Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Give me a reason
Give me a reason
Why I should not love
My father
Give me a reason
Why I should not pray for my Father
Give me a reason
Why I should not go to bed
Early every night
Because I need to go to bed early
So that I can get a proper
Night sleep
Give a reason why
I should not take good care
Of my health
Because I don't want to let my health
Go down hill
Give me a reason
Why should I not wake up early
Every single day
Why I should not love
My father
Give me a reason
Why I should not pray for my Father
Give me a reason
Why I should not go to bed
Early every night
Because I need to go to bed early
So that I can get a proper
Night sleep
Give a reason why
I should not take good care
Of my health
Because I don't want to let my health
Go down hill
Give me a reason
Why should I not wake up early
Every single day
#denial
#despair
#hate
#heartbroken
#shame
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Stop repeating the cycle of bad
When are you gonna change your way of thinking. 🤔 For don't you deserve better than what you've, been receiving from relationships with nothing, but hurt and pain. 😞 For let's take a moment to analyze, the situations that you and I have been through, over the years. For sure we can be blinded, by the fake forms of affection and false, promises of love and happiness. Still we continue to repeat the chaos and drama, with each relationship that we encounter. For don't you know what you, want and need in your life and world. 🌎 For sure when are you gonna change the...
#disappointment
#frustration
#heartbroken
#regret
#TimeHeals
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Griefly Thinking
So now the 24/7 crying is over, What Next?
My mind won't focus, It drifts too much,
stopping on thoughts of those gone,
Felling injustice and ugly despair Ready to go
But Where?
My Dreams imploded leaving Hate,
I need ideas of a new escape.
My mind won't focus, It drifts too much,
stopping on thoughts of those gone,
Felling injustice and ugly despair Ready to go
But Where?
My Dreams imploded leaving Hate,
I need ideas of a new escape.
#anger
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
#loneliness
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I miss you so
I don't care on what they say to you,
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#lyrics
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In Rest
A picture of her smiling face
and the hook,
caught my eye
Stopped my scroll
The post concluded with
a cause of death...
Wasn't the cancer,
-A broken heart
filled the casket
And Fuck!
I've lived with this one
for 30 years,
-no mercy
offered
Some luck
goes unrealised
Now, she'll never know.
and the hook,
caught my eye
Stopped my scroll
The post concluded with
a cause of death...
Wasn't the cancer,
-A broken heart
filled the casket
And Fuck!
I've lived with this one
for 30 years,
-no mercy
offered
Some luck
goes unrealised
Now, she'll never know.
#death
#depression
#heartbroken
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For the Guest of Honor

#anger
#breakup
#grief
#heartbroken
#UnrequitedLove
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Diana
Flash goes off
My life is extinguished
Lasting in my floating nightmares
Can’t come up for air
Coulda been the queen
Living fairytale dreams
Instead twisted and bleeding
In the back of an Audi
Vultures on the kill
Snapping to feed the till
Piranha on the flesh
Down to bone
My life is extinguished
Lasting in my floating nightmares
Can’t come up for air
Coulda been the queen
Living fairytale dreams
Instead twisted and bleeding
In the back of an Audi
Vultures on the kill
Snapping to feed the till
Piranha on the flesh
Down to bone
#greed
#grief
#heartbroken #shame
#heartbroken #shame
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Have you ever wondered
Have you ever wondered WHY DO SOME PEOPLE 🤨
DO what they do and still be trying to call it love, when in fact it's not real love and support and understanding 😠 Why do some people's pretend to care about you, yet you see no commitment nor a real part of consistency and real communications skills. But yet they don't have the simple sense to understand, that it takes two to build a strong relationship. For we all are seeking a positive, level of substance that can't, be never denied. For sure it's human nature for them to pretend, then to speak with truth and trust and...
DO what they do and still be trying to call it love, when in fact it's not real love and support and understanding 😠 Why do some people's pretend to care about you, yet you see no commitment nor a real part of consistency and real communications skills. But yet they don't have the simple sense to understand, that it takes two to build a strong relationship. For we all are seeking a positive, level of substance that can't, be never denied. For sure it's human nature for them to pretend, then to speak with truth and trust and...
#courage
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#respect
#strength
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never
aching redemption, my brokenness can be seen
my scars too evident
my love of you, mine only, to believe
hurtful day, don't care too much
your heart worn and bare
a singularity of soul, when there should be two there
I'm in love, I'm unsure of you
sacred kiss, I put myself in deep
forlorn sorrow, I hide it within
don't weep for me tomorrow
I have enough faith in myself
I will bear it alone
sanctuary in sadness, it is mine to keep
my smile is empty
my melancholy tears mixed...
my scars too evident
my love of you, mine only, to believe
hurtful day, don't care too much
your heart worn and bare
a singularity of soul, when there should be two there
I'm in love, I'm unsure of you
sacred kiss, I put myself in deep
forlorn sorrow, I hide it within
don't weep for me tomorrow
I have enough faith in myself
I will bear it alone
sanctuary in sadness, it is mine to keep
my smile is empty
my melancholy tears mixed...
#heartbroken
#love
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No Church Bells
We need to talk
Why do I feel my chest tighten or, like every nerve ending is firing at once
We need to talk
Nothing ever goes well with those types of words
I know what I told you
I should stop this. I know exactly where it's going, and my heart is slowly ripping apart.
I told you everything was over with me and her, but I also told you I would try to make it work.
Why is he still talking? I got it. I'm gone
I would like if we could still be friends
He would like it if we could...
Why do I feel my chest tighten or, like every nerve ending is firing at once
We need to talk
Nothing ever goes well with those types of words
I know what I told you
I should stop this. I know exactly where it's going, and my heart is slowly ripping apart.
I told you everything was over with me and her, but I also told you I would try to make it work.
Why is he still talking? I got it. I'm gone
I would like if we could still be friends
He would like it if we could...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#rejection #sadness
#rejection #sadness
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Please Join My Self-Destruction

#evil
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#lust
#support
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mosaic heart
Blessed are the broken hearts
With jagged edges and bloody pieces
Happier are the halves and chips
That grieve a loss too heavy to remain complete
Lucky are painful beating time bombs of mass destruction, that end in tragic wreck
For they will build a mighty fortress
Where love knows where to go, in a castle standing sturdy
A steel-framed wall of regret, memory, and dirty reflection is what protects the mosaic heart so tenderly
For it has healed, grown, and been made new.
But oh… jealous are the whole hearts
Who watch in...
With jagged edges and bloody pieces
Happier are the halves and chips
That grieve a loss too heavy to remain complete
Lucky are painful beating time bombs of mass destruction, that end in tragic wreck
For they will build a mighty fortress
Where love knows where to go, in a castle standing sturdy
A steel-framed wall of regret, memory, and dirty reflection is what protects the mosaic heart so tenderly
For it has healed, grown, and been made new.
But oh… jealous are the whole hearts
Who watch in...
#emotional
#heartbroken
#hurt
#relationships
#TruthOfLife
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