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the faces in the picture
the grasp of each finger
taken from that very instant
as two hands
joined together in
some promise of 1948
now rests in my hand
saved by some dead child
of some dead mother
and i put it down
and lead my heart
to the next box
the next tomb
the voices of silence
they come together
in the midst of this clutter
of old gifts and promises
waiting here
waiting for no one
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Published 29th Sep 2012
| Edited 1st Oct 2012
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29th Sep 2012 3:48pm
We stand on we know no what in order to do this...complete living is honoring all those who have gone before....us. Salute.
Complete living is realizing that those who crave honoring don't deserve it;
and those who deserve it, have no need for it.
and those who deserve it, have no need for it.
dearest WarPrincess[?]
great poom (& not a bad poem either) of
great old foto-
(i love those things - funny how they say abs'lootly no thing about Life, butt wee won't stop projectin' that
they
do..........yet, our beloveds they must/will Be
great poom (& not a bad poem either) of
great old foto-
(i love those things - funny how they say abs'lootly no thing about Life, butt wee won't stop projectin' that
they
do..........yet, our beloveds they must/will Be
30th Sep 2012 4:25am
they talk about life.
here, mostly, they are presenting their new kid
to us, proud, happy, that's a lot to say, even
if it's said over and over.
here, mostly, they are presenting their new kid
to us, proud, happy, that's a lot to say, even
if it's said over and over.
30th Sep 2012 4:05pm
...in the perspective of the
"captured moment",
yes yes yes....
speaks/talks volumes...as,
ironically, all our volumes
are in the midst of fading
into an irretrievable 'past'
"captured moment",
yes yes yes....
speaks/talks volumes...as,
ironically, all our volumes
are in the midst of fading
into an irretrievable 'past'
30th Sep 2012 11:33am
4th Oct 2012 6:00am
6th Oct 2012 6:24pm
Lovely picture. It fits in perfectly with your story-like poem. Extremely well done poem. You follow through with your main metaphor (1948, which may be a real date/time also)consistently and with marvelous language. The only thing I would change is the last line, which is redundant. I would drop it entirely, but that's just me. Thank you for a marvelous read.
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- Edited 28th Jan 2019 8:46am
19th Oct 2012 5:20pm
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