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Submerged
I'm reading your poems
Hers too
Then back to yours
Wondering why I can't write like that ?
Collectively your poems are ravishing
All of you
Submerged
Kinetic
Supercharged
Intrinsic
As an admirer
My shaft rises than recesses
Only to rise again
Stimulated
Transcending desire
Lust is evermore
I will curse the day that is gone
Time is on my Scorpio side
Poetry
Sensual
Erotic consumption
Hers too
Then back to yours
Wondering why I can't write like that ?
Collectively your poems are ravishing
All of you
Submerged
Kinetic
Supercharged
Intrinsic
As an admirer
My shaft rises than recesses
Only to rise again
Stimulated
Transcending desire
Lust is evermore
I will curse the day that is gone
Time is on my Scorpio side
Poetry
Sensual
Erotic consumption
Author's Note
There are some good goddamn writers on this site. One day I aspire to be one of them ..
Gouache Painting by Poetspeak
Gouache Painting by Poetspeak
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Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 12:50pm
Afternoon PoetSpeak,
How u doing?
Personally,I feel that ur a very good and unique poet/Writer.
Keep creating the way u do.
Take care.
X
How u doing?
Personally,I feel that ur a very good and unique poet/Writer.
Keep creating the way u do.
Take care.
X
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 12:54pm
Good Afternoon W6
I appreciate your support.
Validation at one's craft is ripe fruit !!
Thanks !!
❤
I appreciate your support.
Validation at one's craft is ripe fruit !!
Thanks !!
❤
Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 1:03pm
You read your poems to the ladies then fuck them with all your might. Keep on writing.
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1st Aug 2023 1:05pm
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 1:07pm
Oatmeal on her body and pussy then you eat all up making her go wild and you fuck her into orgasmic bliss over and over again.
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:25pm
I've worked at both my art and recently my writing lately, wanting to improve there. It's a long game as it is said. I enjoy both immensely. I guess I always want my writing to have a more graceful feel but in reality I'm a slice and dice kinda guy so I've got work to do.
Thanks Tim !
Thanks Tim !
Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 2:26pm
Another superb painting. As for the rest: keep on, you do write good stuff. Regards, Robert.
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:26pm
Thanks on the painting.
It's a moody personal favorite.
My hybrid flowers..
Appreciate the nod Robert
It's a moody personal favorite.
My hybrid flowers..
Appreciate the nod Robert
Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 2:49pm
Very cool painting. Lots of admiration going on in this community, including lots for you.
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:27pm
Thanks on the painting and on the writing.
I so feel the love and it means a lot to me.
❤
I so feel the love and it means a lot to me.
❤
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:56pm
Festering insecurity is not uncommon in Scorpios. Just brush it off as the mishegoss it is, and know you are multi-talented and awesome.
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 5:01pm
Wow
I'll take that comment to the bank.
High interest !!
I'm studying other styles and trying to write slower, I think that helps
Thx ❤
I'll take that comment to the bank.
High interest !!
I'm studying other styles and trying to write slower, I think that helps
Thx ❤
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 5:03pm
Keep just enough insecurity to be motivated to hone your craft. That's what I try to do.
Slowing down sounds like a good practice.
Slowing down sounds like a good practice.
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1st Aug 2023 5:15pm
Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 3:13pm
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:28pm
Thank you dimpy.
Your visits are pleasurable, keep writing yourself, you're very good too !!
Your visits are pleasurable, keep writing yourself, you're very good too !!
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1st Aug 2023 4:47pm
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:56pm
Not everyone can write eroticism.
You feel it so you can express that way.
It's a gift..💌
You feel it so you can express that way.
It's a gift..💌
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 4:59pm
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 5:03pm
Yes, that's how your poems read.
A hunger, a desire, a need that needs to be satisfied.
Be wild
Surrender to lust
A hunger, a desire, a need that needs to be satisfied.
Be wild
Surrender to lust
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 5:13pm
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1st Aug 2023 5:16pm
Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 5:49pm
Your poems are direct and full of dominance. I always look forward to reading your words and thoughts. Trust me, they are sexy and arousing, and I’m not just talking about your pics or paintings.
The paintings always intrigue me and I can see where you’re at, I look at your work as a visual poems.
HUGE LIKE😊
The paintings always intrigue me and I can see where you’re at, I look at your work as a visual poems.
HUGE LIKE😊
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 6:05pm
Yes, you have centered in on my approach expertly. I don't know how to be any other way. So .... going with my flow but also taking time to study other styles hoping for some to rub off. There's always room for Jello .... !
Humor !
Mucho thanks Mary
You know how to treat a man !
X
Humor !
Mucho thanks Mary
You know how to treat a man !
X
Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 6:20pm
Treating a man well is my specialty, dear poet😉
And friends too. Have a great week, Gary.
And friends too. Have a great week, Gary.
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Re: Re. Submerged
1st Aug 2023 6:36pm
Yes, you are an expert
You live what you've written up and down the line !
We need more like you
BIG LIKE
You live what you've written up and down the line !
We need more like you
BIG LIKE
Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 00:03am
Makes you sick, don't it? Lol. Mind you, your poem ain't bad. I think we all have our day at one time or another when we really feel we're kickin' ass! Some have been writing some really good stuff lately, I know what you're getting at though. It's nice being in the zone.
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Re: Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 00:20am
I think I'm getting there Billy.
I guess I'd like to write some pretty words sometimes that dance and float with cadence and verve but the truth is I'm a slice and dice guy who's trying his best to protect and serve.
Stay tuned Mister
Thanks always for your take
I guess I'd like to write some pretty words sometimes that dance and float with cadence and verve but the truth is I'm a slice and dice guy who's trying his best to protect and serve.
Stay tuned Mister
Thanks always for your take
Re: Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 00:27am
Whilst you still have scores to settle, I can't see how you can ever write with proper cadence and verve as you dance & float. It's a terrific thought, though, I'll grant you that! ;-)
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2nd Aug 2023 00:58am
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2nd Aug 2023 00:12am
Re: Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 00:23am
Well you know me Brenda, I wear a lot of hats. Ain't too old to rock and roll and I'm willing to try new ways to say things and tell stories....
Appreciate you
❤
Appreciate you
❤
Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 1:45am
Hey PS
Look at you!
Blending colors and words! You are gifted.
It's a journey that never ends amigo.
Never know when or what will inspire - that's part of the addiction. LOL
Great piece!!
Look at you!
Blending colors and words! You are gifted.
It's a journey that never ends amigo.
Never know when or what will inspire - that's part of the addiction. LOL
Great piece!!
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Re: Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 1:59am
This poem started out one way and ended up totally different. But for the better I believe. I'm taking my time lately and you never know what's going to come out of this pen.
You know what I always say Hot Sauce 🔥
Stay Tuned
Thx
You know what I always say Hot Sauce 🔥
Stay Tuned
Thx
Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 7:20am
Dear PS,
Stuff and nonsense. You’re just fishing. Well guess what? You caught one. I think your poetry is top shelf. And to boot you accompany it with beautiful paintings. This one is no exception. We should all have a fraction of your talent! Now, get back to mayor-ing the site😊xx
H🌷
Stuff and nonsense. You’re just fishing. Well guess what? You caught one. I think your poetry is top shelf. And to boot you accompany it with beautiful paintings. This one is no exception. We should all have a fraction of your talent! Now, get back to mayor-ing the site😊xx
H🌷
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Re: Re. Submerged
2nd Aug 2023 12:21pm
Dear H,
Where have you been ? Think I didn't notice ? Think everyone didn't notice ?? Everyone is saying, Where's H ?
Well, hope you were doing something fun !
I know I know, it looks like I was fishing on this one but it's not true. I definitely have a style which as we know is rough and tumble but when I read others sometimes I envy the way words mix and mingle with effortless panache. I'd like to be able to do that and the good news is I haven't given up yet.
Appreciate the comment on my painting, it's a personal moody favorite. I see moody as good. How weird am I ?
And as I'm telling everyone, stay tuned. I'm patrolling the literary streets and avenues and outlaws will answer to me !
Thx babe
X
Where have you been ? Think I didn't notice ? Think everyone didn't notice ?? Everyone is saying, Where's H ?
Well, hope you were doing something fun !
I know I know, it looks like I was fishing on this one but it's not true. I definitely have a style which as we know is rough and tumble but when I read others sometimes I envy the way words mix and mingle with effortless panache. I'd like to be able to do that and the good news is I haven't given up yet.
Appreciate the comment on my painting, it's a personal moody favorite. I see moody as good. How weird am I ?
And as I'm telling everyone, stay tuned. I'm patrolling the literary streets and avenues and outlaws will answer to me !
Thx babe
X
Re. Submerged
3rd Aug 2023 00:06am
It's cool to be like "damn, that's nice... wish I'd thought of it". Sir PS, you are in a league of your own. GD I love the art work.
LJ
LJ
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Re: Re. Submerged
3rd Aug 2023 00:28am
GD I love this comment 👏
So good to see you LJ
We need you here
You look smashing in that hat
Thx
You honor me and I'm feeling it ..
Art, yes, my second skin
It owns me
So good to see you LJ
We need you here
You look smashing in that hat
Thx
You honor me and I'm feeling it ..
Art, yes, my second skin
It owns me
Re. Submerged
5th Aug 2023 11:35pm
Gawd, I hope you're not including me in this too, seeing how you're referencing your shaft rising! Dude no!! Lol.
Listen, we all fall under the guise of being a writer. Few of us are truly poets. I consider myself simply a creative writer. I see "poets" as those classical, established, historical even, types. But that's just my opinion. We all are writers. I've said it before; Every nail holds the house of DUP together.
Your dual ability is your strength, obviously. And, when you do slow down a bit and concentrate more as a writer, it shows. Especially your past several. I noticed. I think at times you feel the need to "add words" to a painting that you want to share, and not so much to add a picture to the poem that you wrote. The value is flipped.
Painting is your primary much of the time, yes? But, you are a fine writer when you write, especially when that is your first goal.
So keep on keeping on, Gary. You're awesome.
Listen, we all fall under the guise of being a writer. Few of us are truly poets. I consider myself simply a creative writer. I see "poets" as those classical, established, historical even, types. But that's just my opinion. We all are writers. I've said it before; Every nail holds the house of DUP together.
Your dual ability is your strength, obviously. And, when you do slow down a bit and concentrate more as a writer, it shows. Especially your past several. I noticed. I think at times you feel the need to "add words" to a painting that you want to share, and not so much to add a picture to the poem that you wrote. The value is flipped.
Painting is your primary much of the time, yes? But, you are a fine writer when you write, especially when that is your first goal.
So keep on keeping on, Gary. You're awesome.
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Re: Re. Submerged
6th Aug 2023 4:01am
No worries Mark
My fancies are women only so any risings belongs to their Stimulus..
Yes I am an artist first but I write more than paint lately. Sometimes I'll do both at the same time but that's rare. It's more write the poem and then frame it with an existing painting or one I did recently.
Dup is a funny place. I agree, there are few actual poets here but like painting you become self taught. I do enjoy writing narrative type poems. This poem was borne out of a desire to do more with what I have and to slow my process and not try and just dash them out. I'll always be a work in progress and I'm not going anywhere so as I always say at the end.
STAY TUNED
THANKS
My fancies are women only so any risings belongs to their Stimulus..
Yes I am an artist first but I write more than paint lately. Sometimes I'll do both at the same time but that's rare. It's more write the poem and then frame it with an existing painting or one I did recently.
Dup is a funny place. I agree, there are few actual poets here but like painting you become self taught. I do enjoy writing narrative type poems. This poem was borne out of a desire to do more with what I have and to slow my process and not try and just dash them out. I'll always be a work in progress and I'm not going anywhere so as I always say at the end.
STAY TUNED
THANKS
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8th Aug 2023 7:30pm
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Re: Re. Submerged
8th Aug 2023 7:49pm
Slice and dice Phyllis
No gristle
Garner the meat and BBQ it
Down and dirty
Glad you're checking out my poems.
More to come
Stay tuned
Appreciate !
No gristle
Garner the meat and BBQ it
Down and dirty
Glad you're checking out my poems.
More to come
Stay tuned
Appreciate !
Re. Submerged
21st Aug 2023 00:14am
I think other writers aspire to have your talents as well Poet.
Awesome write.
Awesome write.
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21st Aug 2023 2:07am