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Unsaid
I fall over words unsaid
Never spoken
And never read
Just trying to find them
Leaves my heart constricting
In rebellion to my emotions
When I don’t know how to say…
Don’t misunderstand me
We aren’t talking about love
You’ll never catch me pining
For some kind of three legged
Relationship with the internet
When you just don’t turn me on
In that boy-girl kind of way
And I’ve no desire to bonk you
Cyberly or otherwise
It’s all platonic
And yet…
You matter to my heart
To my edgy sanity
And truly I’ve lost count
Of every time you’ve unknowingly
Pulled me back up
From the edge of the abyss
That resides within me
That has been begging
Me back into the bottle
Would it be too grand to say
You’ve more than once
Saved my life?
Though I loathe to admit
That I rely a little too much
On the laughs and your strange company
And that sometimes, just sometimes…
I miss you when you’re gone
And that I really do hate
Your compliments
Because I’m not quite sure
How to take them
And so I fall
Over words unsaid
Never spoken
And never read
To reach some kind of conclusion
That friend is not a dirty word
And that I’m not weak
For needing you, as a friend
While I honestly hope we never
Have this conversation
© Indie Adams 2012
Never spoken
And never read
Just trying to find them
Leaves my heart constricting
In rebellion to my emotions
When I don’t know how to say…
Don’t misunderstand me
We aren’t talking about love
You’ll never catch me pining
For some kind of three legged
Relationship with the internet
When you just don’t turn me on
In that boy-girl kind of way
And I’ve no desire to bonk you
Cyberly or otherwise
It’s all platonic
And yet…
You matter to my heart
To my edgy sanity
And truly I’ve lost count
Of every time you’ve unknowingly
Pulled me back up
From the edge of the abyss
That resides within me
That has been begging
Me back into the bottle
Would it be too grand to say
You’ve more than once
Saved my life?
Though I loathe to admit
That I rely a little too much
On the laughs and your strange company
And that sometimes, just sometimes…
I miss you when you’re gone
And that I really do hate
Your compliments
Because I’m not quite sure
How to take them
And so I fall
Over words unsaid
Never spoken
And never read
To reach some kind of conclusion
That friend is not a dirty word
And that I’m not weak
For needing you, as a friend
While I honestly hope we never
Have this conversation
© Indie Adams 2012
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just saw this in the forum
2nd May 2012 10:04am
and Indie, it is so perfect... i hope they appreciate this as much as i just did. sometimes a distant platonic friendship like this means more than we'd have expected it to. brilliant, just how you roll. [:
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re: just saw this in the forum
2nd May 2012 10:10am
Thank you Jesta :) bit nervous about posting this, but I figured just go with it.
...
2nd May 2012 12:26pm
The repetition in the first and last verse makes it really strong and being not much of a fan of rhyming, this worked very well. Good words Miss Indie.
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re: ...
2nd May 2012 11:25pm
Thank you Mr Alptraum, I'm a fan of repeating the beginning at the end if I feel the poem needs it, and I really wanted to emphasise the point I wanted to make in this poem. Glad you enjoyed the write. :)
your nervousness
2nd May 2012 2:33pm
comes through in such an endearing way. Special piece you have here. true vulnerability is such a strength when you write as well as you do
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re: your nervousness
lol, thank you Mr Baron, for your feedback. Clearly not the easiest one of my writes, I'm just glad I was able to convey my emotions clearly and coherently. :)
Indie
2nd May 2012 3:38pm
this is an honest, beautiful poem and i'm sure it will touch the heart of your intended..peace Crim :)
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re: Indie
2nd May 2012 11:30pm
Thank you Crim, it did indeed make the muse of this particular poem so happy I wanted to punch them in the arm and steal a packet of their cigarettes, and I don't even smoke... anymore.
Beautifully Written
2nd May 2012 4:44pm
I don't have much more to add than what has been said. I just wanted to say what a beautiful piece I think this is.
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re: Beautifully Written
2nd May 2012 11:32pm
:)
2nd May 2012 6:03pm
Indie
I wish I could say something other than 'wow.'
You poured well into this. Everything.
Write on,
Sumeet
I wish I could say something other than 'wow.'
You poured well into this. Everything.
Write on,
Sumeet
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re: :)
2nd May 2012 11:33pm
:)
3rd May 2012 00:13am
Excellent and brutally honest. I think you have more pure guts to speak than most of us combined
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Fantastic.
3rd May 2012 2:44am
It's funny how sometimes the unspoken words carry the most weight. Beautifully captured.
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re: Fantastic.
3rd May 2012 6:02am
I completely agreed, often what we don't say is bigger than what we do say. Thank you Scattered Thoughts, for reading and commenting. Much appreciated :)
I wish to thank you . . . beautiful spirit
8th May 2012 10:55pm
I don't know you and vice versa lol, but I can feel your very essence in this touching poem, thank you . . . :) YOU HAVE SOME GUTS GIRL! Peace, wbug94
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re: I wish to thank you . . . beautiful spirit
8th May 2012 11:02pm
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