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summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
Today 2:58pm
Today 2:58pm
~journaling the micro mosaics of One’s interstellar journey
like the spread open
tiny citrussy vesicular
succulences.. afloat
they are.. the plasmic sacs..
as aerial liquescing
mosaics, in a blinding
bright lighted up
efflorescence..
[just when, rings aloud
the palindromic drums
11:11.. as quadrupling
Ones.. ever feels them
as the foundational
gargantuan pillars.. of
anything & everything
(they say, at least four
needs to be around.. for
a seamless carriage, of
one’s coffin.. in some
palanquin dignity.. as...
tiny citrussy vesicular
succulences.. afloat
they are.. the plasmic sacs..
as aerial liquescing
mosaics, in a blinding
bright lighted up
efflorescence..
[just when, rings aloud
the palindromic drums
11:11.. as quadrupling
Ones.. ever feels them
as the foundational
gargantuan pillars.. of
anything & everything
(they say, at least four
needs to be around.. for
a seamless carriage, of
one’s coffin.. in some
palanquin dignity.. as...
#birth
#dark
#love
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
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NP_NP
NP
NP
Poem Published
Today 5:55am
Today 5:55am
Frequencies
I sought you briefly, a fleeting beacon,
to confirm my steps, my chosen path.
Will I ever see you again? I truly don’t know.
Are we tuned to the same frequency,
or have you merely stumbled upon my station,
a ghost caught in the hum of static?
I dug up your skeletons,
just so I could drink tea with them,
to make sense of the echoes they leave behind.
You fear the dark, but I find solace
where shadows weave their quiet embrace.
It was a Friday night—
a moment of resolve,
when I vowed to no longer dance ...
to confirm my steps, my chosen path.
Will I ever see you again? I truly don’t know.
Are we tuned to the same frequency,
or have you merely stumbled upon my station,
a ghost caught in the hum of static?
I dug up your skeletons,
just so I could drink tea with them,
to make sense of the echoes they leave behind.
You fear the dark, but I find solace
where shadows weave their quiet embrace.
It was a Friday night—
a moment of resolve,
when I vowed to no longer dance ...
#learning
#love
#PersonalGrowth
#SelfDiscovery
#StreamOfConsciousness
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
27th Dec 2024 4:42am
27th Dec 2024 4:42am
Wages of The Faithless
In depths unseen, beneath the endless night
Where shadows writhe and whisper of despair
I walked, alone, beneath an empty light
To witness what awaits the soul laid bare
No angels’ song, no holy trumpets sound
Only the hollow moan of desolate cries
For here, where souls in darkness are unbound
The Faithless walk with vacant hopeless eyes
Their steps are slow, their hearts are cold as stone
The wages earned for turning from the truth
In endless grief, they walk, yet walk alone
Their faith forsaken in the fleeting youth
...
Where shadows writhe and whisper of despair
I walked, alone, beneath an empty light
To witness what awaits the soul laid bare
No angels’ song, no holy trumpets sound
Only the hollow moan of desolate cries
For here, where souls in darkness are unbound
The Faithless walk with vacant hopeless eyes
Their steps are slow, their hearts are cold as stone
The wages earned for turning from the truth
In endless grief, they walk, yet walk alone
Their faith forsaken in the fleeting youth
...
#Christian
#faith
#God
#morality
#religion
37 reads
0 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
27th Dec 2024 00:56am
27th Dec 2024 00:56am
What ever you need and want
For sure 🙏 I'm thinking about you in your time of need when you seek clarity of understanding, is why am HERE AND NOW. 🙏 FOR I come as a blessing in disguise, for the betterment of each of your lives, 🤔 to help you navigate your ups and downs that are involved in creating a different kind of life. 🙏 For sure that's why I am here with you now, as I sit here and reflect upon the things I've seen how much this world 🌍 has changed over time. 😭 Years after YEARS of what is happening in the world, as 🌍 it becomes filled with chaos and drama...
#faith
#fate
#philosophical
#redemption
#TruthOfLife
55 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
27th Dec 2024 00:30am
27th Dec 2024 00:30am
wicked
untitled glory beheld me
the ground tremble at your approach
a heavy knowledge overcame me
wisdom was before me burning with truth
I must alter but it seems impossible
to change ones course without first changing oneself
my heart ache from the honesty of this
seeminly bent on one path I lament
travailing with the sacred Father
rejecting some of the things he presents
more information is needed
this causes me sorrow
were it that I so easily believe
but my mind challenges
causing me to fall into...
the ground tremble at your approach
a heavy knowledge overcame me
wisdom was before me burning with truth
I must alter but it seems impossible
to change ones course without first changing oneself
my heart ache from the honesty of this
seeminly bent on one path I lament
travailing with the sacred Father
rejecting some of the things he presents
more information is needed
this causes me sorrow
were it that I so easily believe
but my mind challenges
causing me to fall into...
#spiritual
49 reads
5 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
26th Dec 2024 3:53pm
26th Dec 2024 3:53pm
Thus Spoke Abaddon
"Lo, hark and weep, thou sons of dust
Man’s pride waxed and God’s decrees did rust
Once high, ye stood, in Eden’s grace
Now low ye crawl, a wretched race."
Thus spoke Abaddon
"In days of yore, thy hands were pure
But gold and sin thy hearts allure
Thy towers rose, thy pride took wing
Yet cursed thy voice, no more to sing."
Thus spoke Abaddon
"I watched thee fall, thy doom in stone
The mark of wrath, the seed was sown
By serpent’s tongue and lustful eye
Thy souls were bought, thy birthright...
Man’s pride waxed and God’s decrees did rust
Once high, ye stood, in Eden’s grace
Now low ye crawl, a wretched race."
Thus spoke Abaddon
"In days of yore, thy hands were pure
But gold and sin thy hearts allure
Thy towers rose, thy pride took wing
Yet cursed thy voice, no more to sing."
Thus spoke Abaddon
"I watched thee fall, thy doom in stone
The mark of wrath, the seed was sown
By serpent’s tongue and lustful eye
Thy souls were bought, thy birthright...
#angels
#Christian
#devil
#morality
#religion
40 reads
2 Comments
moon_bather
Poem Published
26th Dec 2024 1:03am
26th Dec 2024 1:03am
Finite
Only here so long
Stand your ground
While we right our wrongs
Eternally
Feed the demon
No more
Only here
For a couple more
Until that wretched shore
So open your soul
Open your mind
What remains here
A thing called life
Only here
For a couple more
Let us live this moment
Before that wretched shore
Stand your ground
While we right our wrongs
Eternally
Feed the demon
No more
Only here
For a couple more
Until that wretched shore
So open your soul
Open your mind
What remains here
A thing called life
Only here
For a couple more
Let us live this moment
Before that wretched shore
#bittersweet
#dark
#emptiness
#inspirational
#redemption
70 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
25th Dec 2024 12:03pm
25th Dec 2024 12:03pm
The Guiding Light
He went for his daily walk like he did every morning around 9:00 am
Today was Xmas
The weather was overcast with some light flurries
His wife was home and they will be spending Xmas with her parents today
His mother died 10 years ago
He hasn't spoken to his father since the time of her passing
They haven't seen eye to eye for many years prior, but once she died, they stopped talking
His mother was a caring, full of life individual that was taken to early
He wasn't the religious type
He would never go and visit her in the cemetery, which was only...
Today was Xmas
The weather was overcast with some light flurries
His wife was home and they will be spending Xmas with her parents today
His mother died 10 years ago
He hasn't spoken to his father since the time of her passing
They haven't seen eye to eye for many years prior, but once she died, they stopped talking
His mother was a caring, full of life individual that was taken to early
He wasn't the religious type
He would never go and visit her in the cemetery, which was only...
#Christmas
#family
#LifeChangingMoment
#love
#spiritual
61 reads
12 Comments
DCLXVI_1989
Poem Published
25th Dec 2024 7:38am
25th Dec 2024 7:38am
Damp Concrete
Little boy with little joy
The past is cast
There's no rewind
Wild child exiled
The mom is gone
There's no more time
For here I sit on this wet ground
Wondering where my memories went
For what is left feels so profound
And what is found has left
Little time for me to find
Any depth for shallow breath
So long it seems
My dreams; so long
Stretching thin; long gone
Reminisce what it all meant
Temples pressed; depressed
Hindsight aced for each failed test
With stress that will...
The past is cast
There's no rewind
Wild child exiled
The mom is gone
There's no more time
For here I sit on this wet ground
Wondering where my memories went
For what is left feels so profound
And what is found has left
Little time for me to find
Any depth for shallow breath
So long it seems
My dreams; so long
Stretching thin; long gone
Reminisce what it all meant
Temples pressed; depressed
Hindsight aced for each failed test
With stress that will...
#emptiness
52 reads
3 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
25th Dec 2024 4:30am
25th Dec 2024 4:30am
Spiritual Wolf
Do you know your true name 🤔 of your spiritual entity, from the deepness of the forest of life. 🙏 FOR have you ever wondered what is your true spiritual name of yours.. FROM the deepness of the entity of that which exists only within the depths of ourselves 👁️👁️ For what is your thoughts on this message of tranquility, and peace and serenity and spiritual soul of your subconsciousness of your own, thoughts and insight and imagination from your own.🧠 MIND.... ...
🪬 SHAMAN 🪬
...
🪬 SHAMAN 🪬
...
#evolution
#forest
#moon
#universe
#werewolves
43 reads
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
23rd Dec 2024 2:18am
23rd Dec 2024 2:18am
rest assured
an artistry in the spilling of words onto the page
finessing the thoughts
stringing them together in a way to make one feel
deeply and passionately with tempo, rhythm and rhyme
sublime feeling when you get it just right
troubling the depths stirring emotions
connecting with one another
we poets are a different breed
hunting for just the right word play
something soft to fall on the ears
it's in the versed I find God
sleepiness of soul and I'm dreaming
ladybug sunshine and starlit horizons
my mind turns happiness over...
finessing the thoughts
stringing them together in a way to make one feel
deeply and passionately with tempo, rhythm and rhyme
sublime feeling when you get it just right
troubling the depths stirring emotions
connecting with one another
we poets are a different breed
hunting for just the right word play
something soft to fall on the ears
it's in the versed I find God
sleepiness of soul and I'm dreaming
ladybug sunshine and starlit horizons
my mind turns happiness over...
#happiness
#spiritual
#uplifting
59 reads
9 Comments
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
21st Dec 2024 8:50pm
21st Dec 2024 8:50pm
One Plus One
God is who made man sinners, when he decided to make the rules.
The devil is why I think I can make it, because he fell and still made it through.
I'm not saying that I'm all evil. One plus one is what makes me too.
Categories? We're all God's children. He loves me, as He also loves you.
The devil is why I think I can make it, because he fell and still made it through.
I'm not saying that I'm all evil. One plus one is what makes me too.
Categories? We're all God's children. He loves me, as He also loves you.
#faith
#hope
#love
#philosophical
#spiritual
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