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Adelphina
Upon my heart, a gentle tapping
of two lovebirds uncaged
Their wings overlapping
Beckoned forth, my desire's true
Have faith in that it beats for you
Surrounded in flutters, quickly centered
The hum of love so surely entered
to my ready heart, to grasp ahold
of these truths revealed, to unfold
In a song of joy, it's one of faith
that within this passion, it's love we make
Rise, my Adelphina
I see your love's a phoenix
You're etched from rainbows' every ribbon
You're the angel born for my religion
As you hold me, as night surrounds
As your wings blanket me all around
It is your heart, that inner song
That beats with mine, as pure and strong
In rapture's grasp, we vow no end
Chest to breast, to ascend
To Heaven's clouds that pillow our fall
and arise as one, we heed the call
to fall in love, falling higher
Rising above, in passion's fire
Beyond our bodies physical test
-Such a limited realm, we've left
This gentle murmur, upon my heart
Fluttering wings as we embark
on a journey together; Lovers eloping
As the songbird's cage is thrown open.
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Author's Note
I was and still am here in DUP for the camaraderie of creative writing amongst us all. I never expected to find everything I ever looked for, in one woman. She's an incredible person.
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Re. Adelphina
14th Aug 2023 4:31am
My, my, the way you rhyme. That is a gift not everyone has.
Excellent.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Excellent.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 1:34am
How's you!?
Thank you, this one was a task! Lol. I used to do rhymes a lot back in the day, but got away from them and did more prose stuff. Thus one was tricky because of how I continued some of the rhymes in mid sentences. A different approach. I see some tweaking I could do. But, I'm tired! Lol. I almost turned it into more song like. Not that I can sing! That would be really bad. Lol
Thank you, this one was a task! Lol. I used to do rhymes a lot back in the day, but got away from them and did more prose stuff. Thus one was tricky because of how I continued some of the rhymes in mid sentences. A different approach. I see some tweaking I could do. But, I'm tired! Lol. I almost turned it into more song like. Not that I can sing! That would be really bad. Lol
Re. Adelphina
14th Aug 2023 4:47am
good evening dearest Styxian and Adelphina I couldn't be happier this is beautiful...dearest poet she is one of my favorite poetesses here this is so tender and loving 💕
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Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 1:40am
Hey Crimson!
Thanks for the nod of approval. I figured I'd do something a bit different for once. If i ever piss her off, I will just pull this poem out and use it as a coupon to make up ! Lol.
Well that and jewelry never fails either!
I'm glad you're happy for us, so are we!
And it's good to see you posting in DUP again.
Thanks for the nod of approval. I figured I'd do something a bit different for once. If i ever piss her off, I will just pull this poem out and use it as a coupon to make up ! Lol.
Well that and jewelry never fails either!
I'm glad you're happy for us, so are we!
And it's good to see you posting in DUP again.
Re. Adelphina
14th Aug 2023 4:50am
Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 2:04am
Hiya!
Obviously it was writing that allowed us to "meet" initially. And writing is very important to both of us. I like to dabble in rhymes a little bit still. It's getting harder for me!
I appreciate the kind comment!
I hope your trip was awesome as well!
Obviously it was writing that allowed us to "meet" initially. And writing is very important to both of us. I like to dabble in rhymes a little bit still. It's getting harder for me!
I appreciate the kind comment!
I hope your trip was awesome as well!
Re. Adelphina
14th Aug 2023 12:59pm
Love abounds
It's as easy as it sounds
Your heart in a whirl
If you got the right girl
BIG LIKE
It's as easy as it sounds
Your heart in a whirl
If you got the right girl
BIG LIKE
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Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 2:07am
Ooh look at you busting out the rhyme! Lol.
Thanks amigo. This write took some serious work! But I wanted to step up a bit and do something away from my norm.
And yeah, it's all pretty easy going with her. No issues, no iffy moments. It's kinda wild how alike we are. Our humor is brutally fun! Lol. She's witty as hell. Who knew!
Thanks amigo. This write took some serious work! But I wanted to step up a bit and do something away from my norm.
And yeah, it's all pretty easy going with her. No issues, no iffy moments. It's kinda wild how alike we are. Our humor is brutally fun! Lol. She's witty as hell. Who knew!
Re. Adelphina
15th Aug 2023 1:40am
Awwhh,
I am your Adelphina:)
This year has been a whirlwind. Lots of drastic changes.
Some scary - some not.
You were the surprise:) I've known you for a long time now
and you never left my side through everything.
Thanks to you I'm in a place of love and happiness.
I had all day to think about what to say and how to reply.
What I say here can't measure up to the beauty of this poem. All I can say is
that I'm so ready to start this journey with you. Wherever it goes:)
And I love you so so much:)
You named a poem after me!! What?!!!!
hahahaha
I am your Adelphina:)
This year has been a whirlwind. Lots of drastic changes.
Some scary - some not.
You were the surprise:) I've known you for a long time now
and you never left my side through everything.
Thanks to you I'm in a place of love and happiness.
I had all day to think about what to say and how to reply.
What I say here can't measure up to the beauty of this poem. All I can say is
that I'm so ready to start this journey with you. Wherever it goes:)
And I love you so so much:)
You named a poem after me!! What?!!!!
hahahaha
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Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 2:18am
Well the poem can't measure up to the beauty of you. It's a ticket stub but you're the concert.
Yeah I finally actually used your name this time, seeing how we are pubic... I mean public! All public now!
When you have a goal, nothing gets in the way. It's all just stuff. Stuff happens.
Remember, it isn't where you are today, it's where do you want to be a year from now. That's where we look, over any obstacles.
It's a beautiful title for my poem. Why settle for a lesser one? And your name fits you perfectly.
So, about that book cover..... what !!!
Yeah I finally actually used your name this time, seeing how we are pubic... I mean public! All public now!
When you have a goal, nothing gets in the way. It's all just stuff. Stuff happens.
Remember, it isn't where you are today, it's where do you want to be a year from now. That's where we look, over any obstacles.
It's a beautiful title for my poem. Why settle for a lesser one? And your name fits you perfectly.
So, about that book cover..... what !!!
Re. Adelphina
15th Aug 2023 4:36pm
What a beautiful ode to such a lovely and amazing woman. :)
To have poetry written about you is so touching...
Knowing that you impacted someone so deeply and intimately.
And this is truly a gorgeous reflection of your feelings.
Anyone can see the love and passion which wrote this.
I see your love's phoenix on spectacular display here.
Often we are beaten down by love but when it rises again...
That passion truly elevates the heart and soul.
And it allows you to spread your wings and fly high.
It's such a beautiful thing to see and song to hear.
Thank you for sharing those feelings with us.
And the note sums it up perfectly...
To have poetry written about you is so touching...
Knowing that you impacted someone so deeply and intimately.
And this is truly a gorgeous reflection of your feelings.
Anyone can see the love and passion which wrote this.
I see your love's phoenix on spectacular display here.
Often we are beaten down by love but when it rises again...
That passion truly elevates the heart and soul.
And it allows you to spread your wings and fly high.
It's such a beautiful thing to see and song to hear.
Thank you for sharing those feelings with us.
And the note sums it up perfectly...
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Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 2:28am
Hey you Scooby!
What a poetic comment!
Thanks a bunch! She is really incredible actually. And I appreciate it that you and a few others can speak highly of her, of us, and of "this". There isn't going to be a breakup, so there won't be any nasty revenge poems eventually either. Lol. This is the real deal.
I'm pretty private with myself in real life. Kinda stoic too much, except with a few close friends. I'm a tree more often than not. Lol. But she really draws me out of that, with her humor and kindness. All of it.
I can't remember being this naturally happy before. I don't think I ever was. To have it now is a blessing.
Anyway! I appreciate your cool comment, and we appreciate you!
What a poetic comment!
Thanks a bunch! She is really incredible actually. And I appreciate it that you and a few others can speak highly of her, of us, and of "this". There isn't going to be a breakup, so there won't be any nasty revenge poems eventually either. Lol. This is the real deal.
I'm pretty private with myself in real life. Kinda stoic too much, except with a few close friends. I'm a tree more often than not. Lol. But she really draws me out of that, with her humor and kindness. All of it.
I can't remember being this naturally happy before. I don't think I ever was. To have it now is a blessing.
Anyway! I appreciate your cool comment, and we appreciate you!
Re: Re. Adelphina
16th Aug 2023 3:18pm
It feels like so long since I have been called Scooby! lol Just know I love that... It's so cute that it touches by heart. :) It's easy to speak highly of her, you, "this". There better not be any nasty revenge poems damnit. When you have the real deal you need to hold onto that with everything you are. I am definitely private too although I guess some things have been bleeding out slowly. I can definitely see how her humor and kindness would be like an axe digging in deep to your trunk. Getting at all those emotions and all the beauty you hold inside. Everything up until this point has given you the ability to truly experience this happiness and blessing. To share yourself helping both of you grow and live. <3
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Re: Re. Adelphina
20th Aug 2023 2:27am
Thanks Kix. We are going to give it a proper go of things. Lol. I think our humor carries us along through life as individuals, so combining like personalities makes things much smoother all around . We both have a good attitude about life and making the best of things.
And obviously our shared interests in writing. And other stuff....
And obviously our shared interests in writing. And other stuff....
Re. Adelphina
19th Aug 2023 00:38am
Long may your (plural) happiness continue. There's enough shit going on in the world to deal with but it's great knowing that somewhere in this madness, you are both doing ok... & that makes me smile. 👍 😊
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Re: Re. Adelphina
20th Aug 2023 2:31am
Hey Billy. How's you?!
Thanks dude. Like I said above, our shared wit and love of writing is paramount of course. It all blossomed from there. She has a great attitude regardless of negative things. Same as me.
We make a good team for overcoming life's bullshit. Lol
Thanks dude. Like I said above, our shared wit and love of writing is paramount of course. It all blossomed from there. She has a great attitude regardless of negative things. Same as me.
We make a good team for overcoming life's bullshit. Lol
Re. Adelphina
19th Aug 2023 11:24am
Good evening styxian and adelphina, my inspiration from reading this poem has hit the citadel of my rooftop, I think now I'm top cop, and want to heal the world, want to touch a rose, and forgive me but I'm so happy for you this is so sarific so sacred, keep to it, you trust each other " the murmur" is true and you got it!!! Keep writing I'll follow, Angeliki xxoo
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Re: Re. Adelphina
20th Aug 2023 2:36am
Wow that's a great comment. Thank you!
It's all about writing here in DUP, I know. But, I can write celebratory stuff right?!
We both are good at changing up the themes etc.
I'm looking forward to checking your own material out as well.
Thanks again!
It's all about writing here in DUP, I know. But, I can write celebratory stuff right?!
We both are good at changing up the themes etc.
I'm looking forward to checking your own material out as well.
Thanks again!
Re. Adelphina
20th Aug 2023 8:18pm
Oh, how lovely to see some DUP favourites finding the Real Thing together... and of course you express it so beautifully. 😊
My presence here has been limited & rushed lately, but I had to stop & leave a little congrats to you both. Looking forward to more wonderful love poetry!
❤️❤️k
My presence here has been limited & rushed lately, but I had to stop & leave a little congrats to you both. Looking forward to more wonderful love poetry!
❤️❤️k
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Re: Re. Adelphina
21st Aug 2023 2:08am
What's up!
Thanks for the well wishes, BT. Its quite a news flash perhaps, but it's all positive (like our personalities!) and it's going to be awesome!
The writing will continue too. I've been posting way too much stuff lately. So its time to take a break.
I hope you're doing well out there, you rock star!
Thanks for the well wishes, BT. Its quite a news flash perhaps, but it's all positive (like our personalities!) and it's going to be awesome!
The writing will continue too. I've been posting way too much stuff lately. So its time to take a break.
I hope you're doing well out there, you rock star!
Re. Adelphina
27th Sep 2023 7:38am
I think throughout the whole poem I loved the kind nature and soft touch, it ment alot to me, I feel as though you create magic and dwell on spells, to create money or goodness, or special roots? ! Keep up the good work!
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Re. Adelphina
26th Oct 2023 9:27pm
All the best, to you both! Sometimes love and things drop in our laps, when we aren't looking, but everything happens according to its appointed time
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Re: Re. Adelphina
29th Oct 2023 3:16pm
Thanks Madame. Neither her or me were "looking". It just began to meld into more. Our personalities and our mutual yearning to write are what created the bond.
Once we took the chance and began meeting up, everything blended together like relationships should. It's a wonderful fortune to have.
Once we took the chance and began meeting up, everything blended together like relationships should. It's a wonderful fortune to have.