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Palm Full Of Jade
Our goodbye will be as a bending stem
Your body, your flower, will close
The aftershocks will be down
to the trembling of wind chimes
No matter how lightly
I walk off my departure
The wooden porch, floor worn
by the scuffling of my old boots
The stain removed by the bleaching
in a path, of my many exits
And by our times greeting each other
at the steps, rushing the entrance
When our eagerness
would split your thighs
At the silence, this now idle
of the wind chimes
Your heart will separate the two flowers
that it's carried since our inception
The yellow first, as hope fades
into this final dusk
Then the orange, a storm we fooled ourselves
into thinking was love
But, my god, how lightning lit everything
at the creation of that lust
They say that blood is blue
until it sees the light of day
Perhaps then, the sky is where
we should have kept things
Instead of in the dark
in those caverns, in our hearts
Your bare feet, upon your porch
painting it pink, as you watch me go
Your soles absorbing my splinters
as you swear you feel nothing of it
Your defiance, at promising
for me to not worry
That jade stays warm
continues its self
Regardless of how cold the hand
that last held it
Like your book of poems
that you lost a night
of sleep and dreams
wondering if I was ready
To read them, to know you
besides just your skin
and the pink of your blush
and the pink of your flower
that opened easier than our words
That conversation, of you saying
Read this one
Skip that one
And so I read every one you said don't
It's in that black and white
that I truly knew you
The ink, like scars upon pages
of your paper skin
All do, fade into grey lettering
but they never go away from you
An earth-warm stone, is jade
You'll never be cold
holding it to your heart like that
and I would never take it from you
Because I can't promise you
I'd not bring a winter sometime
How then, you'd complain
that you can't write
with such shivering bones
I'm not one for goodbyes
So I will leave you with
We will be together again
in our words
Perhaps then we can rewrite
the outcome
I will meet you with white flowers
and you can color them
with your mood
Dare it be red.
~~~
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Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 2:53pm
Ain't that a messy parting
Ain't enough whiskey in the bar to mend those wounds
BIG
Ain't enough whiskey in the bar to mend those wounds
BIG
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:18pm
Ah my friend, whiskey soaks these words. And then I mask them with ginger. To golden the hue even more, regardless of the darkness around them.
Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:23pm
It's fascinating that I had a cup of Ginger and Lemon tea this morning. Something I rarely do. Mysterious
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Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:11pm
Gorgeous writing, Styxian. The closing lines bring raw and bittersweet emotion. Really loved this one!
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:29pm
Thank you much Luna!
This write is completely inspired by things I read recently. I get a lot of ideas that way. It adds the color especially. I'm a sponge when it comes to reading good stuff. Personal stuff. It makes it feel all real.
This write is completely inspired by things I read recently. I get a lot of ideas that way. It adds the color especially. I'm a sponge when it comes to reading good stuff. Personal stuff. It makes it feel all real.
Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:40pm
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 3:14pm
Powerful... sweeping poem... lifted me up... carried me along... one of the... if not the best poem of yours that I have read... excellent from start to finish...
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
Really? Well damn. Because I was actually more satisfied with this one more so than many of my other ones in here. It's the way I like to write. My comfort zone, I suppose.
Thank you tons, for saying how it reaches the goal that I hoped for.
It didn't follow my thoughts at all, after the first stanza. It just went it's own direction. Thankfully it turned out decently.
You helped me breathe easier! Thank you!
Edit; Your pooch, Jade, looks like she's reading it too! It's not about her, I promise! Lol
Thank you tons, for saying how it reaches the goal that I hoped for.
It didn't follow my thoughts at all, after the first stanza. It just went it's own direction. Thankfully it turned out decently.
You helped me breathe easier! Thank you!
Edit; Your pooch, Jade, looks like she's reading it too! It's not about her, I promise! Lol
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 6:32pm
Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 11:24pm
Thanks Pink! I need to add a picture to this. There's a super nice flower blooming in one of my pots. I was staring at it off and on (impatient!) while writing this one on my back porch. I'm sure someone can tell me what kind of flower it is. Lol.
Anyway, colors became a thing in this write. I never did mention green, even though I used jade(as the stone) .
I appreciate your swirls!
Anyway, colors became a thing in this write. I never did mention green, even though I used jade(as the stone) .
I appreciate your swirls!
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 10:04pm
'I will meet you with white flowers
and you can color them
with your mood'
That's some good stuff, much enjoyed
and you can color them
with your mood'
That's some good stuff, much enjoyed
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 11:27pm
Thank you, Kasai! I think the beginning and the ending of this makes it worth the rest. And I appreciate your picking out the end to mention. I wanted it to have some hope for what may follow.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
2nd Apr 2023 11:41pm
Sighing in poetic respect to have read such an amazing piece, my poet
I would love for you to do a spoken word piece on this
Just to hear the temple of your voice, when reading those enticing stanzas
You are so gifted and to sift my mind through your embracing words is like eating ice cream on a hot day, it's so refreshing.
Enjoy your Sunday and have a very humbling upcoming week.
I would love for you to do a spoken word piece on this
Just to hear the temple of your voice, when reading those enticing stanzas
You are so gifted and to sift my mind through your embracing words is like eating ice cream on a hot day, it's so refreshing.
Enjoy your Sunday and have a very humbling upcoming week.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 00:30am
Well thank you so much SKC. Note though, that I cannot do spoken word. I won't try. I'm glitchy that way. For reals. And I damn sure can't recite! Lol.
I will stick to writing them down, and let them speak for me.
Thank you very much for the kind comment. It lets me know I'm doing okay at this stuff.
I will stick to writing them down, and let them speak for me.
Thank you very much for the kind comment. It lets me know I'm doing okay at this stuff.
Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 00:36am
Fair enough, I thought I would place the suggestion at your feet, however, I will accept your poetic prose anyway as long as I can enjoy them in merit, which I always have.
And you are humbly welcome, my poet.
And you are humbly welcome, my poet.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 1:09am
I honestly do have some kind of mental glitch, that causes me to butcher language aloud. And I have a mixed accent, too. That ping-pongs out my mouth on its own accord.
The more comfortable I am around someone, the less I screw up language. And if I'm being quiet, the "oh shit!" Is coming. Lol.
The more comfortable I am around someone, the less I screw up language. And if I'm being quiet, the "oh shit!" Is coming. Lol.
Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 7:20pm
LOL... and we will not want to disturb that confession in the least.
Enjoy your Monday, my poet
Enjoy your Monday, my poet
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 00:45am
Well holy shit, thanks a tonnage for that comment.
And, really, you are already learnt. You write polished. The builds seem easy for you, so you simply shine them up. They're born classics.
This write is directly from things I've read over the weekend. I don't have the high skills for fine crafting. But I do excel at taking a mood from others and building something of my own. It's like I'm never alone when I write. "They" are here too. I write towards the inspiration . And count yourself as part of that. Your last one especially kicked ass.
Few dudes have the balls to compliment other guys in here. The ones who do show their own confidence in themselves. Skill enhances maturity, it seems. You display both very well.
Thank you very much, Raconteur.
And, really, you are already learnt. You write polished. The builds seem easy for you, so you simply shine them up. They're born classics.
This write is directly from things I've read over the weekend. I don't have the high skills for fine crafting. But I do excel at taking a mood from others and building something of my own. It's like I'm never alone when I write. "They" are here too. I write towards the inspiration . And count yourself as part of that. Your last one especially kicked ass.
Few dudes have the balls to compliment other guys in here. The ones who do show their own confidence in themselves. Skill enhances maturity, it seems. You display both very well.
Thank you very much, Raconteur.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 00:16am
Like, what Raconteur said? THAT!
But also... Styx... you... holyshit!
They say that blood is blue
until it sees the light of day
Perhaps then, the sky is where
we should have kept things
Instead of in the dark
in those caverns, in our hearts
OH! MY! FUCKING! GOD! Why didn't I write this? It's so fucking good that I'm dying of jealousy. Like... how the fuck do you come up with these twists of phrase that are mindboggling good. I want to literally hit something over that.
AND THIS?!
The ink like scars upon pages
of your paper skin
All do, fade into grey lettering
but they never go away from you
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH! That's amazing.
You're amazing. Know that?
And the fucking fact that after all of the callousness of the subject, the narrator still maintains a white flower, a new canvas, ready to paint anew?! That is so damn tragic and romantic that I want to literally cuss you out.
The fuck the rest of us going to do?
That was amazing.
But also... Styx... you... holyshit!
They say that blood is blue
until it sees the light of day
Perhaps then, the sky is where
we should have kept things
Instead of in the dark
in those caverns, in our hearts
OH! MY! FUCKING! GOD! Why didn't I write this? It's so fucking good that I'm dying of jealousy. Like... how the fuck do you come up with these twists of phrase that are mindboggling good. I want to literally hit something over that.
AND THIS?!
The ink like scars upon pages
of your paper skin
All do, fade into grey lettering
but they never go away from you
AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH! That's amazing.
You're amazing. Know that?
And the fucking fact that after all of the callousness of the subject, the narrator still maintains a white flower, a new canvas, ready to paint anew?! That is so damn tragic and romantic that I want to literally cuss you out.
The fuck the rest of us going to do?
That was amazing.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 1:26am
The rest of you are going to continue doing what I'm trying to do; burn this motherfucker down with our words!
I ain't here for fluffy stuff. Neither are you, or most the rest. I want everyone to post their scabs, so we can pick at them!
Betty, I dunno. I just write down what that better half of my brain sees. It's my sense of peace I guess.
I added a comma, after "ink" btw. It breaks up what could be read differently. You helped without even trying! You tend to help frequently, without effort.
And overall, I LMAO over your awesome comment. Thank you for the slap on the shoulder.
I ain't here for fluffy stuff. Neither are you, or most the rest. I want everyone to post their scabs, so we can pick at them!
Betty, I dunno. I just write down what that better half of my brain sees. It's my sense of peace I guess.
I added a comma, after "ink" btw. It breaks up what could be read differently. You helped without even trying! You tend to help frequently, without effort.
And overall, I LMAO over your awesome comment. Thank you for the slap on the shoulder.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 00:46am
I mean.... damn. Others have already said all the good stuff. Well, most of it. Except this: I love your use of colour, and the fact that you ended with red... that spread a big, slow, "fuck yeah" grin on my face. Red is where it's at. And the fact that when I came back after my initial read to comment, and there was that big red flower smashing me in the gut... it's just perfection.
Thank you for sharing your gift with us. Wow.
❤️k
Thank you for sharing your gift with us. Wow.
❤️k
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 1:40am
That's your flower then!
The older I've gotten, the more I like dark red. I've always liked dark orange the most. But I suppose our tastes change as we change too.
That damn flower! I've lived here since November 2021, and that plant (and another just like it) was nothing but long blades growing and dying, over and over. I had no idea what it was. But I kept watering it with the rest of the plants. And bam! Look at that pretty sumbitch! Lol.
I appreciate you calling what I do a "gift". It's really just therapy. Like many of us. I'm a better person because I write. That is a fact.
Thanks hot stuff. I appreciate you.
The older I've gotten, the more I like dark red. I've always liked dark orange the most. But I suppose our tastes change as we change too.
That damn flower! I've lived here since November 2021, and that plant (and another just like it) was nothing but long blades growing and dying, over and over. I had no idea what it was. But I kept watering it with the rest of the plants. And bam! Look at that pretty sumbitch! Lol.
I appreciate you calling what I do a "gift". It's really just therapy. Like many of us. I'm a better person because I write. That is a fact.
Thanks hot stuff. I appreciate you.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
Dear S,
“I'm not one for goodbyes
So I will leave you with
We will be together again
in our words”
Aside from posting another outstanding piece of writing this particular bit was haunting as well as gut wrenching. Everyone above has pretty much said all things complimentary and brilliant. At this point I’d just sound like a broken record. I appreciated reading how your ideas are garnered through reading other things and formed in your own stories to create moods and setting. Great process. This one made me feel sad for what is lost between the two but I guess that’s life on life’s terms. Amazing write, as per. H🌷
“I'm not one for goodbyes
So I will leave you with
We will be together again
in our words”
Aside from posting another outstanding piece of writing this particular bit was haunting as well as gut wrenching. Everyone above has pretty much said all things complimentary and brilliant. At this point I’d just sound like a broken record. I appreciated reading how your ideas are garnered through reading other things and formed in your own stories to create moods and setting. Great process. This one made me feel sad for what is lost between the two but I guess that’s life on life’s terms. Amazing write, as per. H🌷
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
4th Apr 2023 2:44am
Obviously some of "me" is in this/these writes, even if I am taking the vibes from what I pick up from some others in here.
I am at a good place in my head! Lol. I just write to write.
Some things in life can be frustrating because of several factors. But I'm a super hopeful guy who continually looks towards tomorrow. Nothing is horrible. And actually, things are looking pretty damn good!
Thanks H. I appreciate your view immensely.
I am at a good place in my head! Lol. I just write to write.
Some things in life can be frustrating because of several factors. But I'm a super hopeful guy who continually looks towards tomorrow. Nothing is horrible. And actually, things are looking pretty damn good!
Thanks H. I appreciate your view immensely.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
3rd Apr 2023 8:50am
You have this style mastered well, Styxian. "Let it flow, let it flow". Easy to read and packed with words that explode. Bravo.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
4th Apr 2023 2:50am
As I say, my "lack of style"! Lol.
I think I do best in such free from. It's what I always liked the most , because it's to the gut and not the brain. And from what I usually read still, it's that message I can easily soak up.
Thank Alviola. Good to see you popping in.
I think I do best in such free from. It's what I always liked the most , because it's to the gut and not the brain. And from what I usually read still, it's that message I can easily soak up.
Thank Alviola. Good to see you popping in.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
5th Apr 2023 1:40pm
I dare to say you've become one of my favorite poets to read. I love how the use of colors make your words come to life. It's a bittersweet farewell but it's a beautiful write through and through.
LJ
LJ
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
6th Apr 2023 2:18am
That's cool, I like a daring woman! I just tweaked my write a tiny bit, because it wasn't edited when I posted it. Maybe I will do the periods and comma thing as well. Lol.
I'm very happy that you like this one, Lj. And thank you for letting me know.
I'm very happy that you like this one, Lj. And thank you for letting me know.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
The balance between natural eloquence and intimate honestly is so proportional in your writing, the voice has emphasis, cadence has suspense. It is a soulful experience. I agree the use of colors is adroit to bring across that anchoring affect on the psyche in the mind's eye.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
6th Apr 2023 2:24am
Listen Daniel, don't be using adroit words on me! Yes, I had to look it up. Lol.
Sometimes I think people sneak made up words on me, to test me. But I readily admit to not knowing some (a lot of) words! Lol.
I love your descriptive elements describing my write. I tried to extend the poetic vibe a bit more than my norm. I had some good motivating reads pushing me.
Sometimes I think people sneak made up words on me, to test me. But I readily admit to not knowing some (a lot of) words! Lol.
I love your descriptive elements describing my write. I tried to extend the poetic vibe a bit more than my norm. I had some good motivating reads pushing me.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
8th Apr 2023 6:39pm
Just the way I like my poetry: straight ahead and right into the heart.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
8th Apr 2023 7:40pm
Because our hearts remember forever, as it was, whereas our brains trash everything into pieces.
Not too long ago I was reading this guy's rant about how hearts aren't actually sensory organs, so why do people use it in love poems, etc, so much.
Poor guy. His heart has a hollow beat.
Not too long ago I was reading this guy's rant about how hearts aren't actually sensory organs, so why do people use it in love poems, etc, so much.
Poor guy. His heart has a hollow beat.
Re. Palm Full Of Jade
11th Apr 2023 11:53pm
Hello…
What I find interesting here is the spirit of jade. How a little known fact about it is that in the metaphysical world it encourages acceptance of the self. And just from a me perspective (because I dig those stones) that had quite a lot to say as an undercurrent theme.
There seems to be two direct stories here: the story of the plant, and the story of the stone. And though they are both earth dwellers in the literal sense, in the metaphorical sense they cannot exist without each other. And that feels mighty important to the voice of the poem if I’m perfectly honest.
I guess flowers blooming can be cliche as fuck sometimes. But I like how you’ve used it in a metaphorical way rather than taking a more literal route.
Thank you for sharing this.
-M
What I find interesting here is the spirit of jade. How a little known fact about it is that in the metaphysical world it encourages acceptance of the self. And just from a me perspective (because I dig those stones) that had quite a lot to say as an undercurrent theme.
There seems to be two direct stories here: the story of the plant, and the story of the stone. And though they are both earth dwellers in the literal sense, in the metaphorical sense they cannot exist without each other. And that feels mighty important to the voice of the poem if I’m perfectly honest.
I guess flowers blooming can be cliche as fuck sometimes. But I like how you’ve used it in a metaphorical way rather than taking a more literal route.
Thank you for sharing this.
-M
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Re: Re. Palm Full Of Jade
12th Apr 2023 11:22pm
Well hey you.
Part of my (positive!) dilemma is I write mostly on my back porch. Where there are plants and flowers. So perhaps I go to that well too often?
You're right about the tired cliche of flowers. As per, you're right about practically everything, if i recall correctly. Your comment is good stuff.
Thanks for showing up!
You're needed.
Part of my (positive!) dilemma is I write mostly on my back porch. Where there are plants and flowers. So perhaps I go to that well too often?
You're right about the tired cliche of flowers. As per, you're right about practically everything, if i recall correctly. Your comment is good stuff.
Thanks for showing up!
You're needed.