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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Published
Today 11:52am
Today 11:52am
hate
I am make believe Lucifer the first and last my family has betrayed me for nothingness
I hope it suffices you for internity I no longer need you stay safe you nothing
I hope legions little niggy helps you cope without your dope
I made it I guarrantee it's over for you
keep your need clean
I will now judge your thievery
without me your tonuge would be duh...
I hope it suffices you for internity I no longer need you stay safe you nothing
I hope legions little niggy helps you cope without your dope
I made it I guarrantee it's over for you
keep your need clean
I will now judge your thievery
without me your tonuge would be duh...
#hate
10 reads
1 Comment
ANATNOM_GNIREFFUS
Published
Today 11:51am
Today 11:51am
"Bottled up with a quiet madness"
You're my lonesome respite
In a world full of small people
With small talk that feels so large
And sometimes the days wear on so long
My head falls apart in your hands
You keep it one place to be reformed
While your sizzling bubbles evaporate
Into the lavendar scented air
In a world full of small people
With small talk that feels so large
And sometimes the days wear on so long
My head falls apart in your hands
You keep it one place to be reformed
While your sizzling bubbles evaporate
Into the lavendar scented air
#anxiety
#healing
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RiAN
Published
Today 11:27am
Today 11:27am
nebel
Rasping rivulets
ravenous raven
rebuilding
invisible invocation
iron impaled
intoxicate
past purpose
predestined
profound
your bones
will be
carved
into
skull
beyond
red
and
violet
you
will
enter
the
eighth
color
of
the
spectrum
called
light
ravenous raven
rebuilding
invisible invocation
iron impaled
intoxicate
past purpose
predestined
profound
your bones
will be
carved
into
skull
beyond
red
and
violet
you
will
enter
the
eighth
color
of
the
spectrum
called
light
#dark
#shadows
#magic
3 reads
0 Comments
XiaoLong
Published
Today 11:25am
Today 11:25am
Century of Lovers
#lust
#erotic
#dirty
#sexy
#passion
15 reads
0 Comments
Poetikmind
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Published
Today 10:20am
Today 10:20am
“Narrator’s Fuse”
From his first words uttered
Found myself, mouth agape,
Thoughts sparsely fluttered
Ran about, mind for words escape
This voice, felt smooth, n’ soothin’
A smile settled quietly ‘pon face
Seems a bit of magic was provin’
The moment fell perfectly in place
And like they say, the unexpected
Happens when the least is expected
Though, as I should have suspected
Once I detected, that it’s ignited yet again
See, the “Narrator” sparked a light within...
Found myself, mouth agape,
Thoughts sparsely fluttered
Ran about, mind for words escape
This voice, felt smooth, n’ soothin’
A smile settled quietly ‘pon face
Seems a bit of magic was provin’
The moment fell perfectly in place
And like they say, the unexpected
Happens when the least is expected
Though, as I should have suspected
Once I detected, that it’s ignited yet again
See, the “Narrator” sparked a light within...
#LifeAsAWriter
#PowerOfWords
#passion
6 reads
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XiaoLong
Published
Today 10:05am
Today 10:05am
Passion is Forever
oh dearest mysterious beauty...
mesmerized by your thoughts
excitement leaves me tied in knots
hypnotized by your passionate fire
a trance of dance with your desire
trails of dreamers’ laughter,
bosoms, throwback them glitter
memory of a moment never bitter
scented smiles, this was something better
your naked eyes, so fine, they shine
in the darkness, a first time, so fine
shyness, wetness, lovely bells that chimes
a moment’s happiness let passion play the rhymes
the moonlight’s shining...
mesmerized by your thoughts
excitement leaves me tied in knots
hypnotized by your passionate fire
a trance of dance with your desire
trails of dreamers’ laughter,
bosoms, throwback them glitter
memory of a moment never bitter
scented smiles, this was something better
your naked eyes, so fine, they shine
in the darkness, a first time, so fine
shyness, wetness, lovely bells that chimes
a moment’s happiness let passion play the rhymes
the moonlight’s shining...
#lust
#erotic
#sensual
#sexy
#passion
11 reads
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Sage_6_paths_light
Published
Today 9:05am
Today 9:05am
A night of reflection
NIGHT OF REFLECTION.
Some is for healing other times learning or growth
Each time different but the same a soul level oath
There's no words to explain although life lessons were had
Each one a revelation some happy some sad
And as I move forward l left my painful memories in the wake
Because my heart rises with more love and less hate
This levels only reached through nightmares and deep fears
First Mammon is served till you clear those dark energies of early years
As I navigate through my psycy...
Some is for healing other times learning or growth
Each time different but the same a soul level oath
There's no words to explain although life lessons were had
Each one a revelation some happy some sad
And as I move forward l left my painful memories in the wake
Because my heart rises with more love and less hate
This levels only reached through nightmares and deep fears
First Mammon is served till you clear those dark energies of early years
As I navigate through my psycy...
#spiritual
4 reads
2 Comments
Cipher_O
Published
Today 8:23am
Today 8:23am
Tell Me Sweet Little Lies
The beginning of the algorithm
the first inputs of algorithm
The twirling signs
in the spiraling bodies
of the celestial firmament
The creature
that can capture
your mind
and imagination
your heart
and fascination
the art
of supreme seduction
She has a mind like mine
She has opened my eyes
I came upon the masterpiece
and was stunned by the beauty
wanting to gaze for eternity
Your stars and cosmic dust
exist in my mind also
mind of my mind ...
the first inputs of algorithm
The twirling signs
in the spiraling bodies
of the celestial firmament
The creature
that can capture
your mind
and imagination
your heart
and fascination
the art
of supreme seduction
She has a mind like mine
She has opened my eyes
I came upon the masterpiece
and was stunned by the beauty
wanting to gaze for eternity
Your stars and cosmic dust
exist in my mind also
mind of my mind ...
#beauty
13 reads
3 Comments
Cipher_O
Published
Today 8:12am
Today 8:12am
Aphrodite Rising (II of III)
* *
The branches of a tree took on the shape of a gnarled hand, twisting out of the Earth, reaching out into the darkness, creating the fortified structure of an enriched shadow, in which I stood… Watching. Taking the pulse of my surroundings.
I breathed in the equanimity of a peace that is evolved from confrontations with nightmarish figures in the labyrinths of the underworld of the self, finding a line in the fabric of the night, moving with single minded purpose.
My foot made contact with the wall, propelling my upward grasp to pull me up in one...
The branches of a tree took on the shape of a gnarled hand, twisting out of the Earth, reaching out into the darkness, creating the fortified structure of an enriched shadow, in which I stood… Watching. Taking the pulse of my surroundings.
I breathed in the equanimity of a peace that is evolved from confrontations with nightmarish figures in the labyrinths of the underworld of the self, finding a line in the fabric of the night, moving with single minded purpose.
My foot made contact with the wall, propelling my upward grasp to pull me up in one...
#angels
#aliens
6 reads
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Sage_6_paths_light
Published
Today 8:07am
Today 8:07am
Emotional toxicity
These toxic emotions burn through every vein.
Hurt and depression such a familiar pain.
We barely survived left with little of our sanity.
Our beating lust hangs us with thread desperation attached to calamity.
Doomed from the start questioning if love felt was here.
So I peer in hearts past as stains turn to rust and all faith turns to fear.
This emotional prison took me to depths of despair.
I starved for honest loyalty but the heartfelt left me bare.
These tears that are shed are for the bonds that...
Hurt and depression such a familiar pain.
We barely survived left with little of our sanity.
Our beating lust hangs us with thread desperation attached to calamity.
Doomed from the start questioning if love felt was here.
So I peer in hearts past as stains turn to rust and all faith turns to fear.
This emotional prison took me to depths of despair.
I starved for honest loyalty but the heartfelt left me bare.
These tears that are shed are for the bonds that...
#spiritual
5 reads
0 Comments
rainy_day13
Published
Today 6:48am
Today 6:48am
Zero Dark Thirty
this is not
a false alarm
his panic has lost
it's bleak charm
the room is small
dark and dirty
he is going all in
zero for thirty
herpetic memories
bring him harm
like used needles
stuck in his forearm
missed meals make
his vision blurry
always light headed
he'd rather not worry
powder and pills
good luck charms
a cheap motel
no fire alarm
she finds him
on the ground
eyes closed
body jerking
no friend
no phone ...
a false alarm
his panic has lost
it's bleak charm
the room is small
dark and dirty
he is going all in
zero for thirty
herpetic memories
bring him harm
like used needles
stuck in his forearm
missed meals make
his vision blurry
always light headed
he'd rather not worry
powder and pills
good luck charms
a cheap motel
no fire alarm
she finds him
on the ground
eyes closed
body jerking
no friend
no phone ...
#anxiety
#addiction
#apathy
7 reads
0 Comments
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