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I'm just passing the time
Who knows where time flies to when we're having fun?
at what point in the past is time gathered
and stored away into the huge pockets
in the jacket of this dimension?
or how long are its coat tails
dragging along the time spent
standing in ques or waiting
for the phone to ring?
Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame?
Or is time filtered of it's activities and recycled
among every living thing in the universe?
When time tells all, who does it speak to?
and where are its great healing powers
when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception?
is time not just as ruthless
as any other mass murderer?
at what point in the past is time gathered
and stored away into the huge pockets
in the jacket of this dimension?
or how long are its coat tails
dragging along the time spent
standing in ques or waiting
for the phone to ring?
Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame?
Or is time filtered of it's activities and recycled
among every living thing in the universe?
When time tells all, who does it speak to?
and where are its great healing powers
when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception?
is time not just as ruthless
as any other mass murderer?
Written by
lepperochan
(CraicDealer)
Published 19th May 2012
| Edited 22nd May 2012
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Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
- Edited 20th May 2012 6:57pm
19th May 2012 6:38pm
I like how you've questioned time... Instead of just saying that time tells all, you go a step further.
It really made me envision time as a person or physical creature.... Or mass murderer ;)
"Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame"
Favorite part of the poem.
P.S.... "where is it's"
Should be 'its'.
Great write.
It really made me envision time as a person or physical creature.... Or mass murderer ;)
"Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame"
Favorite part of the poem.
P.S.... "where is it's"
Should be 'its'.
Great write.
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 11:59am
Autumn, good to see you about.
yep time could well be the biggest mass murderer since time began. This little write had me thinking for a while.
cheers for the spell check :) i'll sort that now.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint.
yep time could well be the biggest mass murderer since time began. This little write had me thinking for a while.
cheers for the spell check :) i'll sort that now.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint.
re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 11:59am
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Oct 2019 8:45pm
19th May 2012 7:36pm
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re: as always
22nd May 2012 12:01pm
Dark Dreams
Yeah I liked that line myself, and wonder if there is any truth in it too.
thanks for the words :)
Yeah I liked that line myself, and wonder if there is any truth in it too.
thanks for the words :)
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
19th May 2012 7:37pm
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 12:04pm
Mr C
can we take time or borrow time or make time or fake time it all remains to be seen I think.
hope your lunch was time well spent.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
can we take time or borrow time or make time or fake time it all remains to be seen I think.
hope your lunch was time well spent.
thanks for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
Re: I'm just passing the time
19th May 2012 10:38pm
I'm so glad you posted this. :D This is cliches reinvented into something that isn't at all cliche.
A philosophical, thought provoking write, that makes me ponder on the idea of times and the universe.
Love this concept.
"Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame?"
Great write as always, Eamon. :)
A philosophical, thought provoking write, that makes me ponder on the idea of times and the universe.
Love this concept.
"Is there a grand hall that has on display
all the fifteen minutes of fame?"
Great write as always, Eamon. :)
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 12:07pm
Indie
far too kind with your words, though I'm glad you gave the opportunity for this write to come about.
thanks for dropping in and throwing down your words
:)
far too kind with your words, though I'm glad you gave the opportunity for this write to come about.
thanks for dropping in and throwing down your words
:)
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
20th May 2012 00:17am
Wonderful philosophical poem
the end sums it up ...so well
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when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception?
is time not just as ruthless
as any other mass murderer?
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food for thought
Peace
Kitty
the end sums it up ...so well
****************************************
when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception?
is time not just as ruthless
as any other mass murderer?
****************************************
food for thought
Peace
Kitty
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 12:11pm
Kitty.
thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this write. much appreciated.
thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this write. much appreciated.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Yes you do elevate the cliches here. Great write. Only quibble is the last stanza. In the second line "is" should be "are," referring to it's powers. Also for flow I don't know if you need the extra alliteration of "mass" in the last line. It disturbs the flow for me. Other than that I like it much.
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 12:14pm
Steve.
Yeah, i was caught between 'is and 'are when I was writing it. I think now that 'are is a much better option. I'll sort that out now.
I'll try do something with the last line to bring the flow into a more fluid read.
grateful for your keen eye on this write.
thanks for stopping by Steve.
Yeah, i was caught between 'is and 'are when I was writing it. I think now that 'are is a much better option. I'll sort that out now.
I'll try do something with the last line to bring the flow into a more fluid read.
grateful for your keen eye on this write.
thanks for stopping by Steve.
Recycled Time...
and you're philosophical too? What else will I get to discover about you? ;)
See, just not schooled is all. Told ya!
"where is it's great healing powers"
I have wondered this myself, for many many years.
Great write to ponder on Eamon[n] :)
See, just not schooled is all. Told ya!
"where is it's great healing powers"
I have wondered this myself, for many many years.
Great write to ponder on Eamon[n] :)
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re: Recycled Time...
22nd May 2012 12:22pm
Rachel.
well, one must keep some mystery about one self so i reckon that's all your going to get. :)
glad you enjoyed this little write and happy you stopped by to leave your thoughts.
well, one must keep some mystery about one self so i reckon that's all your going to get. :)
glad you enjoyed this little write and happy you stopped by to leave your thoughts.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
20th May 2012 5:26pm
I love it, very well written. I think life is just like an eight hour work day each time and we should all be glad to clock out at the end and go home, but that's just me :-)Peace, Miki
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd May 2012 12:25pm
Michelle.
glad you love it.
not a bad thought, clocking out should be ok if there was a decent time to be had when leaving.
thanks for the words.
glad you love it.
not a bad thought, clocking out should be ok if there was a decent time to be had when leaving.
thanks for the words.
Re: I'm just passing the time
25th May 2012 9:17pm
Yes, I would have to agree with the rest of your fans this is great, a well articulated argument on the passing of time.
Gypsy red
Gypsy red
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Re: I'm just passing the time
25th May 2012 10:03pm
ah Miss Gypsy good to see you back.
thank you for reading this little write and leaving your thoughts. much appreciated.
thank you for reading this little write and leaving your thoughts. much appreciated.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
28th May 2012 2:25am
I saw this posted on a forum thread and I wanted so bad to comment on it, but since it was a general chat I decided to restrain my fingers. I'm only sad to say that I failed to see it sooner, here in your poetry vault. Thanks for sharing, Eamonn:) as this poem pretty much sums it up (IMO).
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
29th May 2012 6:59am
Devlin.
why thank you kind lady.
It's always good to have you around this way reading and sharing your thoughts.
why thank you kind lady.
It's always good to have you around this way reading and sharing your thoughts.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
15th Jun 2012 6:32am
Other than your first two lines, which I strongly feel you should strike out, I am in lust with this piece.
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
17th Aug 2012 5:12am
Aish.
shit. please forgive my neglect of your comment. I have no idea why I didn't see it before now.
ahh, first two lines. I should explain their existence. the poem was written for a cliche competition and well you can't really get much more cliched than the first two lines..well you can and I did further down the poem in a semi regular type of way.
I'll put a bit of thought into how I can bring them up a notch.
as always Aish, pleasure to see you about the place.
shit. please forgive my neglect of your comment. I have no idea why I didn't see it before now.
ahh, first two lines. I should explain their existence. the poem was written for a cliche competition and well you can't really get much more cliched than the first two lines..well you can and I did further down the poem in a semi regular type of way.
I'll put a bit of thought into how I can bring them up a notch.
as always Aish, pleasure to see you about the place.
Re: I'm just passing the time
20th Sep 2012 2:35pm
Dear CraicDealer ... all the Great Masters say that time is an illusion ... they also say that the mind is likened to a computers memory chip imprinting or recording minute by minute all of ones thoughts and activities ... hence the mind is a great storehouse of all of ones many lives lived. This is called by the mystics the "Akashic Records" ... Some gifted people like, Edgar Casey, have been able to read these records of people.
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
22nd Sep 2012 6:09pm
Bruce.
I agree that time as we know it is a concept that barely touches upon the reality.
I'm not sure I'd buy into the brain keeping records going back that far but I can see the theory could hold some merit.
Thank you kindly for stopping by and for the words of enlightenment.
I agree that time as we know it is a concept that barely touches upon the reality.
I'm not sure I'd buy into the brain keeping records going back that far but I can see the theory could hold some merit.
Thank you kindly for stopping by and for the words of enlightenment.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
24th Oct 2012 2:33pm
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re: Re: I'm just passing the time
25th Oct 2012 11:52am
Broomie,
ah well, you are far too kind with your comments, but I'll take them anyway :)
thanks for stopping by and leaving your thoughts.
ah well, you are far too kind with your comments, but I'll take them anyway :)
thanks for stopping by and leaving your thoughts.
Re: I'm just passing the time
Anonymous
25th Oct 2012 5:34pm
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Re. I'm just passing the time
16th Nov 2015 5:23am
I have wandered for decades amonst
these planes, wondering in semblance
of these very words:
"When time tells all, who does it speak to?
and where are its great healing powers
when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception? "
Ha! who and when? because I sure cannot
figure the riddle of this at all, where can the
key unto be found?
Oh, goodness dear.. absolutely loved this
piece. So much to say, so much felt, so
much has been dealt. Yet, I too am just
passing the time.
-Howlings
these planes, wondering in semblance
of these very words:
"When time tells all, who does it speak to?
and where are its great healing powers
when the living start slowly dying
from the moment of conception? "
Ha! who and when? because I sure cannot
figure the riddle of this at all, where can the
key unto be found?
Oh, goodness dear.. absolutely loved this
piece. So much to say, so much felt, so
much has been dealt. Yet, I too am just
passing the time.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. I'm just passing the time
16th Nov 2015 5:45am
ahh, this one brings me back to a good place, thank you muchly
I think the problems with any riddles of time is that they take far too much time to figure out, if you're lucky enough to figure it out chances are your time is up anyway
I thank yo u most humbly for your visit and comment, Lady
I think the problems with any riddles of time is that they take far too much time to figure out, if you're lucky enough to figure it out chances are your time is up anyway
I thank yo u most humbly for your visit and comment, Lady
Re. I'm just passing the time
2nd Mar 2017 2:04pm
Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9494/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9494/
Best of Luck and thank you for being a member of the Deep Side!
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