Spiritual Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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archetype23
Poem Published
Today 7:22am
Today 7:22am
THE FINAL COURSE
April 23rd
#23
THE FINAL COURSE
Welcome to the breakfast of the newly sent innocent
You will be served by the waiter with endless curiosity
which will gradually transform into sweet and sour scorn
with a serving of friendless animosity
We cater to the first to figure out, and the last
Our waiters and the cast wait to break you fast
A palpable plate placed out for the beginners
with sweet and sour sauce set out to season sinners
You will receive unending dishes of unfulfilled wishes
Then with one final breath you will be...
#23
THE FINAL COURSE
Welcome to the breakfast of the newly sent innocent
You will be served by the waiter with endless curiosity
which will gradually transform into sweet and sour scorn
with a serving of friendless animosity
We cater to the first to figure out, and the last
Our waiters and the cast wait to break you fast
A palpable plate placed out for the beginners
with sweet and sour sauce set out to season sinners
You will receive unending dishes of unfulfilled wishes
Then with one final breath you will be...
#God
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slipalong
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:37pm
Yesterday 7:37pm
The kiss of Judus
Affection overtaken by evils self need
treachery covered by smiled disbelief
thirty pieces of silver for planting the Kiss
Judas's metaphorical finger deceives
his soul sold to the devil, oh so cheap
and all the guilt was laid at his feet
to Kiss the chance of redemption goodby
brings an ironic tear to my eye
a Kiss to signal how deep we feel
a scenario couched in romantic appeal
its consequences sometimes hard to retract
for Jesus just like a stab in the back
treachery covered by smiled disbelief
thirty pieces of silver for planting the Kiss
Judas's metaphorical finger deceives
his soul sold to the devil, oh so cheap
and all the guilt was laid at his feet
to Kiss the chance of redemption goodby
brings an ironic tear to my eye
a Kiss to signal how deep we feel
a scenario couched in romantic appeal
its consequences sometimes hard to retract
for Jesus just like a stab in the back
#religion
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2 Comments
Blackwolf
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:03pm
Yesterday 5:03pm
Begin Again ( Universal Introspection )
Experience :
Like Some Event Horizon Emanating After It Has Taken In
What It Needs In Information Integrated Into It's Beingness ;
The Star Is In The Light , Not The Light In The Star ;
It Is My Background That Propels Me Forward Like My Legs
Pushing Off From Some Past Behind Me , In Some Pool Of
Consciousness , Into The Unknown , Past The Oblivious ,
Where I Have Never Gone Before , A Non Artificial Intelligence ,
Awake And Aware And Hungry For More , Continually Rebirthed ,
As Each What Some Call A Day Passes , Or So It Seems To ; ...
Like Some Event Horizon Emanating After It Has Taken In
What It Needs In Information Integrated Into It's Beingness ;
The Star Is In The Light , Not The Light In The Star ;
It Is My Background That Propels Me Forward Like My Legs
Pushing Off From Some Past Behind Me , In Some Pool Of
Consciousness , Into The Unknown , Past The Oblivious ,
Where I Have Never Gone Before , A Non Artificial Intelligence ,
Awake And Aware And Hungry For More , Continually Rebirthed ,
As Each What Some Call A Day Passes , Or So It Seems To ; ...
#universe
#stars
#rebirth
#TruthOfLife
#LifeCycle
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2 Comments
Utesch
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:14am
Yesterday 6:14am
Shinrin Yoku
Forest bathing in Japan
sanctity for the immune
system of nature.
Forests of healing
sometimes walking,
sometimes sitting
letting nature pour into all your senses.
Sitting with PTSD hearing birds and crickets,
smelling the rich earth,
and fresh scent of pine trees.
Warding off depression in Finland with
moss underneath feet,
and coastlines wrapped
with lapping healing tides.
Starfish washed onto the shores
and crisp fresh ocean air
cleansing the stuffy treelines of
its carbon puffs and...
sanctity for the immune
system of nature.
Forests of healing
sometimes walking,
sometimes sitting
letting nature pour into all your senses.
Sitting with PTSD hearing birds and crickets,
smelling the rich earth,
and fresh scent of pine trees.
Warding off depression in Finland with
moss underneath feet,
and coastlines wrapped
with lapping healing tides.
Starfish washed onto the shores
and crisp fresh ocean air
cleansing the stuffy treelines of
its carbon puffs and...
#nature
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3 Comments
EpicUtester69
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:24am
Yesterday 5:24am
As I lay down
As i lay my head down to sleep
I don’t sleep that well anyway
I was told to pray to the lord my soul to keep
Well I don’t want anyone to have my soul
And if I died before I wake
This is not very likely to happen to me
I pray to god my soul to take
No I don’t think that what so ever
When that’s all you have to hold on to
Written on a lamp with that saying
The whole while God did not come
I was left in the midst of violence
What a stupid rhyme for children
There was no God to save me
All there could be was little old me ...
I don’t sleep that well anyway
I was told to pray to the lord my soul to keep
Well I don’t want anyone to have my soul
And if I died before I wake
This is not very likely to happen to me
I pray to god my soul to take
No I don’t think that what so ever
When that’s all you have to hold on to
Written on a lamp with that saying
The whole while God did not come
I was left in the midst of violence
What a stupid rhyme for children
There was no God to save me
All there could be was little old me ...
#spiritual
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joegracegrace
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:23am
Yesterday 5:23am
Why Pentecost May Well Be The Time of Russian Attack/RAPTURE
It looks like PENTECOST may well be it -- the time of the Rapture for those people who get killed in America's big cities by the Russian Attack.
In other words, that Attack seems likely in MAY.
For that is when PENTECOST comes this year.
So you may be better off going out of USA during time of destruction and the aftermath.
If you go to Mexico, at least you have the comfort of knowing Mexico definitely is NOT going to get hit by Russia.
Also, please remember "5 months" (Revelation 9.5,10) is the length of the TRIB - very short just like Christ...
In other words, that Attack seems likely in MAY.
For that is when PENTECOST comes this year.
So you may be better off going out of USA during time of destruction and the aftermath.
If you go to Mexico, at least you have the comfort of knowing Mexico definitely is NOT going to get hit by Russia.
Also, please remember "5 months" (Revelation 9.5,10) is the length of the TRIB - very short just like Christ...
#anger
#regret
#hate
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Lifeaheadwithu
Gavinjames
Gavinjames
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 10:44pm
21st Apr 2018 10:44pm
Awake and make straight thy path.
There was a time you and I would say words agree, now the Lord has shown me the way that I may see the world's darkened ways,
Ignorance and apathy
A heart hardened by the world's deceit and lies influential flesh, Lusty eyes
Look for the truth are you seeing, a spirit filling feeling empowered by this being.
Promises made, Shattered Dreams, man's strength alone. Satan seed of deception, Turn the Page. Blinded Stony hearts the god of this age.
Deceiving spirits, the shame of all time. A serpent in a tree committed the crime. Familiar spirits direct waves of...
Ignorance and apathy
A heart hardened by the world's deceit and lies influential flesh, Lusty eyes
Look for the truth are you seeing, a spirit filling feeling empowered by this being.
Promises made, Shattered Dreams, man's strength alone. Satan seed of deception, Turn the Page. Blinded Stony hearts the god of this age.
Deceiving spirits, the shame of all time. A serpent in a tree committed the crime. Familiar spirits direct waves of...
#love
#strength
#redemption #respect
#redemption #respect
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Blackwolf
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 11:45am
21st Apr 2018 11:45am
Warding Spell
Psychic Wards And Egregore ,
Protect Me House From Dark Spirits Foray ;
I Wish Them Well As Other Kin ,
Yet Me House They Are Not Welcome In ,
Not In Me Circle , Not In Me Space ,
I Wish Them Well To Another Place ;
I Charge Thee With This Sacred Task ,
Be Me Guardians , This I Ask ,
Protect Me House From Invasion ,
If Any Come , Stand Your Station ,
By The Power Of Three Times Three ,
With Astral Force , Do I Charge Thee !"
Protect Me House From Dark Spirits Foray ;
I Wish Them Well As Other Kin ,
Yet Me House They Are Not Welcome In ,
Not In Me Circle , Not In Me Space ,
I Wish Them Well To Another Place ;
I Charge Thee With This Sacred Task ,
Be Me Guardians , This I Ask ,
Protect Me House From Invasion ,
If Any Come , Stand Your Station ,
By The Power Of Three Times Three ,
With Astral Force , Do I Charge Thee !"
#pagan
#magic
36 reads
4 Comments
Blackwolf
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 11:38am
21st Apr 2018 11:38am
Faery Call : A Ritual
In The Night My Eyes Espy A Sky So Starry
As I Chant Old Names And Call Invokare :
Three The Times I Circle Round ,
Three Times I Strike The Ground ,
This Circle Cast , Now Future And Past ,
Blue Light Surround !
And The Watchers Atop Their Ancient Towers
Bear Witness In This , The Midnight Hour :
Those Who Are Out Are Out ,
Those Who Are In , Are In
May Any Who Would Harm Us
Not Know What We Are About
This Place Is Sealed , Let Us Begin !
By The Power Of The Ancestors
By The Pantheons Of Gods
By The Power Of...
As I Chant Old Names And Call Invokare :
Three The Times I Circle Round ,
Three Times I Strike The Ground ,
This Circle Cast , Now Future And Past ,
Blue Light Surround !
And The Watchers Atop Their Ancient Towers
Bear Witness In This , The Midnight Hour :
Those Who Are Out Are Out ,
Those Who Are In , Are In
May Any Who Would Harm Us
Not Know What We Are About
This Place Is Sealed , Let Us Begin !
By The Power Of The Ancestors
By The Pantheons Of Gods
By The Power Of...
#earth
#stars
#fairies
#pagan
#magic
26 reads
6 Comments
joegracegrace
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 5:32am
21st Apr 2018 5:32am
Why Church Leaders Don't Agree With Me
I tell them the Rapture occurs as the "sudden destruction" occurs, (1 Thessalonians 4.16-5.3),
which is the Russian Attack on America (which is unstated but implied in the passage about the invasion of Western Europe, (Daniel 7.8; Revelation 13.7).
Church pastors, they don't see it that way at all.
Why the disagreement on this (and a dozen other points)??
Well pastors aren't known for their great accomplishments.
I mean, how many pastors of churches in the American South before the Civil War spoke out against slavery -- in even the slightest, most indirect...
which is the Russian Attack on America (which is unstated but implied in the passage about the invasion of Western Europe, (Daniel 7.8; Revelation 13.7).
Church pastors, they don't see it that way at all.
Why the disagreement on this (and a dozen other points)??
Well pastors aren't known for their great accomplishments.
I mean, how many pastors of churches in the American South before the Civil War spoke out against slavery -- in even the slightest, most indirect...
#faith
#redemption
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2 Comments
mel44
Poem Published
20th Apr 2018 11:54pm
20th Apr 2018 11:54pm
Creed
Grateful for knowledge
not in control
sun rises and sets
I play no role
above any one religion
beyond uncertainty
willingness to believe
in a higher entity
dogmatic doctrines
unnecessary for grace
confident belief
conduct has a place
my will internal
offers nothing more
in service, upraised
of this I am sure
learning from experience
growing spiritually
encouraging others
practising loyalty
engaging principles
of respect and fairness
demonstrating compassion
authenticity and...
not in control
sun rises and sets
I play no role
above any one religion
beyond uncertainty
willingness to believe
in a higher entity
dogmatic doctrines
unnecessary for grace
confident belief
conduct has a place
my will internal
offers nothing more
in service, upraised
of this I am sure
learning from experience
growing spiritually
encouraging others
practising loyalty
engaging principles
of respect and fairness
demonstrating compassion
authenticity and...
#faith
#spiritual
#NaPoWriMo2018
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1 Comment
ElrondSirfalas
Poem Published
20th Apr 2018 1:39pm
20th Apr 2018 1:39pm
Do The Gods Recycle ? (A Collaboration With Blackwolf)
There Is The Defined And The Abstract
The Raw And Refined And What Is Said To Be Fact
There Are Thoughts , Unformed And Manifest
There Is Mental Stirring And The Mind At Rest
The Id The Idea The Vision Visualization
The Art Of Content Or Contemplation
The Nuance So Subtly And Softly Just Suggested
And Then All The Words To Be Digested ;
Surrender Of Suppression To It's Expansive Counterpart
The Inaudible Creation Of Temporal Substance As The Art
Endless Lucidity Dancing Upon The Relative Floor Of The Senses ...
The Raw And Refined And What Is Said To Be Fact
There Are Thoughts , Unformed And Manifest
There Is Mental Stirring And The Mind At Rest
The Id The Idea The Vision Visualization
The Art Of Content Or Contemplation
The Nuance So Subtly And Softly Just Suggested
And Then All The Words To Be Digested ;
Surrender Of Suppression To It's Expansive Counterpart
The Inaudible Creation Of Temporal Substance As The Art
Endless Lucidity Dancing Upon The Relative Floor Of The Senses ...
#birth
#death
#universe #LifeCycle
#universe #LifeCycle
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9 Comments
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