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Surrender
Listen closely, sweet maiden
Can you hear it?
Strain if you must, to listen
Welcome the song of magic on the wind
Surrender
As gentle waves give over to the Moon,
So give yourself to her sacred guidance
Stand closely, dear mother
Can you feel it?
Dig if you must, to touch
Grasp the light from deep within
Surrender
As Summer succumbs to Autumn
So give yourself to the ever-changing seasons
Look closely, wise crone
Can you see it?
Lean in if you must, to behold
View the beauty of all that is before you
As the chrysalis contains the transformation
So give yourself to the power of rebirth
Can you hear it?
Strain if you must, to listen
Welcome the song of magic on the wind
Surrender
As gentle waves give over to the Moon,
So give yourself to her sacred guidance
Stand closely, dear mother
Can you feel it?
Dig if you must, to touch
Grasp the light from deep within
Surrender
As Summer succumbs to Autumn
So give yourself to the ever-changing seasons
Look closely, wise crone
Can you see it?
Lean in if you must, to behold
View the beauty of all that is before you
As the chrysalis contains the transformation
So give yourself to the power of rebirth
Published 26th Oct 2023
| Edited 27th Oct 2023
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26th Oct 2023 2:57am
What a wonderful, uplifting write you have here. And our reward to get to read it. The flow is gentle, yet sure. Like wisdom!
It's a treat to read this tonight. Thanks for the mood boost!
It's a treat to read this tonight. Thanks for the mood boost!
26th Oct 2023 3:07pm
26th Oct 2023 3:42am
Beautifully written and stanza'd. So very happy to see your words once again.
26th Oct 2023 3:07pm
The muse is such a fickle creature lol. I’m so glad to be writing again. Thank you for being here ❤️
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27th Oct 2023 6:17pm
great words, smooth flow, and much to ponder on life's wisdom.
stay happy Luna,
stay happy Luna,
27th Oct 2023 7:46pm
28th Oct 2023 12:55pm
Hoi hoi
Oh, so sweet to write something as uplifting as this one.
Thank you for writing and posting!
Kind regards, Gus
Oh, so sweet to write something as uplifting as this one.
Thank you for writing and posting!
Kind regards, Gus
28th Oct 2023 2:07pm
28th Oct 2023 4:43pm
Whether it's the butterfly or phoenix, this really propels the heart, renewing ourselves on the inside.
Amazing pen.
Amazing pen.
28th Oct 2023 5:34pm
Dear L,
Your gracious gentle style still resounds and resonates with all who read you. The beauty in this for me is two fold between life and nature. So prayerful and serene. Absolutely gorgeous. H🌷
Your gracious gentle style still resounds and resonates with all who read you. The beauty in this for me is two fold between life and nature. So prayerful and serene. Absolutely gorgeous. H🌷
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21st Jan 2024 1:33pm
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2nd Feb 2024 11:07pm
The repetition keeps the dialog consistant. This is beautifully done, Luna.
3rd Feb 2024 6:00pm
28th Mar 2024 7:35pm
This poem beautifully captures the essence of surrendering to the natural cycles of life and the transformative power of embracing change. The imagery of the maiden, mother, and crone symbolizes the different stages of life and the wisdom gained through each phase. The use of sensory language - hearing, feeling, and seeing - invites the reader to immerse themselves fully in the experience described.
The repetition of "surrender" emphasizes the importance of yielding to the flow of life and relinquishing control. Each stanza depicts a different aspect of surrender - to magic, to guidance, to change, and to transformation - reflecting the multifaceted nature of this concept.
Overall, the poem encourages readers to embrace the beauty and inevitability of change, reminding them of the power found in surrendering to the natural rhythms of existence.
