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LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Published
Today 9:39pm
Today 9:39pm
Final Prayer
#sex
#betrayal
#death #orgasm
#death #orgasm
3 reads
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MThorne
Margaret
Margaret
Published
Today 9:16pm
Today 9:16pm
Struggle
I struggle with the thought of not being good enough.
Good enough to be seen or even noticed by anyone.
I struggle with wanting to hear others talking to me instead of only hearing their silence.
I struggle to keep my thoughts good instead of having my thoughts turn evil and trying to convince me everyone secretly hates me.
I struggle with am I good enough or if I should succumb to my evil thoughts and let them win.
Good enough to be seen or even noticed by anyone.
I struggle with wanting to hear others talking to me instead of only hearing their silence.
I struggle to keep my thoughts good instead of having my thoughts turn evil and trying to convince me everyone secretly hates me.
I struggle with am I good enough or if I should succumb to my evil thoughts and let them win.
#anxiety
#loneliness
#denial #emptiness
#denial #emptiness
4 reads
1 Comment
SatansSperm
Published
Today 9:15pm
Today 9:15pm
Free Clinic
It wasn't
a cunt
that caused
the lump
in my throat
but the other
C word
Cancer
What started
as a hiccup
was now
a full dance card
with death
I am
not sure
if I have
the shoes
for it
a cunt
that caused
the lump
in my throat
but the other
C word
Cancer
What started
as a hiccup
was now
a full dance card
with death
I am
not sure
if I have
the shoes
for it
#despair
#bittersweet
7 reads
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NewBeginnings
Published
Today 8:48pm
Today 8:48pm
Wildfire
Visual Entry
#love
#passion
#emotions #fear
#emotions #fear
17 reads
1 Comment
Solomon_Song
Published
Today 8:31pm
Today 8:31pm
A WOMAN'S TOUCH
A woman's touch
within man's crotch
doth so excite
him to unite,
through his boner,
with hand's owner
when she's stirred up
to, with him, tup:
bodies merging
at lust's urging.
within man's crotch
doth so excite
him to unite,
through his boner,
with hand's owner
when she's stirred up
to, with him, tup:
bodies merging
at lust's urging.
#sex
#erotic
#rhyming
11 reads
5 Comments
Frustrated_prole
Published
Today 7:28pm
Today 7:28pm
Dark Hearts and Cold Eyes
Dark is the heart that beats for truth
Sometimes I buy a second hand suit, with a bit of life in it, I wander down the rich streets of London, and pretend I made it. I order an expensive pizza and a ten pound glass of wine. I go along with the great conjuring act. I'm laughing on the inside. I'm laughing at the world, for now. There will come a time when I take it too seriously again. I will forget to laugh. The world abandons those who forget to laugh.
Cold are the eyes of the Yuppie
I looked into the cold eyes of the middle class, they turned their backs on...
Sometimes I buy a second hand suit, with a bit of life in it, I wander down the rich streets of London, and pretend I made it. I order an expensive pizza and a ten pound glass of wine. I go along with the great conjuring act. I'm laughing on the inside. I'm laughing at the world, for now. There will come a time when I take it too seriously again. I will forget to laugh. The world abandons those who forget to laugh.
Cold are the eyes of the Yuppie
I looked into the cold eyes of the middle class, they turned their backs on...
#homelessness
#greed
#culture #tradition
#culture #tradition
5 reads
0 Comments
ravibabygirl
Published
Today 7:12pm
Today 7:12pm
trouble focusing
this medication I'm taking has some pro and cons
I like that I can get some sleep finally at night
the con is i space out more than normal is that wrong
the pro is i feel calmer
i was trying to make a point in an argument then i went blank
i just couldn't remember what i was saying
its good that i can't fight or get real angry
at night when i take the medicines i see images
i see the dark shadow monsters
i see like spiders webs there black in front of me
at the same time when i go through them they disappear
then i fall fast...
I like that I can get some sleep finally at night
the con is i space out more than normal is that wrong
the pro is i feel calmer
i was trying to make a point in an argument then i went blank
i just couldn't remember what i was saying
its good that i can't fight or get real angry
at night when i take the medicines i see images
i see the dark shadow monsters
i see like spiders webs there black in front of me
at the same time when i go through them they disappear
then i fall fast...
#anxiety
#depression
#LifeStruggles #MentalHealth
#LifeStruggles #MentalHealth
4 reads
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Whimsy_Ginger
Published
Today 7:08pm
Today 7:08pm
Our Story
When we met I believed your words
What I didn't know where you secrets
I fell for you hard and quickly
You told me you felt the same for me
I always believed your words
Soon after meeting, you had to leave
You needed to deal with your secrets
Secrets I still knew nothing about
You visited me once two months later
Seeing you reassured how I felt
I would never stop feeling so deep
I broke contact to protect myself
Unsure if you would ever return
Seven months passed and I caved
Reaching out to see how life was ...
What I didn't know where you secrets
I fell for you hard and quickly
You told me you felt the same for me
I always believed your words
Soon after meeting, you had to leave
You needed to deal with your secrets
Secrets I still knew nothing about
You visited me once two months later
Seeing you reassured how I felt
I would never stop feeling so deep
I broke contact to protect myself
Unsure if you would ever return
Seven months passed and I caved
Reaching out to see how life was ...
#loneliness
#heartbroken
#polyamory #emotional
#polyamory #emotional
8 reads
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AaHarvey
Published
Today 6:59pm
Today 6:59pm
Kill me with your love
Show me your creation,
Written down in black ink.
Let me see your darkest thoughts;
I need a place to sink.
I want a place to disappear;
There really is no escape.
If I cannot have someone to love,
Then I will no longer fight my fate.
Love is out there somewhere to find.
All I have to do is look with open eyes,
But I am blind to anyone who could be nice,
Because of the tears I have cried, so many times.
So cut me with your truthfulness,
I want this pain to hurt.
I am no longer playing...
Written down in black ink.
Let me see your darkest thoughts;
I need a place to sink.
I want a place to disappear;
There really is no escape.
If I cannot have someone to love,
Then I will no longer fight my fate.
Love is out there somewhere to find.
All I have to do is look with open eyes,
But I am blind to anyone who could be nice,
Because of the tears I have cried, so many times.
So cut me with your truthfulness,
I want this pain to hurt.
I am no longer playing...
#anxiety
#dark
#death
#WritingPoetry
#fear
10 reads
0 Comments
AaHarvey
Published
Today 6:56pm
Today 6:56pm
Line
Take a second to enjoy the moment.
Slow right down to find fulfilment.
Wait a while to see the change.
You could become spiritual and fly away,
Or remain lost, living life head on,
Accepting all comers, bring it on,
Show me what you got.
If you have anything at all.
Are you a wolf howling at the door?
Or are you Bambi? Is that all you want to be?
Write a book on how to love.
Snap a paint brush when your work is done.
You are not all you have to entertain,
Relax your brain and find a new way,
Float on waves over...
Slow right down to find fulfilment.
Wait a while to see the change.
You could become spiritual and fly away,
Or remain lost, living life head on,
Accepting all comers, bring it on,
Show me what you got.
If you have anything at all.
Are you a wolf howling at the door?
Or are you Bambi? Is that all you want to be?
Write a book on how to love.
Snap a paint brush when your work is done.
You are not all you have to entertain,
Relax your brain and find a new way,
Float on waves over...
#happiness
#hope
#LifeChangingMoment
#uplifting
#art
1 read
0 Comments
ELIAS11
Published
Today 6:53pm
Today 6:53pm
Hand Forged
Have you ever considered the elements it takes...
The ingredients inside to make someone great...
Is it something they do or something they create..?
Giving it some thought... some mental debate...
Perhaps it's through words so soft and so dear...
Or their callous ability... to create respect through fear...
People are strange when given some thought...
Seems most aspiring to something their not...
Is a king an almighty and powerful force..?
Destroyed by a nameless man...
Incapable of...
The ingredients inside to make someone great...
Is it something they do or something they create..?
Giving it some thought... some mental debate...
Perhaps it's through words so soft and so dear...
Or their callous ability... to create respect through fear...
People are strange when given some thought...
Seems most aspiring to something their not...
Is a king an almighty and powerful force..?
Destroyed by a nameless man...
Incapable of...
#strength
#courage
#humankind
#WritingPoetry
#redemption
11 reads
0 Comments
solanaceae
Published
Today 6:45pm
Today 6:45pm
The Wren (Visual Poem)
Visual Poem
#love
#grief
#family #death
#family #death
15 reads
1 Comment
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