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Solomon_Song
Poem Published
23rd Apr 2025 8:12am
23rd Apr 2025 8:12am
BAPTISM IN THE SPIRIT
Baptism in the spirit
you can't from kin inherit.
It can only be given
by the Father in Heaven,
who sees you have repented,
your life to him presented.
Nothing else can be your plea
than his Son shed blood for thee.
you can't from kin inherit.
It can only be given
by the Father in Heaven,
who sees you have repented,
your life to him presented.
Nothing else can be your plea
than his Son shed blood for thee.
#Christian
#faith
#religion
#sacrifice
#spiritual
53 reads
2 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
21st Apr 2025 5:39pm
21st Apr 2025 5:39pm
Paradox
do we exist
or it's just a dream...?
when you become 'aware'
of your being,
you'll find yourself
at an intersection of two circles
representing reality and illusion;
the place they smudge
is a mental haze-
misty and mystique,
familiar yet unfamiliar.
a strange realm
where unknown overlaps known.
you can't evaluate your own existence,
you can't define your subsistence.
is our life real,
or a paradox
just like schrödinger's cat ...
or it's just a dream...?
when you become 'aware'
of your being,
you'll find yourself
at an intersection of two circles
representing reality and illusion;
the place they smudge
is a mental haze-
misty and mystique,
familiar yet unfamiliar.
a strange realm
where unknown overlaps known.
you can't evaluate your own existence,
you can't define your subsistence.
is our life real,
or a paradox
just like schrödinger's cat ...
#LifeChangingMoment
#SelfDiscovery
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
88 reads
9 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
20th Apr 2025 8:36pm
20th Apr 2025 8:36pm
Manfestion of thoughts
They say if you can teach one, just imagine teaching a million 👏 NOW that you are a student, I want you to focus your energy, with your ability to manifest your deepest thoughts. Just concentrate your thoughts, as you inhale and exhale slowly and methodically thinking, about what is your true spiritual subconsciousness. FOR sure you have the ability for manfestion of which, you desire to see and behold through your third eye. 👁️ What are you thinking about as you stand upon the still water, beneath your feet, what do you wish for in this hypnotic atmosphere, as this is...
#admiration
#courage
#emotions
#gratitude
#strength
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0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
20th Apr 2025 8:29pm
20th Apr 2025 8:29pm
~& the warm-up in process.. for the death knell :: unleashing fully the inner aghori #2
https://youtu.be/Xm9kjceWeEc?feature=shared
the holy land of Kashi lights up
in its Aarthi worship.. performed
by the priests in synchronizations..
intense yellows of the flames..
unwaveringly like the flashing huge
petals of the fiery sun itself.. dance
steadily against gravity.. as
conspicuously raging third eye
of Shiva .. tearing out
of the darkly black nights
out in the daring daylights..
peacock feathers adorn
the whitened powdery beds
of the...
the holy land of Kashi lights up
in its Aarthi worship.. performed
by the priests in synchronizations..
intense yellows of the flames..
unwaveringly like the flashing huge
petals of the fiery sun itself.. dance
steadily against gravity.. as
conspicuously raging third eye
of Shiva .. tearing out
of the darkly black nights
out in the daring daylights..
peacock feathers adorn
the whitened powdery beds
of the...
#lies
#rebellion
#religion
#spiritual
#war
92 reads
2 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
20th Apr 2025 2:53pm
20th Apr 2025 2:53pm
Ishtar
Easter Sunday, the day of resurrection,
As we celebrate Christ's rising from the dead,
I believe he did rise,
But the word Easter was taken from a Sumerian religion called Ishtar
The eggs and bunnies are symbols of fertility rites
She was the Goddess of love and war for many ancient cultures
And her legacy lived on in more modern societies
In the Western world today, we celebrate Easter
and have long forgotten where our iconic symbols originated from
Surely it's a lot of fun to color Easter eggs
But it has little to do with...
As we celebrate Christ's rising from the dead,
I believe he did rise,
But the word Easter was taken from a Sumerian religion called Ishtar
The eggs and bunnies are symbols of fertility rites
She was the Goddess of love and war for many ancient cultures
And her legacy lived on in more modern societies
In the Western world today, we celebrate Easter
and have long forgotten where our iconic symbols originated from
Surely it's a lot of fun to color Easter eggs
But it has little to do with...
#Easter
#philosophical
#spiritual
67 reads
2 Comments
SonderNinja
BenjaminEC
BenjaminEC
Poem Published
19th Apr 2025 8:42pm
19th Apr 2025 8:42pm
Dirtshirt
(or "The Necromancy Blues")
The dead shall live and their bodies will break
these blue remains from the nameless crave
bears a graceful pain in gunmetal quake -
braced for the wake of an early grave
the whippoorwill cries from a lonesome ledge
the killdeer shrieks in protective feign
hinterland magic past the greenway's edge
ensorcelled brain at sauntering reign
black goat of the wood with a thousand young
gibbering pact along drooling path ...
The dead shall live and their bodies will break
these blue remains from the nameless crave
bears a graceful pain in gunmetal quake -
braced for the wake of an early grave
the whippoorwill cries from a lonesome ledge
the killdeer shrieks in protective feign
hinterland magic past the greenway's edge
ensorcelled brain at sauntering reign
black goat of the wood with a thousand young
gibbering pact along drooling path ...
#death
#Easter
#hope
#magic
#nature
79 reads
1 Comment
slipalong
Poem Published
19th Apr 2025 7:45pm
19th Apr 2025 7:45pm
cry golden tears
The road it snaked thro trees so tall
when spring was lush with birdsong call
in dappled camoflage, a flitting form
a flash of grey was all I saw
in the misty dew of morn
The light it drew sillouettes of day
dawn with all its rays arayed
was it a mother and her foal?
that danced and sprang conveyed
in the springtimes stubborn cold
I wished that I could be so free
contained and chained, no liberty
of newborn heart, replace the old
...
when spring was lush with birdsong call
in dappled camoflage, a flitting form
a flash of grey was all I saw
in the misty dew of morn
The light it drew sillouettes of day
dawn with all its rays arayed
was it a mother and her foal?
that danced and sprang conveyed
in the springtimes stubborn cold
I wished that I could be so free
contained and chained, no liberty
of newborn heart, replace the old
...
#rebirth
54 reads
2 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
19th Apr 2025 4:01am
19th Apr 2025 4:01am
It's never good bye
As long as there is life, there is death ☠️ that will follow with silent whispers, of tears ruining down people's faces saying their last good byes. For it's true it's so hard to say goodbye 🫂 to those who, have touched so many lives in so many ways, on different levels of love and support and encouragement. But yet it's a natural thing that happens in life, for sure it's necessary to truly understand that they have gone, to a better place. FOR sure they will never be forgotten, as they will always be loved 😍 in our hearts and minds. For sure death is not what we,...
#admiration
#hope
#kindness
#love
#strength
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0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
17th Apr 2025 11:02pm
17th Apr 2025 11:02pm
~ 2.0 defied. & undefined
the only tendrilous link
…
that been there with
the faceless netherlands…
(.. with its steamy hot hissing.. a such
surprisingly reactive in what? urgency
of a decadent formative.. an
addictive abyss … with
a namesake manufactured.. a
sorta made-up spice unheard
of .. cos it never was
in existence
in its natural form
the irony of existence..
that it ceases to exist
in truth .....
…
that been there with
the faceless netherlands…
(.. with its steamy hot hissing.. a such
surprisingly reactive in what? urgency
of a decadent formative.. an
addictive abyss … with
a namesake manufactured.. a
sorta made-up spice unheard
of .. cos it never was
in existence
in its natural form
the irony of existence..
that it ceases to exist
in truth .....
#freedom
#LifeChangingMoment
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#TruthOfLife
83 reads
2 Comments
Cyndi_Moone
Poem Published
15th Apr 2025 9:50pm
15th Apr 2025 9:50pm
HAPPY RESURRECTION DAYS
HAPPY RESURRECTION DAYS
He came from heaven to the earth
A little lower than the angels from birth
Pleasing His Father up above
Powered in prayer He showed His love
Young man wise as serpent gentle as dove!
Recalling today the day He gave up His life
Entering the heart of Jerusalem without a strife!
Soldiers up in front - up the streets
Until Golgotha He did reach
Recalling ALL He had done:
Redemption, Healing, Wonders and Signs all done for us through the Son
Entering different cities and different towns
Chastised...
He came from heaven to the earth
A little lower than the angels from birth
Pleasing His Father up above
Powered in prayer He showed His love
Young man wise as serpent gentle as dove!
Recalling today the day He gave up His life
Entering the heart of Jerusalem without a strife!
Soldiers up in front - up the streets
Until Golgotha He did reach
Recalling ALL He had done:
Redemption, Healing, Wonders and Signs all done for us through the Son
Entering different cities and different towns
Chastised...
#Easter
#holiday
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1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Apr 2025 00:44am
14th Apr 2025 00:44am
(The Last Upper)
Jesus had a huge supper, with large amounts of uppers
Cocaine, amphetamines & methamphetamine
The aliens from our future planet came to visit him on this special day
They offered him food, drink & loads of drugs
Most disciples were upset with this and walked out
A few stayed for the debauchery
There were also punks, metal heads, hip artists and free thinkers at this gathering
Such unity, democracy, in one social gathering
The image I included here is the original Leonardo da Vinci painting that showcased what was really happening during the last...
Cocaine, amphetamines & methamphetamine
The aliens from our future planet came to visit him on this special day
They offered him food, drink & loads of drugs
Most disciples were upset with this and walked out
A few stayed for the debauchery
There were also punks, metal heads, hip artists and free thinkers at this gathering
Such unity, democracy, in one social gathering
The image I included here is the original Leonardo da Vinci painting that showcased what was really happening during the last...
#aliens
#God
#nonfiction
#scifi
#TruthOfLife
85 reads
6 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
12th Apr 2025 11:07pm
12th Apr 2025 11:07pm
Singing in the Rain of Tears
Miranda
Fruits crown her laughter,
Rhythms bloom in vibrant hues
Carmen sways through life.
Sumak
Voice of mountains soar,
Ancient echoes fill the air
Yma's song transcends.
Maria
Voice like a tempest,
Passion pierces through the soul
Callas reigns supreme.
Rodrigues
Fado’s voice takes flight,
Soulful tides of sorrow swell
Amália endures.
Berberian
Avant-garde takes flight,
Cathy's voice bends worlds to art
Boundless, bold,...
Fruits crown her laughter,
Rhythms bloom in vibrant hues
Carmen sways through life.
Sumak
Voice of mountains soar,
Ancient echoes fill the air
Yma's song transcends.
Maria
Voice like a tempest,
Passion pierces through the soul
Callas reigns supreme.
Rodrigues
Fado’s voice takes flight,
Soulful tides of sorrow swell
Amália endures.
Berberian
Avant-garde takes flight,
Cathy's voice bends worlds to art
Boundless, bold,...
#art
#happiness
#music
#spiritual
#women
62 reads
8 Comments
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