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Fall Into Sleep
Falling to the ground, Big Bang,
That's the sound.
A big man balancing on a tricycle,
Dancing like a clown.
High in the Sefirot trying not to drop.
Opened my mouth couldn't get it to stop.
Pressure boiling in with hot steam,
Makes my ears pop.
The fish in the sky are going dry.
Start to flip flop.
High on my mind wasting time on the clock.
I'm in decline, getting behind, still in line,
Want fame from the tick tock.
The grandfather signs spirals and shines,
Brightens my nights with flaming rocks.
I need a familial chariot ride,
Need to hide my pride.
Still wishing for luck.
I'm alive but I wanna die,
No need to survive.
Hide the crime from Sherlock.
Detox my eyes from the lies.
The only way to humble,
Is to destroy what's inside.
Jacks are wild,
It's time to beat box.
That's the sound.
A big man balancing on a tricycle,
Dancing like a clown.
High in the Sefirot trying not to drop.
Opened my mouth couldn't get it to stop.
Pressure boiling in with hot steam,
Makes my ears pop.
The fish in the sky are going dry.
Start to flip flop.
High on my mind wasting time on the clock.
I'm in decline, getting behind, still in line,
Want fame from the tick tock.
The grandfather signs spirals and shines,
Brightens my nights with flaming rocks.
I need a familial chariot ride,
Need to hide my pride.
Still wishing for luck.
I'm alive but I wanna die,
No need to survive.
Hide the crime from Sherlock.
Detox my eyes from the lies.
The only way to humble,
Is to destroy what's inside.
Jacks are wild,
It's time to beat box.
Written by
AfterSexDilemma
Published 8th Sep 2024
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Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 12:24pm
You're writing always shines. The riddles and play on words, that result in a much deeper thought & idea are brilliant creations of your artistic mind. Well done ASD. Always!!
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Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 12:33pm
Thank you so much for that heartfelt comment. Bless you for that. Hope you have a great day! <3
Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:27pm
Sometimes your poems have post punk vibe..
Like I'm listening to the Clash or
BIG AUDIO DYNAMITE
BIG LIKE COUNTRY
RL AWARD
Like I'm listening to the Clash or
BIG AUDIO DYNAMITE
BIG LIKE COUNTRY
RL AWARD
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Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:44pm
Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:31pm
Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:45pm
I appreciate your compliment and the devil Horns hahaha let's start a mosh pit! :D
Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:34pm
Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 1:46pm
Yeah I was trying a new approach and failed miserably lmao. Thanks for the feedback
Much appreciated!
Much appreciated!
Re. Fall Into Sleep
8th Sep 2024 6:23pm
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8th Sep 2024 11:52pm
Re. Fall Into Sleep
9th Sep 2024 00:39am
Aha!
Is this the riot (of words) you mentioned starting?
Excellent results I see:)
Is this the riot (of words) you mentioned starting?
Excellent results I see:)
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Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
9th Sep 2024 1:14am
Hahaha yep! Waiting on Mr. Sleepy Head to show up.
Thanks for the RLE!
Thanks for the RLE!
Re. Fall Into Sleep
9th Sep 2024 1:39am
Even if or when we fail we still learn something, we like this piece and it's flow. Tight
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9th Sep 2024 5:32am
Re. Fall Into Sleep
29th Sep 2024 7:28am
Powerful write. I see imagery in your words. Lot's of visual cues. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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Re: Re. Fall Into Sleep
29th Sep 2024 7:36am
Thank you for the read and comment! It's actually about what kabbalist jews believe in. Another thing you should look up!