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Mistake
I try to think of ways not to hate.
I try to sleep through the pain.
I try to eat when I'm not hungry.
I try to be a better me.
I hope when I fail, you forget.
I hope when I frown you don't see it.
I hope when I yell you don't believe it.
I hope when we hangout you don't regret it.
I wish I had more to give.
I wish I wasn't so selfish.
I wish I weren't your reason to live
I wish responsibilities didn't exist.
I won't give up on you.
I won't allow the tears I made break through.
I won't force us to always argue.
I won't allow our love to be untrue.
I try to sleep through the pain.
I try to eat when I'm not hungry.
I try to be a better me.
I hope when I fail, you forget.
I hope when I frown you don't see it.
I hope when I yell you don't believe it.
I hope when we hangout you don't regret it.
I wish I had more to give.
I wish I wasn't so selfish.
I wish I weren't your reason to live
I wish responsibilities didn't exist.
I won't give up on you.
I won't allow the tears I made break through.
I won't force us to always argue.
I won't allow our love to be untrue.
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Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 10:46am
This one is an honest exposition of one's self
So poetic, love the way you write
So poetic, love the way you write
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Re: Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 10:52am
It's the classic feeling of "everything I do is wrong and please don't hate me" haha thanks for the read!
Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 10:57am
This is also quite revealing. Many can relate to this piece. I certainly can. Regret is a strong feeling when it can eat you from the inside. It will rear it's ugly face and can wreck you.
Great write. Nicely presented!
Great write. Nicely presented!
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Re: Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 11:06am
You are too kind. I thought of it as more uplifting but it ended up being sad lol
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16th Jun 2024 11:06am
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16th Jun 2024 11:11am
Oh yeah. I feel like they should rename all poetry sites and books that. Really sums them up after a while lol
Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 11:23am
"I wish I weren't your reason to live"
That's quite a line.
Guys will do that. It gets in the way of progress.
Outstanding self examination...
BIG LIKE
That's quite a line.
Guys will do that. It gets in the way of progress.
Outstanding self examination...
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 11:30am
Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 11:45am
I think being natural is the best way to live a good life, all that may alter it, will surely fail.
Living like a flowing stream is not hard, but it will make oneself an example to follow..
Thanks for sharing your quill..
Living like a flowing stream is not hard, but it will make oneself an example to follow..
Thanks for sharing your quill..
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Re: Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 11:48am
Perhaps we don't need to change. But the river always flows the laziest way it can.
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streams are not fast neither slow; they follow naturals course, and speed, its something gained being too much an adept of nature's love..
where we find truth, authenticity, and true love on many a level..
Thats' for sure.
We cant form thoughts and rules before tested on natures crterion..
thank you for the reply ASD...
where we find truth, authenticity, and true love on many a level..
Thats' for sure.
We cant form thoughts and rules before tested on natures crterion..
thank you for the reply ASD...
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Re. Mistake
16th Jun 2024 4:53pm
I wish you write more of this…
I hope you know this went right through my heart…
I hope you know this went right through my heart…
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16th Jun 2024 9:18pm
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9th Jul 2024 9:11pm
Thank you for reading! I'm surprised how many people this connected with
Re. Mistake
2nd Oct 2024 2:01am
I am sure you contributed a lot. You are strong one.
I can feel.your pain.
I can feel.your pain.
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Re: Re. Mistake
2nd Oct 2024 2:10am
Thank you. It is not easy being a disappointment to someone and trying to fix it
Re: Re. Mistake
2nd Oct 2024 2:13am
My advice , you are not an object to someone. You are not a machine who has to perform with a command. Don't be disappointed with yourself.
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Re: Re. Mistake
2nd Oct 2024 2:17am
I agree, but when it's your kid, that dynamic completely changes. Which is what this poem is about! Lol