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Close your eyes and we’ll pretend it never happened…
One…
Two…
Three…
I’m still here, you’re still here and you’re looking at me
With such disdain, no empathy in your voice
When you say “It happens”
And I’m sorry to disappoint, but I didn’t have it coming
Sixteen years old, my innocence shattered
Why didn’t you tell me all those things I didn’t know?
And I’m not special that it happened to me
The older I get the common it seems to be that men
Have so much trouble keeping it in their pants
So here I am, and you’re looking at me
Like the great disappointment I am, ‘cause I’ve never amounted to anything
Still running from that look, that sends chill up my spine in teenage terror
Eleven years on and it still brings tears to my eyes
The memory of you face, when you knew and offered me nothing
More than hollow words and a look of disdain for your daughter in pain
Close your eyes and we’ll pretend it never happened…
A smile at your lips, tense as the avoidance in your gaze
While I’m struggling to choke down a history that won’t die
‘Cause I know your secret, and it’s fucked up that you think it’s okay
That men should have that power…
© Indie Adams 2012
One…
Two…
Three…
I’m still here, you’re still here and you’re looking at me
With such disdain, no empathy in your voice
When you say “It happens”
And I’m sorry to disappoint, but I didn’t have it coming
Sixteen years old, my innocence shattered
Why didn’t you tell me all those things I didn’t know?
And I’m not special that it happened to me
The older I get the common it seems to be that men
Have so much trouble keeping it in their pants
So here I am, and you’re looking at me
Like the great disappointment I am, ‘cause I’ve never amounted to anything
Still running from that look, that sends chill up my spine in teenage terror
Eleven years on and it still brings tears to my eyes
The memory of you face, when you knew and offered me nothing
More than hollow words and a look of disdain for your daughter in pain
Close your eyes and we’ll pretend it never happened…
A smile at your lips, tense as the avoidance in your gaze
While I’m struggling to choke down a history that won’t die
‘Cause I know your secret, and it’s fucked up that you think it’s okay
That men should have that power…
© Indie Adams 2012
Published 2nd May 2012
| Edited 25th Nov 2013
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Crim, thanks for your comment :) I'm glad I was able to convey a hard hitting topic without it needing an extreme content warning. Peace, Indie.
You have, once again, produced a work of quite outstanding magnitude. The subject is unequivocally hideous, horrendous, but you have managed to place your anger and pain perfectly. I applaud and commend you for the bravery of this write.
I am always thankful to you for sharing your prodigious tallent.
D x
I am always thankful to you for sharing your prodigious tallent.
D x
2nd May 2012 6:10am
Thank you very much Waggy for your comments and feedback. Much appreciated, and you're welcome. Thank you for reading. x)
2nd May 2012 3:46am
Indie
A power write. It reminded me of Fellini,
especially 'City of Women' in its rawness.
Hard hitting-scathing-unapologetic. Hard poetry.
As hard it gets.
Respect,
Sumeet
p.s- Being a man I have often found myself fumbling for an answer when a woman asks me
the question you have raised. Sigh.
A power write. It reminded me of Fellini,
especially 'City of Women' in its rawness.
Hard hitting-scathing-unapologetic. Hard poetry.
As hard it gets.
Respect,
Sumeet
p.s- Being a man I have often found myself fumbling for an answer when a woman asks me
the question you have raised. Sigh.
2nd May 2012 6:29am
Sumeet, thank you.
I can imagine it would make any decent man fumble for words when presented with such a question by any woman.
I've not come across Fellini's City of Women, though after googling it, I'm now intrigued and might have to hunt it down now. It looks like a fascinating film.
I can imagine it would make any decent man fumble for words when presented with such a question by any woman.
I've not come across Fellini's City of Women, though after googling it, I'm now intrigued and might have to hunt it down now. It looks like a fascinating film.
2nd May 2012 5:04am
pretty hard hitting there. you make us such the voyeur, as your therapeutic observations take form. (I can only hope i spose that you are indeed therapitized by this). I think it is exceptional that the villian here is the mother, who thinks "That men should have that power…" rather then the men. not to say that the men who assault women aren't, but i feel this is the road less traveled.
2nd May 2012 6:24am
Thank you very much Mr Baron for your feedback :)
Any way this topic is looked at, it's uncomfortable for people to read, though as readers we are indeed sometimes voyeurs into the minds of others.
I could talk about this topic for hours, on an intellectual level, from how the legal system belittles women, to how some men feel justified in taking what they want from women to sate their "needs", right through to how some women (even the gen x and y) validate that other women are asking for it, because of a, b and c... and end with how some of the older generation still believe it is something a woman is obligated to give it, or have it taken from them, especially in a marriage.
In an ideal world we should all be able to walk around naked without the threat to having someone try and seduce us into an alley, or anywhere else just to appease a physical sensation. Sadly we don't live in an ideal world. And I'm going to stop write here, or I might just produce DUP's longest reply.
Again thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It's much appreciated.
Any way this topic is looked at, it's uncomfortable for people to read, though as readers we are indeed sometimes voyeurs into the minds of others.
I could talk about this topic for hours, on an intellectual level, from how the legal system belittles women, to how some men feel justified in taking what they want from women to sate their "needs", right through to how some women (even the gen x and y) validate that other women are asking for it, because of a, b and c... and end with how some of the older generation still believe it is something a woman is obligated to give it, or have it taken from them, especially in a marriage.
In an ideal world we should all be able to walk around naked without the threat to having someone try and seduce us into an alley, or anywhere else just to appease a physical sensation. Sadly we don't live in an ideal world. And I'm going to stop write here, or I might just produce DUP's longest reply.
Again thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It's much appreciated.
2nd May 2012 1:39pm
thank you for this peek into an arm of cruelty i haven't had the severe displeasure of experiencing. very hard to take, as my own mother always felt unsteady on the subject to me. protective of her kids, but almost like she, herself, owed that duty to whomever she was bound, and that men deserved a certain power. these shorter pieces of yours are really reaching me today... you bolster them in a different way than the longer ones, and whatever strings you're pulling, it's working.
2nd May 2012 11:26pm
You're very welcome Jesta, thank you so much for your comments. Your feedback means a lot to me, as one of the well-respected writers here in DUP. :)
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