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Know Ye Not
Know ye not from whence I come?
That deep dark pit that beckons some?
Those within be blind and numb.
Touch not the gate lest ye succumb.
Know ye not my purpose here?
My dark intentions grow severe.
The ending of our game is near.
Those of your blood I bathe in fear.
Know ye not your master's call?
The bargain struck brings the fall.
A deal is a deal after all,
and I have come to reap it all.
Know ye not the smoke ye see?
Tis your burning family tree.
And when ye beg a drink of me,
your mother's tears will i give ye.
That deep dark pit that beckons some?
Those within be blind and numb.
Touch not the gate lest ye succumb.
Know ye not my purpose here?
My dark intentions grow severe.
The ending of our game is near.
Those of your blood I bathe in fear.
Know ye not your master's call?
The bargain struck brings the fall.
A deal is a deal after all,
and I have come to reap it all.
Know ye not the smoke ye see?
Tis your burning family tree.
And when ye beg a drink of me,
your mother's tears will i give ye.
Written by
saint_gw
(Gregory)
Published 29th Jan 2013
| Edited 12th Nov 2015
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Re: Know Ye Not
29th Jan 2013 4:44am
Re: Know Ye Not
29th Jan 2013 4:40pm
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29th Jan 2013 5:01pm
Re: Know Ye Not
29th Jan 2013 6:16pm
re: Re: Know Ye Not
30th Jan 2013 2:14am
Thank you, I counted for this one. Emphasis has to be just right to get the right flow. I'm glad you found the count. Thanks again. 3 of the four verses have a pattern that i thought was neat to try. The last 3 letters will match in pairs. But only in 3 verses, 3 letters 3 verses. I don't know , I was playing with pattern to make it more challenging.
re: re: Re: Know Ye Not
22nd Apr 2013 3:04am
I do that too. Not specifically THAT, but trying new things just to make it more difficult.
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Re: Know Ye Not
11th Feb 2013 11:56pm
This had a great flow..sing song almost ..taunting even..but I think thats what you were going for. Much enjoyed the 3rd verse.
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Re: Know Ye Not
12th Feb 2013 00:14am
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Re: Know Ye Not
22nd Apr 2013 3:07am
I dunno about anyone else, but I PERSONALLY feel that the olde English kinda takes away from the darkness,that's probably just me, though. It was really good nonetheless.
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Re: Know Ye Not
25th Aug 2013 7:35pm
Understood. I just heard it in my head that way. I had no choice but to write it as it was. Thank you for your critique.
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Re. Know Ye Not
24th Oct 2020 00:02am
Thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I liked the older English style of language. It adds to the darkness of it. The rhyme scheme is divine.
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27th Nov 2020 4:57am