Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#heartbroken
heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Tear Kissed Lashes
When I thought I had nothing left
That my internal well had run dry
You managed to bring forth one tear
It clung to the longest lash
Like a lover’s kiss
Just because you said
Beautiful
That my internal well had run dry
You managed to bring forth one tear
It clung to the longest lash
Like a lover’s kiss
Just because you said
Beautiful
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#BDSM
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what about us
I hated you for the longest time,
Believed someday I'd leave you behind.
I cried, I screamed, I begged the sky,
“Tell me what I did, why?”
For months, the tears refused to cease,
Pain demanded but granted no release.
Then, one day, I felt something shift,
No more yearning, just a hollow rift.
I’m not numb; I still feel pain,
Anger lingers, sharp as rain.
But thoughts of you bring only cold,
A hollow ache where love once told.
I craved your touch, now it makes me ill,
The thought of you...
Believed someday I'd leave you behind.
I cried, I screamed, I begged the sky,
“Tell me what I did, why?”
For months, the tears refused to cease,
Pain demanded but granted no release.
Then, one day, I felt something shift,
No more yearning, just a hollow rift.
I’m not numb; I still feel pain,
Anger lingers, sharp as rain.
But thoughts of you bring only cold,
A hollow ache where love once told.
I craved your touch, now it makes me ill,
The thought of you...
#anxiety
#breakup
#depression #heartbroken
#depression #heartbroken
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The Boys First Heartbreak
I ask him, "Was she worth it?"
He exhales, slow and deliberate.
"She was the tweak to my addict,
the dead eyes you see in the lost.
She was dark, parasitic to my heart.
She wanted to crawl inside my skin
just to feel my warmth.
She was fucking everything."
"She sounds terrible," I respond.
He takes the longest drag of his cigarette,
smoke curling like his thoughts.
"Nah," he says,
"she was comfortable in the dark.
It’s there she created art.
Sure, she nearly swallowed my...
He exhales, slow and deliberate.
"She was the tweak to my addict,
the dead eyes you see in the lost.
She was dark, parasitic to my heart.
She wanted to crawl inside my skin
just to feel my warmth.
She was fucking everything."
"She sounds terrible," I respond.
He takes the longest drag of his cigarette,
smoke curling like his thoughts.
"Nah," he says,
"she was comfortable in the dark.
It’s there she created art.
Sure, she nearly swallowed my...
#breakup
#dark
#depression
#heartbroken
#love
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A Reality Dream
Do you know why 🤨 WHY DO GOOD PEOPLE, HAVE THE MOST BAD LUCK IN THE WORLD. 🌍 WHEN TRYING TO BE WITH SOMEONE, YET WHO HAVE THE WORST RESULTS IN TRYING, TO FIND THAT ONE RELATIONSHIP, with real honesty and truth and trust. For sure do you know why, it's not working out as they plan, it's simple for they display there feelings and emotion, so easy in there mind and heart ❤️ Hoping that this time will be different than the last time. 😭 BUT yet it becomes a repeat of bad all over again. 😞 For sure let's smash the deepness of the madness, and drama that...
#disappointment
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#StreamOfConsciousness
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You always will be
You know I can't stop thinking about you
For the last three nights I've been dreaming about you
It's always the same dream, you don't want me
This morning I woke up and I swore it was real
I lay there for a while and thought about all the things that I had to do in the dream
How fucked up it was and it took me that long to figure out it was a dream
I thought I had it beat
I thought I had you out of my head for good
I must have slid back because now you're all I think about
I was so proud of myself
I was actually healing
But now I'm back...
For the last three nights I've been dreaming about you
It's always the same dream, you don't want me
This morning I woke up and I swore it was real
I lay there for a while and thought about all the things that I had to do in the dream
How fucked up it was and it took me that long to figure out it was a dream
I thought I had it beat
I thought I had you out of my head for good
I must have slid back because now you're all I think about
I was so proud of myself
I was actually healing
But now I'm back...
#breakup
#deception
#dreams
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
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Sandman O.D.
She stole my heart
And she got away.
Waiting for her return.
But to her it's just a game.
Feening like an addict.
Addicted like bad habits.
Sandman come visit me.
Dust me until I O.D.
Escaping fantasies.
Relief from memories.
Dramatically traumatized.
Refusing to realize.
Like PTSD, she's got a hold of me.
In day or dream, there's no escape it seems.
And she got away.
Waiting for her return.
But to her it's just a game.
Feening like an addict.
Addicted like bad habits.
Sandman come visit me.
Dust me until I O.D.
Escaping fantasies.
Relief from memories.
Dramatically traumatized.
Refusing to realize.
Like PTSD, she's got a hold of me.
In day or dream, there's no escape it seems.
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love #relationships
#love #relationships
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Love isn't for me
Oh; how long it’s been
Since I wore a grin
Should I let love begin
No; maybe it’s sin
Or love isn’t for me
Oh; I can’t believe...
how heart deceive
With words it weaves..
yet love won’t cleave
Guess that love for real.... ain't meant for me
Oh; how dreams delay
A hope in grey... that fades halfway
I kneel and pray
But love won’t look my way
Oh; how pain persists
A fleeting kiss... that slits the wrists
Each joy resists
Because love won’t come to me
Oh; how time’s a thief
It...
Since I wore a grin
Should I let love begin
No; maybe it’s sin
Or love isn’t for me
Oh; I can’t believe...
how heart deceive
With words it weaves..
yet love won’t cleave
Guess that love for real.... ain't meant for me
Oh; how dreams delay
A hope in grey... that fades halfway
I kneel and pray
But love won’t look my way
Oh; how pain persists
A fleeting kiss... that slits the wrists
Each joy resists
Because love won’t come to me
Oh; how time’s a thief
It...
#emotional
#heartbroken
#love #rejection
#love #rejection
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You.
Dear you,
Hey you. I can't talk to you. I call out your name, but you can't hear me. I miss you so bad that some days I don't think too clearly. You made me who i am today. And for that, ill tilt my hat, cause you taught me more than you will ever know. I just wish you were here with me to help teach and watch our daughter grow.
Life the way it is now, just doesn't seem real to me.. It’s almost like none of this is real, and i made up all these memories. Almost as if you died, or maybe it was me that died.. And if thats the case, hell is where I’ll be, until the day I can touch...
Hey you. I can't talk to you. I call out your name, but you can't hear me. I miss you so bad that some days I don't think too clearly. You made me who i am today. And for that, ill tilt my hat, cause you taught me more than you will ever know. I just wish you were here with me to help teach and watch our daughter grow.
Life the way it is now, just doesn't seem real to me.. It’s almost like none of this is real, and i made up all these memories. Almost as if you died, or maybe it was me that died.. And if thats the case, hell is where I’ll be, until the day I can touch...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#prison
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Under my skin
Here you are again
Under my skin
I thought it had thickened
But with you It's razor thin
Those eyes pierce through
And I can't think
When you breath my air
My heart just sinks
Just do it quickly
Make it painless
No need to pick up any shards
We both know you will do it
And we both know I will let you
Just quickly break my heart
You are the winner
You get everything
I am defenseless
Here you are again
Under my skin
Under my skin
I thought it had thickened
But with you It's razor thin
Those eyes pierce through
And I can't think
When you breath my air
My heart just sinks
Just do it quickly
Make it painless
No need to pick up any shards
We both know you will do it
And we both know I will let you
Just quickly break my heart
You are the winner
You get everything
I am defenseless
Here you are again
Under my skin
#confusion
#heartbroken
#rejection
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
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Now that the long night is over
Now that the long night is over
We had a long sleep
Now my Father
Brought the morning for us
First thing in the morning
Now it is time to say good morning to each other
It is finally a beautiful day
Outside
We just got up now
We are ready to enjoy this beautiful sunny day
That our Father gave to us
We are lucky to have a beautiful morning
With lots of sun
We are glad that there is no sign of rain
Also we are getting lots of vitamin d
This morning
We had a long sleep
Now my Father
Brought the morning for us
First thing in the morning
Now it is time to say good morning to each other
It is finally a beautiful day
Outside
We just got up now
We are ready to enjoy this beautiful sunny day
That our Father gave to us
We are lucky to have a beautiful morning
With lots of sun
We are glad that there is no sign of rain
Also we are getting lots of vitamin d
This morning
#confusion
#denial
#greed
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Lost Love
She was the best part of my day
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#love
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
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Backwoods Love
Loving you was harder then it seemed.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
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