Spiritual Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry which debates religion, atheism and New Age spirituality
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Cyndi_Moone
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 8:12pm
3rd Apr 2025 8:12pm
SILLY BILLIE YOU'RE SO SILLY
This is the story of Silly Billie
A little boy who was so silly
He lost his friend whose name was Willie
Because he stold candy from his sister Millie.
He didn’t stop there – that Silly Billie
Feeling alone without his friend whose name was Willie
He made a new friend who was just as silly!
Loud and rambunctious and all up-hilly
The librarian, whose name was Chantilly,
Did not like noise nor anyone O so silly!
Influenced by Willie, Silly Billie was given a “Silly Willie”
When he cried out
And the librarian threw him out!
...
A little boy who was so silly
He lost his friend whose name was Willie
Because he stold candy from his sister Millie.
He didn’t stop there – that Silly Billie
Feeling alone without his friend whose name was Willie
He made a new friend who was just as silly!
Loud and rambunctious and all up-hilly
The librarian, whose name was Chantilly,
Did not like noise nor anyone O so silly!
Influenced by Willie, Silly Billie was given a “Silly Willie”
When he cried out
And the librarian threw him out!
...
#Christian
#forgiveness
#redemption #rejection
#redemption #rejection
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summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
~second homecoming [collab with Vision_of_ insanity (Keith)]
https://youtu.be/6LD30ChPsSs?feature=shared
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity ...
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity ...
#collaboration
#LifeChangingMoment
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#love
62 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 2:30pm
2nd Apr 2025 2:30pm
rise
2/30
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
#love
#spiritual
45 reads
4 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 5:16am
2nd Apr 2025 5:16am
She Rises
With spirit and determination
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
#gratitude
#love
#rebirth
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
51 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 8:34pm
1st Apr 2025 8:34pm
The Almighty
Because of sin
The death
Has gained ground
in human life
The earth
has become cursed
The wickedness
spread
The payment
of sin
is
death
Only
the sacrifice
can be
wiped out
The son of god took human flesh
came to the earth and died on the cross instead of me.
He died and resurrected the third day
He is the glorious king forever.
Jesus is the way, the truth and the life
Who believes in him
will live, even though they die
in...
The death
Has gained ground
in human life
The earth
has become cursed
The wickedness
spread
The payment
of sin
is
death
Only
the sacrifice
can be
wiped out
The son of god took human flesh
came to the earth and died on the cross instead of me.
He died and resurrected the third day
He is the glorious king forever.
Jesus is the way, the truth and the life
Who believes in him
will live, even though they die
in...
#Christian
#God
#religion
#spiritual
#TruthOfLife
61 reads
8 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 6:35pm
1st Apr 2025 6:35pm
~i l l u m i n e
glinting tinkly silvery pearls
with the hardened sacred
‘rudraksha’.. in a darkened
matte beaded alternating..
a simplistic rustic jewellery
of this a ‘bhakti sanyasini’
hymning devoutional love
to you my Shiva..
this inner earthen red
a terracota dotted base, this
rooted ‘Kundalini’ Shakti
rises in an awakening..
a hissing divine serpent
in search of the Spirited
You..
half stern, yet yielding
to a malleably flexing..
in her...
with the hardened sacred
‘rudraksha’.. in a darkened
matte beaded alternating..
a simplistic rustic jewellery
of this a ‘bhakti sanyasini’
hymning devoutional love
to you my Shiva..
this inner earthen red
a terracota dotted base, this
rooted ‘Kundalini’ Shakti
rises in an awakening..
a hissing divine serpent
in search of the Spirited
You..
half stern, yet yielding
to a malleably flexing..
in her...
#love
#power
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
70 reads
3 Comments
AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
31st Mar 2025 9:23pm
31st Mar 2025 9:23pm
Black Face
Let me give you redemption.
Everytime I ride you into a tree.
You're my favorite comedian,
And my noble steed.
Those bullet holes,
Are there to remind me,
Everytime I needed you,
After doing illegal things.
The government,
is coming after me.
Let's rob a train,
like traditional theives.
You have a black face,
But no Martin Luther King!,
You're just a dumb horse,
That does illegal things.
I hope I don't get banned.
I hope my horse understands.
When I whistle a command,
The...
Everytime I ride you into a tree.
You're my favorite comedian,
And my noble steed.
Those bullet holes,
Are there to remind me,
Everytime I needed you,
After doing illegal things.
The government,
is coming after me.
Let's rob a train,
like traditional theives.
You have a black face,
But no Martin Luther King!,
You're just a dumb horse,
That does illegal things.
I hope I don't get banned.
I hope my horse understands.
When I whistle a command,
The...
#funny
#technology
50 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
31st Mar 2025 9:16pm
31st Mar 2025 9:16pm
Zion
Mourning air whispering over me
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Zion
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Zion
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
#death
#heaven
#hell
#peace
#silence
83 reads
10 Comments
SonderNinja
BenjaminEC
BenjaminEC
Poem Published
29th Mar 2025 00:53am
29th Mar 2025 00:53am
Initiation
Blood in:
so daft in my grave,
a fresh-cut flesh-nut
slips & falls
from proverbial vein-
my sleepaway cave
craved awake
on chords of light
through ancient rows
where I soak my cells
in a green serene
slurping gasoline
a break from those
unblinking
high beam
~eyes:
this all-seeing dream
that winked at our dogs
& wormed our wrists
into one happy hominid ...
#FreeVerse
#spiritual
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
hiccup
gleaning from fact and fiction
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
#humankind
#spiritual
#stars
67 reads
4 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
25th Mar 2025 3:47am
25th Mar 2025 3:47am
That Outer BODY feelings
Have you ever had a sacred outer body experience with feelings, with a real positive level of energy as you go through, a manfestion which revolves within your thoughts of your own mind thoughts. For sure it's necessary to understand, that what you think you have the ability to be able to achieve. As it is a want and need to believe that you alone, have the ability and power within your own hands and mind thoughts. For do you really believe in your faith of your mind thoughts, that you do possess the skills of magical powers of strength and energy and determination and PERSEVERANCE. TO PUSH...
#dialogue
#metaphor
#philosophical
#SelfDiscovery
#StreamOfConsciousness
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PAR
Poem Published
24th Mar 2025 11:52pm
24th Mar 2025 11:52pm
Myth Haikus
Thoth
Scroll of stars unfolds,
wisdom flows through measured time.
Eye records it all.
Gilgamesh
Walls rise to the sky,
friendship forged, yet doomed to fade.
Mortals seek their name.
Tupã
Thunder splits the night,
roaring whispers through the storm.
Creation takes breath.
Amaterazu
Hidden in her cave,
sunlight fades, the world grows cold.
Hope draws her to dance.
Shango
Drums thunder the sky,
lightning splits the heavens wide. ...
Scroll of stars unfolds,
wisdom flows through measured time.
Eye records it all.
Gilgamesh
Walls rise to the sky,
friendship forged, yet doomed to fade.
Mortals seek their name.
Tupã
Thunder splits the night,
roaring whispers through the storm.
Creation takes breath.
Amaterazu
Hidden in her cave,
sunlight fades, the world grows cold.
Hope draws her to dance.
Shango
Drums thunder the sky,
lightning splits the heavens wide. ...
#culture
#mirror
#mythology
#religion
#tradition
69 reads
6 Comments
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