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Atomic beauty
I’ve always thrived in heat;
and it’s almost
never too
hot
But you’re an elemental force
not a temperature.
You’re something liquid and steel
that melts your skin to my bones
and makes me feel like
I’m in danger
My finger in your mouth,
our gazes locked,
you pick me up,
fingers dimpling
the flesh of my ass
as I automatically
wrap my arms
around your neck,
legs around your waist,
and press against you,
needing to feel
my chest blister from
the you-UV rays
and you drop me on the bed
as if it were both altar and pyre.
Something primordial crawls
through my guts
and I lie back,
arching and wanton,
eyes only on you.
You place an ankle on your
wide
strong
shoulder,
run your face
down the length of my leg,
and my fingers reflexively
clench in the sheets.
I break out in chills
as your chin scrapes against
my trembling inner thigh.
My fingers find their boldness
and run through your hair,
whisper light,
a moment of reflection
perhaps,
before you hit the ignition switch
and blow me to shreds
with the detonation
of your lust
And I understand heat
for the first time.
I understand it can be too hot.
I have a bare cognizance
of it as my toes dig into the bed,
my hands dig into your scalp
and I lose language.
On fire.
Crinkling away to nothing.
Blown to ash by the wind,
like a blackened
sheet of paper
with
love words
on it.
and it’s almost
never too
hot
But you’re an elemental force
not a temperature.
You’re something liquid and steel
that melts your skin to my bones
and makes me feel like
I’m in danger
My finger in your mouth,
our gazes locked,
you pick me up,
fingers dimpling
the flesh of my ass
as I automatically
wrap my arms
around your neck,
legs around your waist,
and press against you,
needing to feel
my chest blister from
the you-UV rays
and you drop me on the bed
as if it were both altar and pyre.
Something primordial crawls
through my guts
and I lie back,
arching and wanton,
eyes only on you.
You place an ankle on your
wide
strong
shoulder,
run your face
down the length of my leg,
and my fingers reflexively
clench in the sheets.
I break out in chills
as your chin scrapes against
my trembling inner thigh.
My fingers find their boldness
and run through your hair,
whisper light,
a moment of reflection
perhaps,
before you hit the ignition switch
and blow me to shreds
with the detonation
of your lust
And I understand heat
for the first time.
I understand it can be too hot.
I have a bare cognizance
of it as my toes dig into the bed,
my hands dig into your scalp
and I lose language.
On fire.
Crinkling away to nothing.
Blown to ash by the wind,
like a blackened
sheet of paper
with
love words
on it.
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Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:06am
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:23am
BOOM!
Thanks turtle. You the BOMB… get it? The BOMB….. ahahahahahhaahaha! I kill me.
Thanks turtle. You the BOMB… get it? The BOMB….. ahahahahahhaahaha! I kill me.
Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:08am
honor and love is everything...to me when it comes to you Woman...I will see the day your name shines in the darkness again. please, tell me though it has come already because I'm getting mean flashbacks of losing you.
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:25am
Darling, you and I have an unbreakable bond. 11 years dear lovely.
This is just … ashes. Nothing reflective of you.
Love you!
This is just … ashes. Nothing reflective of you.
Love you!
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:36am
I'm so fucking tired you guys gonna let a lady handle business alone? stand now please...
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:42am
Whoa! Did this just turn into an orgy?
I’m in!
But we need snacks. My metabolism is crazy high and I gotta eat frequently.
Speaking of snacks… crim you’re looking like a snack right now.
Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:12am
Writing gorgeous erotica
I enjoyed reading your warm verses
Greetings to you
I enjoyed reading your warm verses
Greetings to you
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:26am
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:27am
Fuuuucck! What?!
You didn’t just do the thing. We have discussed complimenting the Wild Betty in her natural habitat. It should never be done. The ego on that beastie?!
Hey… thanks. I mean it.
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:38am
I keep telling her that, too. But then she just does that "aw shucks" crap and ruins it.
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:39am
Fuuuuccck. Styx, et tu?
Thank you my sweet friend. You damn me with false praise.
More please!
I mean… hey. Thanks.
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:42am
That wasn't to you. I was talking to Raconteur. Your gloating head was in the way! Your turn is coming down under...
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:51am
Yeah, because I'm demure and I'm just going to sit here pretty while the men talk over me.
First off, buddy, I'm taller than most people here, so you can't talk over me.
SECOND... WHOA! Hey! What are you doing with my head?
WHOOOAA! HEY! What are you doing with your ...
First off, buddy, I'm taller than most people here, so you can't talk over me.
SECOND... WHOA! Hey! What are you doing with my head?
WHOOOAA! HEY! What are you doing with your ...
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:56am
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LW9ZGT8L7ZA&list=RDGMEM_v2KDBP3d4f8uT-ilrs8fQ&start_radio=1&rv=TsDdtkvtay0
I'm in you guys ready?
I'm in you guys ready?
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:57am
You're taller than most..... That's so awesome! I almost remember when I was as short as you!
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Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:53am
* I'm sure that you know there was an actual atomic bomb given the name "Betty".
You at least kill with silk ropes! I've also noticed a cool pattern in many of your writes, that bring the endings into a personal direction. Like a trailing thought. Like you're willing to admit a difference even if it's practically all physical . You're not A.I. !!!
You are a brutally good writer. And human as (most of) us!
You at least kill with silk ropes! I've also noticed a cool pattern in many of your writes, that bring the endings into a personal direction. Like a trailing thought. Like you're willing to admit a difference even if it's practically all physical . You're not A.I. !!!
You are a brutally good writer. And human as (most of) us!
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 2:57am
(AND SINCE YOU MENTIONED IT... please everyone, get your ass to the forum and chime in on how we, as a community, are going to deal with AI.)
I'm not AI. I wish.
You are a brutally good reviewer.
Also? Don't talk over me. It makes me obnoxious.
I'm not AI. I wish.
You are a brutally good reviewer.
Also? Don't talk over me. It makes me obnoxious.
Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 6:49am
An explosively hot, visualisable picture of a session you paint. Favourite chunks:
You place an ankle on your
wide
strong
shoulder,
run your face
down the length of my leg,
and my fingers reflexively
clench in the sheets.
I break out in chills
as your chin scrapes against
my trembling inner thigh.
My fingers find their boldness
and run through your hair,
whisper light,
a moment of reflection
perhaps,
before you hit the ignition switch [best image of the clitoris, I think]
and blow me to shreds
with the detonation
of your lust
You place an ankle on your
wide
strong
shoulder,
run your face
down the length of my leg,
and my fingers reflexively
clench in the sheets.
I break out in chills
as your chin scrapes against
my trembling inner thigh.
My fingers find their boldness
and run through your hair,
whisper light,
a moment of reflection
perhaps,
before you hit the ignition switch [best image of the clitoris, I think]
and blow me to shreds
with the detonation
of your lust
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 1:11pm
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 1:31pm
First poem I've read described as Atomic, I am used to seeing Volcanic with previous ones here. You show yourself an Atomic [Sex] Kitten* here!
*A play on name of British girl group Atomic Kitten.
*A play on name of British girl group Atomic Kitten.
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Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 10:21am
Re: Re. Atomic beauty
6th Apr 2023 1:12pm
Re. Atomic beauty
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7th Apr 2023 2:39am
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Re. Atomic beauty
7th Apr 2023 9:23pm
When I read books, I'm a sucker for, Paranormal Romance. I leave this world while my head is between pages, but it has to be written well, so I become the voyer. They are loaded with erotic scenes, which are so detailed that the reader is able to be present, and that is how you write, so detailed that I'm present, not in DU, but in your story.
You could write books and I would be gripped.
Absolutely fantastic writing Betty 😘
You could write books and I would be gripped.
Absolutely fantastic writing Betty 😘
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Re: Re. Atomic beauty
8th Apr 2023 1:59am
I love those too, Mags, so I realize what high praise that really is. Thank you my friend. I appreciate you!