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Origami
What I remember most
are your delicate
fingers
creasing the edges,
folding and turning,
twisting and shaping
the everything of
anything you
touch
into all the different
creatures of
creation
until finally and at last,
I rest warm in your
empathetic palm,
panting and thumping,
dripping with your
immaculate essence,
almost as beautiful
and imaginative
as you.
Then,
with your angular jaw
and your intimate lines,
you released me
like a paper sparrow.
Today
in your absence
I am falling…
an unraveled leaflet,
wingless and helpless,
spinning and swirling
to the ground -
your diligent hands,
your careful expression
still folding and creasing
in your omnipotent
heaven.
are your delicate
fingers
creasing the edges,
folding and turning,
twisting and shaping
the everything of
anything you
touch
into all the different
creatures of
creation
until finally and at last,
I rest warm in your
empathetic palm,
panting and thumping,
dripping with your
immaculate essence,
almost as beautiful
and imaginative
as you.
Then,
with your angular jaw
and your intimate lines,
you released me
like a paper sparrow.
Today
in your absence
I am falling…
an unraveled leaflet,
wingless and helpless,
spinning and swirling
to the ground -
your diligent hands,
your careful expression
still folding and creasing
in your omnipotent
heaven.
Published 27th Apr 2024
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27th Apr 2024 5:38pm
28th Apr 2024 6:07pm
27th Apr 2024 9:12pm
I’m not going to comment on this… each time I do comment I get crumbled into an origami salad here in DU
28th Apr 2024 6:08pm
Not by me, you don't. I'm a meat and potatoes girl. So, drop it on my plate, big boy.
27th Apr 2024 9:17pm
This starts out so beautiful. You remember the fingers? Aww. Love it Fia xoxo
28th Apr 2024 6:10pm
28th Apr 2024 2:23am
Well wrought, the telling of everything to nothing. Love's artistry is always in the touch. Unrequited not cliched, but fresh in the telling - and hopefully, fictional. 🌼
28th Apr 2024 6:11pm
I think we've all had a taste of this in our lives, Joe. I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reading!
29th Apr 2024 2:28am
This is quite good. It has a simple eloquence that shows your intuitive psyche. This type of write shows a reader how you're wired inside. The value in the grand simplicity of two people. How it should be, anyway.
Obviously, you have a very good skill at writing. Capturing the moment and putting it to words so precisely.
Really well done.
Obviously, you have a very good skill at writing. Capturing the moment and putting it to words so precisely.
Really well done.
30th Apr 2024 3:37am
5th Jul 2024 2:51am
Very cool! I just recently started doing origami with my daughter. Enjoyed the subject and play on words
5th Jul 2024 9:20pm
Thank you so much, ASD! I'm no good at it, but I'm so glad you liked the poem. Thanks for reading and commenting!
