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Cold Burn
Walked through the golden harvest of corn.
Beneath descending sun.
Fully knowing the winter of the mind
would soon be born.
That first stark ivory would stun.
Before I knew inner inferno's contain icicles too.
The cold burn left the clues.
His eyes were electric heat.
His words a brutal snow.
His smile a warmth so sweet.
His touch, the absence of tomorrow.
I walked the maze through the piercing sorrow.
Beneath descending sun.
Fully knowing the winter of the mind
would soon be born.
That first stark ivory would stun.
Before I knew inner inferno's contain icicles too.
The cold burn left the clues.
His eyes were electric heat.
His words a brutal snow.
His smile a warmth so sweet.
His touch, the absence of tomorrow.
I walked the maze through the piercing sorrow.
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Re. Cold Burn
18th Sep 2024 8:11pm
I preferred reading of your golden harvest before the chill set in. Reminded me of happy childhood memories in Hamilton, New Zealand where I father was a farm labourer there. I remember him plucking a fresh corn cob. Delicious! But inevitably, cold's burn always follows, maybe not straight away but it does, it's true! 😐
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18th Sep 2024 8:18pm
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18th Sep 2024 8:23pm
You did & it gave me a warm feeling. We should count ourselves lucky for having such happy recollections that we never fully appreciate at that time. It's only when the chill sets in, as you say, that we truly realise the golden harvest we were given. 😊
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Re. Cold Burn
19th Sep 2024 00:21am
Something about the words, the image and knowing that summer is practically gone, knowing that winter is not to far away. Loved the image & atmosphere you created. Another cycle, another year has gone by. Loved it!!!
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19th Sep 2024 12:21pm
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Re. Cold Burn
19th Sep 2024 4:30am
Dear D,
I enjoyed this piece. For me, there was a sinister-like anticipated arrival of the coming season. I liked the mental visuals of cold. Excellent write. H🌷
I enjoyed this piece. For me, there was a sinister-like anticipated arrival of the coming season. I liked the mental visuals of cold. Excellent write. H🌷
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19th Sep 2024 12:24pm
Hi! Thank you for sharing your thoughts. That is the tone it was written in.
Thank you!
Thank you!
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19th Sep 2024 10:09am
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19th Sep 2024 5:12pm
I wanted a contrast to the lingering warmth being remembered
Thanks for checking out!
Thanks for checking out!
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Anonymous
19th Sep 2024 6:05pm
"His eyes were electric heat.
His words a brutal snow.
His smile a warmth so sweet.
His touch, the absence of tomorrow."
There is a world in just those few lines. Wow...
His words a brutal snow.
His smile a warmth so sweet.
His touch, the absence of tomorrow."
There is a world in just those few lines. Wow...
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Re: Re. Cold Burn
19th Sep 2024 7:59pm
I was trying to capture the warmth of a person in opposition to a cold emptiness.
And can it be found in the same person.
I'm so happy you enjoyed, thank you!
And can it be found in the same person.
I'm so happy you enjoyed, thank you!
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