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samael
Published
Today 9:01pm
Today 9:01pm
Marcel Proust- Questionnaire:
Here’s a part of Proust Questionnaire:
__1.__If you could be someone else, who would you like to be? – water, landowner in Heiskell,TN, samurai, Pokemon trainer, dhamphir vampire, lover in your pocket.
__2.__What is your idea of perfect happiness? – a home with a loving family, or perfectly alone to read into insanity.
__3.__What is your greatest fear? – not being loved & remembered, not being able to be open up about how I feel;i live my fear everyday.
__4.__When and where were you the happiest? – childhood, Norris,TN
__5.__What is...
__1.__If you could be someone else, who would you like to be? – water, landowner in Heiskell,TN, samurai, Pokemon trainer, dhamphir vampire, lover in your pocket.
__2.__What is your idea of perfect happiness? – a home with a loving family, or perfectly alone to read into insanity.
__3.__What is your greatest fear? – not being loved & remembered, not being able to be open up about how I feel;i live my fear everyday.
__4.__When and where were you the happiest? – childhood, Norris,TN
__5.__What is...
#confessional
#myself
4 reads
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ImperfectedStone
P M Banks
P M Banks
Published
Today 8:58pm
Today 8:58pm
Tail
In the bleak salt spray, watching baby seals at play, a book, rather a page, steals my mind away -
a book buried within my palms that harms progressive social conduct - I wash my claws of it.
My soul instructs one chapter more,
excused away to the cottage floor
stretched out as a ribby cat
that shamelessly rolls about beside a roaring fire.
The Father begins a conversation on appropriate walking shoes, fetches a map for forward planning
all of which are shoved to a corner nearer the binding,
purring fondly over a place and time, these folk at the...
a book buried within my palms that harms progressive social conduct - I wash my claws of it.
My soul instructs one chapter more,
excused away to the cottage floor
stretched out as a ribby cat
that shamelessly rolls about beside a roaring fire.
The Father begins a conversation on appropriate walking shoes, fetches a map for forward planning
all of which are shoved to a corner nearer the binding,
purring fondly over a place and time, these folk at the...
#family
#cats
#holiday #books
#holiday #books
4 reads
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heresjohnny97
Jaw Knee
Jaw Knee
Published
Today 7:42pm
Today 7:42pm
Throatless
If life had a colour right now it’d be grey,
or would it be beige?
Frustration channelled through terraced streets,
dark festering boredom
Is a whore for danger,
screaming penetrate,
hoping to animate, senses
stored shivering, let’s hope
the dust hasn’t choked your ideals.
Mine could do with being doused in flame
and screamed raw,
never known such inactivity before, brain
flickers like insect eyes,
inspiration’s meaning suffers degradation
now it seeps from darker sources,
pipe dreams disintegrate,
left out for...
or would it be beige?
Frustration channelled through terraced streets,
dark festering boredom
Is a whore for danger,
screaming penetrate,
hoping to animate, senses
stored shivering, let’s hope
the dust hasn’t choked your ideals.
Mine could do with being doused in flame
and screamed raw,
never known such inactivity before, brain
flickers like insect eyes,
inspiration’s meaning suffers degradation
now it seeps from darker sources,
pipe dreams disintegrate,
left out for...
#drugs
5 reads
0 Comments
DawnRaider
Dr
Dr
Published
Today 7:27pm
Today 7:27pm
Star-cross'd lovers
Across a busy bar
I watch you arrive
Radiant smile from afar
I see your face
Make-up applied
New outfit of
Silk and lace
Now you are here
admire your grace
I see elegance, a touch of grey
when you smile; laughter lines
No longer a youth
but still tingles my spine
A woman I see
Independant, confident
living her life, living free
Making choices to love
and be loved
by him, by her, by me
Oh, what entanglement!
what web we weave
with lovers and partners
separate to protect
or maybe...
I watch you arrive
Radiant smile from afar
I see your face
Make-up applied
New outfit of
Silk and lace
Now you are here
admire your grace
I see elegance, a touch of grey
when you smile; laughter lines
No longer a youth
but still tingles my spine
A woman I see
Independant, confident
living her life, living free
Making choices to love
and be loved
by him, by her, by me
Oh, what entanglement!
what web we weave
with lovers and partners
separate to protect
or maybe...
#relationships
#ForbiddenLove
#bisexual
19 reads
6 Comments
ImperfectedStone
P M Banks
P M Banks
Published
Today 6:57pm
Today 6:57pm
Flame and Ash
She spat on me, blackened this flickering freedom
and starved my spark yet
I'd grown accustomed to her fragility, her music, her embers,
never learning she is just dust through sullied fingertips.
There's a history written on paper, soon crumpled, erased, mere energy between she and I.
There's a heat remembered, lingering in the end of time,
an unspoken power that speckles her matter, where I am everything
and nothing else.
She's cleared away, after staying too long,
and what pure bliss upon my return than the hearty...
and starved my spark yet
I'd grown accustomed to her fragility, her music, her embers,
never learning she is just dust through sullied fingertips.
There's a history written on paper, soon crumpled, erased, mere energy between she and I.
There's a heat remembered, lingering in the end of time,
an unspoken power that speckles her matter, where I am everything
and nothing else.
She's cleared away, after staying too long,
and what pure bliss upon my return than the hearty...
#love
#death
#fire
9 reads
0 Comments
runaway-mindtrain
Published
Today 6:40pm
Today 6:40pm
Her loving smile
She gently wakes me up
Kisses and hugs me tight
My babe of the morning
My angel of the night,
I can see the eternal warming
As sweet fire in her eyes
We ran all night in our dreams
Then walking the water stream
Of the world, we now flow,
My heart now completes
Her heart from the beginning
Our union of souls ignites
This new star in flight...
Kisses and hugs me tight
My babe of the morning
My angel of the night,
I can see the eternal warming
As sweet fire in her eyes
We ran all night in our dreams
Then walking the water stream
Of the world, we now flow,
My heart now completes
Her heart from the beginning
Our union of souls ignites
This new star in flight...
#girlfriend
#romantic
#ILoveYou
23 reads
0 Comments
Rjm
Published
Today 6:28pm
Today 6:28pm
Before you
You are a beautiful disease
Infecting my deepest dreams
Leaving me weak and fevered
You are an intoxicating poison
Sapping and confusing me
Leaving me begging for more
You are an unnamed feeling
New and foreign to me
Leaving me afraid of normality
You are a wanted parasite
Fuelling lust whilst feeding off it
Leaving me perpetually aroused
You are a perfect nightmare
Scaring me with these feelings
Leaving me terrified of waking
You are a rapturous curse
Vexing me at every turn ...
Infecting my deepest dreams
Leaving me weak and fevered
You are an intoxicating poison
Sapping and confusing me
Leaving me begging for more
You are an unnamed feeling
New and foreign to me
Leaving me afraid of normality
You are a wanted parasite
Fuelling lust whilst feeding off it
Leaving me perpetually aroused
You are a perfect nightmare
Scaring me with these feelings
Leaving me terrified of waking
You are a rapturous curse
Vexing me at every turn ...
#love
#lust
#dreams #nightmares
#dreams #nightmares
29 reads
7 Comments
Tallen
Published
Today 6:15pm
Today 6:15pm
Precious Smile
a smile
any of I’ve chosen, until ----
infects and thrills
hearts leaping o’er
mountain tops
over glades and hills.
a glimpse of smile
laughter
causes elation
again and again.
lusting for what comes after
I want to understand.
the voice
of my friend
so gentle, so free
throughout my mind it rings
ringing of sensuality!
her smile gives me no time of day
an option to flirt?
reflecting, what can I do but
smile?
her smile
causes my insides to leap
flooding my...
any of I’ve chosen, until ----
infects and thrills
hearts leaping o’er
mountain tops
over glades and hills.
a glimpse of smile
laughter
causes elation
again and again.
lusting for what comes after
I want to understand.
the voice
of my friend
so gentle, so free
throughout my mind it rings
ringing of sensuality!
her smile gives me no time of day
an option to flirt?
reflecting, what can I do but
smile?
her smile
causes my insides to leap
flooding my...
#love
#friendship
#UnrequitedLove
24 reads
13 Comments
StrugglingRapper
Published
Today 6:09pm
Today 6:09pm
Beach
Glitter glistening sand, sapphires crashing the land,
Glitter sparkles on my vans, sun disappears to Japan,
My body becomes a band, heart like a fighting hand,
In awe my lungs expand, consciously in dreamland,
I see faces in the clouds, like pictures drawn by a child,
Abstract and wild, the wind makes them exiled,
Drifting off like my mind again, I see Orion shining in,
Wait until the sun rises again, let that light shine deep in,
Glitter sparkles on my vans, sun disappears to Japan,
My body becomes a band, heart like a fighting hand,
In awe my lungs expand, consciously in dreamland,
I see faces in the clouds, like pictures drawn by a child,
Abstract and wild, the wind makes them exiled,
Drifting off like my mind again, I see Orion shining in,
Wait until the sun rises again, let that light shine deep in,
#sun
#beach
#stars
#holiday
#travel
3 reads
0 Comments
MindOfAPohett
Published
Today 5:58pm
Today 5:58pm
L O V E
I ceased trust with that slut many years ago.
Searchin for that bitch so damn long.
Fucked around and became hoe.
See, BAD love will leave ya heart cold
GOOD love make you feel shy and uncomfortable.
If two wrongs dont make a right, WHY we keep Searchin tho?
I rite my words in RED ink just to show.
Even tho its blood, they too can be schemin, plotin, bobby-pin'in locks to sneak thru ya front door.
LOOK Y'ALL I AIN'T TRYINA START WAR!
Buhht LOVE?
Blinded me nd hurt me to my core.
Shit! my motha'fuckin body sore.
Cause even tho i...
Searchin for that bitch so damn long.
Fucked around and became hoe.
See, BAD love will leave ya heart cold
GOOD love make you feel shy and uncomfortable.
If two wrongs dont make a right, WHY we keep Searchin tho?
I rite my words in RED ink just to show.
Even tho its blood, they too can be schemin, plotin, bobby-pin'in locks to sneak thru ya front door.
LOOK Y'ALL I AIN'T TRYINA START WAR!
Buhht LOVE?
Blinded me nd hurt me to my core.
Shit! my motha'fuckin body sore.
Cause even tho i...
#love
#breakup
8 reads
0 Comments
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