Spiritual Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry which debates religion, atheism and New Age spirituality
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Fiftysevenhours
Poem Published
12th Apr 2025 7:44pm
12th Apr 2025 7:44pm
Beneath trees.
Reaching out from the strands of,
Imperceptible actions,
The rattle and rush,
The continual drones brush.
The ebb and fall,
The hushed pace,
Of the winds heartbeat,
Merge.
Essential and inseparable,
As one mass,
Cohesive, movement.
Not for, due or because,
But witnessed upon,
This space,
I do happen to inhabit.
A transient presence,
Corporeal laid,
Back to the back of stone.
The bedrock,
Of this river's home.
In a choice up to me,
To let the wash absorb the haste,
The angst,
The...
Imperceptible actions,
The rattle and rush,
The continual drones brush.
The ebb and fall,
The hushed pace,
Of the winds heartbeat,
Merge.
Essential and inseparable,
As one mass,
Cohesive, movement.
Not for, due or because,
But witnessed upon,
This space,
I do happen to inhabit.
A transient presence,
Corporeal laid,
Back to the back of stone.
The bedrock,
Of this river's home.
In a choice up to me,
To let the wash absorb the haste,
The angst,
The...
#NaPoWriMo2024
#philosophical
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0 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
9th Apr 2025 5:03am
9th Apr 2025 5:03am
Augury
I could see the pain in her eyes
For the things that she used to tell
And for the many that she kept to herself
People her time were built different
Like strongholds of resilience and secrets
Every now and then
I’d get a glimpse of the world she came from
She knew that old ghosts sometimes come back
Not to haunt
But try to stir you away from the current path
And yet, she always remained stoic
Death and spirits tend to have that effect on some people
For her
It was a way of life
Because even though now she...
For the things that she used to tell
And for the many that she kept to herself
People her time were built different
Like strongholds of resilience and secrets
Every now and then
I’d get a glimpse of the world she came from
She knew that old ghosts sometimes come back
Not to haunt
But try to stir you away from the current path
And yet, she always remained stoic
Death and spirits tend to have that effect on some people
For her
It was a way of life
Because even though now she...
#death
#mystery
#peace #suffering
#peace #suffering
73 reads
2 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
8th Apr 2025 2:21am
8th Apr 2025 2:21am
Overcoming Fear
It wasn’t so much the fear of what happens after death
But the constant guilt over things beyond my control
It just felt like many of the decisions I made in my youth
Were based on the premise – I was trying to save my soul
And yet for some reason it felt like something was missing
Many of the things I saw and witnessed didn’t make sense
I had lost faith and found it and lost it over and over again
And until the veil was lifted it stripped away that innocence
Then I believed I’d achieve something with a bigger purpose
Even the little...
But the constant guilt over things beyond my control
It just felt like many of the decisions I made in my youth
Were based on the premise – I was trying to save my soul
And yet for some reason it felt like something was missing
Many of the things I saw and witnessed didn’t make sense
I had lost faith and found it and lost it over and over again
And until the veil was lifted it stripped away that innocence
Then I believed I’d achieve something with a bigger purpose
Even the little...
#faith
#humankind
#PersonalGrowth
#religion
#spiritual
88 reads
2 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
7th Apr 2025 9:48pm
7th Apr 2025 9:48pm
~aromatic anomalies
does your hyperosmic eccentricities
make you an instant sniffer~ dog.. hit
by this an animalistic gifted streak…
or even so better, make you
a uniquely magnifique maverick god
a magical synesthetic
to an esoteric mystique
of whatever vagaries
of aromatic sensations
in an ease of a creative synthesise
to its brusque breakdown rapidities
anything & everything
from those high hanging
exotic ethereal perfumeries
to digging deep underground
an earthen...
make you an instant sniffer~ dog.. hit
by this an animalistic gifted streak…
or even so better, make you
a uniquely magnifique maverick god
a magical synesthetic
to an esoteric mystique
of whatever vagaries
of aromatic sensations
in an ease of a creative synthesise
to its brusque breakdown rapidities
anything & everything
from those high hanging
exotic ethereal perfumeries
to digging deep underground
an earthen...
#conflict
#evolution
#identity
#science
#spiritual
96 reads
2 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
7th Apr 2025 4:49pm
7th Apr 2025 4:49pm
Ode to My Mango Tree
two decades or so, yet
ever reaching out to me
your calloused branches...
my voice and touch
carved in your aging bough,
your song when leaves rustle
in the night breeze
overwhelms my tormented soul...
o' my dearest amrapali,
more than my confidant,
you are an embodiment
of my spirit guide,
listening to my laments
and in whose silence
dwells solace-
an intercessor,
who carries my
pleas and prayers
to the universe; ...
ever reaching out to me
your calloused branches...
my voice and touch
carved in your aging bough,
your song when leaves rustle
in the night breeze
overwhelms my tormented soul...
o' my dearest amrapali,
more than my confidant,
you are an embodiment
of my spirit guide,
listening to my laments
and in whose silence
dwells solace-
an intercessor,
who carries my
pleas and prayers
to the universe; ...
#nature
#respect
#spiritual #trees
#spiritual #trees
138 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
7th Apr 2025 12:11pm
7th Apr 2025 12:11pm
Ave Donna Cicciolina
Beneath the gaze of falcon’s flight
she rose, a flame in endless night.
Ilona, bold, her banner soar ahigh.
A siren's call beneath the pink sky.
Her eyes, a hawk's sharp, so keen,
a prowler through a world's unseen.
Wings of freedom, hearts in a sway,
she soared like birds of fierce prey.
Mocked and praised, her voice defied,
A rebel’s cry where sounds truth reside.
Ave, Donna, Cicciolina, fearless queen,
in your sir shadow the all brave convene.
Through storms of judgment, skies of grey,
she danced...
she rose, a flame in endless night.
Ilona, bold, her banner soar ahigh.
A siren's call beneath the pink sky.
Her eyes, a hawk's sharp, so keen,
a prowler through a world's unseen.
Wings of freedom, hearts in a sway,
she soared like birds of fierce prey.
Mocked and praised, her voice defied,
A rebel’s cry where sounds truth reside.
Ave, Donna, Cicciolina, fearless queen,
in your sir shadow the all brave convene.
Through storms of judgment, skies of grey,
she danced...
#art
#PopCulture
#porn
#sex
#women
99 reads
4 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
7th Apr 2025 11:06am
7th Apr 2025 11:06am
Do you believe in your faith
For sure in this life we all will go through somethings, that will be out of our own control, but it doesn't mean that, you give up on hope and stop ignoring the power of prayers. For sure it might be a crippling disease like cancer, or it maybe a broken heart filled with hurt and pain, or it could be a illness that affects you mentally and emotionally and physically. For it could be tears for a love one that have gone away. But regardless what ever you do don't stop believing in your faith and beliefs, for sure he will never leave you nor forsake you, as you are one of GOD ALMIGHTY CHILDREN....
#courage
#hope
#kindness
#love
#redemption
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
6th Apr 2025 3:39pm
6th Apr 2025 3:39pm
accountable
invariably, I am what I am not
an empath struck by what is
channeling the pain of the verses
It affects me at a deep level
sometimes intertwining with my thoughts
a soul so complex with its art
metaphors and philosophies
that are not all mine
are just my way of coping with what is
flooded with visions that disturb
My first thought is to shove them down deep
but they cause me great anxiety
so I free them on the page
at what toll I don't know
They say kindness covers a multitude of sins
I hope...
an empath struck by what is
channeling the pain of the verses
It affects me at a deep level
sometimes intertwining with my thoughts
a soul so complex with its art
metaphors and philosophies
that are not all mine
are just my way of coping with what is
flooded with visions that disturb
My first thought is to shove them down deep
but they cause me great anxiety
so I free them on the page
at what toll I don't know
They say kindness covers a multitude of sins
I hope...
#love
#spiritual
98 reads
7 Comments
Cyndi_Moone
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 8:12pm
3rd Apr 2025 8:12pm
SILLY BILLIE YOU'RE SO SILLY
This is the story of Silly Billie
A little boy who was so silly
He lost his friend whose name was Willie
Because he stold candy from his sister Millie.
He didn’t stop there – that Silly Billie
Feeling alone without his friend whose name was Willie
He made a new friend who was just as silly!
Loud and rambunctious and all up-hilly
The librarian, whose name was Chantilly,
Did not like noise nor anyone O so silly!
Influenced by Willie, Silly Billie was given a “Silly Willie”
When he cried out
And the librarian threw him out!
...
A little boy who was so silly
He lost his friend whose name was Willie
Because he stold candy from his sister Millie.
He didn’t stop there – that Silly Billie
Feeling alone without his friend whose name was Willie
He made a new friend who was just as silly!
Loud and rambunctious and all up-hilly
The librarian, whose name was Chantilly,
Did not like noise nor anyone O so silly!
Influenced by Willie, Silly Billie was given a “Silly Willie”
When he cried out
And the librarian threw him out!
...
#Christian
#forgiveness
#redemption #rejection
#redemption #rejection
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summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
2nd Apr 2025 9:09pm
~second homecoming [collab with Vision_of_ insanity (Keith)]
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with...
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with...
#collaboration
#LifeChangingMoment
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#love
140 reads
7 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 2:30pm
2nd Apr 2025 2:30pm
rise
2/30
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
#love
#spiritual
75 reads
4 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 5:16am
2nd Apr 2025 5:16am
She Rises
With spirit and determination
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
#gratitude
#love
#rebirth
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
104 reads
4 Comments
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