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Hollow
You bring me down
you cast me out
I grieve again
but I'll believe again
What you don't know
(fear blinds your soul)
as you watch me go
(your walls so sure)
I'll take my light
(in loveless dark)
I'll leave you hollow
(I wish you grace)
hollow
you cast me out
I grieve again
but I'll believe again
What you don't know
(fear blinds your soul)
as you watch me go
(your walls so sure)
I'll take my light
(in loveless dark)
I'll leave you hollow
(I wish you grace)
hollow
Author's Note
This music track by Iceman came along and derailed my day until the whole thing was written, recorded and mixed. Meanwhile, fundamentalists hijacked the institution I work for.
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Re. Hollow
20th Jun 2024 2:57pm
Re: Re. Hollow
20th Jun 2024 7:14pm
Don't worry, they don't want anything to do with the likes of me! I'm a heretic.
Thanks for checking it out. 😊
❤k
Thanks for checking it out. 😊
❤k
Re: Re. Hollow
21st Jun 2024 1:23am
Re. Hollow
20th Jun 2024 10:22pm
There's a positivity flowing through this despite the darkness. Wishing grace is a beautiful wish
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Re: Re. Hollow
21st Jun 2024 1:26am
Thank you. I feel sad for those whose actions are driven by fear instead of love... so yes, I wish them grace. Maybe one day they'll wake up.
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Re. Hollow
23rd Jun 2024 9:07am
Dear K,
That’s my girl, “They” won’t take you down today! This piece reminds me of just how much fear and insecurity there is among people. I loved the wish of grace for the perps and a wave as you move onward. Fab recording as per! H🌷
That’s my girl, “They” won’t take you down today! This piece reminds me of just how much fear and insecurity there is among people. I loved the wish of grace for the perps and a wave as you move onward. Fab recording as per! H🌷
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Re: Re. Hollow
24th Jun 2024 00:43am
Thank you, H. They certainly won't take me down or make me afraid! There's a lot to work out about how to move onward, but I'm looking forward to some freedom.
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Re. Hollow
7th Jul 2024 9:11pm
Damn how you hit them high notes!!!
This is cool as hell. I got a gothic feel for it, and could see the music being a deeper tone, to add bass to your secretive sweet voice. It's lulling, like leading sailors into the rocks.
Your talent is obvious and very enjoyable, ya know.
This is cool as hell. I got a gothic feel for it, and could see the music being a deeper tone, to add bass to your secretive sweet voice. It's lulling, like leading sailors into the rocks.
Your talent is obvious and very enjoyable, ya know.
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Re: Re. Hollow
14th Jul 2024 8:58pm
Gosh, I'm blushing... Thank you for all those kind words!
I'm doing my best to just put stuff out there when it happens, and quit obsessing about whether it's "good" enough for the anonymous strangers I share it with. But this is one that I also shared with "real" people, with my real name attached, because it relates to a real situation that many of us are in together. It was a horrifying leap. It didn't get a ton of attention, but I'm still alive, so I guess that proves that sharing my creations isn't actually fatal. Go figure! LOL
Thanks for being such an enthusiastic supporter. I appreciate it.
❤k
I'm doing my best to just put stuff out there when it happens, and quit obsessing about whether it's "good" enough for the anonymous strangers I share it with. But this is one that I also shared with "real" people, with my real name attached, because it relates to a real situation that many of us are in together. It was a horrifying leap. It didn't get a ton of attention, but I'm still alive, so I guess that proves that sharing my creations isn't actually fatal. Go figure! LOL
Thanks for being such an enthusiastic supporter. I appreciate it.
❤k
Re. Hollow
12th Aug 2024 2:29am
Re: Re. Hollow
12th Aug 2024 1:22pm
Gosh, I haven't got an A++ since I was teacher's pet in grade 4.... !! Thank you.
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Re: Re. Hollow
12th Aug 2024 1:34pm
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12th Aug 2024 3:25pm