Spiritual Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry which debates religion, atheism and New Age spirituality
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runaway-mindtrain
Poem Published
Today 5:06am
Today 5:06am
Karma to burn
I think therefore I am...So I think?Innocent heart loves overflowing
Will God show it's face and wink?
So dry up this tear of unknowing
-
Second sorriest excuse to believe
Seal of soul nevermore credulous
Prime original principles conceive
Adversity is scantily serendipitous
Will God show it's face and wink?
So dry up this tear of unknowing
-
Second sorriest excuse to believe
Seal of soul nevermore credulous
Prime original principles conceive
Adversity is scantily serendipitous
#spiritual
#quatrain
9 reads
2 Comments
atkfrostyatk
Poem Published
Today 1:57am
Today 1:57am
Perpetuity
If I drift please let me know
Through Jesus my salvation will show
The earth the seas and winds obey
So I will hang on to everything you say
Through the bible I will read your word
Because falling into the devils trap is something I can't afford
It's not up to me to decide whats just or fair
So i won't see what I want I'll read whats really there
Out of Adam you created Eve
Now all these years later you made me
So now I must fight off their sins and mine
For me it's impossible but that's why you sent Jesus to die
And up on his...
Through Jesus my salvation will show
The earth the seas and winds obey
So I will hang on to everything you say
Through the bible I will read your word
Because falling into the devils trap is something I can't afford
It's not up to me to decide whats just or fair
So i won't see what I want I'll read whats really there
Out of Adam you created Eve
Now all these years later you made me
So now I must fight off their sins and mine
For me it's impossible but that's why you sent Jesus to die
And up on his...
#religion
#Christian
#faith #spiritual
#faith #spiritual
10 reads
2 Comments
Hunterapsych
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:55am
Yesterday 00:55am
My altar
Electric alchemists
erecting atmospheres
unheard of,
unpredictably unique and timeless
impacting the spirit indefinitely
with it's seductive aura
and alluring intensity..
Ancientness blended with
a futuristic freshness,
vibes so infectious
and divinely directed..
Passing through forms and
presented in formlessness,
vibrations and audible structures
incredible in their limitlessly
hypnotic qualities consuming thee..
It's become an altar of sorts for me
this space of assorted sounds
and...
erecting atmospheres
unheard of,
unpredictably unique and timeless
impacting the spirit indefinitely
with it's seductive aura
and alluring intensity..
Ancientness blended with
a futuristic freshness,
vibes so infectious
and divinely directed..
Passing through forms and
presented in formlessness,
vibrations and audible structures
incredible in their limitlessly
hypnotic qualities consuming thee..
It's become an altar of sorts for me
this space of assorted sounds
and...
#God
#music
#humankind
#SelfReflection
#art
14 reads
4 Comments
Ahavati
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:58pm
Yesterday 3:58pm
Comfortably Numb
I was a fresh tube of paint, Indian Yellow,
in wait to experience the slick skin
of a gesso'd canvas—or paper'd
Poetry put to pictures, a visual gift
After hand-to-hand combat
With the muse. I had never known
A scent of turpentine permeating
The space of an atelier,
Unlike my friend, whose name
Was that of a man's, Michael,
Yet, she was feminine as they come.
Michael, who had fallen obsessively
Within the composition of one
Who would unwittingly become
My greatest mentor. Me, starry-eyed ...
in wait to experience the slick skin
of a gesso'd canvas—or paper'd
Poetry put to pictures, a visual gift
After hand-to-hand combat
With the muse. I had never known
A scent of turpentine permeating
The space of an atelier,
Unlike my friend, whose name
Was that of a man's, Michael,
Yet, she was feminine as they come.
Michael, who had fallen obsessively
Within the composition of one
Who would unwittingly become
My greatest mentor. Me, starry-eyed ...
#secrets
#philosophical
#TedHughes
51 reads
9 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:28pm
Yesterday 3:28pm
Stardust
Stardust
#spiritual
#SelfReflection
23 reads
5 Comments
atkfrostyatk
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:01pm
Yesterday 1:01pm
One step forward two steps back
Doubting myself but never blaming God
Hating to sin but not knowing how to stop
Hurting in ways that I can't explain
Growing restless because everything stays the same
Talking to Jesus but still feeling alone
Still wondering when the holy spirit will make itself known
Giving up and falling on my knees
Praying hard but still the devils holding me
Fighting back thoughts of suicide
Holding onto hope that Jesus is still on my side
Trying to do good but always slipping up
Thinking I have faith but not knowing how to love
From my mouth...
Hating to sin but not knowing how to stop
Hurting in ways that I can't explain
Growing restless because everything stays the same
Talking to Jesus but still feeling alone
Still wondering when the holy spirit will make itself known
Giving up and falling on my knees
Praying hard but still the devils holding me
Fighting back thoughts of suicide
Holding onto hope that Jesus is still on my side
Trying to do good but always slipping up
Thinking I have faith but not knowing how to love
From my mouth...
#religion
#faith
#spiritual
#redemption
#morality
14 reads
1 Comment
Joseph-Zenieh
Poem Published
Yesterday 12:50pm
Yesterday 12:50pm
JESUS ON PALM SUNDAY
JESUS ON PALM SUNDAY
You rode a donkey, my great Lord !
You are Who rule the sky and land.
All kings rode chariots and top steeds.
You are the Lamb of peerless deeds.
You did not care what they would ride.
You knew Yourself, no need for pride,
that was employed by who felt slight
and their steep horses gave them height.
You are the Son, extremely strong,
with value known among the throng,
no need for worth from those outside
to give You what Your traits supplied.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED ...
You rode a donkey, my great Lord !
You are Who rule the sky and land.
All kings rode chariots and top steeds.
You are the Lamb of peerless deeds.
You did not care what they would ride.
You knew Yourself, no need for pride,
that was employed by who felt slight
and their steep horses gave them height.
You are the Son, extremely strong,
with value known among the throng,
no need for worth from those outside
to give You what Your traits supplied.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED ...
#SelfWorth
21 reads
14 Comments
slipalong
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:01am
Yesterday 9:01am
Patina
In the aura of its reservation
hold a sheen so rare
as the modern with its shiny
looks on, in frank despair
Tended with a loving touch
and held in great esteem
dented like a well worn couch
and corners thumbed with wear
Hold the eye without contempt
with an aura of good taste
all complete within its space
just class, like a comfy chair
Carry all the wear and toil
the dirt and grime that should despoil
yet stand serene
each age conserve in it's repair
For once it was all...
hold a sheen so rare
as the modern with its shiny
looks on, in frank despair
Tended with a loving touch
and held in great esteem
dented like a well worn couch
and corners thumbed with wear
Hold the eye without contempt
with an aura of good taste
all complete within its space
just class, like a comfy chair
Carry all the wear and toil
the dirt and grime that should despoil
yet stand serene
each age conserve in it's repair
For once it was all...
#FallingInLove
11 reads
3 Comments
Kinkpoet
Poem Published
5th Jul 2020 5:25pm
5th Jul 2020 5:25pm
Stellar Stream
seeing stars through pain
astronomical torment
adrift in stardust
consuming darkness
deep dark black abysmal hole
ignites the Big Bang
lights dance in the sky
real or imagination
hallucinations
truths spawning questions
on which plane does truth exist
astral or causal
blasting into dreams
planetary ecstasy
vacuum of deep space
cosmic array
astronomical medley
black holes and comets
successful moments
balanced with fears of failure
universal scales
...
astronomical torment
adrift in stardust
consuming darkness
deep dark black abysmal hole
ignites the Big Bang
lights dance in the sky
real or imagination
hallucinations
truths spawning questions
on which plane does truth exist
astral or causal
blasting into dreams
planetary ecstasy
vacuum of deep space
cosmic array
astronomical medley
black holes and comets
successful moments
balanced with fears of failure
universal scales
...
#sadness
#grief
#hope
#inspirational
#stars
24 reads
4 Comments
Pimp2ThaFuture04
Poem Published
5th Jul 2020 2:47pm
5th Jul 2020 2:47pm
The Last Days
The angels of God married
The daughters of men
fallen angels are weeping punishment for the corruption of all creation this is the final judgement
These are the days of the walk of Atonement for the heartache and the torment
Look at the lawlessness increased on the earth our world is being destroyed
Neighbors are slaying each other by the swords turning their backs on the ways of the Lord
It's enough to make a schizophrenic paranoid
Can't you see the angels been sparing
The Rod be careful your arms
Are too short to...
The daughters of men
fallen angels are weeping punishment for the corruption of all creation this is the final judgement
These are the days of the walk of Atonement for the heartache and the torment
Look at the lawlessness increased on the earth our world is being destroyed
Neighbors are slaying each other by the swords turning their backs on the ways of the Lord
It's enough to make a schizophrenic paranoid
Can't you see the angels been sparing
The Rod be careful your arms
Are too short to...
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeChangingMoment
#apocalypse #choices
#apocalypse #choices
43 reads
4 Comments
atkfrostyatk
Poem Published
5th Jul 2020 2:20pm
5th Jul 2020 2:20pm
the kingdom
Maybe because its Sunday that i feel so satisfied,
Maybe because i'm worried and honestly I'm terrified
Maybe its the lack of sun or maybe its the rain,
Maybe its because i have the wisdom to appreciate the pain
Maybe I've gone crazy and fell out of my tree
Maybe I fell asleep or i'm not really me
Now it's still a dream and life's not really real
And since I lost my nerve I can't tell you how I feel
Now I know some science contradicts the truth I've heard
But I've looked so hard for answers and found them in the word
One day I...
Maybe because i'm worried and honestly I'm terrified
Maybe its the lack of sun or maybe its the rain,
Maybe its because i have the wisdom to appreciate the pain
Maybe I've gone crazy and fell out of my tree
Maybe I fell asleep or i'm not really me
Now it's still a dream and life's not really real
And since I lost my nerve I can't tell you how I feel
Now I know some science contradicts the truth I've heard
But I've looked so hard for answers and found them in the word
One day I...
#religion
#Christian
#spiritual
18 reads
0 Comments
atkfrostyatk
Poem Published
5th Jul 2020 2:05pm
5th Jul 2020 2:05pm
Repentance
I heard the message and I took it in,
I gave myself to Christ i abandoned sin
I ignored all evil i past many tests,
woke up with a happy heart giving God my best
It was so easy to walk in Jesus' light
Didn't have to struggle didn't have to fight
Then one day the devil showed his skin,
I resisted at first but then I let him win
I still talked to Jesus I still confessed my sins
I tried to pick myself up and I fell down again
I got down on my knees and prayed with all my heart
Yet I felt no peace and things got way to hard
If I could...
I gave myself to Christ i abandoned sin
I ignored all evil i past many tests,
woke up with a happy heart giving God my best
It was so easy to walk in Jesus' light
Didn't have to struggle didn't have to fight
Then one day the devil showed his skin,
I resisted at first but then I let him win
I still talked to Jesus I still confessed my sins
I tried to pick myself up and I fell down again
I got down on my knees and prayed with all my heart
Yet I felt no peace and things got way to hard
If I could...
#Christian
#faith
#spiritual
22 reads
5 Comments
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