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Dirty Ace of Hearts
Channeling you
Looking everywhere
Then suddenly
You appeared
A dirty version
Former self
Turned out
Struggling to survive
Your immaculate conception
Poisoned on the avenue
Splintered and struck
I had choices
Take you home
Bathe you in sanctity
Or leave you wounded
For the next John
To worship you
Make you into his likeness
Only to fail desperately
As he won't know
What I know
Alas
I’m not telling…
Looking everywhere
Then suddenly
You appeared
A dirty version
Former self
Turned out
Struggling to survive
Your immaculate conception
Poisoned on the avenue
Splintered and struck
I had choices
Take you home
Bathe you in sanctity
Or leave you wounded
For the next John
To worship you
Make you into his likeness
Only to fail desperately
As he won't know
What I know
Alas
I’m not telling…
Author's Note
Dog waking this morning I found a Ace of hearts on the street, dirty and tattered and had to write her story …
I like to write dark creepy shit lately ..
I like to write dark creepy shit lately ..
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Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
Anonymous
22nd Aug 2024 00:33am
This is awesome. Love the last line.
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22nd Aug 2024 00:35am
I'm getting into some dark writing lately and I gotta tell you, it cheers me up ...
Thanks Pink..
Thanks Pink..
Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 1:28am
Dear PS,
It’s a new genre of your writing talent. I enjoyed the story of this and especially how you created it. I was leaning in and intrigued from start to finish. Great write. H🌷
It’s a new genre of your writing talent. I enjoyed the story of this and especially how you created it. I was leaning in and intrigued from start to finish. Great write. H🌷
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22nd Aug 2024 2:09am
Dear H,
It's easy to get into a writer rut so I had to take action. Digging down into my soul for new directions. Dark writing is fulfilling and I expect there will be more...
BIG THANKS H
Appreciate
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It's easy to get into a writer rut so I had to take action. Digging down into my soul for new directions. Dark writing is fulfilling and I expect there will be more...
BIG THANKS H
Appreciate
👹
Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 1:52am
A many both male and female think they know how and can find a lump of coal and create a diamond. Most spend their entire life polishing and idolizing never turning this lump of coal into anything. They fail to realize what only a few can get right the first time, to create a diamond takes time, patience, and most important pressure. The pressure should also be coated in pain to really buff out a shine, tight
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22nd Aug 2024 3:01am
Pressure makes a diamond and pressure is a quotient that makes us work harder in all works of life.
My job as a poet is reach across the aisle and talk on all subjects in all styles.
Tonight it's a little creepy and tomorrow could be style and grace.
Stay tuned ME.
The best is yet to come.
My name is Poetspeak and I approve this message..
Thanks ME
My job as a poet is reach across the aisle and talk on all subjects in all styles.
Tonight it's a little creepy and tomorrow could be style and grace.
Stay tuned ME.
The best is yet to come.
My name is Poetspeak and I approve this message..
Thanks ME
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22nd Aug 2024 3:07am
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22nd Aug 2024 5:17am
Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 3:01am
I love it. What a great literary approach to how the card made you feel. Perhaps you were meant to find it. A sign...
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22nd Aug 2024 3:07am
That's why I make sure I carry my phone on every dog walk. My dog was looking for her spot for relief and there was the card. Just one look at the Ace in ruins and the poem started to write itself. It's amazing how that process works. You know that well Mark.
So this is my journey. A little different from my usual style. Looking forward to writing more out there in the fields !!
Stay tuned !
Thank you Sir
So this is my journey. A little different from my usual style. Looking forward to writing more out there in the fields !!
Stay tuned !
Thank you Sir
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22nd Aug 2024 3:10am
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Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 3:03am
Ooooh, I love the creativity and deep, dark imagination of this! Bravo! 👏👏👏
❤️k
❤️k
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Re: Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 3:12am
Yeah
This darkness is a little new for me.
My muse will be proud I think.
Only thing better would to have written it in blood.
Maybe next time.
Thanks RED
👹👺
This darkness is a little new for me.
My muse will be proud I think.
Only thing better would to have written it in blood.
Maybe next time.
Thanks RED
👹👺
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22nd Aug 2024 3:03am
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22nd Aug 2024 3:14am
LJ !!!!
You've written a lot in this style.
Paying homage.
Glad you like, that makes me happy !!
Thx
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You've written a lot in this style.
Paying homage.
Glad you like, that makes me happy !!
Thx
👺
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22nd Aug 2024 4:13am
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Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 11:49am
A dip a little dark sometimes myself and your trip of the pen was very cool indeed!
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22nd Aug 2024 1:08pm
Yes Sir Thor
Not quite sexy and not quite demure, something mysterious and dark in between the secrets and the less than truth writing ..
Feeling at home here suddenly....
Not quite sexy and not quite demure, something mysterious and dark in between the secrets and the less than truth writing ..
Feeling at home here suddenly....
Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 2:15pm
Yes, always play your A-C-E....Hugs and love, Oral
A-ttitude
C-hanges
E-verything
A-ttitude
C-hanges
E-verything
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22nd Aug 2024 6:19pm
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Re: Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
22nd Aug 2024 2:56pm
Direct gets me right to the heart of matters.
Sometimes gets me in trouble too ..
Thank you Shiloh, that's a lovely compliment
Appreciate
Sometimes gets me in trouble too ..
Thank you Shiloh, that's a lovely compliment
Appreciate
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Re. Dirty Ace of Hearts
16th Sep 2024 5:33pm
"Take you home
Bathe you in sanctity "
Love the double entendre here, the imaginings of how many hands it may have been in and how it could be treated by your hand.
Amazing work.
Bathe you in sanctity "
Love the double entendre here, the imaginings of how many hands it may have been in and how it could be treated by your hand.
Amazing work.
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16th Sep 2024 5:43pm
The minute I saw that card on the street I knew a poem had to be written. It's satisfying that I got a good response to it and now I have the ultimate comment.... YOURS
Thank you Sir W !!
Thank you Sir W !!