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Vferry
Published
Today 3:45am
Today 3:45am
Better Me
Catch me when I am gone
Just a picture on the shelf
Faded by the sun I couldn’t bring
With shades of my better self
Know me when I’m forgotten
When my truth is no longer real
Buried inside the blackthorn vines
That prevents your want to feel
If at times, my better me
Whirls a hum inside your heart
Hold my hand in the blackthorn vines
To remember what tore us apart
And if drops of fallen angel blood
Rain from clouds at Heaven’s floor
It’s a reminder from the grave
Of all the hurt I did before
Just a picture on the shelf
Faded by the sun I couldn’t bring
With shades of my better self
Know me when I’m forgotten
When my truth is no longer real
Buried inside the blackthorn vines
That prevents your want to feel
If at times, my better me
Whirls a hum inside your heart
Hold my hand in the blackthorn vines
To remember what tore us apart
And if drops of fallen angel blood
Rain from clouds at Heaven’s floor
It’s a reminder from the grave
Of all the hurt I did before
#relationships
#conflict
#death
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Taurek
Published
Today 3:36am
Today 3:36am
Sing Sing’s Dreaming
Radio silence on
Miley Cyrus
The only chick you
think about now
You know what the
male gaze is? It’s hardcore
pornography, war, pillage,
rape, sadistic
violence. What is the
female gaze? It’s the
same thing.
Now you know why
we’ve survived, thus
far, at the top of the
food chain
Clementine’s on
Tuesday
I’m never going to
forgive you
As the Madame
laments
me
There will be a
reckoning and
this thing of
ours will be ...
Miley Cyrus
The only chick you
think about now
You know what the
male gaze is? It’s hardcore
pornography, war, pillage,
rape, sadistic
violence. What is the
female gaze? It’s the
same thing.
Now you know why
we’ve survived, thus
far, at the top of the
food chain
Clementine’s on
Tuesday
I’m never going to
forgive you
As the Madame
laments
me
There will be a
reckoning and
this thing of
ours will be ...
#women
#men
#war
#PopCulture
#prison
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HadesRising
Published
Today 3:35am
Today 3:35am
WORMWOOD
She is the fire in the coldest night
Bright enough to renew this heart, alight
This ballad was inked in blood just for her
I'm staked to the ground just waiting to burn
ONE
Her kiss is poison
TWO
This bliss is poison
THREE
I have fallen for Wormwood
FOUR
Tattooed with poison
She rapes the skies with her infernal grace
Spreading her arms for those she must embrace
Smitten by all but the devil may care
Lighting the way for ungodly warfare
ONE
Her kiss is poison
TWO
This bliss is...
Bright enough to renew this heart, alight
This ballad was inked in blood just for her
I'm staked to the ground just waiting to burn
ONE
Her kiss is poison
TWO
This bliss is poison
THREE
I have fallen for Wormwood
FOUR
Tattooed with poison
She rapes the skies with her infernal grace
Spreading her arms for those she must embrace
Smitten by all but the devil may care
Lighting the way for ungodly warfare
ONE
Her kiss is poison
TWO
This bliss is...
#love
#apocalypse
#mythology #curse
#mythology #curse
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CosiestPrism273
Published
Today 3:26am
Today 3:26am
Reality
What is real?
What is fake?
Is what you see true?
What about opinions you make?
Are you truly here?
Are you just a figment of someone's mind?
Are you in someone's game?
Is that what you will find?
Who are you?
Are you even alive?
Do you have thoughts?
Are you just another bee in a hive?
Is your mind even controlled by you?
Do you have any say in what is chosen?
Are you just a random spin from death?
Are you in ice and frozen?
Is this all a dream?
Is this all a simulation?
Is there...
What is fake?
Is what you see true?
What about opinions you make?
Are you truly here?
Are you just a figment of someone's mind?
Are you in someone's game?
Is that what you will find?
Who are you?
Are you even alive?
Do you have thoughts?
Are you just another bee in a hive?
Is your mind even controlled by you?
Do you have any say in what is chosen?
Are you just a random spin from death?
Are you in ice and frozen?
Is this all a dream?
Is this all a simulation?
Is there...
#universe
#fate
#mirror
#philosophical
#reading
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5 Comments
Everyday_Author
Published
Today 3:13am
Today 3:13am
Why am I here? (A Statement of Purpose)
My favorite songs
Turn words to water
On the days when I wonder
Why i even bother
Why am I here?
What do I have to offer?
Just let me soak
In the pain of others
To know the flood
And dive deep on purpose
Is to live a life more honest
Than those on the surface
When I'm feeling worthless
This makes it worth it
I put pain to paper
To help lift the burden
Without letters to myself
My mental powers would falter
I'm on display to help us both through
I'm an everyday author
Turn words to water
On the days when I wonder
Why i even bother
Why am I here?
What do I have to offer?
Just let me soak
In the pain of others
To know the flood
And dive deep on purpose
Is to live a life more honest
Than those on the surface
When I'm feeling worthless
This makes it worth it
I put pain to paper
To help lift the burden
Without letters to myself
My mental powers would falter
I'm on display to help us both through
I'm an everyday author
#depression
#identity
#myself #philosophical
#myself #philosophical
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2 Comments
PurplePandas
Published
Today 2:11am
Today 2:11am
God's Play
I'm going to be leaving soon, will you miss me?
Will you wonder about the signs you didn't see?
Please don't cry, I've wanted this for a while.
You see, it started when I was a young child.
I've sat and thought about the release that I would feel.
I've wondered if heaven and hell were something real.
Do you think God will condemn me for stopping the pain?
You think he will see me coming and hurry closing the gate?
All I wanted was his comfort and to come home.
But I'm scared I'll be on the other side all alone.
He won't...
Will you wonder about the signs you didn't see?
Please don't cry, I've wanted this for a while.
You see, it started when I was a young child.
I've sat and thought about the release that I would feel.
I've wondered if heaven and hell were something real.
Do you think God will condemn me for stopping the pain?
You think he will see me coming and hurry closing the gate?
All I wanted was his comfort and to come home.
But I'm scared I'll be on the other side all alone.
He won't...
#God
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PittinixDesigns
Published
Today 2:08am
Today 2:08am
You're An Irreplaceable Treasure
Other loves have tried to seduce me,
But they just couldn’t charm my heart.
Ever since I surrendered to your love,
Nobody else can excite and enthuse me.
Other beauties have caught my eye,
But they're not as pretty as you, Fíona.
There’s no woman for me but you.
I can’t succeed without you loving me.
Other arms have held me affectionately,
But I’d rather be embraced by your arms.
Tears have flowed down other cheeks,
But they don’t add up to my tears.
I've cried countless times since you left. ...
But they just couldn’t charm my heart.
Ever since I surrendered to your love,
Nobody else can excite and enthuse me.
Other beauties have caught my eye,
But they're not as pretty as you, Fíona.
There’s no woman for me but you.
I can’t succeed without you loving me.
Other arms have held me affectionately,
But I’d rather be embraced by your arms.
Tears have flowed down other cheeks,
But they don’t add up to my tears.
I've cried countless times since you left. ...
#sadness
#love
#heartbroken
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PittinixDesigns
Published
Today 2:01am
Today 2:01am
An Immeasurable Love
For Trishie
You keep querying how much I love you.
I can’t explain the extent of my feelings,
For I’ve got an immeasurable love.
Darling, I love you beyond estimation.
Do I really treasure and adore you?
You should know the answer by now.
I couldn’t accomplish anything without you.
You’ve helped me in so many ways.
You’re worth all the love I can give.
Nobody can evaluate the love of my heart.
It’s a love that can’t be measured.
My love will comfort you for a lifetime.
Stop questioning how much I love...
You keep querying how much I love you.
I can’t explain the extent of my feelings,
For I’ve got an immeasurable love.
Darling, I love you beyond estimation.
Do I really treasure and adore you?
You should know the answer by now.
I couldn’t accomplish anything without you.
You’ve helped me in so many ways.
You’re worth all the love I can give.
Nobody can evaluate the love of my heart.
It’s a love that can’t be measured.
My love will comfort you for a lifetime.
Stop questioning how much I love...
#love
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PurplePandas
Published
Today 2:01am
Today 2:01am
Mental War
Depression is a bitch that likes to kick you when you're down.
Anxiety comes and makes you question everything around.
Why you're here and what's your purpose.
Why you're like this, were you maybe cursed?
It's so horrible that you welcome the depression hoping for weight loss.
You only eat once a day, but it's okay because you don't care the cost.
You've been torn down by everyone, maybe you'll be better?
Maybe they'll want you around more if you're lighter.
If you're easy on the eyes, maybe you'll be easy on their heart.
Maybe...
Anxiety comes and makes you question everything around.
Why you're here and what's your purpose.
Why you're like this, were you maybe cursed?
It's so horrible that you welcome the depression hoping for weight loss.
You only eat once a day, but it's okay because you don't care the cost.
You've been torn down by everyone, maybe you'll be better?
Maybe they'll want you around more if you're lighter.
If you're easy on the eyes, maybe you'll be easy on their heart.
Maybe...
#MentalHealth
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2 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Published
Today 1:16am
Today 1:16am
let's not fight about it, that's all
bloke in the pub says that pepys
was the most interesting writer ever
heard of johnson's lives of the poets
I said let's just talk about football ..
was the most interesting writer ever
heard of johnson's lives of the poets
I said let's just talk about football ..
#alcohol
12 reads
1 Comment
SAngel
Published
Today 1:08am
Today 1:08am
Sex with a stranger
I cannot see
Since they have blindfolded me
Gulp, cough, slurp
It feels like cock is for dessert
Breath is on my face
Feel a slap from someone else's hand
Ever so quickly it did land
Another slap lands on my cheek
I really want to have a peek
Of who is starting to screw me
I suppose it's all part of the mystery
I'm having sex with a stranger
And all I see is black
I'm taking it in
With a mighty wide grin
Without a plan of attack
I hope they remove the blindfold
So I can finally see...
Since they have blindfolded me
Gulp, cough, slurp
It feels like cock is for dessert
Breath is on my face
Feel a slap from someone else's hand
Ever so quickly it did land
Another slap lands on my cheek
I really want to have a peek
Of who is starting to screw me
I suppose it's all part of the mystery
I'm having sex with a stranger
And all I see is black
I'm taking it in
With a mighty wide grin
Without a plan of attack
I hope they remove the blindfold
So I can finally see...
#sex
24 reads
3 Comments
RagingFlames
Published
Today 1:04am
Today 1:04am
02/23/2020
I gave everything to them...
Those four
I gave them everything
So why?
Why did those two have to lie about him
Why does he have to be the topic of the fights
Why does he ignore me
What did I do to deserve this
I’m back in Vermont rn and all I can think of
Is the fact that it’s her birthday and I can’t look at her
I know that if I see her I’ll be reminded of the betrayal
Then be pissed
I bought her a gift months ago when we were talking
Told her sister where to pick it up
I’m dropping it off then leaving ...
Those four
I gave them everything
So why?
Why did those two have to lie about him
Why does he have to be the topic of the fights
Why does he ignore me
What did I do to deserve this
I’m back in Vermont rn and all I can think of
Is the fact that it’s her birthday and I can’t look at her
I know that if I see her I’ll be reminded of the betrayal
Then be pissed
I bought her a gift months ago when we were talking
Told her sister where to pick it up
I’m dropping it off then leaving ...
#anger
#anxiety
#frustration #disappointment
#frustration #disappointment
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