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Life Seen Through A Window
My window is a vision
a doorstep away
I gently gaze out,
see tomorrows & today
Across the street,
their young family resides
Man, woman, child
hiding their family inside
One day the woman
birthed a new baby boy
Expressions were clear,
completely filled, overjoyed
Weeks turned to months,
I've watched as he's grown
only made possible,
as I work now from home
Infant to toddler,
the little one now walks
windows were open
amazed how he talks
He leaves in the morning
mom drives him to school
time and life intertwine
soon, I’ll be an old fool
The boy has seen me,
doesn’t know me too well
Will he look through his own window
to share in this story I tell
a doorstep away
I gently gaze out,
see tomorrows & today
Across the street,
their young family resides
Man, woman, child
hiding their family inside
One day the woman
birthed a new baby boy
Expressions were clear,
completely filled, overjoyed
Weeks turned to months,
I've watched as he's grown
only made possible,
as I work now from home
Infant to toddler,
the little one now walks
windows were open
amazed how he talks
He leaves in the morning
mom drives him to school
time and life intertwine
soon, I’ll be an old fool
The boy has seen me,
doesn’t know me too well
Will he look through his own window
to share in this story I tell
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1st Feb 2024 11:27am
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1st Feb 2024 11:28am
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1st Feb 2024 11:54am
That was a really great look at the passing of time. I love how you composed it. There was a lot of depth within your simplicity. Well done!
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1st Feb 2024 12:29pm
Thank you very much. Simple is my middle name. None of my poems will ever get to intricate in wording. I appreciate you reviewing & liking it.
Re. Life Seen Through A Window
1st Feb 2024 12:43pm
It is the things unwritten in the pauses that make your poems pleasing to the reader as it spurns one to imagine and create themselves into the story. Nicely done.
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Re. Life Seen Through A Window
1st Feb 2024 12:51pm
Thank you so much for the positive review. I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
Re. Life Seen Through A Window
1st Feb 2024 1:50pm
Love this! One of my favorite pastimes growing up was trying to figure out and even inventing other's life stories, just from seeing them as I passed by.
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Re. Life Seen Through A Window
1st Feb 2024 1:51pm
Yes, we all have a unique story and one way is what you are doing, honestly escaping into the wonderful world of daring poetry and creating new fantasies. BRAVO. Hugs and love.
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1st Feb 2024 1:53pm
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Re. Life Seen Through A Window
1st Feb 2024 1:53pm
I agree. I've done this countless times but never had so much time to stare out a window. Now I do, due to working from home.
Thank you for reading. This is kind of wrapped up with my last poem "Job". These two ideas were thought of during the same day. Was going to incorporate the two. Glad I didn't.
Thank you for reading. This is kind of wrapped up with my last poem "Job". These two ideas were thought of during the same day. Was going to incorporate the two. Glad I didn't.
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1st Feb 2024 6:53pm
Thank you critiquing my work. I appreciate the feedback. Truly I do.
Keith
Keith
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