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Ravager

I’ve now become   
invisible    
to women I desire.    
I’m easily ignored.    
and overlooked.    
   
And if    
within an accidental moment  
I am seen by chance,  
I’m easily discounted  
as a man
not worth a second glance.  
Age the ravager  
age the savager  
has stripped my flesh
of any comeliness    
or kindling fire.
Written by Baldwin
Published | Edited 8th Feb 2025
Author's Note
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