Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
MasterG
Poem Published
Today 2:41am
Today 2:41am
Last word
As I take pen in hand
To write but one final verse
I stop to read your text
Examine your photos
The love begins to poor
From my eyes as rain
My hands begin to shake
Knowing this is but a farewell
It becomes hard to breathe
Catching my breath
Becoming impossible to breathe
Empty time will fill the void
As you slip thru my hands
Putting down the pen
Unable to write
I see now that was once unclear
You were never mine
To have and to hold
Till death do us part
It was but a dream
Made by the...
To write but one final verse
I stop to read your text
Examine your photos
The love begins to poor
From my eyes as rain
My hands begin to shake
Knowing this is but a farewell
It becomes hard to breathe
Catching my breath
Becoming impossible to breathe
Empty time will fill the void
As you slip thru my hands
Putting down the pen
Unable to write
I see now that was once unclear
You were never mine
To have and to hold
Till death do us part
It was but a dream
Made by the...
#breakup
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moon_bather
Poem Published
22nd Jan 2025 3:51am
22nd Jan 2025 3:51am
Regurgitated Rumination
Remember that time
When we were happy?
The noise of the world
Could not stop us
Though they slapped us
With desperate warnings
We wrote them off
As jealous nothings
Together we broke
Molds and habits
At the end of the day
We did not give two shits
Discarded their sayings
Those stark warnings
Discounting every word
to live wholeheartedly
We ignored wisdom
Gave into delirium
To live our life of beauty
To live in hedonism
When we were happy?
The noise of the world
Could not stop us
Though they slapped us
With desperate warnings
We wrote them off
As jealous nothings
Together we broke
Molds and habits
At the end of the day
We did not give two shits
Discarded their sayings
Those stark warnings
Discounting every word
to live wholeheartedly
We ignored wisdom
Gave into delirium
To live our life of beauty
To live in hedonism
#breakup
#memories
#misunderstood
#nostalgia
#separation
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Damselinhandcuffs
Poem Published
22nd Jan 2025 2:30am
22nd Jan 2025 2:30am
Bug
I used your pet name last night.
It was an accident.
It slipped out of the lonely gap of my teeth
as I slipped him out of me.
It came searching for you like the pest that you are.
I called this stranger your pet name and cried,
It was an accident.
How it still pains me
that you turned out to be a flea only for her.
The bird woman
The one who could leave and still be so present.
So controlling in absence.
But my dear,
you are a bug.
A plague that took years from...
It was an accident.
It slipped out of the lonely gap of my teeth
as I slipped him out of me.
It came searching for you like the pest that you are.
I called this stranger your pet name and cried,
It was an accident.
How it still pains me
that you turned out to be a flea only for her.
The bird woman
The one who could leave and still be so present.
So controlling in absence.
But my dear,
you are a bug.
A plague that took years from...
#breakup
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#rejection
#UnrequitedLove
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sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 7:07am
17th Jan 2025 7:07am
Different Now
I'm starting to see things a little different now.
The older I get, the more difficult it gets, to try to forget, about the thing that you did.
I'm like, fucking wow.
I use to think that you were the one, but this is no longer what I would call fun.
I see that this ain't what I thought that was love.
I wish that I could, but I can't.
I wish that you would, but you ain't.
The time that we wasted is gone.
There's no need to keep this lie going on.
The beat has done faded out of this song.
Walking away, distance is gained with each step that we...
The older I get, the more difficult it gets, to try to forget, about the thing that you did.
I'm like, fucking wow.
I use to think that you were the one, but this is no longer what I would call fun.
I see that this ain't what I thought that was love.
I wish that I could, but I can't.
I wish that you would, but you ain't.
The time that we wasted is gone.
There's no need to keep this lie going on.
The beat has done faded out of this song.
Walking away, distance is gained with each step that we...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love #relationships
#love #relationships
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Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 4:04pm
12th Jan 2025 4:04pm
Shattered Love
You told me that you loved me...
...you gave me everything...
...so much - that it was too much!
I clutched the material things...
...wonderful memories...
...unbelievable feelings...
and the years of safety - so tightly!
I wanted it to be real.
But it was unbelievable...
...it wasn't what I had ever had...
...or ever known - I hesitated!
I tried to return feelings...
...but I hurt us both -
trying too hard to hold on to me...
and be what you deserved.
The weight of my past...
...piled too...
...you gave me everything...
...so much - that it was too much!
I clutched the material things...
...wonderful memories...
...unbelievable feelings...
and the years of safety - so tightly!
I wanted it to be real.
But it was unbelievable...
...it wasn't what I had ever had...
...or ever known - I hesitated!
I tried to return feelings...
...but I hurt us both -
trying too hard to hold on to me...
and be what you deserved.
The weight of my past...
...piled too...
#breakup
#love
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sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 9:30am
12th Jan 2025 9:30am
Love Script
The pen ran dry, as all love seems.
The ink no longer pours, as it use to bleed.
Lead goes dull, and erasers fade.
But the words themselves, still cut like blades.
Handwritten or typed, they all have pain.
Some worse then others, some all the same.
The ink no longer pours, as it use to bleed.
Lead goes dull, and erasers fade.
But the words themselves, still cut like blades.
Handwritten or typed, they all have pain.
Some worse then others, some all the same.
#breakup
#heartbroken
#ILoveYou
#love
#relationships
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Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 7:32am
12th Jan 2025 7:32am
Cotton candy panties girl...
Sunlight shimmers through her hair!
She hasn't got a single fuck...ing care.
I follow her...every...where...
cause I'm her Stalker!
Can I lure her in my van?
I'll bet you puppies that I can!
I've always been her number...one...fan...
cause I'm her Stalker!
Cotton candy panties girl...
you ain't fooling anyone...
you're...a...nasty little...hater!
I will make you understand...
We all have feelings too...except you...
EXCEPT YOU! EXCEPT YOU!
I was normal once. I did try...
got my feelings...
She hasn't got a single fuck...ing care.
I follow her...every...where...
cause I'm her Stalker!
Can I lure her in my van?
I'll bet you puppies that I can!
I've always been her number...one...fan...
cause I'm her Stalker!
Cotton candy panties girl...
you ain't fooling anyone...
you're...a...nasty little...hater!
I will make you understand...
We all have feelings too...except you...
EXCEPT YOU! EXCEPT YOU!
I was normal once. I did try...
got my feelings...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
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AverageJoe
Poem Published
5th Jan 2025 10:48pm
5th Jan 2025 10:48pm
Levels and Layers
I watched another sun come up
And another sun has set
As shadows lengthen into the night
But nights no darker than the day
And my life
Both good and bad
Lies wasted in the stain
The feeling of lost
Which cradles me now in emptiness
And for what
For saying I wanted to be kissed as if this was our last breath
For wanting to be part of us
And not a me and you
For wanting warmth and not just a body
Lying beside me in the bed
Work it out!
Work it out?!?
How many years have I slept...
And another sun has set
As shadows lengthen into the night
But nights no darker than the day
And my life
Both good and bad
Lies wasted in the stain
The feeling of lost
Which cradles me now in emptiness
And for what
For saying I wanted to be kissed as if this was our last breath
For wanting to be part of us
And not a me and you
For wanting warmth and not just a body
Lying beside me in the bed
Work it out!
Work it out?!?
How many years have I slept...
#love
#breakup
138 reads
11 Comments
sayia
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 11:27am
3rd Jan 2025 11:27am
what about us
I hated you for the longest time,
Believed someday I'd leave you behind.
I cried, I screamed, I begged the sky,
“Tell me what I did, why?”
For months, the tears refused to cease,
Pain demanded but granted no release.
Then, one day, I felt something shift,
No more yearning, just a hollow rift.
I’m not numb; I still feel pain,
Anger lingers, sharp as rain.
But thoughts of you bring only cold,
A hollow ache where love once told.
I craved your touch, now it makes me ill,
The thought of you...
Believed someday I'd leave you behind.
I cried, I screamed, I begged the sky,
“Tell me what I did, why?”
For months, the tears refused to cease,
Pain demanded but granted no release.
Then, one day, I felt something shift,
No more yearning, just a hollow rift.
I’m not numb; I still feel pain,
Anger lingers, sharp as rain.
But thoughts of you bring only cold,
A hollow ache where love once told.
I craved your touch, now it makes me ill,
The thought of you...
#anxiety
#breakup
#depression #heartbroken
#depression #heartbroken
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NP_NP
Poem Published
2nd Jan 2025 3:58pm
2nd Jan 2025 3:58pm
The Boys First Heartbreak
I ask him, "Was she worth it?"
He exhales, slow and deliberate.
"She was the tweak to my addict,
the dead eyes you see in the lost.
She was dark, parasitic to my heart.
She wanted to crawl inside my skin
just to feel my warmth.
She was fucking everything."
"She sounds terrible," I respond.
He takes the longest drag of his cigarette,
smoke curling like his thoughts.
"Nah," he says,
"she was comfortable in the dark.
It’s there she created art.
Sure, she nearly swallowed my...
He exhales, slow and deliberate.
"She was the tweak to my addict,
the dead eyes you see in the lost.
She was dark, parasitic to my heart.
She wanted to crawl inside my skin
just to feel my warmth.
She was fucking everything."
"She sounds terrible," I respond.
He takes the longest drag of his cigarette,
smoke curling like his thoughts.
"Nah," he says,
"she was comfortable in the dark.
It’s there she created art.
Sure, she nearly swallowed my...
#breakup
#dark
#depression
#heartbroken
#love
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gothicsurrealism
Daniel Long
Daniel Long
Poem Published
1st Jan 2025 11:28pm
1st Jan 2025 11:28pm
From Lust To Frost
From lust to frost,
romance to regret,
from fall to winter.
Our passions have wintered.
Yielding to loneliness -
this season of surrender!
Shared wintry breaths chilled our spirits.
Our fleeting emotions wintering our love.
Our passing trusts, now only wintery words.
This crestfallen experience with you!
We wilted, then can the silence of tears
which froze as visible memories on our cheeks.
romance to regret,
from fall to winter.
Our passions have wintered.
Yielding to loneliness -
this season of surrender!
Shared wintry breaths chilled our spirits.
Our fleeting emotions wintering our love.
Our passing trusts, now only wintery words.
This crestfallen experience with you!
We wilted, then can the silence of tears
which froze as visible memories on our cheeks.
#breakup
#depression
#love
#MentalHealth
#rejection
117 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
31st Dec 2024 11:05am
31st Dec 2024 11:05am
You always will be
You know I can't stop thinking about you
For the last three nights I've been dreaming about you
It's always the same dream, you don't want me
This morning I woke up and I swore it was real
I lay there for a while and thought about all the things that I had to do in the dream
How fucked up it was and it took me that long to figure out it was a dream
I thought I had it beat
I thought I had you out of my head for good
I must have slid back because now you're all I think about
I was so proud of myself
I was actually healing
But now I'm back...
For the last three nights I've been dreaming about you
It's always the same dream, you don't want me
This morning I woke up and I swore it was real
I lay there for a while and thought about all the things that I had to do in the dream
How fucked up it was and it took me that long to figure out it was a dream
I thought I had it beat
I thought I had you out of my head for good
I must have slid back because now you're all I think about
I was so proud of myself
I was actually healing
But now I'm back...
#breakup
#deception
#dreams
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
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