Heavy On My Mind

Trying something new be gentle guys...lolol

Simply Beautiful Lady.....just like YOU!


Fire

Thank you so much Fire, I got another surprise up my sleeve but I am little nervous about it.we shall see.

Red

4 days.....what is up that sleeve???  Intergalactic and transcendent...

Memories, whisper, sweetly, overload, moths, incandescent flames, raw spirits shared, fusions, explosions, clouds, desires, and displays of effervescent light.

When and if love should collide each holds an equal weapon

Damn fine write Red

I thank you sir for such a generous comment, happy you approve.

Red

Have you seen red amber?  Ruby and organic...

Nope don't know what cha talkin bout turtle boy.


Thanks for stopping by to read
Red

https://www.google.com/search?hl=en&safe=off&q=red+amber&bav=on.2,or.r_gc.r_pw.r_cp.r_qf.&biw=1356&bih=736&um=1&ie=UTF-8&tbm=isch&source=og&sa=N&tab=wi&ei=MDlPUK_DK4rpqgH4r4CQDQ

Got it saw it woo hoo.liked it.

"there is no
turning back now
nowhere to flee
trapped in
the liquid amber
that is, your power
over me..."

simply beautiful :)
I adored this piece
very well done

an add to my list for sure ;)

Thank you so much, I am very happy you like it.

Red

I try at the time to do my best, but never a conformist I strive to improve and do better. I appreciate your words and the praise, coming from you it is highly prized. Thank you

Red

Hey there Soldier.

I like what you do with the format. It's great.

I don't think you need the ellipses at the end of Divinity. second stanza is my favorite, the flow and rhyming are spot on.
on the third, in the context of flow I think you should take out 'elusively (read it without and you'll see what I mean)

ending stanza is spot on too.

A real piece of work you have here, fair play missus.

Thank you Lepperochan, that word has been bothering me because it has too many syllables and throws off the flow but I was not sure, did not want to trust my first mind. I appreciate immensely the honest critique.Right on!

Red

Thrilled you at last did the spoken word on this. You should link it under the illustrated poem. And do record more, please.

Thanks ken for being a good friend and the wind in my sails.

Red

Red,
This was magnificent! Great read and GREAT Spoken word! You have inspired me to start recording my own!!!

Thank you so much and yes, do that, so we can enjoy your pieces in your voice, it absolutely gives it another dimension.

Red

No turning back for me, just brakes for a while.

Nice poem Red.

Strider

Good luck with that "ol boy" you know were I am at if you need me.Thanks for the comment.

Red

This is a beautiful piece that flows rather well to begin with but that astonishing voice of yours has given it alot more depth positively bringing it to life.

Magnifico.

Duncan

Thank you very much Duncan; I am elated that you enjoyed it, for it to be the first time reading it is being well received, Thank you again.

Red

Heavy on my mind indeed.  An excellent write Gypsy. I had no sound on the video, I opened the YouTube page and it stuck on buffering. :(

Sorry my dear, try updating your adobe flash player that might help. Sooo glad you liked this piece, yes I think was appropriate at the time. Glad to see you around you have sorely missed.Thank you for the comment.

Red

"There is no  
turning back now  
nowhere to flee  
trapped in  
the liquid amber  
that is, your power  
over me..."

Very nice job Red!  
 

Thank you Mark, glad to see you still follow my work lol

Red

This was beautifully written and a visual
so stunning, really a treat for my senses,

Best wishes
Ricecake

Thank you RC, glad you enjoyed that I have another one on spoken word, The Ghetto's heartbeat if you care to see it.

Red