Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
20th Dec 2024 6:51am
20th Dec 2024 6:51am
Backwoods Love
Loving you was harder then it seemed.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
Up at night, due to broken dreams.
Puppet Master, you loved pulling strings.
When all you had to do was just believe.
We had a future, I handed you the keys.
Country living, just like you asked to be.
I was your king, and you were my queen.
But that Wile E Coyote, would always get in between.
On my knees, begging for you to see.
But you and God had other plans unfortunately.
#breakup
#conflict
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
19th Dec 2024 8:00pm
19th Dec 2024 8:00pm
I don't even want to be friends
Poor soul
So confused
She just talks shit, through her mouth
She claims she knows me
But she knows shit
Too many words and nothing said
Stones thrown to the sky
In a way that they'll never return
A clear mind is what I need
To see a fucked up past
To see a dreadful future
This relationship is toxic
I'm done...No more!
I'm so sick of you...It's Over!
So confused
She just talks shit, through her mouth
She claims she knows me
But she knows shit
Too many words and nothing said
Stones thrown to the sky
In a way that they'll never return
A clear mind is what I need
To see a fucked up past
To see a dreadful future
This relationship is toxic
I'm done...No more!
I'm so sick of you...It's Over!
#breakup
#lies
#MovingOn
#relationships
#secrets
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8 Comments
Ashley_M_Hardy
Poem Published
18th Dec 2024 3:11pm
18th Dec 2024 3:11pm
Lovesick Introverted Poets Society (LIPS)
This one is for all of y'all heart broken mutha fuckas
That come around frequently and destroy my peace with y'all sappy ass poems
I come outside to unwind from the daily grind
But then I find y'all beating yourselves down
Lighten up! Cause the people you hold close to you, will lie because love is twisted
It's supposed to hurt
And anybody who ever told you differently, is full of shit
Find new inspiration
Emotional asses
How you sound asking somebody to treat you right?
Now, your content belongs to you, no filter
But I was...
That come around frequently and destroy my peace with y'all sappy ass poems
I come outside to unwind from the daily grind
But then I find y'all beating yourselves down
Lighten up! Cause the people you hold close to you, will lie because love is twisted
It's supposed to hurt
And anybody who ever told you differently, is full of shit
Find new inspiration
Emotional asses
How you sound asking somebody to treat you right?
Now, your content belongs to you, no filter
But I was...
#breakup
#love
#MovingOn
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TimWombles
Poem Published
15th Dec 2024 12:29pm
15th Dec 2024 12:29pm
Sad Memories
We had a good run
We made it a good while
Then things just sorta fell apart
You know, we had our share of trials
No matter how we tried to get our problems resolved
We had to watch as all we had just sort of dissolved
When I look at the past
Wondering if it's possible to make love last
I gotta say no thank you please
Cause I got nothing left but sad memories
Nothing Left but sad memories
Sometimes memories hurt, sometimes they cause me pain
But then sometimes they make me want to love again
Sometimes I think...
We made it a good while
Then things just sorta fell apart
You know, we had our share of trials
No matter how we tried to get our problems resolved
We had to watch as all we had just sort of dissolved
When I look at the past
Wondering if it's possible to make love last
I gotta say no thank you please
Cause I got nothing left but sad memories
Nothing Left but sad memories
Sometimes memories hurt, sometimes they cause me pain
But then sometimes they make me want to love again
Sometimes I think...
#breakup
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Lyrically_Inclined
Poem Published
13th Dec 2024 2:35pm
13th Dec 2024 2:35pm
My Therapist
Analyzing me
with her third degree
From Woman’s Intuition University
(I don’t even think that’s an accredited institution, nor should be! 🤔)
All this chit chatter
but my words don’t matter
Psychosis computing all of her Data
She said she doesn’t understand me
She thinks she knows the real me
She knows ‘My truth’
Was carefully designed to Exonerate me
Refusing to accept my not guilty plea
She condemns me
No mercy
Not what I thought this was supposed to be! ...
with her third degree
From Woman’s Intuition University
(I don’t even think that’s an accredited institution, nor should be! 🤔)
All this chit chatter
but my words don’t matter
Psychosis computing all of her Data
She said she doesn’t understand me
She thinks she knows the real me
She knows ‘My truth’
Was carefully designed to Exonerate me
Refusing to accept my not guilty plea
She condemns me
No mercy
Not what I thought this was supposed to be! ...
#anger
#breakup
#deception
#funny
#revenge
61 reads
9 Comments
Poetblue
Poeblue
Poeblue
Poem Published
13th Dec 2024 12:42pm
13th Dec 2024 12:42pm
Fasting from Your Love
Fasting from your love—
The addiction that consumes my mind,
A fire that burns, leaving reason behind.
I’m desperate to purge you from my soul,
But our bond runs deeper, beyond control.
Our souls are bound, down to the nucleus,
A connection so pure, so ruinous.
To break us apart would shatter the skies,
An atomic ripple where the universe cries.
I’m a prisoner of my own fragile mind,
Padded walls meant to protect, yet confined.
But even here, the stabs still find my heart,
As darkness whispers, tearing me apart.
...
The addiction that consumes my mind,
A fire that burns, leaving reason behind.
I’m desperate to purge you from my soul,
But our bond runs deeper, beyond control.
Our souls are bound, down to the nucleus,
A connection so pure, so ruinous.
To break us apart would shatter the skies,
An atomic ripple where the universe cries.
I’m a prisoner of my own fragile mind,
Padded walls meant to protect, yet confined.
But even here, the stabs still find my heart,
As darkness whispers, tearing me apart.
...
#breakup
#sadness
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
13th Dec 2024 11:01am
13th Dec 2024 11:01am
Love...Forgotten
Bitterness
Your life in bitterness
Hatred
Hate consumes your every emotion
Your soul is engulfed with blackness
Putting your guilt upon others
Hate takes over your life
Hate takes over your mind
You feel your life slip away
When you live your life in hate
You seal your destiny
You've sealed your fate
Love... forgotten
Jealousy
Don't take your revenge against me
Pride
Your pride builds up inside
I've got no time for your ignorance
You live in your own complacency
You've made your...
Your life in bitterness
Hatred
Hate consumes your every emotion
Your soul is engulfed with blackness
Putting your guilt upon others
Hate takes over your life
Hate takes over your mind
You feel your life slip away
When you live your life in hate
You seal your destiny
You've sealed your fate
Love... forgotten
Jealousy
Don't take your revenge against me
Pride
Your pride builds up inside
I've got no time for your ignorance
You live in your own complacency
You've made your...
#breakup
#emptiness
#love
#sadness
#vulnerability
61 reads
8 Comments
Intepta
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 7:12pm
11th Dec 2024 7:12pm
what do you do when everything is grey
For today I've cried enough
And for tomorrow there's some cheese in the fridge
The tarot card I've drawn
Tells me to accept my situation and stop resisting
Only then I would see the solution
It was the hanged
The doctor I've fallen in love with is playing banjo
There's twelve other people around him playing the fiddle, bass, guitar and some more banjo
I'm holding onto my beer and two or three months ago he introduced himself with "Shaun, like the sheep"
and that's exactly how their music sounds like
I wish I felt the way...
And for tomorrow there's some cheese in the fridge
The tarot card I've drawn
Tells me to accept my situation and stop resisting
Only then I would see the solution
It was the hanged
The doctor I've fallen in love with is playing banjo
There's twelve other people around him playing the fiddle, bass, guitar and some more banjo
I'm holding onto my beer and two or three months ago he introduced himself with "Shaun, like the sheep"
and that's exactly how their music sounds like
I wish I felt the way...
#breakup
#conflict
#ForbiddenLove
74 reads
1 Comment
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 12:57pm
11th Dec 2024 12:57pm
Mixing It Up
#abuse
#breakup
#sex
142 reads
7 Comments
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 6:13am
11th Dec 2024 6:13am
Technical KnockOut
I know it's been a minute since I've placed a call.
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
#separation
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AprylNovember
A.R.M.
A.R.M.
Poem Published
11th Dec 2024 00:13am
11th Dec 2024 00:13am
Saves
The crazy you installed.
In my heart of gold.
Lives there today.
And why I can not stay.
This love goes the distance.
So lives the dissonance.
My heart beats your name.
Though the tune has changed.
The only never I can promise.
This forever grants me prowess.
Is the absence from your eyes.
Disappeared from your sight.
Murder, even when deserved.
Will send me straight to hell.
My love stands as your preserve.
Postponing your death knell.
A.R.M.
In my heart of gold.
Lives there today.
And why I can not stay.
This love goes the distance.
So lives the dissonance.
My heart beats your name.
Though the tune has changed.
The only never I can promise.
This forever grants me prowess.
Is the absence from your eyes.
Disappeared from your sight.
Murder, even when deserved.
Will send me straight to hell.
My love stands as your preserve.
Postponing your death knell.
A.R.M.
#breakup
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1 Comment
MalcolmG
Poem Published
9th Dec 2024 5:16am
9th Dec 2024 5:16am
Cut Ya Out ..
All these years, I let you hurt me,
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
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1 Comment
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