Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Embracing The Aquatic, Heat 1
Doctor says,
“stop sitting idle watching the telly
start emptying that bowl full of jelly.”
Next, prescribing an exercise regime.
“Water walking is easy on the joints”
Dear, healer of highest esteem
you taunt me on purpose
I am good but by no means perfect
Oh, on the floor of a shallow pool
not striding on the surface?
I’ll do as you suggest.
A wonderful dichotomous effect,
losing weight while keeping cool.
“stop sitting idle watching the telly
start emptying that bowl full of jelly.”
Next, prescribing an exercise regime.
“Water walking is easy on the joints”
Dear, healer of highest esteem
you taunt me on purpose
I am good but by no means perfect
Oh, on the floor of a shallow pool
not striding on the surface?
I’ll do as you suggest.
A wonderful dichotomous effect,
losing weight while keeping cool.
#happiness
#love
#water
#SelfReflection
#SelfDiscovery
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Sails the Lonely Ship
From a land I was exiled
I sail on,
Forevermore
Who will guide me now?
The sun never rises
Beyond the stars,
Unknown
Ploughing through angry waves
cold winds blow
ice forming on the mast
Desperate
Memories of loved ones fading away
Children grow & die
Who will remember or accept me
Discarded
Waiting to die.
I sail on,
Forevermore
Who will guide me now?
The sun never rises
Beyond the stars,
Unknown
Ploughing through angry waves
cold winds blow
ice forming on the mast
Desperate
Memories of loved ones fading away
Children grow & die
Who will remember or accept me
Discarded
Waiting to die.
#sadness
#loneliness
#sea
#water
#nature
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Sunning By The Pool Before She Saw Her Former Lover
Xena
was sunning
herself
by the pool before
she saw her former
lover Brian with
that one
skanky bitch
Layla.
was sunning
herself
by the pool before
she saw her former
lover Brian with
that one
skanky bitch
Layla.
#heartbroken
#summer
#water
#fiction
#lover
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Nocturnal Tranquility...
Tucked within the Blue Ridge tapestry,
I watched, with passion, as skies of sun
and indigo kissed day goodbye.
Droplets of dew fell from the ether
to then be carried upon a chaotic zephyr
while I bundled around the fire.
As hues of muted grey painted the sky,
the moon made its debut in a pale,
yet supple form; granting the slightest mångata atop the liquid mirth.
As the cosmos embraced the lake from
the expanse of its astral plane,
I played voyeur; wrapped up in their moonlight reverie, and thoroughly
enjoying the cold, yet...
I watched, with passion, as skies of sun
and indigo kissed day goodbye.
Droplets of dew fell from the ether
to then be carried upon a chaotic zephyr
while I bundled around the fire.
As hues of muted grey painted the sky,
the moon made its debut in a pale,
yet supple form; granting the slightest mångata atop the liquid mirth.
As the cosmos embraced the lake from
the expanse of its astral plane,
I played voyeur; wrapped up in their moonlight reverie, and thoroughly
enjoying the cold, yet...
#night
#water
#mountains
#moon
#peace
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Mermaid Fantasy
You were swimming in the sea.
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
#sea
#water
#nature #uplifting
#nature #uplifting
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Why Did You Do That To Me?! Are You Crazy?!
Jonathan walked
to the pool
and spotted Brooke
sleeping naked on a
float over the water.
But when he touched her skin,
it made her go into the water.
to the pool
and spotted Brooke
sleeping naked on a
float over the water.
But when he touched her skin,
it made her go into the water.
#friendship
#summer
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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Messenger
The likes of no one draw near
Times of change, a growing fear
Upon the ocean my dreams all died
Ever since the full moon rises the tide
Watching the world precisely through my lens
Famine & Poverty will never end
Times of change, a growing fear
Upon the ocean my dreams all died
Ever since the full moon rises the tide
Watching the world precisely through my lens
Famine & Poverty will never end
#LifeStruggles
#pollution
#water
#rhyming
#poverty
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Riding The Wave Until It Crashes
Pieces of me.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
#water
#unicorns
#apathy
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Urging Him To Come Over
Colin
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
#friendship
#summer
#water
#fiction
#dating
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That's It! I'm Calling The Police!
Kathryn was showering herself outside.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
#anger
#home
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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she loved the river
Life is like the river, sometimes it sweeps you gently along and
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
#river
#water
#nature
#fate
#tragedy
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Mahogany
It's that quiet whisper
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Easing the tip of your hard seduction into my sensations space
You fit inside the paradox of me so tight
Unlocking the dimensions of my Pandora Box
Dip inside, yes take that stream deeper, lose control in the saturated essence of my mental ravine
I do like the way you stroke your quill, when you brushing all over the peaks of my curiosity
Tempting my in the wet liaison unclothed of his psyche to psyche
...
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Easing the tip of your hard seduction into my sensations space
You fit inside the paradox of me so tight
Unlocking the dimensions of my Pandora Box
Dip inside, yes take that stream deeper, lose control in the saturated essence of my mental ravine
I do like the way you stroke your quill, when you brushing all over the peaks of my curiosity
Tempting my in the wet liaison unclothed of his psyche to psyche
...
#sun
#water
#lover
#sensual
#seductive
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique