Breakup by Top Critiquers Poems
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breakup by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
smackdownraven
Poem Published
3rd Mar 2020 6:33pm
3rd Mar 2020 6:33pm
I love you Lucifer style daddy and angel style daddy to specifically
dear daddy I love you
do you not know brenda is actually me?
without question do not marry another e instead of me
I will be cross with you if you do
I am stuck in an immortal prison
it's dark here but brenda has made me safety extra safety
because auroa is frightened
daddy I'm explaining to auroa daddy has safety goggles on
he think we love the devils
I am mad at you daddy
you just married the dragon
he looks like a cherbum
he is a bum who looks like a mutt to me
he didn't save the aborted babies
brenda...
do you not know brenda is actually me?
without question do not marry another e instead of me
I will be cross with you if you do
I am stuck in an immortal prison
it's dark here but brenda has made me safety extra safety
because auroa is frightened
daddy I'm explaining to auroa daddy has safety goggles on
he think we love the devils
I am mad at you daddy
you just married the dragon
he looks like a cherbum
he is a bum who looks like a mutt to me
he didn't save the aborted babies
brenda...
#love
#forgiveness
#breakup #FallingInLove
#breakup #FallingInLove
675 reads
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buddhakitty
Poem Published
25th Jan 2022 8:29am
25th Jan 2022 8:29am
the shadows of silence
what is built in
love and
beauty
is torn down in
rage and
fire
moments
come
moments
go
lovers
come
lovers
go
and at the end
of the
day
when the sun
is tried and
curses the
sky
and cars limp slowly
home through
snow and
ice
loss remains
a faithful
friend
and heartbreak wears a
mask so beautiful that
the shadows
of...
love and
beauty
is torn down in
rage and
fire
moments
come
moments
go
lovers
come
lovers
go
and at the end
of the
day
when the sun
is tried and
curses the
sky
and cars limp slowly
home through
snow and
ice
loss remains
a faithful
friend
and heartbreak wears a
mask so beautiful that
the shadows
of...
#breakup
#apathy
495 reads
12 Comments
MalcolmG
Poem Published
9th Dec 2024 5:16am
9th Dec 2024 5:16am
Cut Ya Out ..
All these years, I let you hurt me,
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
123 reads
1 Comment
Nevermindthegaps
Poem Published
14th Jun 2022 11:51am
14th Jun 2022 11:51am
Sunset Sinks Into The Crying Ocean
a globe of fire flickering out
last rays are bright but offer
no warmth
drinks glide down my throat
in an abundance of ice
the cold comfort of fermented
sanity
a light buzz as the sun cuts through
the glint of waves
rocks crunch beneath my toes
I sit beside the esky
reflecting
a choppy sea of things I should have said
regrets tight around my throat
a noose
a slow burn
that has seen the world turn
a new way to measure things that are gone
I should have...
last rays are bright but offer
no warmth
drinks glide down my throat
in an abundance of ice
the cold comfort of fermented
sanity
a light buzz as the sun cuts through
the glint of waves
rocks crunch beneath my toes
I sit beside the esky
reflecting
a choppy sea of things I should have said
regrets tight around my throat
a noose
a slow burn
that has seen the world turn
a new way to measure things that are gone
I should have...
#regret
#breakup
182 reads
0 Comments
Tallen
earth_empath
earth_empath
Poem Published
5th Apr 2023 4:39pm
5th Apr 2023 4:39pm
THEREWITHAL
5/30
THEREWITHAL
No logical idea WHY
i still love You . . .
Because you LEFT me
back when I sooooo
wanted to move
give up my
United States Citizenship
on the ledge, on the brink
of fruition ----
You called our union OFF
Was it something i said?
Your Bestie told me
i took too long
Never neither knew
nor realized
there was a timeline
dated with secret gossip
AND stupid innuendos!!
It has been 3 or 4 or 5 yrs
since you tore my heart
apart and i...
THEREWITHAL
No logical idea WHY
i still love You . . .
Because you LEFT me
back when I sooooo
wanted to move
give up my
United States Citizenship
on the ledge, on the brink
of fruition ----
You called our union OFF
Was it something i said?
Your Bestie told me
i took too long
Never neither knew
nor realized
there was a timeline
dated with secret gossip
AND stupid innuendos!!
It has been 3 or 4 or 5 yrs
since you tore my heart
apart and i...
#love
#heartbroken
#breakup #NaPoWriMo2023
#breakup #NaPoWriMo2023
279 reads
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nutbuster
D C
D C
Poem Published
19th Jun 2021 7:55pm
19th Jun 2021 7:55pm
The Vacation Chapter 2 part2
The Vacation Chapter 2 part2
"Thank you! Thank you! Tha-"
Kimberly! Enough! You're very welcome! I do not need to hear you say it anymore. I am glad the upgrade did not go to waste, Kyle said firmly but with a smile and the woman grinned back, nodding.
The remaining members of their group arrived, and Vivian got their attention.
Just leave your bikes with us but take your helmets with you. Your bags have been taken to your rooms. Check in with registration to get your keys.
Dinner tonight is in the chateau's dining room and is covered except...
"Thank you! Thank you! Tha-"
Kimberly! Enough! You're very welcome! I do not need to hear you say it anymore. I am glad the upgrade did not go to waste, Kyle said firmly but with a smile and the woman grinned back, nodding.
The remaining members of their group arrived, and Vivian got their attention.
Just leave your bikes with us but take your helmets with you. Your bags have been taken to your rooms. Check in with registration to get your keys.
Dinner tonight is in the chateau's dining room and is covered except...
#breakup
332 reads
3 Comments
goldenmyst
Poem Published
13th Mar 2024 10:03pm
13th Mar 2024 10:03pm
Lost Love Haiku from the Cafe
Lost Love Haiku from the Cafe
her lost voice
in the meadowlark song
outside his window
newspaper clipping
daguerreotype of sweetheart
married to a stranger
the crescent moon
of her once upon a time slipper
transits his tears
timbre
of her mezzo soprano
memory echo
golden opportunity
a locomotive barreling by
his freight train blues
jewelry box
holds the diamond ring
she once wore for him
her lost voice
in the meadowlark song
outside his window
newspaper clipping
daguerreotype of sweetheart
married to a stranger
the crescent moon
of her once upon a time slipper
transits his tears
timbre
of her mezzo soprano
memory echo
golden opportunity
a locomotive barreling by
his freight train blues
jewelry box
holds the diamond ring
she once wore for him
#love
#heartbroken
#breakup
#haiku
#memories
236 reads
2 Comments
DevilsChild
Poem Published
10th Feb 2021 7:52am
10th Feb 2021 7:52am
i WiLl FaLl!!!
#anger
#breakup
#conflict
428 reads
0 Comments
eroseternal
Tim Eros
Tim Eros
Poem Published
22nd May 2020 11:28pm
22nd May 2020 11:28pm
Virtually Yours
I am a man that has had many loves
each very unique and very personal
I tend to hold on to the way it was
once the love has touched my eternal soul
I'll never abandon that part of me
To the love within, I must be true
That place in my heart where you used to be
is now haunted by the ghost of you
I will live my life devoted to you
Though I realize you have already gone
I'm not saying my life is through
I'm just saying you were the one
No one else could ever take your place
and I will never...
each very unique and very personal
I tend to hold on to the way it was
once the love has touched my eternal soul
I'll never abandon that part of me
To the love within, I must be true
That place in my heart where you used to be
is now haunted by the ghost of you
I will live my life devoted to you
Though I realize you have already gone
I'm not saying my life is through
I'm just saying you were the one
No one else could ever take your place
and I will never...
#love
#breakup
490 reads
3 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
25th Sep 2024 11:12am
25th Sep 2024 11:12am
Just Like Last Summer
As your shadow fades
from my sight, I could only
remember you to
be smiling and playing that
guitar just like last summer.
from my sight, I could only
remember you to
be smiling and playing that
guitar just like last summer.
#breakup
#dialogue
#fiction
#lover
#tanka
164 reads
0 Comments
a_methyste
hlightdroid
hlightdroid
Poem Published
9th Jun 2024 8:39pm
9th Jun 2024 8:39pm
The mosquito from hell
The mosquito from hell
Is buzzing in my room
Metalic
With a metalic scratch
I try to catch it but it is fast
It has put me down
Is buzzing in my room
Metalic
With a metalic scratch
I try to catch it but it is fast
It has put me down
#breakup
#conflict
#love
151 reads
2 Comments
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