Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
5w3374ng3r
Poem Published
Today 2:25am
Today 2:25am
Saturday night.
Saturday night, you seemed sincere to me,
I want a child from you, you said.
Woman at eighteen, but you don't know that at twenty,
I cannot understand that.
But don't you know that this is the world of adults,
And your love lasts one night,
And you will see that you will become a celebrity,
Even without me looking at you.
Saturday night, don't turn up the stereo,
I want to listen to you, let the disco,
Woman at eighteen, I was at least twenty,
I'd be crazy about you.
But don't you know that just one winter is...
I want a child from you, you said.
Woman at eighteen, but you don't know that at twenty,
I cannot understand that.
But don't you know that this is the world of adults,
And your love lasts one night,
And you will see that you will become a celebrity,
Even without me looking at you.
Saturday night, don't turn up the stereo,
I want to listen to you, let the disco,
Woman at eighteen, I was at least twenty,
I'd be crazy about you.
But don't you know that just one winter is...
#love
#heartbroken
#romantic #breakup
#romantic #breakup
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Abracadabra
Poem Published
25th Sep 2021 7:42am
25th Sep 2021 7:42am
Unraveling
He left you
she left you
he left you
she left you
he left you
she left you
You left him
she left her
she left her
he left him
and the world
never
noticed
a thing
She's back with him
he's back with her
she's back with him
he's back with her
she's back with him
she's back with her
she's back with her
he's back with him
listen how the lovebirds
sing
and when everyone's
connected
the world's
one big ball
of string
she left you
he left you
she left you
he left you
she left you
You left him
she left her
she left her
he left him
and the world
never
noticed
a thing
She's back with him
he's back with her
she's back with him
he's back with her
she's back with him
she's back with her
she's back with her
he's back with him
listen how the lovebirds
sing
and when everyone's
connected
the world's
one big ball
of string
#relationships
#breakup
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5w3374ng3r
Poem Published
24th Sep 2021 5:02am
24th Sep 2021 5:02am
Farewell, girl.
Money dreams,
Beverly Hills,
Prince of Bel Air,
I was a little kid,
Be in heaven, be here.
Sorrow memories,
Puor l'amour, pour la vie,
Pray for us, ave mari,
Curse for us, angel in tears.
Sweet wilted Rosenrot.
And ask me if, if I don't know who you are.
Is this our love? Is it a farewell? I wish not.
Don't believe me if, if I say I love you, I would lie.
Yes, I love another one,
Yes, I love another girl,
Yes, I love another she.
I do love her, yes, I do love another she.
I’m her...
Beverly Hills,
Prince of Bel Air,
I was a little kid,
Be in heaven, be here.
Sorrow memories,
Puor l'amour, pour la vie,
Pray for us, ave mari,
Curse for us, angel in tears.
Sweet wilted Rosenrot.
And ask me if, if I don't know who you are.
Is this our love? Is it a farewell? I wish not.
Don't believe me if, if I say I love you, I would lie.
Yes, I love another one,
Yes, I love another girl,
Yes, I love another she.
I do love her, yes, I do love another she.
I’m her...
#love
#relationships
#breakup
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PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
24th Sep 2021 1:00am
24th Sep 2021 1:00am
Infidelity
Inspired by Georgia
How do you expect me to feel about your infidelity?
I saw you last night with a worthless young man.
He and you were standing behind the old house.
You hugged him as if you were hugging a teddy bear.
And you kissed him like lovers kiss in a romantic movie.
Even though I’ve felt your embrace over the years,
You hugged him tighter than you’ve ever hugged me.
I’ve experienced the pleasure of your sweet lips,
But you’ve never kissed me the way you kissed him.
Why did you deceive me with another man, Georgia?
...
How do you expect me to feel about your infidelity?
I saw you last night with a worthless young man.
He and you were standing behind the old house.
You hugged him as if you were hugging a teddy bear.
And you kissed him like lovers kiss in a romantic movie.
Even though I’ve felt your embrace over the years,
You hugged him tighter than you’ve ever hugged me.
I’ve experienced the pleasure of your sweet lips,
But you’ve never kissed me the way you kissed him.
Why did you deceive me with another man, Georgia?
...
#love
#relationships
#breakup
#betrayal
#passion
29 reads
6 Comments
Baldwin
Poem Published
21st Sep 2021 3:32pm
21st Sep 2021 3:32pm
Healing
I am measuring today
against my memory of several yesterdays
how long the intervals are becoming now
between the rough invasions of my day
by thoughts of you.
A minute, now, or maybe less,
but still, there is an increase in the length of them.
And dreams at night are fewer, too.
The ghost grows thin.
And in the story and the plot line of the healing of the heart
that’s progress, yes?
against my memory of several yesterdays
how long the intervals are becoming now
between the rough invasions of my day
by thoughts of you.
A minute, now, or maybe less,
but still, there is an increase in the length of them.
And dreams at night are fewer, too.
The ghost grows thin.
And in the story and the plot line of the healing of the heart
that’s progress, yes?
#breakup
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Fallen_Angel_194
Angel.
Angel.
Poem Published
20th Sep 2021 2:21am
20th Sep 2021 2:21am
Fate
Watching the love seep its way out of your parents bones is something I would not wish on anyone; enemy or not.
It is like fate himself has swooped down to pick at the inside of my chest, making the cracks in my lungs grow bigger and bigger.
I think that watching them slowly begin to hate one another is one of the worst pains that i have ever felt.
These are the same two people who once had a water gun fight inside of the house because of the thundering roaring rain outside, the same people who stayed up all night putting a toy together that now sits in the back of our...
It is like fate himself has swooped down to pick at the inside of my chest, making the cracks in my lungs grow bigger and bigger.
I think that watching them slowly begin to hate one another is one of the worst pains that i have ever felt.
These are the same two people who once had a water gun fight inside of the house because of the thundering roaring rain outside, the same people who stayed up all night putting a toy together that now sits in the back of our...
#breakup
#separation
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Fallen_Angel_194
Angel.
Angel.
Poem Published
19th Sep 2021 7:23am
19th Sep 2021 7:23am
Salt and Sugar
I would’ve done damn near anything for you when the love between us still lived it’s way inside of my bones.
But things are all so different now,
And I am so much more tired, so broken.
Do not mistake that salt on the inside of your tongue for my sugar, because you are no longer entitled to such things.
I, was not the one who set our world ablaze and watched it be consumed in scorched fiery flames.
You chose to leave me, and I make no excuses for how I chose to mend the broken bones that you smashed.
I think that I will always love you, who...
But things are all so different now,
And I am so much more tired, so broken.
Do not mistake that salt on the inside of your tongue for my sugar, because you are no longer entitled to such things.
I, was not the one who set our world ablaze and watched it be consumed in scorched fiery flames.
You chose to leave me, and I make no excuses for how I chose to mend the broken bones that you smashed.
I think that I will always love you, who...
#breakup
#manipulation
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AverageJoe
Poem Published
18th Sep 2021 10:29pm
18th Sep 2021 10:29pm
Just a Dot on The Page
I’ve waited for any word
Just a dot on a page
But all I get is the ticking of the clock
And its 4 am on a sleepless night of the soul
And I’m tired of being awake and alone
But that’s nothing compared to the tired of hurting –
The pain that ebbs and flows
Those times when I’m almost alright
And those times when everything stops
And I tear up like I’ve been gut punched
And those are the highs and the lows
Adrift on a sea of emptiness
And I don’t know how to find myself
I’m meaningless to the one who gave everything meaning ...
Just a dot on a page
But all I get is the ticking of the clock
And its 4 am on a sleepless night of the soul
And I’m tired of being awake and alone
But that’s nothing compared to the tired of hurting –
The pain that ebbs and flows
Those times when I’m almost alright
And those times when everything stops
And I tear up like I’ve been gut punched
And those are the highs and the lows
Adrift on a sea of emptiness
And I don’t know how to find myself
I’m meaningless to the one who gave everything meaning ...
#love
#breakup
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11 Comments
Scorpio
Poem Published
16th Sep 2021 2:54pm
16th Sep 2021 2:54pm
Poetess
#love
#breakup
#sex
#rhyming
#WritingPoetry
124 reads
3 Comments
Scorpio
Poem Published
15th Sep 2021 2:28pm
15th Sep 2021 2:28pm
Moon Plea
I woke this morning and you were gone
Went to say hello and then it dawned
I can't believe you won't be there anymore
I've lost the only thing I was living for
The minutes are hours and the hours days
Not even a day and I'm half crazed
What in the Hell am I going to do
Go through the rest of my life missing you
But
Maybe you'll finally realize I was right
And you were the one who started the fight
Because I'm not ready yet to concede it
You could have given me what I needed
So if you're out there and reading this ...
Went to say hello and then it dawned
I can't believe you won't be there anymore
I've lost the only thing I was living for
The minutes are hours and the hours days
Not even a day and I'm half crazed
What in the Hell am I going to do
Go through the rest of my life missing you
But
Maybe you'll finally realize I was right
And you were the one who started the fight
Because I'm not ready yet to concede it
You could have given me what I needed
So if you're out there and reading this ...
#love
#forgiveness
#heartbroken
#breakup
#rhyming
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AverageJoe
Poem Published
15th Sep 2021 00:08am
15th Sep 2021 00:08am
It Haunts Me
I awoke last night
As on so many other nights
To the sound of your voice
Calling my name
But when I’d looked
You'd left neither word nor trace
And whether in hope or wish or dream
I heard the sound of my name
In the sound of your voice
And it haunts me
As on so many other nights
To the sound of your voice
Calling my name
But when I’d looked
You'd left neither word nor trace
And whether in hope or wish or dream
I heard the sound of my name
In the sound of your voice
And it haunts me
#sadness
#love
#breakup
64 reads
1 Comment
MotDi
Poem Published
13th Sep 2021 4:43am
13th Sep 2021 4:43am
Dear Douchebag
#anger
#breakup
#BDSM
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DU Poetry : Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
