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Keilani
Published
Today 6:30pm
Today 6:30pm
Cadence…
he looked up
and said to me
in a moment
of reverie
Is that not everything
or
at least
well
the tapping rain
when reaching ground
cycles of the ebbs
and tides
fractal beauty
that resides
so openly
or drawn
in the music
implicitly
the mathematics
of our beating heart
an orchestra
of pulsing blood
patterns
that we mortals
trust
And...
and said to me
in a moment
of reverie
Is that not everything
or
at least
well
the tapping rain
when reaching ground
cycles of the ebbs
and tides
fractal beauty
that resides
so openly
or drawn
in the music
implicitly
the mathematics
of our beating heart
an orchestra
of pulsing blood
patterns
that we mortals
trust
And...
#universe
#nature
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KittyFromHell
Published
Today 6:10pm
Today 6:10pm
Let's Destroy Each Other
You tell me you love me
While you drag me into a death roll.
It's a vicious tumble into the depths
That I do not want to take.
The spinning has left me dizzy,
Headed for a blackout
Where my demons await
With eager jaws.
Already I feel you
Stripping the meat from my bones.
I tell you I love you
With your heart clenched in my teeth
Like a wild eyed animal
Too consumed by hunger
To mind the blood.
Though you scream in agony,
You follow after me.
Tears fall freely,
Heart aches for both of...
While you drag me into a death roll.
It's a vicious tumble into the depths
That I do not want to take.
The spinning has left me dizzy,
Headed for a blackout
Where my demons await
With eager jaws.
Already I feel you
Stripping the meat from my bones.
I tell you I love you
With your heart clenched in my teeth
Like a wild eyed animal
Too consumed by hunger
To mind the blood.
Though you scream in agony,
You follow after me.
Tears fall freely,
Heart aches for both of...
#love
#dark
#fate
#addiction
#karma
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Joshsam
Published
Today 5:27pm
Today 5:27pm
This.
He running up against the tide.
Trying to hide.
Everything.
Too scared to confront the fact.
Hes forever looking back
Achingly.
He never thought it would come to this.
Never to miss.
You.
Daydreaming, unreeling, not sleeping.
Loneliness takes its toll.
How the days roll.
Endlessly.
Around and around.
Lost in a Sci-fi sound.
Spiralling.
Unable to move completely.
Held ever so discreetly.....
Hidden.
Encased in bitterness.
Looking to...
Trying to hide.
Everything.
Too scared to confront the fact.
Hes forever looking back
Achingly.
He never thought it would come to this.
Never to miss.
You.
Daydreaming, unreeling, not sleeping.
Loneliness takes its toll.
How the days roll.
Endlessly.
Around and around.
Lost in a Sci-fi sound.
Spiralling.
Unable to move completely.
Held ever so discreetly.....
Hidden.
Encased in bitterness.
Looking to...
#depression
#heartbroken
#FeelingLost
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Stoney223
Published
Today 4:42pm
Today 4:42pm
OUTSIDE JUST LOOKING WITHIN
They say that the truth about love is that we are not allow to be understood, by others who are only looking at us from the outside, looking into the part of us that they cannot see. For I am not that what you are trying to see nor, i will not make myself feel less guilty of a crime that I have not committ. For why do I have to live under certain conditions that don't fit into my life, for why do I have to adjust my mind to be mentally abuse, and emotionally attack by the attitudes of someone else, that doesn't see me as I am. For sometimes we have to question whether or not, if we can make a...
#regret
#rejection
#heartbroken
#shame
#disappointment
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OG-Poetry
Published
Today 3:56pm
Today 3:56pm
… pressure for measure
just five pounds
is all it takes,
to end a life,
to make hearts break,
from life to death
is the measure,
with five pounds,
of index pressure.
is all it takes,
to end a life,
to make hearts break,
from life to death
is the measure,
with five pounds,
of index pressure.
#corruption
#murder
#death
#GunControl
#greed
3 reads
0 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Published
Today 2:48pm
Today 2:48pm
Warm Showers
The same hands that soothed the fevered brows of her now-grown children kneaded dough for the dinner rolls, served hot this evening. She had outlived two husbands and one child, but her smile could clear the river valley below her home of fog in seconds.
Her finger touched mine as she passed the plate and it felt like a cool wind through a crack in the door. I caught my breath while thinking of the stories in those fingers.
I smiled while pouring honey over the hot buttered roll. Glenda’s face softened as if remembering others who’d taken nourishment from her bread. ...
Her finger touched mine as she passed the plate and it felt like a cool wind through a crack in the door. I caught my breath while thinking of the stories in those fingers.
I smiled while pouring honey over the hot buttered roll. Glenda’s face softened as if remembering others who’d taken nourishment from her bread. ...
#sex
#travel
#aging
19 reads
2 Comments
Wired6
Published
Today 2:06pm
Today 2:06pm
X1--The Cotton Wool Blues.
The smell.
I should have realised,yet again,
You'd been between another's thighs.
What a disguise.
What a filthy cotton wool of fucking lies.
What a great show you keep trying,albeit terribly,
2 hide from my eyes.
Every night,once you finally cum 2 our bed.
I can smell your hoar.
Your rotten,stinking hoar,
as if she were right here in our bed,
all fucking over your head.
But still I stay quiet,and just carry on,
as if nothings wrong.
One move forward,
but two moves on first move.
Such...
I should have realised,yet again,
You'd been between another's thighs.
What a disguise.
What a filthy cotton wool of fucking lies.
What a great show you keep trying,albeit terribly,
2 hide from my eyes.
Every night,once you finally cum 2 our bed.
I can smell your hoar.
Your rotten,stinking hoar,
as if she were right here in our bed,
all fucking over your head.
But still I stay quiet,and just carry on,
as if nothings wrong.
One move forward,
but two moves on first move.
Such...
#bittersweet
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PoetSpeak
Published
Today 1:42pm
Today 1:42pm
Secret Door
My home
My chamber
My art
Open the door
To my world
Secrets
Creation
Life
My chamber
My art
Open the door
To my world
Secrets
Creation
Life
#secrets
#LifeChangingMoment
#art #philosophical
#art #philosophical
26 reads
3 Comments
averageJoe69
Ron Summers
Ron Summers
Published
Today 1:10pm
Today 1:10pm
True to my word
#erotic
#dreams
#sexy
32 reads
2 Comments
Stoney223
Published
Today 12:37pm
Today 12:37pm
MY STILLNESS AWAITS
As I awaken from a dream that has awaken me, as I am still here in this world alive and still breathing. Yet I have to take sometime to adjust my life and mind to the truth, that from the darkness I had to learn to experience life from a different perspective. Yet through those troubling times, I learn that we have to go through some rough times to appreciate, the good blessings of our lives. For as I deal with my cancer treatments going through chemotherapy, I am still not afraid of what the future will bring or become for me. As I am feeling no pain nor regret for living my life as I did...
#strength
#courage
#gratitude
#cancer
#StreamOfConsciousness
10 reads
2 Comments
joeborg
Published
Today 12:26pm
Today 12:26pm
effectively cold
The winter came in just a flick
The cold hit harder than a brick,
Bathing costumes from the summer
Have now turned out to be sour,
No transition in the weather
To our jackets we’ll surrender,
From the heat down to this cold
We will feel it as a twofold,
Grab a hot brew by your screen
Warm your hands right in between,
Start the chat and look me up
Read my poem sip that cup.
The cold hit harder than a brick,
Bathing costumes from the summer
Have now turned out to be sour,
No transition in the weather
To our jackets we’ll surrender,
From the heat down to this cold
We will feel it as a twofold,
Grab a hot brew by your screen
Warm your hands right in between,
Start the chat and look me up
Read my poem sip that cup.
#motivational
#lover
#uplifting #passion
#uplifting #passion
6 reads
0 Comments
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