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Blowing Big Brother
I walked down the hall to the bathroom
Wearing nothing but pink lace lingerie
The door was ajar and the light was on
I peaked inside and could not look away
He looked in the mirror at what he just shaved
His dick was in hand and his hair on the floor
He looked up at me and then down at my chest
I stared at his dick and then closed the door
I should have felt guilty but began to get wet
My body was tight at just sixteen years old
I stood outside the door while debating myself
My lust beat my guilt and I chose to be bold
I opened the door, he was stroking it fast
His dick was gigantic, I wanted a taste
I offered to help and he said not a word
So I got on my knees looking up at his face
I stroked his big dick and I licked his shaved balls
A blow job I’d give though I wanted to fuck
Any minute now, my parents could arrive
But I opened up wide and I started to suck
He was already primed so it didn’t take long
My pussy was wet and my panties were soaked
He blasted his cum and he filled up my mouth
His load was so large that I damn near choked
We didn’t say a word but both of us laughed
He kissed my cheek and he left the room
I could still taste his dick as reality hit
I couldn’t believe we came from the same womb
Wearing nothing but pink lace lingerie
The door was ajar and the light was on
I peaked inside and could not look away
He looked in the mirror at what he just shaved
His dick was in hand and his hair on the floor
He looked up at me and then down at my chest
I stared at his dick and then closed the door
I should have felt guilty but began to get wet
My body was tight at just sixteen years old
I stood outside the door while debating myself
My lust beat my guilt and I chose to be bold
I opened the door, he was stroking it fast
His dick was gigantic, I wanted a taste
I offered to help and he said not a word
So I got on my knees looking up at his face
I stroked his big dick and I licked his shaved balls
A blow job I’d give though I wanted to fuck
Any minute now, my parents could arrive
But I opened up wide and I started to suck
He was already primed so it didn’t take long
My pussy was wet and my panties were soaked
He blasted his cum and he filled up my mouth
His load was so large that I damn near choked
We didn’t say a word but both of us laughed
He kissed my cheek and he left the room
I could still taste his dick as reality hit
I couldn’t believe we came from the same womb
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Re: Blowing Big Brother
13th Oct 2012 9:06am
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13th Oct 2012 9:20am
Re: Blowing Big Brother
13th Oct 2012 10:09pm
Well , wonder what would have happend if the parents walked in ..... ORGEY!!!
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13th Oct 2012 11:52pm
Re: Blowing Big Brother
14th Oct 2012 1:36pm
The "Big Brother" part of the title had me thinking of both the book and the tv show! I think for many that family element is something that the mind waxes over even if we wouldn't dare act in real life. Of course the bigger one is pinning over a friend's relative.
Welcome to DU.
Welcome to DU.
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
15th Oct 2012 7:28am
Most wouldn't act on it but some of us would. Thanks for the comment Jazz.
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15th Oct 2012 7:30am
Thank you for your comments Amanecio. "I could still taste his dick as reality hit" was a fun line. I love that you love my naughtiness!
Re: Blowing Big Brother
14th Oct 2012 5:24pm
There is something remarkably disturbing about a 1,2 rhyme scheme, which is most common amidst nursery rhyme and bad song writing, and incest. This together... Hmmm. I wouldn't describe it as erotic. Apart from the title and the last line its just another blowjob.
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Re: Blowing Big Brother
15th Oct 2012 7:33am
It is never just another blow job when I'm giving it! Thank you for your comments Panama.
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Anonymous
15th Oct 2012 5:02pm
LOL!!! No, I dare think it's never "just another" with anything you do! ; ) Keep on writing!!!
tornado
tornado
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
16th Oct 2012 10:53am
Re: Blowing Big Brother
16th Oct 2012 2:06am
I read both your poems and I am just knocked out. They flow like pure magic as storytelling and as poetry. IMHO.
I would definitely buy your book of poems on any topic.
Thanks,
Gurudev (Grant)
I would definitely buy your book of poems on any topic.
Thanks,
Gurudev (Grant)
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
16th Oct 2012 10:54am
I'll be sure to let you know if I ever write a book. Thank you so much Gurudev. That's a wonderful compliment!
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17th Oct 2012 7:58am
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20th Oct 2012 11:13pm
Oh goodness miss Holly.. I think I just came while re reading the last few lines. This is the most beautiful lullaby.. I logged in and read your comment and have to say a few things to you. 1. how fucking beautiful it was to read a comment that didn't say anything about how sick i am.
2.the way you broke it down and fed it to me only caused me to hunger you.
3. I am now a fan. I appreciate an open mind and someone along the other side of poetry finding me. welcome to DU. can't wait to play with you.
2.the way you broke it down and fed it to me only caused me to hunger you.
3. I am now a fan. I appreciate an open mind and someone along the other side of poetry finding me. welcome to DU. can't wait to play with you.
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
20th Oct 2012 11:32pm
Thank you Devilish. If you came then I did my job. ;) I have been reading poetry here all day but the poem of yours I read stands out. We seem to have a lot in common (except for all of the blood and guts. It's not my thing.)
Re: Blowing Big Brother
24th Oct 2012 10:08am
The taboo act of incest turned into a somewhat innocent and curious flow and vibe. The curiosity of taboo type poems like this always draw in the reader I feel.
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
24th Oct 2012 10:16am
Thank you for the comment. I agree. It will disgust some readers and excite others but the curiosity will draw most readers anyway regardless of their morals.
Holly
Holly
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25th Oct 2012 2:44am
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27th Oct 2012 7:58pm
Curiosity may have killed the cat but it also gave my big brother a blow job!
Holly
Holly
Re: Blowing Big Brother
6th Dec 2012 8:06pm
Whoooooo .... Okay then Holly, obviously, like any red-blooded male, your pic was enough to get me interested in what you'd write about .... annnnddd ...
.... having read your profile detes, all I can say is wowwww !!!
A very interesting young lady aren't ya ... ???
Obviously, subject matter aside ... quite the ride through your mind ....
Post some more .... will ya !!!!!
Nice1
Virge
.... having read your profile detes, all I can say is wowwww !!!
A very interesting young lady aren't ya ... ???
Obviously, subject matter aside ... quite the ride through your mind ....
Post some more .... will ya !!!!!
Nice1
Virge
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
15th Feb 2013 8:18am
Thank you for your kind words Big Virge. I will oing back to school for my Masters has occupied a lot of my time but I'll try to squeeze out some poetry. I miss my little hobby.
Holly
Holly
Re: Blowing Big Brother
Brilliant how you managed to get humour into it! Please write more I just love wicked women!:-)
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15th Feb 2013 8:19am
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15th Feb 2013 8:11am
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15th Feb 2013 8:21am
lol. It certainly was a unique family experience. I'm glad so many have enjoyed my decision to put it into verse.
Holly
Holly
Re: Blowing Big Brother
27th Feb 2013 2:09am
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27th Feb 2013 2:37am
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18th Jun 2013 2:36am
That's because the angel on your other shoulder is going to give him a blowjob in hell. Lol!
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29th Jun 2013 6:42pm
Re: Blowing Big Brother
25th Jun 2013 10:29am
Iam not into doing my big bro but still a very nice write...the mind is a fantastic playground.
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29th Jun 2013 6:43pm
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2013 6:10pm
I had to revisit the first of eight classic writes today, Holly. It still holds it's own as a brilliantly naughty, sexy and funny write all at once. You certainly are quality over quantity and that's what we love - looking forward to the next masterpiece!
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
24th Sep 2013 9:07pm
Thank you for revisiting this poem. I appreciate your appreciation. :)
Holly
Holly
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13th Nov 2013 5:13pm
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18th Nov 2013 6:09am
many of your poetry takes on some wild and uncommon topics .. like rape me , gang bang and now this ... great write and i salute your bold attitude lady...
write on ...
cyanide...
write on ...
cyanide...
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
21st Nov 2013 4:51pm
Thank you, cyanide. I strive to grab your attention by breaking the barriers of the norm. Who wants to read about missionary position sex. It's already been written a million times. There's nothing original there.
Holly
Holly
Re: Blowing Big Brother
20th Jan 2014 6:01pm
i don't know
if its true
but could be anything
so poetic cumming from you
and sure enough
ur brother knew
you were next in Q
that's why he left
the door open for u
did that night
he fuck u
must have u gave
him the cue
to have more of his glue
ur poety is enchanting
all www readers
now knew
if its true
but could be anything
so poetic cumming from you
and sure enough
ur brother knew
you were next in Q
that's why he left
the door open for u
did that night
he fuck u
must have u gave
him the cue
to have more of his glue
ur poety is enchanting
all www readers
now knew
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
26th Jan 2014 3:53pm
Re: Blowing Big Brother
21st Jan 2014 2:27am
the danger of incest is
deformed kids
between immediate siblings
mom's side may be
yes only MAYBE
okay
deformed kids
between immediate siblings
mom's side may be
yes only MAYBE
okay
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re: Re: Blowing Big Brother
26th Jan 2014 3:54pm
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26th Jan 2014 5:04pm
yeah
that we all know
beyond that at night
when under---bedsheeets
the two flow
then only tis
we all know
why my spelling u dislike?
its all brief - like
i liked this one immensely
hence placed on my reading list
any more I'll ensure
most read it from my gallery
galore
your r an imaginative one
THAT'S FOR SURE
EVEN IF THIS ONE WAS
JUST AN IMAGINARY CURE
that we all know
beyond that at night
when under---bedsheeets
the two flow
then only tis
we all know
why my spelling u dislike?
its all brief - like
i liked this one immensely
hence placed on my reading list
any more I'll ensure
most read it from my gallery
galore
your r an imaginative one
THAT'S FOR SURE
EVEN IF THIS ONE WAS
JUST AN IMAGINARY CURE
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26th Jan 2014 5:08pm
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26th Jan 2014 5:44pm
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30th Aug 2017 2:45am
now its been three years since you disappeared now 16 plus 3 =19 have u with bro again ever been show if u have something your natural erotica helps many to cummmm bros with bros or sis with or sis any one blows glows and big toes all grow
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2nd Sep 2017 4:04pm
Haha! I wasn't 16 when I wrote that and you don't even know if that was fact or fantasy. Think on that. :)
Re: Blowing Big Brother
30th Nov 2014 6:05pm
Re: Blowing Big Brother
27th Aug 2017 3:11pm
If that poem didn't tell a story then I did a poor job of telling it.
Holly
Holly
Re. Blowing Big Brother
20th Dec 2021 4:56pm
Hi Holly,
Incest is taboo. But nothing is wrong in fantasizing for good reasons. It is kind of bond that helps us to go through tough time. I have written stories about incest to break the taboo. It doesn't mean that we indulge in it. I love the way you tell the story and portray it in vivid style. I don't know if you do check your messages. It has been long since you have gone.
with love,
KS
Incest is taboo. But nothing is wrong in fantasizing for good reasons. It is kind of bond that helps us to go through tough time. I have written stories about incest to break the taboo. It doesn't mean that we indulge in it. I love the way you tell the story and portray it in vivid style. I don't know if you do check your messages. It has been long since you have gone.
with love,
KS
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