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run-on life
somebody asked me
why don't I use punctuation
or capitalize the beginning of a line
apparently they found it offensive
lazy...or some such nonsense
well...the answer is this
my writing reflects my life
I write as I think
and my experience of existence...
...seems to have always been one long run-on sentence
it all runs madly together...
...with the occasional ellipses
while the system is still loading
...before throwing me back into the chaos
where I'm forced to sort through the rubble
trying to make sense of it
until this is what you get
emotions sorted into verses
with the random pause...
...to emphasize a particular thought
be thankful I use spaces between words...
...although not always...
I'm not at all pretentious
...just speaking the way I process
one big mess of words...
...spread...
...exactly the way they emerge
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Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:09pm
Girl, run-on all you want. In life, in your poetry, in everything. It’s beautifully uniquely you. And thank God for that.
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Re: Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:17pm
I am what I am...a catastrophic disaster. 😂 But I own it unapologetically. Thank you so much for such a great comment!
Re: Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:17pm
Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:12pm
Re: Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:18pm
Is that what it's called? I just write what comes out in the order it escapes my mind. Thank you so much!
Re: Re. run-on life
22nd Nov 2023 2:08pm
Re. run-on life
Sure, you've let your punctuation hair down, but that's not the end of the editorial world:)
Much punctuation exists just to indicate where the dramatic conversation pauses are supposed to be, and even the best writers mess that up from time to time, which is why everyone needs an editor.
But let's focus on what you do very well. You make the most out of the tree dot ellipsis points...and I just love that, because I think that's the go to pause indicator whenever you're not sure about all the others, like periods, commas (which kind, Oxford or serial?), colons, and semi-colons.
When in doubt...use the dots! They are totally valid, and you will see them in almost all of my poems.
I get the run-on life thing, but your poems are totally comprehensible:)
Much punctuation exists just to indicate where the dramatic conversation pauses are supposed to be, and even the best writers mess that up from time to time, which is why everyone needs an editor.
But let's focus on what you do very well. You make the most out of the tree dot ellipsis points...and I just love that, because I think that's the go to pause indicator whenever you're not sure about all the others, like periods, commas (which kind, Oxford or serial?), colons, and semi-colons.
When in doubt...use the dots! They are totally valid, and you will see them in almost all of my poems.
I get the run-on life thing, but your poems are totally comprehensible:)
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Re: Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:39pm
I use those 3 dots a lot. Possibly where I'd pause in speaking to finish organizing the thought I'm trying to convey. Thank you so much for the well thought out comment! I appreciate the feedback
Re: Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:50pm
First things first...get the words out onto the page.
You can, and should, always organize them later. I understand that a lot of medieval textual works were written without punctuation, or even spacing, because it was expected that the reader would know.
Hey if you ever need pretentious input...I'm your man!
You can, and should, always organize them later. I understand that a lot of medieval textual works were written without punctuation, or even spacing, because it was expected that the reader would know.
Hey if you ever need pretentious input...I'm your man!
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Re. run-on life
20th Nov 2023 10:56pm
I envy you
The comfort to create a style and stick to it...
I kinda like no punctuation
Bravo Willow
The comfort to create a style and stick to it...
I kinda like no punctuation
Bravo Willow
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Re: Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 9:38pm
The one thing I'm really good at is being me! My poetry has to be me too. I never have to overthink my writing. I do enough of that out in the Big World. 😊
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21st Nov 2023 9:58pm
Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 4:42am
you are awesome thankyou I am inspired to take a psychedelic journey and write some memories on the mystical now much gratitude
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21st Nov 2023 9:39pm
Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 6:22am
Ahhh.. the way they flow is the way they go
You know I'm feeling this
The beautiful struggle is what I call it
Such is poetry
You know I'm feeling this
The beautiful struggle is what I call it
Such is poetry
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Re: Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 9:40pm
It goes where it goes in the manner most familiar. Organized chaos is mine!
Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 11:43am
I totally get this. Sometimes the line break is all the punctuation you need! Personally, I'm all over the place with punctuation - sometimes I use it, sometimes not - as the words move me. But, it's never about laziness... that complaint is utter bullshit. The thoughts come how they come, and we write how we write! You do you.
By the way, you're not a disaster. You're a creative tempest, attuned to what's under the surface. It's OK. 🙂
❤️k
By the way, you're not a disaster. You're a creative tempest, attuned to what's under the surface. It's OK. 🙂
❤️k
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Re: Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 9:41pm
Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 9:55pm
Grammar is one in a long line of stifling unnecessary evils. So far I’ve just read this example ( I’ll read more) and I found it delightful and dare I say whimsy. Good stuff, I enjoyed thoroughly!
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Re: Re. run-on life
21st Nov 2023 11:06pm
I love this comment! I have a hard time with restriction...gives me a headache. So I just march to my own chaotic beat 😊