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wallyroo92
Published
13th Sep 2019 2:45pm
13th Sep 2019 2:45pm
Another Phase of Life
Time and space move so differently here,
The agony and pain have subsided,
Actually my brain understands that fear
Is an illusion the living provided.
There’s no light at the end of this tunnel,
The darkness covers everything around,
There’s nothing here to make me stumble,
Just an echo that makes a faint sound.
But it’s the grief of those that are still living,
Trying to deal with departure and sorrow,
As my body withers I’m shifting,
Knowing for me there is no tomorrow.
I’ve been here before but I can’t remember,
My memories...
The agony and pain have subsided,
Actually my brain understands that fear
Is an illusion the living provided.
There’s no light at the end of this tunnel,
The darkness covers everything around,
There’s nothing here to make me stumble,
Just an echo that makes a faint sound.
But it’s the grief of those that are still living,
Trying to deal with departure and sorrow,
As my body withers I’m shifting,
Knowing for me there is no tomorrow.
I’ve been here before but I can’t remember,
My memories...
#grief
#death
#spiritual
562 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Published
Yesterday 8:56pm
Yesterday 8:56pm
cave
the devil in you craves the witch in me
a hex is upon you what will you do?
secretly I cast a spell
enchanting your desire
wow and you feel it
deep in your loins
my clever trick, is to keep you amused
interest piqued I seduce
conjuring your ardo to my bedroom
I covet your affections
fate decided to reward my efforts
the karmic wheel spin in my favor
you are the flavor I need
decadently dark you know what it takes to please me
your power evident I wonder now who got who
your stoic stare pins me...
a hex is upon you what will you do?
secretly I cast a spell
enchanting your desire
wow and you feel it
deep in your loins
my clever trick, is to keep you amused
interest piqued I seduce
conjuring your ardo to my bedroom
I covet your affections
fate decided to reward my efforts
the karmic wheel spin in my favor
you are the flavor I need
decadently dark you know what it takes to please me
your power evident I wonder now who got who
your stoic stare pins me...
#lust
48 reads
3 Comments
gothicsurrealism
Daniel Long
Daniel Long
Published
Yesterday 8:47pm
Yesterday 8:47pm
Bitch On A Leash (part two)
As my spit-drizzled cock stood erect before her face, she looked at me and gave a smile that would show she was having childish fun.
So I pulled on her leash until she came face to face with me. I pressed my lips into hers and we laughed. There she reached down and started fondling my sweaty balls as she said, “I love how you taste. I want you to drain it down my throat.”
“Every drop?” I asked jokingly.
“Yes! I’m gonna suck it out like a vacuum.”
She slid back down between my knees and she gave quick licks over my balls as she grasped the base of...
So I pulled on her leash until she came face to face with me. I pressed my lips into hers and we laughed. There she reached down and started fondling my sweaty balls as she said, “I love how you taste. I want you to drain it down my throat.”
“Every drop?” I asked jokingly.
“Yes! I’m gonna suck it out like a vacuum.”
She slid back down between my knees and she gave quick licks over my balls as she grasped the base of...
#BDSM
#dirty
#erotic
#lust
#sex
40 reads
1 Comment
Green_Arrow
Published
Yesterday 8:26pm
Yesterday 8:26pm
Feels Like Something From Out Of A Sex Film... Does It?
Brandon was taking a shower.
That's before Susan... Tommy's mother... joined him.
She lets him hump her.
But then, Tommy's father Charles walked in.
his shocked eyes fixed on the lovers.
That's before Susan... Tommy's mother... joined him.
She lets him hump her.
But then, Tommy's father Charles walked in.
his shocked eyes fixed on the lovers.
#betrayal
#fiction
#friendship
#home
#sex
35 reads
0 Comments
James_A_Knight
Published
Yesterday 5:13pm
Yesterday 5:13pm
Porcelain Origami
She folds herself into a swan
So she can fly away
She cracks but never breaks
She reinforced her porcelain
So she can fly away
She cracks but never breaks
She reinforced her porcelain
#birds
22 reads
1 Comment
NP_NP
Published
Yesterday 4:53pm
Yesterday 4:53pm
White Lines
Leslie likes the white lines on the road
And her coffee table.
The party girl who grew up too fast,
Now asks her 15-year-old niece for cash.
Bouncing from hotel to motel,
You used to be so beautiful—
To think of the woman you could have been
Breaks my heart.
We hung out a couple of times,
You were so much fun to be around.
What broke you? Who hurt you?
Why couldn’t you just walk away from that life?
I loved your smile, your hazel eyes,
The most beautiful brown skin—
You...
And her coffee table.
The party girl who grew up too fast,
Now asks her 15-year-old niece for cash.
Bouncing from hotel to motel,
You used to be so beautiful—
To think of the woman you could have been
Breaks my heart.
We hung out a couple of times,
You were so much fun to be around.
What broke you? Who hurt you?
Why couldn’t you just walk away from that life?
I loved your smile, your hazel eyes,
The most beautiful brown skin—
You...
#drugs
23 reads
0 Comments
Roadisattva
Ian Kenney
Ian Kenney
Published
Yesterday 4:46pm
Yesterday 4:46pm
Election Day
election day
under the protestor's boot
a flower
under the protestor's boot
a flower
#senryu
16 reads
0 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Published
Yesterday 4:38pm
Yesterday 4:38pm
I f**k the Girl
When in doubt, I fucked the girl
It always felt so right
Short or tall, they were sure to fall
I fucked one every night
It might not be the ideal time
There might be complications
But when you feel those pussy lips
You lose all reservations
It always felt so right
Short or tall, they were sure to fall
I fucked one every night
It might not be the ideal time
There might be complications
But when you feel those pussy lips
You lose all reservations
#dark
#lust
#sex
48 reads
1 Comment
Baldwin
Published
Yesterday 4:34pm
Yesterday 4:34pm
Ravager
I’ve now become
invisible
to women I desire.
I’m easily ignored.
and overlooked.
And if
within an accidental moment
I am seen by chance,
I’m easily discounted
as a man
not worth a second glance.
Age the ravager
age the savager
has striped my flesh
of any comeliness
or kindling fire.
invisible
to women I desire.
I’m easily ignored.
and overlooked.
And if
within an accidental moment
I am seen by chance,
I’m easily discounted
as a man
not worth a second glance.
Age the ravager
age the savager
has striped my flesh
of any comeliness
or kindling fire.
#depression
26 reads
0 Comments
chihiro_angel
geeeeel.crp
geeeeel.crp
Published
Yesterday 4:07pm
Yesterday 4:07pm
The Prison Beneath the Skin
I pity the spiders forced to fight,
torn from their webs, thrown into battles
they never chose, their fragile legs grasping at life
while other hands decide their own fate.
I was never fond of them, and I never will be,
but fear does not blind me to their suffering.
They do not seek harm, only survival,
yet they are crushed beneath thoughtless hands.
But deeper still is the sorrow I feel
for birds who have never touched the sky.
Trapped behind cold metal bars,
they sing songs of longing, not knowing why. ...
torn from their webs, thrown into battles
they never chose, their fragile legs grasping at life
while other hands decide their own fate.
I was never fond of them, and I never will be,
but fear does not blind me to their suffering.
They do not seek harm, only survival,
yet they are crushed beneath thoughtless hands.
But deeper still is the sorrow I feel
for birds who have never touched the sky.
Trapped behind cold metal bars,
they sing songs of longing, not knowing why. ...
#despair
19 reads
0 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Published
Yesterday 3:30pm
Yesterday 3:30pm
The Rooted Lofty Tree
She sat there under a rooted lofty tree.. Shading branches and fanning leaves kept her company... The hissing of silence and the reigning of solitude driving her cold at home. She took a step out to let vanish the void that filled her chest. She brooded over herself the one of the past leafing through her memories... "That's the apple of my eye.. The lifeblood of my heart!.." She came to taste beauty.. To touch the very core of delight when He was brought to her life. Burning all the candles of her youth at both sides, extremely weary but profoundly contented. The echoes of giggles...
#aging
#gratitude
#LifeCycle
#motherhood
#nostalgia
22 reads
2 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Published
Yesterday 3:13pm
Yesterday 3:13pm
Calm spirits of AWAKENING
As I stop and look and listen not only to my own mind and heart, I listen carefully to what others have to say on what they think and say about some situations, for sure it's true we all have our own opinions on what we see and hear, and read between the lines ✍️ For it's a pleasure to be able to have grown FOLKS conversations, as we can agree or disagree, but yet come together with a positive level of understanding, and walk away with knowledge and wisdom and enlightenment. With insight and the spiritual subconsciousness of our lives and dreams. Still intact with our endless,...
#dialogue
#gratitude
#philosophical
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
22 reads
0 Comments
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