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Ron Summers
Ron Summers
Published
Today 1:00am
Today 1:00am
Dream time Queen
#love
#hope
#dreams
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Published
Yesterday 00:43am
Yesterday 00:43am
soul deep
speak to my soul
on the edge of feeling
I cry out in need of redemption
forsaking my violence
tempering my darkness
I enter into an understanding of passion
so deep it invades my senses causing me ache
liberating in its honesty
but cuts so deep
separating fact and fiction
I climb the notes of despair
then dive in, to meet love where it is
deep in an ocean of loneliness
an arrogant bitterness
and a greed so great I have just begun to touch
need and desire warring with each other
down at...
on the edge of feeling
I cry out in need of redemption
forsaking my violence
tempering my darkness
I enter into an understanding of passion
so deep it invades my senses causing me ache
liberating in its honesty
but cuts so deep
separating fact and fiction
I climb the notes of despair
then dive in, to meet love where it is
deep in an ocean of loneliness
an arrogant bitterness
and a greed so great I have just begun to touch
need and desire warring with each other
down at...
#love
#lust
14 reads
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johnnyscarlotti
Published
Yesterday 00:15am
Yesterday 00:15am
watch
#memories
#SelfReflection
#choices
5 reads
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CanisInc-Untis
Published
Yesterday 00:14am
Yesterday 00:14am
Stoker stoking the Fire - #5
while cannon rumbled
‘geddon getting their beginning
the North could not bind
Southern colour
that forced them
on 3 of their sides
lo they were winning
but she conjured hesitation
General unpractical
Ewell to perplex
on the far flank of Culps
where she sent
hallucination
and reticules of her hex
now that Stonewall was gone
backboned grey giant
she cursed so hard
they could not even catch
the steely hooked fish
that remained non-compliant
vulnerable bend in the ridge
like curves...
‘geddon getting their beginning
the North could not bind
Southern colour
that forced them
on 3 of their sides
lo they were winning
but she conjured hesitation
General unpractical
Ewell to perplex
on the far flank of Culps
where she sent
hallucination
and reticules of her hex
now that Stonewall was gone
backboned grey giant
she cursed so hard
they could not even catch
the steely hooked fish
that remained non-compliant
vulnerable bend in the ridge
like curves...
#lust
#war
#witches
#curse
#military
8 reads
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Razzerleaf
Published
Yesterday 11:39pm
Yesterday 11:39pm
Guybrush Threepwood
The little shit
always the dim wit
monkey island
headphones for the silence
Lucas arts
bunch of farts
playin till four in the morning
listen to the birds calling
Fucked up by ghost pirate
Le chuck and his crew
grog was my special brew
always went too far
in the scum bar
talkin to spiffy the dog
over another jug of grog
married Elaine
lol kept changing his name
melee island
my asylum
hanging on its anchor chain
played about 4 games
when I should have been revising
not strategizing ...
always the dim wit
monkey island
headphones for the silence
Lucas arts
bunch of farts
playin till four in the morning
listen to the birds calling
Fucked up by ghost pirate
Le chuck and his crew
grog was my special brew
always went too far
in the scum bar
talkin to spiffy the dog
over another jug of grog
married Elaine
lol kept changing his name
melee island
my asylum
hanging on its anchor chain
played about 4 games
when I should have been revising
not strategizing ...
#obsession
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Sandals
Published
Yesterday 11:24pm
Yesterday 11:24pm
How Do U See It From My Eyes
#dark
#beauty
#gothic
#beach
#UnrequitedLove
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Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Published
Yesterday 11:06pm
Yesterday 11:06pm
Rain
My mood betrays me
sometimes I need
blue skies to smile
I'm tired of the cold
hands pressed against frigid glass
praying for a break in the grey
But the grey doesn't move
it settles in its blinding grim existence
and refuses to cease its tears
that drown out everything else
until nothing is left
but sadness in my hands
and a chill in my soul
that craves sunshine and blue skies
My mood betrays me
© Indie Adams 2022
sometimes I need
blue skies to smile
I'm tired of the cold
hands pressed against frigid glass
praying for a break in the grey
But the grey doesn't move
it settles in its blinding grim existence
and refuses to cease its tears
that drown out everything else
until nothing is left
but sadness in my hands
and a chill in my soul
that craves sunshine and blue skies
My mood betrays me
© Indie Adams 2022
#depression
#rain
#MentalHealth #despair
#MentalHealth #despair
24 reads
2 Comments
Sandals
Published
Yesterday 11:05pm
Yesterday 11:05pm
Evanescence
#dark
#relationships
#beauty
#scary
#lover
7 reads
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faithmairee
Published
Yesterday 10:32pm
Yesterday 10:32pm
Someday (You're Gonna Pay)
Someday You're gonna pay
For all of your evil ways
Someday, someway
You're gonna regret that
You threw our love away
I would never say
I told you so
When you went astray
You were making a mistake
Playing a foolish game
Even though you hurt me so
I forgive you in my heart
Wish you all the best
It was just so sad
Watching the way you changed
For all of your evil ways
Someday, someway
You're gonna regret that
You threw our love away
I would never say
I told you so
When you went astray
You were making a mistake
Playing a foolish game
Even though you hurt me so
I forgive you in my heart
Wish you all the best
It was just so sad
Watching the way you changed
#regret
#forgiveness
#heartbroken
18 reads
1 Comment
MidnightSonneteer
Published
Yesterday 10:09pm
Yesterday 10:09pm
Her Majesty
She's in a diminishing phase
From last quarter to the new
But soon all her crescent displays
Will please lunatics tried and true
Who watch her climb the eastern skies
As often as the clouds allow
That hallowed orb to hypnotize
The eyes beneath the caveman brow
Housing a love for midnight things
Like moonbeams in midsummer air
And Saturn in his sacred rings
Or screech owls who routinely stare
At all of that which lurks below
A moonrise of majestic glow!
From last quarter to the new
But soon all her crescent displays
Will please lunatics tried and true
Who watch her climb the eastern skies
As often as the clouds allow
That hallowed orb to hypnotize
The eyes beneath the caveman brow
Housing a love for midnight things
Like moonbeams in midsummer air
And Saturn in his sacred rings
Or screech owls who routinely stare
At all of that which lurks below
A moonrise of majestic glow!
#moon
#summer
#night
12 reads
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Her
Published
8th Sep 2021 1:02pm
8th Sep 2021 1:02pm
Last Night
Softly he asked, "have you ever tried?"
Hesitantly I turned to him
and discovered our new playtime
One after the other
Gasping from the shock of each slap
Aching, tensing
Shifting forwards and back
My racing heart echoes
Each stinging slap building
Aching need
Tears of ecstasy in my eyes
Then my lovers breath
upon my neck
Release the passionate delight
of my anticipation
Blissful quaking drips like honey
Nourished pleasure
My body blushed
Hesitantly I turned to him
and discovered our new playtime
One after the other
Gasping from the shock of each slap
Aching, tensing
Shifting forwards and back
My racing heart echoes
Each stinging slap building
Aching need
Tears of ecstasy in my eyes
Then my lovers breath
upon my neck
Release the passionate delight
of my anticipation
Blissful quaking drips like honey
Nourished pleasure
My body blushed
#erotic
#sexy
#orgasm
188 reads
9 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Published
Yesterday 9:59pm
Yesterday 9:59pm
Adieu...
She said goodbye in a dream last night
Or else it was a housecat's ghost
Lingering as an after sight
Where fondness always plays the host.
She dynamized as spirits do
Yet in her familiar way
Of anxious trot and dainty chew
On a garden moth canape.
Then she coursed the hall from room to room
Wondering where she last had slept
And soon enough she would assume
A vacant lap where she'd be kept...
Long enough for a farewell pet
And a purring sound I won't forget.
Or else it was a housecat's ghost
Lingering as an after sight
Where fondness always plays the host.
She dynamized as spirits do
Yet in her familiar way
Of anxious trot and dainty chew
On a garden moth canape.
Then she coursed the hall from room to room
Wondering where she last had slept
And soon enough she would assume
A vacant lap where she'd be kept...
Long enough for a farewell pet
And a purring sound I won't forget.
#sadness
17 reads
2 Comments
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