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Isn't it beautiful what was
We are cameras,
Desperately capturing,
A fleeting sunset.
Desperately capturing,
A fleeting sunset.
Published 28th Jul 2024
Author's Note
This is a haiku about the carcass of a relationship, desperately pretended to be alive by it's participants.
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28th Jul 2024 3:39pm
A sensation...
The art of life is sensation, to feel that we exist, even as cameras.
Nice writing.
The art of life is sensation, to feel that we exist, even as cameras.
Nice writing.
28th Jul 2024 3:42pm
28th Jul 2024 3:44pm
28th Jul 2024 4:40pm
This is a style I desperately wish I could get comfortable with writing! To be able to capture such strong, relatable emotions in just 3 lines...sigh. I felt this one as an echo of experience. Well done!
28th Jul 2024 5:39pm
Thank you so much! I've never had anyone compliment my writing style, so your comment means do much to me!
