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Poetic_License
Published
Today 8:17pm
Today 8:17pm
Amelia's Box
He spied her in the crowded bar,
A local haunt for regulars,
The pregame, postgame, game time refuge.
In a rolling sea of moving bodies,
Voices crashed and chased each other in crescendo,
She remained still, quiet, ethereal.
She does not belong here.
That was his first lucid thought through an alcohol induced haze.
What is she doing here?
For her part, she sat peacefully, hands atop the bar,
Her auburn locks fell full and loose,
A cascade of fire tumbling over pale shoulders.
He approached, straightening...
A local haunt for regulars,
The pregame, postgame, game time refuge.
In a rolling sea of moving bodies,
Voices crashed and chased each other in crescendo,
She remained still, quiet, ethereal.
She does not belong here.
That was his first lucid thought through an alcohol induced haze.
What is she doing here?
For her part, she sat peacefully, hands atop the bar,
Her auburn locks fell full and loose,
A cascade of fire tumbling over pale shoulders.
He approached, straightening...
#sadness
#rejection
#ghosts
#UnrequitedLove
#disappointment
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smackdownraven
Published
Today 8:10pm
Today 8:10pm
lucidity
sweet sanctity within sanity
break the chains that subdue
inside the sacred halls of lucidity
endure the wretched pain
to find yourself stronger still
delusions may rage
but in the poet's keep be well
break the chains that subdue
inside the sacred halls of lucidity
endure the wretched pain
to find yourself stronger still
delusions may rage
but in the poet's keep be well
#bipolar
#MentalHealth
#minimalist
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PoetSpeak
Published
Today 8:04pm
Today 8:04pm
Model for Me
You have what I want
You like showing off too
Show me almost everything
Not all
Keep me dangling
Mess up my head
A man will do almost anything for sex
I don’t want sex
It’s arousal that’s da bomb
What are you waiting for ?
Show me the way
Your way
You like showing off too
Show me almost everything
Not all
Keep me dangling
Mess up my head
A man will do almost anything for sex
I don’t want sex
It’s arousal that’s da bomb
What are you waiting for ?
Show me the way
Your way
#obsession
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Joshuaberry
Ancestor
Ancestor
Published
Today 7:57pm
Today 7:57pm
Reserata Carcerem XXXIV
Erstwhile, travelled a monk to heav'n -
that Holy Grail.
Borne on trance's wings - pride cloven.
Got he at 't gate:
And the angels all were silent.
Where pale Cynthia shed her order,
for its great wall
pukes rare radiance, beams and Jasper -
and the gate's tall:
And the angels all were silent.
Then his fingers, this marred monk wrapped
into knuckles
on the gate - cacophony clasped ;
his grit trembled:
And the angels all were silent.
Saw he wings in gay - sumptuous spree.
Its floor of gold. ...
that Holy Grail.
Borne on trance's wings - pride cloven.
Got he at 't gate:
And the angels all were silent.
Where pale Cynthia shed her order,
for its great wall
pukes rare radiance, beams and Jasper -
and the gate's tall:
And the angels all were silent.
Then his fingers, this marred monk wrapped
into knuckles
on the gate - cacophony clasped ;
his grit trembled:
And the angels all were silent.
Saw he wings in gay - sumptuous spree.
Its floor of gold. ...
#redemption
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AverageJoe
Published
Today 7:39pm
Today 7:39pm
Something About You
You're beautiful
And my world
Finds night transposing into light
For what was just a dream before
Awakens to be you
Love
In a glance or a moment shared
A smile
A touch
A word
Finds the undeniable there
And what has birthed love of dreams
But the indefinable in you
You
Who i have yet to come to know
Whisper in your nearness
The sweet savour of thoughts
Which yearn for forever
Indefinable
Undeniable
In the turning of this moment
And I couldn't wish for more
For you're...
And my world
Finds night transposing into light
For what was just a dream before
Awakens to be you
Love
In a glance or a moment shared
A smile
A touch
A word
Finds the undeniable there
And what has birthed love of dreams
But the indefinable in you
You
Who i have yet to come to know
Whisper in your nearness
The sweet savour of thoughts
Which yearn for forever
Indefinable
Undeniable
In the turning of this moment
And I couldn't wish for more
For you're...
#love
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EdibleWords
Published
Today 7:34pm
Today 7:34pm
The Left has a Swamp to Drain, Also
Don’t give the slime
what they want
Stagnant cooperation
with rotting moral values
There are and
always will be
the newly wisened
sensible centrists
Humanitarian
moral Americans
upstanding students
of social lessons
Let the spotless
rise and be tested
what they want
Stagnant cooperation
with rotting moral values
There are and
always will be
the newly wisened
sensible centrists
Humanitarian
moral Americans
upstanding students
of social lessons
Let the spotless
rise and be tested
#politics
#LifeCycle
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SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Published
Today 6:56pm
Today 6:56pm
GET A GRIP
Get a grip
I yelled to you
Before you threw
Yourself at me
Get a grip
I silently tell
Protective hands
You bruised and battered
I yelled to you
Before you threw
Yourself at me
Get a grip
I silently tell
Protective hands
You bruised and battered
#abuse
#bullying
#hurt #DomesticViolence
#hurt #DomesticViolence
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SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Published
Today 6:39pm
Today 6:39pm
ECHOES
The backs of my hands
Know your balled-up anger
Better than the back (or inside)
Of my head
Thankfully,
Though their echoes
Won’t let me
Forget:
Everything I try to hold
Threatens to fall through
My weakened
Clasp.
Know your balled-up anger
Better than the back (or inside)
Of my head
Thankfully,
Though their echoes
Won’t let me
Forget:
Everything I try to hold
Threatens to fall through
My weakened
Clasp.
#abuse
#bullying
#hurt #DomesticViolence
#hurt #DomesticViolence
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Ely
E.A.Rothwell
E.A.Rothwell
Published
Today 5:45pm
Today 5:45pm
Tanka #39 my folks were hoping...
My folks were hoping to marry me...
off to a man who would be
a stabilizing influence.
...I don't think you were exactly
what they had in mind...
off to a man who would be
a stabilizing influence.
...I don't think you were exactly
what they had in mind...
#parent
#family
#tanka
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wallyroo92
Published
Today 5:22pm
Today 5:22pm
Statuesque
Statuesque
#erotic
#rhyming
#WritingPoetry #sensual
#WritingPoetry #sensual
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1 Comment
zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Published
Today 5:00pm
Today 5:00pm
Hanky Noodle Dandy
Yankee doodled on lockdown just sat there on his pony
with a frown said fuq this town I'm getting stonedy to the boney
Hanky Noodle got a quarter pound and blazed up with his homies
Stuck his finger in the air and called it
Rice-A-Roni...... Save a potato
Rice-A-Roni a San Francisco treat
with a frown said fuq this town I'm getting stonedy to the boney
Hanky Noodle got a quarter pound and blazed up with his homies
Stuck his finger in the air and called it
Rice-A-Roni...... Save a potato
Rice-A-Roni a San Francisco treat
#funny
#patience
#nostalgia
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#pandemic
10 reads
1 Comment
OG-Poetry
Published
Today 4:59pm
Today 4:59pm
i, myself and me..
i.. was having a talk today with me,
me and myself usually agree,
i objects to smoking of weed,
then..
i.. excused myself upsettingly
and when he did, he left with me,
me and myself usually agree,
so..
i just can’t see how it can be,
that “their minds are truly free”
on a long term “smoking therapy”,
now..
i will start to stretch and breathe
it’s a crowded place in here to be
really when visits of sad or misery,
what..
one thing that the three do agree
and maybe hard...
me and myself usually agree,
i objects to smoking of weed,
then..
i.. excused myself upsettingly
and when he did, he left with me,
me and myself usually agree,
so..
i just can’t see how it can be,
that “their minds are truly free”
on a long term “smoking therapy”,
now..
i will start to stretch and breathe
it’s a crowded place in here to be
really when visits of sad or misery,
what..
one thing that the three do agree
and maybe hard...
#happiness
#anxiety
#LifeStruggles
#marijuana
#healing
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