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Righting The Rules
There's softness to the edges
where my desire for righteous pain
plays at the cusp of your patience
willingness, incarnate
Exploring boundaries is my pure release
a wormhole to wonderland
tumbling topsy turvy by design
realities of normal, being in the eye of the beholder
You, understand perfectly
Why I sometimes act like I do... with you
Why I crave your divine discipline
in our very particular way
reveling excitedly how it's only your
specific administering of,
which affects the deepest parts of me
You know without judgement,
exactly why
I
push
and
I
push
and
I
push
your buttons,
arising in each of us
a calling we were meant to answer
I love how you allow me to almost
appear in control
when we both know
that it's anything but
That knowledge,
is almost enough
to immediately procure me
on hands and knees
earnestly begging
by fiery stare
for all that your own secret fantasies
have ever dreamed to dare
I think of you,
your brand, our brand of playtime
and what it will elicit from my body
[while sharpening my mind]
as I dreamily (and purposely)
leave my hair clipped up
(knowing the requirement is leaving it down)
I especially start to struggle
with waves of anticipation
as I try to hide my latest tattoo
which you last reminded me
was to be something we both discussed first
and beforehand.
Oh how I wickedly smile,
biting my lower lip
as if to quickly sample
pain mixed with pleasure
in the very moment
that anticipation swells to a tantalizing peak
I can smell our combined essences,
It's a petrichor of
life altering sense memory— an affirmation
making it almost impossible to think clearly
as desire ripples and roars
testing my resolve as it tears
through every single part of my body
I once told you
that my ability to obey—
to become what we both seek
(like you require and like I have searched for)
is largely based upon
how I'm dealt with
when I'm 'behaving badly'
I don't ever want to have to explain myself
in soul crushing tedious repetition
In fact, in my eyes
nothing could be worse
or less attractive
It's the intuitive nature
of your epicly masterful mind,
quick wit that charms and intrigues
combined with our shared delicacy
of distinct thoughtfulness;
care and longing
in how we chose to live.
Understanding
the value of being seen
and acutely accepted.
Coming together
through the sweet rapture of tears
bravely falling down my cheeks or
the way my sobs squeak out
with each hoarse begging plea of release
accompanied by your alluring laugh
as you ignore my cries
and continue the task at hand -
inching us towards transcendence
Striving for that bit of unexplored unknown
tamping down fears
trusting you(us) to push me past where it was
I thought I could handle
and into a whole new universe—
our new realm of exquisite existence
Rewriting together
what could be possible...
into what is.
Published 3rd Jul 2023
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3rd Jul 2023 9:17pm
3rd Jul 2023 9:20pm
Thanks, GR
It's nice to know there was an impact and that you found a little something that struck a chord.
Appreciate you taking the time,
🌹B
It's nice to know there was an impact and that you found a little something that struck a chord.
Appreciate you taking the time,
🌹B
3rd Jul 2023 10:23pm
This sounds like quite an all encompassing relationship. It was exquisitely written with a soft honesty. Def reading it again....and again. 😛
I love stepping into your world of words. It's a magic place.
I love stepping into your world of words. It's a magic place.
4th Jul 2023 00:15am
Your feedback is just lovely, Debbie
Much love and many thanks for stopping in to read.
It's heartening to me that you've found some worth within
Thank you.
-💙
Much love and many thanks for stopping in to read.
It's heartening to me that you've found some worth within
Thank you.
-💙
3rd Jul 2023 10:39pm
3rd Jul 2023 11:45pm
4th Jul 2023 2:32am
I will ring your rules until you are moaning and singing with pure delight. Keep on writing you strong beautiful smart sexy woman.
18th Jul 2023 5:20pm
hahaha.... You're absolutely crazy... thanks for the offer but I'm all good, currently!
I appreciate you, always Francisco!
-B
I appreciate you, always Francisco!
-B
18th Jul 2023 7:11pm
4th Jul 2023 3:50am
Blue, I was hooked and stuck onto every line in this write. I'm not one to submit, but this piece is profoundly significant.
There's different strokes for different folks, which I wholly appreciate and adore. Actually, I am thankful for that fact because how boring would it be if we were all cookie cutter copies!?! No thank you! ... I'm stoked af that you felt every line like you did— hell yeah.. ;)
Thank you for being here, the generous list add, taking the time and for the thoughts you leave me... It's truly meaningful in my eyes.
🌹💙 - xo
Thank you for being here, the generous list add, taking the time and for the thoughts you leave me... It's truly meaningful in my eyes.
🌹💙 - xo
6th Jul 2023 2:00am
4th Jul 2023 6:05pm
5th Jul 2023 5:58pm
4th Jul 2023 6:27pm
We each tempt in our own ways. Can't tempt with out lines and lines were made to be crossed. 🌼💙
5th Jul 2023 5:53pm
Testing limits in the essence of pure discovery has always been so attractive.... I love what you've said here and couldn't agree more, J.
Thank you for sharing with me.
Always a pleasure ✨
🌹 💙
Thank you for sharing with me.
Always a pleasure ✨
🌹 💙
4th Jul 2023 9:14pm
Very enlightening write.
The way you've written this out (explained) makes dominant/submissive much more acceptable. Actually more equal. I can understand better, the role as submissive isn't exactly that of victim.
That is a credit to your descriptive write. Your opening of the psyche involved, not just the body's acceptance of being treated as a tool. Perhaps showing that control isn't really lost completely, just relaxed.
Very well done, B.
The way you've written this out (explained) makes dominant/submissive much more acceptable. Actually more equal. I can understand better, the role as submissive isn't exactly that of victim.
That is a credit to your descriptive write. Your opening of the psyche involved, not just the body's acceptance of being treated as a tool. Perhaps showing that control isn't really lost completely, just relaxed.
Very well done, B.
It's actually never ever about being a victim. It's the 'submissive' who really holds all of the power within this shared and mutually agreed upon dynamic. Without the enormous amount of respect, trust and open communication, there's absolutely zero willingness for relinquishing of control to another. The dominant more than recognizes that and upholds her, his sub, with the highest of adoration, reverence and care. NOTHING takes place without consent and deep seeded desire. I am the epitome of empowerment and beautifully strong in my thoughtful decision to submit. I derive deep soul affirming pleasure, as does my partner, from our fetishistic desires and needs being so in sync. We both consider it not only romantic, meaningful and wholly fulfilling but way more open, truthful and made of a deeper connection than most vanilla/mainstream 'normal' (hate that word) relationships .... I just think you're potentially seeing the Dom/s dynamic from a sort of skewed perspective. The role of a submissive isn't as a tool, far from it. She/he is the very epicenter of all that is and can be possible within sensual kinky playtime. Yes, it's not for everyone but there's no shame, victimhood or embarrassments here... Only beauty, in self expression of the complete and honest truth of someone's heart. To me that's as brave as you can be.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I am deeply and sincerely appreciative of the time you've taken to read and comment.
-S
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I am deeply and sincerely appreciative of the time you've taken to read and comment.
-S
4th Jul 2023 11:19pm
Hi B
I enjoyed the back and forth. The wit of it - between two people.
Using sex to get the upper hand.
The descriptive writing in this is amazing btw!!
You had them both pushing buttons!!
Which gave me a smirk throughout the whole piece. haha
Isn't that what we do in relationships anyway? Push buttons!!
Keeps things interesting.
I'm taking a bow to you for this write amiga!
I loved the ending too.
Making possibilities into reality
I enjoyed the back and forth. The wit of it - between two people.
Using sex to get the upper hand.
The descriptive writing in this is amazing btw!!
You had them both pushing buttons!!
Which gave me a smirk throughout the whole piece. haha
Isn't that what we do in relationships anyway? Push buttons!!
Keeps things interesting.
I'm taking a bow to you for this write amiga!
I loved the ending too.
Making possibilities into reality
5th Jul 2023 6:34pm
Hey there, lady
Sometimes the power exchange between two consenting adults is as heady as the actual physical aspects... It's all in the eye of the beholder... There's a reason there's so many different flavors of ice cream, right?!?... heh heh.. 😏
Thank you for feeling what it is that I had hoped to convey... it's truly invigorating and motivational.
Always love seeing you 🦋
🌹💙
Sometimes the power exchange between two consenting adults is as heady as the actual physical aspects... It's all in the eye of the beholder... There's a reason there's so many different flavors of ice cream, right?!?... heh heh.. 😏
Thank you for feeling what it is that I had hoped to convey... it's truly invigorating and motivational.
Always love seeing you 🦋
🌹💙
5th Jul 2023 5:17pm
5th Jul 2023 5:30pm
7th Jul 2023 10:37am
Under the right circumstances, sometimes the only reward that meets the occasion is a bare hand on a bare bottom....even in public....to show willingness to be bent without breaking.
Satori.
And arousal.
Perspective.
Satori.
And arousal.
Perspective.
7th Jul 2023 3:40pm
sudden enlightenment.... indeed...
That's what I continue to crave, even when I'm not aware, fully, I need that.... am driven by it...
Really enjoyed your newest poem.
It had me wound up, a bit... in a very contemplative state.
-Ty
That's what I continue to crave, even when I'm not aware, fully, I need that.... am driven by it...
Really enjoyed your newest poem.
It had me wound up, a bit... in a very contemplative state.
-Ty
9th Jul 2023 3:20am
Susan,
This amazing write exquisitely depicts all of the powerful and emotional dynamics of love & sex
in the sensual world of B.D.S.M.
I am profoundly bound and struck by the power of your seductive submission.
Your expressive erotic poetry has an arousing pulse that always stimulates.......the mind?? lol
You write with such an eloquence and grace that you can effortlessly even transcend fantasy into reality with your ink.
Your appeal to portray a perfect symphony of beautiful conditioning made by two amazing sexually empowered individuals in this misunderstood lifestyle is simply beautiful.
''A scintillating symphony of empowerment and desire expertly expressed in Verse'' !!!
A pure fortification of consensual kink and mutual empowerment that stimulates wittingly because of your poetic genius.
I truly found myself immersed in this journey of ecstasy, desire, and love with every brilliant passage.
You are an Inspiration!
Genius!!!
This amazing write exquisitely depicts all of the powerful and emotional dynamics of love & sex
in the sensual world of B.D.S.M.
I am profoundly bound and struck by the power of your seductive submission.
Your expressive erotic poetry has an arousing pulse that always stimulates.......the mind?? lol
You write with such an eloquence and grace that you can effortlessly even transcend fantasy into reality with your ink.
Your appeal to portray a perfect symphony of beautiful conditioning made by two amazing sexually empowered individuals in this misunderstood lifestyle is simply beautiful.
''A scintillating symphony of empowerment and desire expertly expressed in Verse'' !!!
A pure fortification of consensual kink and mutual empowerment that stimulates wittingly because of your poetic genius.
I truly found myself immersed in this journey of ecstasy, desire, and love with every brilliant passage.
You are an Inspiration!
Genius!!!
11th Jul 2023 4:40pm
I read and reread these unbelievable comments and just cannot even hope to reply with enough gravitas that conveys my own deep deep gratitude.... you humble me with all your hallmark generousity - 🙏🏻
Your perceptions are of an unmitigated awareness and enormous comprehensive understanding,the kind that I dream of and that sends my senses reeling, in the very best of ways. You feel the atmosphere that I wrap myself in and the raw truth of how and what I unabashedly require... and you bask in that knowledge with eyes open and sans all judgments. We are two sides of the same coin, reflecting off of each other's brilliant sheen....its beyond heartening.. It's transformative.
The sense of your immersement and excitement at being swept up within the revelations shared, only added fuel to my existing fire...and that burn... oh that delicious burn, feels exactly like the heated vortex that continually stirs inside myself, at times begging and pleading to be released.
Where known meets known.... can be an exquisite torment as well as true beauty, incarnate.
Thank you for for being that beautiful revelation.
I cherish you, always, my lovely soul soothsayer...
-💙 -
Your perceptions are of an unmitigated awareness and enormous comprehensive understanding,the kind that I dream of and that sends my senses reeling, in the very best of ways. You feel the atmosphere that I wrap myself in and the raw truth of how and what I unabashedly require... and you bask in that knowledge with eyes open and sans all judgments. We are two sides of the same coin, reflecting off of each other's brilliant sheen....its beyond heartening.. It's transformative.
The sense of your immersement and excitement at being swept up within the revelations shared, only added fuel to my existing fire...and that burn... oh that delicious burn, feels exactly like the heated vortex that continually stirs inside myself, at times begging and pleading to be released.
Where known meets known.... can be an exquisite torment as well as true beauty, incarnate.
Thank you for for being that beautiful revelation.
I cherish you, always, my lovely soul soothsayer...
-💙 -
11th Jul 2023 10:11pm
Wow! Wonderfully insightful.
You have captured the essence of power dynamics.
❣️🙏🏽
You have captured the essence of power dynamics.
❣️🙏🏽
11th Jul 2023 10:59pm
12th Jul 2023 3:28am
My reading has never beheld the spirituality of submission with such ferocious beauty as here. I am in awe and aroused by your words more than any graphic depiction ever could. This is what it is all about. And no one does it better than you my friend.
Much love,
John
Much love,
John
12th Jul 2023 4:03am
This is a favorite of mine .... I'll let you in on a little secret (it's probably the closest I've come in truly representing me, as I love and play in my real life) it's not often that I am that blatantly open, so I'm pure joy, that you found such pleasure within this piece, because it's extremely meaningful.
Thank you, my darling... thank you.
🌹💙
-Susan
Thank you, my darling... thank you.
🌹💙
-Susan
14th Jul 2023 5:13pm
Sometimes it’s better to not abide by the rules. Pushing boundaries forcing anticipation and thrill at the unknown consequences or erotic discoveries while learning more of yourself and partner.
The feline hunter cloaked as a timid house cat; the master not realizing they are really the mouse. Toyed with until nourishment is wanted.
Excellent capture of the dynamics of the bdsm roles and how the roles aren’t black and white, but can be smudged. The intuition on what the other needs – priceless. The reader is captivated by your adventure (and on both sides of the prespective).
Hope this partner is authentic and not just your desire in words.
The feline hunter cloaked as a timid house cat; the master not realizing they are really the mouse. Toyed with until nourishment is wanted.
Excellent capture of the dynamics of the bdsm roles and how the roles aren’t black and white, but can be smudged. The intuition on what the other needs – priceless. The reader is captivated by your adventure (and on both sides of the prespective).
Hope this partner is authentic and not just your desire in words.
18th Jul 2023 5:16pm
Luckily, there is authenticity here!
Love that you found yourself in tune and captivated, Leo.
There's just something about trying to live out loud on the page that I continue to try to capture.
So glad you felt that spirit.
Much love and endless appreciation,
🌹-💋
Love that you found yourself in tune and captivated, Leo.
There's just something about trying to live out loud on the page that I continue to try to capture.
So glad you felt that spirit.
Much love and endless appreciation,
🌹-💋
14th Jul 2023 6:43pm
"that anticipation swells to a tantalizing peak"...
it's these kinds of lines you weave that make the reader swoon and filled vivid scenarios.
it's these kinds of lines you weave that make the reader swoon and filled vivid scenarios.
18th Jul 2023 5:18pm
Hell Yesssss!!
If I can get a swoon outta you than my goal is met!!
That's one helluva an awesome comment, Walter.
Thanks for feeling this piece, it's a personal favorite.
Hope you are doing well,
🌹B
If I can get a swoon outta you than my goal is met!!
That's one helluva an awesome comment, Walter.
Thanks for feeling this piece, it's a personal favorite.
Hope you are doing well,
🌹B
16th Jul 2023 5:03pm
Holy damn, you are so fucking hot I have to bathe in Tabasco to cool down enough to comment.
Exquisite explanation of the pendulum. And this…
“I don't ever want to have to explain myself
in soul crushing tedious repetition
In fact, in my eyes
nothing could be worse
or less attractive”
Chef’s fucking kiss…. Muh-wah!
Discussion of boundaries and of expectations , what works and what doesn’t, what feels good and what doesn’t… that is necessary. But fuck, having to go over the same shit again, and again, and again takes the sparkle from it. If it isn’t a tuned pitchfork, it isn’t going to work.
You really did great work expressing the strength and fragility of a constantly-equalizing dynamic. Work is required from both parties.
Hand me the Tabasco?
18th Jul 2023 5:14pm
Your comments are the extra spice that you add to make that tingle last and last.... 🔥🌶️♨️
Yeah, I know not everyone is a mind reader but I definitely reward and highly covet when someone actually listens... AND retains... That's a huge part of how and where sexiness stays alive and well.
It's high praise that you've left me, B...thank you for taking the time you do. It might be silly, but it really does help me when I read how you view and feel what I write. Your pov and the way you leave feedback is unlike any other and I take what you say to heart. It means a lot and I learn so much that I consider truly valuable input.
You're astronomically spicy yourself, adding hot sauce might border...
dangerous! .....(Woo-hoo!!)
You're awesome.
-x
Yeah, I know not everyone is a mind reader but I definitely reward and highly covet when someone actually listens... AND retains... That's a huge part of how and where sexiness stays alive and well.
It's high praise that you've left me, B...thank you for taking the time you do. It might be silly, but it really does help me when I read how you view and feel what I write. Your pov and the way you leave feedback is unlike any other and I take what you say to heart. It means a lot and I learn so much that I consider truly valuable input.
You're astronomically spicy yourself, adding hot sauce might border...
dangerous! .....(Woo-hoo!!)
You're awesome.
-x
27th Jul 2023 7:32am
Well I'm late to the party and it's all been said so I'll just say Wow!! :) and .....uh.....Wow!! :)...Oh! Almost forgot.....Wow!!
hahaha... There's no time frame here... Your arrival is spot on!! ;)
Thanks for the kind and very generous "wows" That was invigorating and made me smile.
Glad you enjoyed your.
I appreciate you diving in!
🌹💙 - B
Thanks for the kind and very generous "wows" That was invigorating and made me smile.
Glad you enjoyed your.
I appreciate you diving in!
🌹💙 - B
