Poems About Rivers Seeking Honest Critique
#river
Poems about rivers seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
rowantree
Poem Published
18th Jul 2020 7:38pm
18th Jul 2020 7:38pm
!!!: Rivers
Suddenly,
being needed is heaven,
and heaven is right here and now
in the Texas hills
by the Guadalupe
with little ones to look after
even when they are pure ruckus
and the day is too hot and still.
The sweat comes
and flows, a flood to fill
the driest emptiness.
There's a river
dripping down my back
and shaking me by the shoulders -
carving my heart
into something smoother,
older,
snaking under shirt,
winding over breast
leaving goose-pimpled ...
being needed is heaven,
and heaven is right here and now
in the Texas hills
by the Guadalupe
with little ones to look after
even when they are pure ruckus
and the day is too hot and still.
The sweat comes
and flows, a flood to fill
the driest emptiness.
There's a river
dripping down my back
and shaking me by the shoulders -
carving my heart
into something smoother,
older,
snaking under shirt,
winding over breast
leaving goose-pimpled ...
#happiness
#river
579 reads
3 Comments
BlueBeastGirl
Beasty
Beasty
Poem Published
6th Jul 2020 6:07pm
6th Jul 2020 6:07pm
Acid Dreams
My dreams are eroding my sense of self
Who am I? Where do I go from here?
I dream of a life that was mine, but not mine
It was my soul, but definitely not my body
And there was your soul, but not your body
Swimming in colors, tie dye galaxies
Swirling and embracing me tightly
Your hands, no... Their hands?
Are souls what make us... Us?
If it isn't why am I dreaming of a life
Where we had different bodies, different paths then this one
Where we loved against all the odds
Lava lamp summer, wine made in tubs
Trees all around,...
Who am I? Where do I go from here?
I dream of a life that was mine, but not mine
It was my soul, but definitely not my body
And there was your soul, but not your body
Swimming in colors, tie dye galaxies
Swirling and embracing me tightly
Your hands, no... Their hands?
Are souls what make us... Us?
If it isn't why am I dreaming of a life
Where we had different bodies, different paths then this one
Where we loved against all the odds
Lava lamp summer, wine made in tubs
Trees all around,...
#ILoveYou
#river
#rebirth
#magic
#curse
680 reads
2 Comments
FATBOY300PLUS
Poem Published
2nd Jun 2020 5:40pm
2nd Jun 2020 5:40pm
Only When the Rain Falls on Your Head
To the ears of the unhearing
Screams go unheard
Unnoticed
Like a whisper in a whirlwind
Only when the tornado removes the roof of the pampered and privileged
And only as torrents fall upon and tarnish a closet full of Armani's finest
and rain ruins that $400 hairdo
Will those who look away
Finally look at what was happening all around them all along
As the water rises higher inside the walls of a now roofless bowl that was once an impenetrable fortress
We,
who have learned to swim the raging rivers,
shall see if that...
Screams go unheard
Unnoticed
Like a whisper in a whirlwind
Only when the tornado removes the roof of the pampered and privileged
And only as torrents fall upon and tarnish a closet full of Armani's finest
and rain ruins that $400 hairdo
Will those who look away
Finally look at what was happening all around them all along
As the water rises higher inside the walls of a now roofless bowl that was once an impenetrable fortress
We,
who have learned to swim the raging rivers,
shall see if that...
#river
#tragedy
489 reads
3 Comments
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
24th May 2020 8:53pm
24th May 2020 8:53pm
ALL RIVERS FLOW
Ocean is calling
Pulling itself out of me
Thru glazed, awestruck eyes
Pulling itself out of me
Thru glazed, awestruck eyes
#river
#sea
#senryu #emotional
#senryu #emotional
371 reads
8 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
20th May 2020 12:37pm
20th May 2020 12:37pm
A RECLUSIVE ESCAPE
Here within this moment of solitude far away from the rhythmic noises, from the depth of the world with its systematic theology system of control. I can relate to the very existences of my mind and heart, as my mind becomes relax from the tension and anxiety and madness desperately needing an escape. For even my heart has become an beating drum breathing life back into me, as I inhale and exhale this untouched atmosphere not touched by mankind, as the true beauty shines through the illumination through rays of the golden sun peeking through the trees. For it is here beyond those peeking eyes...
#trees
#river
#sun
#sky
#water
572 reads
8 Comments
Leobormish
Poem Published
16th May 2020 1:54pm
16th May 2020 1:54pm
Dangling Above the River Thames
#river
#StreamOfConsciousness
266 reads
3 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
4th Apr 2020 00:14am
4th Apr 2020 00:14am
the city was never so quiet
the lapping of the river against the
embankment was all I
heard later this might carry on for a
while ..
embankment was all I
heard later this might carry on for a
while ..
#river
432 reads
12 Comments
PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
13th Mar 2020 2:26am
13th Mar 2020 2:26am
A Poem of Love
I wrote this poem of love for you late last night.
Please listen attentively while I recite from my heart:
The shade of your tempting lips is pink like flamingos.
No eyes are as beautiful as yours in the moonlight.
Your cheeks resemble the blossoms of an apple tree.
And your love blooms like the wild lilies of the fields.
Baby, I sincerely meant it when I told you I love you.
And this feeling inside me gets stronger every day.
We belong together like a gam of whales in the ocean.
I would be a king if you proudly wear my...
Please listen attentively while I recite from my heart:
The shade of your tempting lips is pink like flamingos.
No eyes are as beautiful as yours in the moonlight.
Your cheeks resemble the blossoms of an apple tree.
And your love blooms like the wild lilies of the fields.
Baby, I sincerely meant it when I told you I love you.
And this feeling inside me gets stronger every day.
We belong together like a gam of whales in the ocean.
I would be a king if you proudly wear my...
#love
#river
#flowers
#nature
#mountains
430 reads
0 Comments
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
5th Jan 2020 7:24pm
5th Jan 2020 7:24pm
BATTERING RAM
I am the wood
that floats down the stream
to entangle myself
and bump
bump
bump
against you
again
and
again
that floats down the stream
to entangle myself
and bump
bump
bump
against you
again
and
again
#river
#nature
#sensual
456 reads
0 Comments
Joshuaberry
Ancestor
Ancestor
Poem Published
5th Jan 2020 12:29pm
5th Jan 2020 12:29pm
Contract Into Catastrophe
yawning yucks vying
salient sin scrunching
felon feast fiddling
feigning fostered feeling
sorrow met laughter
twain callous criminals
curvy court clutched
sumptuous shriek sucked
lurching la-de-da lust
eerie end amputating
drooling desires dangling
met mystic melody
severed smithereens smirking
contract into catastrophe.
20:01:05:10:45
salient sin scrunching
felon feast fiddling
feigning fostered feeling
sorrow met laughter
twain callous criminals
curvy court clutched
sumptuous shriek sucked
lurching la-de-da lust
eerie end amputating
drooling desires dangling
met mystic melody
severed smithereens smirking
contract into catastrophe.
20:01:05:10:45
#river
#beach
323 reads
0 Comments
cabcool
Poem Published
15th Dec 2019 4:45pm
15th Dec 2019 4:45pm
barcarole
a boatman survives the river’s undercurrents
There are always a lot of people so afraid of rocking the boat that they stop rowing.
We can never get ahead that way. -- Harry S. Truman
your calm exterior
seems far superior
to all the raging storms that bruise my breast
yet in your silent depths
the lurking hands of death
strangles all life that sinks beneath your crest
tyrant of wordlessness
unspoken wantonness
your innuendos haunt the page i write
with pros of prosody
your ire of irony
cons all my...
There are always a lot of people so afraid of rocking the boat that they stop rowing.
We can never get ahead that way. -- Harry S. Truman
your calm exterior
seems far superior
to all the raging storms that bruise my breast
yet in your silent depths
the lurking hands of death
strangles all life that sinks beneath your crest
tyrant of wordlessness
unspoken wantonness
your innuendos haunt the page i write
with pros of prosody
your ire of irony
cons all my...
#courage
#river
#water #determination
#water #determination
531 reads
2 Comments
nikkimoe
Poem Published
3rd Dec 2019 11:41pm
3rd Dec 2019 11:41pm
Crackled Mud
The river he said
would never subside
has dried up
The tears are scarce,
it's a drought.
would never subside
has dried up
The tears are scarce,
it's a drought.
#river
#water
454 reads
3 Comments
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