I can't say this is about you but you know it is ....

I enjoyed reading this piece of enlightenment and insight and spiritual connection with the deepness of the mind and heart who ever this message is about this is priceless 👏💪👍👊💯🏍️ STONE RIDER 🏍️

Glad you enjoyed
I know her well, practically wrote itself...

😉 sometimes it be that way sometimes we have to go through the process of the flow of the moments and laugh with a smile 😁 😉🏍️ STONE RIDER 🏍️

😉 sometimes it be that way sometimes we have to go through the process of the flow of the moments and laugh with a smile 😁 😉🏍️ STONE RIDER 🏍️

(Sings in bad Carly Simon)

I’m sooo vain, I probly think this song is about me, I’m soooo vaiiin.

Just kidding. The twatwaffle is mine.

But this is a big like!

I am vain
Everything is about me
Gonna keep it that way too...

Yo

This is one I wouldn't have minded writing for Her (Mary) if only I'd had your imagination. I might still use it, mind but conceed that they are your words... wished to be written by me... Fair? 🤔 😉

You've got a pretty good pen ...
Think you should write your own Mister !!

Thank you kindly, PS but I don't always see the things you do, plus you have more experience at this sort of thing than I do. 😉 😜

Mary isn't on the site anymore....
So... moot point I guess

Beautifully penned, Speak. Great read my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian  

Many thanks D ...

Appreciate

moving lines man.
regards
James

Thanks James

BIG APPRECIATE

Plain truth is the best poetry. No nonsense, just a straight shot of honest. Deserved an RL

Thank you brother AJ

Appreciate !!

hello dearest Poet I love this side of you I pull close then I pull back you know 💕

I’m finding it’s okay to let out my tender side now CB often.
I know how you think..
Appreciate you
Always !!

❤️♥️🤠❤️♥️

Feelings for someone can develop in ways we didn't expect. Even long distance ones.
Nice write. ......   Metropolis.

My only real gripe is the question marks, for me they add more of a confusing pause rather than what I believe you want to be a reflective pause, I think it’s implied in the write,  
 
However I’m a guy trapped inside a ladder and for sure probably don’t know what I’m talking about

Not sure what you're saying ether....

All good then, when I figure it out I’ll get back to you

Copy that...

Sorry about the drive by incoherent comment earlier

I feel close to you
Often
Even in turmoil
I'm bound by your near smile
It illuminates a path
One day there will be glory
Until then
I'm your mentor
Wise ?
Sometimes
In desire ?
Almost always
Your time ?
Precious stones

in the last sections of your piece,

You have question marks within the write.

I believe there purpose is to create a contemplative pause  
trying to phrase it as a question rather than a statement.
From my perspective it creates an awkward pause as if you’re questioning the word rather than the meaning

Wise ?  
Sometimes  

vs  

wise,  
sometimes

Vs

Wise ?
sometimes

as a reader the format of having the capital letters at the start of the answer part of the question makes it read awkward as well.

The poem is succinct and there’s not much you can hide behind so to me these little things stick out.

I could be totally wrong, but you asked for honest critique and as soon as I read the piece this stuck out to me.

It's a good point and a good critique.
I too questioned whether or not to use question marks.
I agree too that there is an awkwardness to the write.

I made a few changes  

Thank you

Those are the best, when you feel that connection, surging in the torrid "poetical" ways.
Poetspeak, you are the man.
BL

That's a beautiful comment Wally !

I'm most appreciative of your support all these years

Thx