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MalcolmG
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:12pm
Yesterday 2:12pm
The Whispers of the Eternal
I am the wind, that shifts endlessly, never still,
I walk the earth where mountains rise, then fall.
All things are born, yet in time they will die,
Return to dust, one truth, the greatest call.
Can you see the silent lotus, blooming through the mire,
Its petals soft, but rooted in the deep.
So too, you find wisdom through the fire,
In the darkest places, let your spirit leap.
The river’s current carries both pain and grace,
Suffering, like rain, falls where it may,
Yet through the storm, the heart must find its place,
For...
I walk the earth where mountains rise, then fall.
All things are born, yet in time they will die,
Return to dust, one truth, the greatest call.
Can you see the silent lotus, blooming through the mire,
Its petals soft, but rooted in the deep.
So too, you find wisdom through the fire,
In the darkest places, let your spirit leap.
The river’s current carries both pain and grace,
Suffering, like rain, falls where it may,
Yet through the storm, the heart must find its place,
For...
#happiness
#love
#peace
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Pete_25
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:10am
Yesterday 8:10am
This Life
In spite of all the danger
Pray to the Heaven's above
Packed in life's container
What's the meaning of?
Applause the final curtain
Taking your final puff
Spectators serving sermons
All in the name of love
Pray to the Heaven's above
Packed in life's container
What's the meaning of?
Applause the final curtain
Taking your final puff
Spectators serving sermons
All in the name of love
#fate
#philosophical
#spiritual
35 reads
6 Comments
Casted_Runes
Mr Karswell
Mr Karswell
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:55am
Yesterday 00:55am
songs of loss and innocence
they play forever in your head
the temples expanding
as all our bodies age
and store up memories
until they die
and all that loss and innocence
flies out and impregnates the air
the temples of our thoughts
and feelings fall apart
the temples expanding
as all our bodies age
and store up memories
until they die
and all that loss and innocence
flies out and impregnates the air
the temples of our thoughts
and feelings fall apart
#death
#LifeCycle
#memories #spiritual
#memories #spiritual
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1 Comment
MalcolmG
Poem Published
19th Nov 2024 7:53pm
19th Nov 2024 7:53pm
Lust and the Devil
I am told that the devil is a name
spoken only by the wicked and fearful,
a shadow cast on by the soul's yearning,
an accusation that stains the lips.
But yet they speaks of righteousness,
when their body trembles with desire?
"Who then amongst you dares to call lust a sin or immoral, when it beats like fire deep within your soul, the pulse of your life itself, breathing flames into the hollows of your hungry heart?"
It pulls the heart, it stirs the mind,
A craving wild, a tie that binds the blind.
but in its wake, the soul...
spoken only by the wicked and fearful,
a shadow cast on by the soul's yearning,
an accusation that stains the lips.
But yet they speaks of righteousness,
when their body trembles with desire?
"Who then amongst you dares to call lust a sin or immoral, when it beats like fire deep within your soul, the pulse of your life itself, breathing flames into the hollows of your hungry heart?"
It pulls the heart, it stirs the mind,
A craving wild, a tie that binds the blind.
but in its wake, the soul...
#devil
#lust
#StreamOfConsciousness
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cabcool
Poem Published
19th Nov 2024 3:31pm
19th Nov 2024 3:31pm
2024 November Poems >> i fathom not why He should choose the least
No. 08
i fathom not why He should choose the least
an awe-inspired confessional
Remembering Eerie
“It is not death that a man should fear,
but he should fear never beginning to live.”―Marcus Aurelius
i wonder if it's almost time to die,
because my bloom is as the century palm
whose shoot with fragrance paints the evening sky
of spikenard, for its withering of calm.
am i the thornbird with his sweetest song, ...
i fathom not why He should choose the least
an awe-inspired confessional
Remembering Eerie
“It is not death that a man should fear,
but he should fear never beginning to live.”―Marcus Aurelius
i wonder if it's almost time to die,
because my bloom is as the century palm
whose shoot with fragrance paints the evening sky
of spikenard, for its withering of calm.
am i the thornbird with his sweetest song, ...
#death
#grief
#memorial #respect
#memorial #respect
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
18th Nov 2024 6:56am
18th Nov 2024 6:56am
Respite Under Arches
O house of splendor, temple divine
With vaults that in gilded radiance shine!
Thy arches soar, as prayers take flight
To pierce the veil of the eternal night
Thy pillars, twelve, as prophets of old
Proclaim the truths in stories told
Each stone a witness, each wall a creed
To Him who hath met our every need
The rose-hued glass, in splendor bright
Transforms the sun to heavenly light
Its beams cascade in hallowed streams
As angels sing of sacred dreams
The sacred font, in marble hewn
Doth whisper of the coming...
With vaults that in gilded radiance shine!
Thy arches soar, as prayers take flight
To pierce the veil of the eternal night
Thy pillars, twelve, as prophets of old
Proclaim the truths in stories told
Each stone a witness, each wall a creed
To Him who hath met our every need
The rose-hued glass, in splendor bright
Transforms the sun to heavenly light
Its beams cascade in hallowed streams
As angels sing of sacred dreams
The sacred font, in marble hewn
Doth whisper of the coming...
#Christian
#God
#religion
#rhyming
#spiritual
47 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
16th Nov 2024 6:46am
16th Nov 2024 6:46am
Right n Wrong
Right n wrong
There is no right and wrong
Between heaven and hell
Can’t blur the lines
Lies fall down in the valley of satan
Truth leads me to the light
Facts become fiction
Spinning out a webs of lies
Sorting through the truth of right n wrong
Fiction becomes the truth
Leads me somewhere true and clean
Fiction doesn’t go away
Forms of conspiracy
Black is black and white is white
No grey in the truth
Rabbit goes down the hole
You don’t have to follow
There is no right and wrong
Between heaven and hell
Can’t blur the lines
Lies fall down in the valley of satan
Truth leads me to the light
Facts become fiction
Spinning out a webs of lies
Sorting through the truth of right n wrong
Fiction becomes the truth
Leads me somewhere true and clean
Fiction doesn’t go away
Forms of conspiracy
Black is black and white is white
No grey in the truth
Rabbit goes down the hole
You don’t have to follow
#lies
#morality
#TruthOfLife
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AmyMMosier
Poem Published
16th Nov 2024 00:31am
16th Nov 2024 00:31am
There exists no place
There exists no place
Outside the Lord's grip -
From the outposts of space
To the eclipse of a pit -
He's never far away.
Outside the Lord's grip -
From the outposts of space
To the eclipse of a pit -
He's never far away.
#God
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2 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 11:49pm
14th Nov 2024 11:49pm
We have so much to lose
We will always have a choice to choose, what we need and want to have in our lives, with a relationship between the lines of uncertainties. For sure we will never know, how things will go down the road of trails and tribulations.
THROUGH this life with the challenges, that could make us or break us up and destroy, the deepness of the truth of the foundation. Built from steel and stones, and the deepness of the love that we shall share, for we have a history together as woman to man and man to woman. For sure let's ask thyself what was the point for do we really want and need, that kind...
THROUGH this life with the challenges, that could make us or break us up and destroy, the deepness of the truth of the foundation. Built from steel and stones, and the deepness of the love that we shall share, for we have a history together as woman to man and man to woman. For sure let's ask thyself what was the point for do we really want and need, that kind...
#anger
#courage
#disappointment
#frustration
#strength
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Nov 2024 6:47am
12th Nov 2024 6:47am
Wanderings
Through barren wastes of ash and stone
The ascetic walked, in faith alone
The sun, a pyre, bled red and pale
As winds did wail a mournful tale
His flesh grew weak, his breath ran dry
Yet prayers rose up to pierce the sky
When from the dust a shadow loomed
A saintly corpse, from grave exhumed
Its bones did gleam with spectral fire
Its hollow eyes burned fierce, entire
“O pilgrim, lost in dread’s domain,
Rise now, and walk the path of pain”
Its voice was both a hymn and cry,
A beacon bright, yet sharp with...
The ascetic walked, in faith alone
The sun, a pyre, bled red and pale
As winds did wail a mournful tale
His flesh grew weak, his breath ran dry
Yet prayers rose up to pierce the sky
When from the dust a shadow loomed
A saintly corpse, from grave exhumed
Its bones did gleam with spectral fire
Its hollow eyes burned fierce, entire
“O pilgrim, lost in dread’s domain,
Rise now, and walk the path of pain”
Its voice was both a hymn and cry,
A beacon bright, yet sharp with...
#Christian
#dark
#God
#religion
#rhyming
43 reads
1 Comment
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
11th Nov 2024 4:04pm
11th Nov 2024 4:04pm
IT'S ABOUT WHAT IS TRUE
As long as you can do that what is necessary to do for you, to be able to share your thoughts and insight and spiritual strength. That is what we have to do, for us to be able to connect on a positive level. For sure we each have our own opinions. 🤔 For neither one is wrong or right that is why, we have to learn to understand that we will agree to disagree. But with common sense of intelligences and subconscious, thoughts on any subject matter. 🤫 For sure that is what makes you and I different, as we can appreciate the opportunity to share our thoughts, and insight and...
#choices
#SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection
#SelfWorth
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Sappho
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 8:36am
10th Nov 2024 8:36am
Diamond Processing
They judged and humiliated you
They tried to shape you according to
Their own narrow-minded world view
Their disregard tortured you very much
Your collision with social roles
Put you under enormous pressure
This way giving birth to a
Precious raw diamond
Despite all adversities and hardships
You embarked on a journey of
Finding and fulfilling your
Lífe's purpose
Your suffering scrubbed away
The magma of prejudices and
The mud of expectations and demands
The shining diamond became visible ...
They tried to shape you according to
Their own narrow-minded world view
Their disregard tortured you very much
Your collision with social roles
Put you under enormous pressure
This way giving birth to a
Precious raw diamond
Despite all adversities and hardships
You embarked on a journey of
Finding and fulfilling your
Lífe's purpose
Your suffering scrubbed away
The magma of prejudices and
The mud of expectations and demands
The shining diamond became visible ...
#rebirth
#spiritual
80 reads
5 Comments
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