn mark
bleeding a story untold
each worn thread, paper thin
spoke of having packed
a different cookie tin
That dried, delicate, dark
snake skin
spoke seven languages and fifteen
dialects
in the letters
-oh the letters
were a hand me down
they contained
a special "melktert" recipe
and instructions for the moon
I'll share the recipe,
I don't have permission to share
instructions for the moon
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(Alistair Plint)
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< instructions for the moon >
when we were kids we had a solar system game
we spun an eleven-sided top that had the names of the planets printed on each side
(mercury to pluto and the sun and moon as well)
and each planet had different rules that were printed on a colored card
but
we lost the moon
so right at the first of every game we spun the top
and whoever spun the highest got to make up the rules for the moon
and these ranged from my brother roger's
"if you land there you die"
to my sister cathy's
"one point for every basket of cheese you bring back to earth"
then today
i was sorting some my dad's stuff (he died ten years ago)
and there they were
the instructions for the moon
< Written by Ray Heinrich >
Rays profile about page also appears in my poem. As does the first in his catalog entitled < Recipe >
NOT A ENTRY!
Anonymous
☝️ Hello my lovely….
Unfortunately I can’t accept this as an entry because it’s new writes only…
However, you are most welcome to submit something new. And you are of course most welcome to leave this here in honour of Ray.
Thanks muchly ☺️
Unfortunately I can’t accept this as an entry because it’s new writes only…
However, you are most welcome to submit something new. And you are of course most welcome to leave this here in honour of Ray.
Thanks muchly ☺️
RevolutionAL
Alistair Plint
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Alistair Plint
Dangerous Mind
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Joined 24th July 2012Forum Posts: 1257
Northern_Soul said:☝️ Hello my lovely….
Unfortunately I can’t accept this as an entry because it’s new writes only…
However, you are most welcome to submit something new. And you are of course most welcome to leave this here in honour of Ray.
Thanks muchly ☺️
Hello
Thank you! I apologies, I missed that rule. My bad, should have given them some extra time, in the excitement of this wonderful thread idea!
Below a new entry,
I've edited above to state "not an entry"
Thank you
Unfortunately I can’t accept this as an entry because it’s new writes only…
However, you are most welcome to submit something new. And you are of course most welcome to leave this here in honour of Ray.
Thanks muchly ☺️
Hello
Thank you! I apologies, I missed that rule. My bad, should have given them some extra time, in the excitement of this wonderful thread idea!
Below a new entry,
I've edited above to state "not an entry"
Thank you
RevolutionAL
Alistair Plint
Forum Posts: 1257
Alistair Plint
Dangerous Mind
29
Joined 24th July 2012Forum Posts: 1257
de[light]ed to [trib]ute six_out
one day,
i'll find. the words.
simple. concise
but those are un-natural traits
for [me]
so. i. say
- i love you, like fish love water.
as i'll die, if you take
me out of it / left on a river bank
flapping fins
like my arms
asking what they did, before
they. held. you.
time is steady moving. i asked
how long we had
you said -'it'll take you eternities to get rid of me'
and you smiled - in a way that
could make a man almost believe in god.
offering my heart.
ripped to pieces - because being [un]dead, isn't being alive.
-you make me want-to-live.
this. won't. end.
i don't give up on shit. like this.
yes, the story of love
ends in graves.
and i want yours
next to mine.
because death never had the strength
to, end. this.
to. end. us.
it takes courage to become
who [you] really are.
i'm still working on it. i am nothing original.
only the combined efforts of everyone
i have ever known.
especially, you.
you, who
took the words right-out of my fingers
- left me with this.
speaking in stolen tongue.
-x-
A word of thanks to Six-Out (Jon Rodgers)
without whom this poem wouldn't exist and the writers before him, who inspired the original [ex]cited. I gave Jon's rather unique punctuation a try at the same time (un-sure that I got it, though) .
Charles Bukowski, Jack Kerouac, ee cummings, Sylvia Plath, Pablo Neruda, Buddy Wakefield, Andrea Gibson, Frank Sinatra, and Chuck Pahlaniuk.
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RevolutionAL
Alistair Plint
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Alistair Plint
Dangerous Mind
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Joined 24th July 2012Forum Posts: 1257
That Day Barbie Walked Into Wacken
hold onto your knickers, this may roar
Some things are underground for a reason
Much mush
pretty make up
and half dressed
mannequins
have throughout history
tried to turn
the hardest
of the underground movements
into pretty-tinsel-laced
e v e r y d a y
environments
It makes
as much fucking sense as
Michael Jackson
being headmaster
of kindergarten
So while you read this
thinking
"yes but"
I'm sorry
-NO!
If you're wanting to hear
"hit me baby one more time"
expect an axe guitar to the temple
There are a million
commercial
pretty poetry websites
There are thousands of
publishers willing
to print
your wrecking ball
But only one fucking
underground
that welcomes
your cutting poem
your sex change
your death wish
your hard core
your heartache
your heavy
the love
and the
dark in
YOU!
Now I'm not saying pop
shouldn't feature as an
appetizing act
I am saying
we can't turn
a death metal festival
into grandma's
peach-panty-tea'party
While Karen
and Justin
arrive putting
vases of daises
on the toilet cistern
-a mirror ball above the mic
and a crop top on the drum kit
pull out your leathers
hold true to your heart
swap it out
for a skull coffin
filled with
black-fucking-roses
Hold your own truth
-apple pie
has no place
in suspenders
and chastity devices!
paint your love, in poetry as our forefathers did, but do it, just do it the underground way
< end rant >
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(Alistair Plint)
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Anonymous
Just giving this one a little bump x
robert43041
Viking
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Viking
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A tribute
't is for a competition
But is has to do with a poem
Entitled ''Brown Paper Bag''
By Styxian.
It is about memories of very younger days
And very difficult times.
I wish I could write with such depth
And transmit such
Emotions.
But is has to do with a poem
Entitled ''Brown Paper Bag''
By Styxian.
It is about memories of very younger days
And very difficult times.
I wish I could write with such depth
And transmit such
Emotions.
Written by robert43041
(Viking)
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Related submission no longer exists.
[]https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/449232-canopy/[/url]
the Last Tree on Earth
In my world, there's one last tree
somewhere the desert
meets the sea
and I wish it could comfort me,
keep me safe like company
I'm gazing at the swaying fruit
with a tongue that's parched
and a mouth that's mute..
and all I want
is to lay near it's roots
under that blasted sky of blue
So somewhere several feet away
I'm sitting just outside it's shade
comfort there beyond my reach
unfulfilled and incomplete
hands reaching, eyes praying
hunger won't get the best of me
For this is the one last tree...
if I touch it will it cease to be?
If I look too much will it
be the last I'll ever see?
And if this is the one last tree
do I even deserve
what it could offer.
by fieryangelsouljia (M6rr6g6n)
the Last Tree on Earth
In my world, there's one last tree
somewhere the desert
meets the sea
and I wish it could comfort me,
keep me safe like company
I'm gazing at the swaying fruit
with a tongue that's parched
and a mouth that's mute..
and all I want
is to lay near it's roots
under that blasted sky of blue
So somewhere several feet away
I'm sitting just outside it's shade
comfort there beyond my reach
unfulfilled and incomplete
hands reaching, eyes praying
hunger won't get the best of me
For this is the one last tree...
if I touch it will it cease to be?
If I look too much will it
be the last I'll ever see?
And if this is the one last tree
do I even deserve
what it could offer.
by fieryangelsouljia (M6rr6g6n)
RevolutionAL
Alistair Plint
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Alistair Plint
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Joined 24th July 2012Forum Posts: 1257
An Electric Ode To Kahn
"Lightning light me up, illuminate like fireflies
Medusa magic cast my dreams in stone" Kahn Morbee
ANC fairytales,
are not the same as the memory of The Roxy
-that midnight you taught men to wear eye-liner
just, one of many times you upped the game
"we promised our parents, we were just having fun!"
in front of a piano, choosing ivory, smiling at it's name
thinking of stardust galaxies and the road to china
knowing the gospel, "that goodbyes are never easy"
will live on each stone tarred to the journey's road
because "that's life" and I'm colorful
You are my antidote as beautiful as there comes a man,
I remain a loyal fan of your story, of your life design
so I tell myself you're "saving the best bit for tomorrow"
I'm starring at the mountain, calling the devil I know
I'm only human, your words remain
a white blood cell pumping me alive
while you silently read mine
converting wine
"what the hell were we thinking, were we thinking at all
what the hell did we believe we'd achieve
stood there with our hearts exposed
as the elders said I told you so." The Parlotones
*for some reason this poem bumps on the mobile screen.
Turn your mobile sideways for best results.
Written by RevolutionAL
(Alistair Plint)
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wallyroo92
Forum Posts: 1866
Tyrant of Words
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Phantasmic Aching
The realm between fantasy and reality crosses a fine line
When the yearning burns and turns from mind to body
Every part of the cortex is provoked and vexed with want
‘Til the reeling of phantasmic aching has you feeling naughty
And it’s here when you hear that voice expressing hunger
Delectable utterances stir the soul into transcendent bliss
With near breathless tones it can render some speechless
Flooding imaginations with images one simply cannot dismiss
Oh and the stirring, the thought provoking visions are conferring
It’s an alluring invitation to fleeting dreams at the edge of sin
Like little deaths coupled with resurrections and awakenings
Until the fantastic madness wears the veil of decorum thin
And we, the audience reading and listening to the story unfold
Delve into the scenery delighted by the enticing narration
Where self indulgence and indiscretions can be boundless
Reveling in the pleasure of a wordsmith’s magnificent creation
Written by wallyroo92
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Inspired by Bluevelvete's Artful Ascension