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Do Animals Sin?
Does he think of her when
my breath brushes over him?
I see her eyes when I kiss the same
flesh her lips have known.
I feel a cold trimmer in my chest as
we cross the lines of fidelity,
certain of tsunamis to follow.
At the moment of his entering,
my eyes drift up to ask,
Do animals sin?
my breath brushes over him?
I see her eyes when I kiss the same
flesh her lips have known.
I feel a cold trimmer in my chest as
we cross the lines of fidelity,
certain of tsunamis to follow.
At the moment of his entering,
my eyes drift up to ask,
Do animals sin?
Published 13th Mar 2023
Author's Note
My fear of mother's absence led me to seek affection from another married man. This has become a pattern in my life. I remember mother saying married men were simpler sometimes because they weren't seeking a bride, then she gave a mischievous smile.
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13th Mar 2023 11:18pm
Love the philosophical question. This query would make a great comp prompt I think.
14th Mar 2023 6:30pm
Thank you for the comment. Hadn't thought of the competition prompt but maybe so.
14th Mar 2023 00:30am
We are all mammals who need to be loved. Keep on writing. Listening to the song The Bad Touch by Bloodhound Gang. Keep on writing.
15th Mar 2023 5:02am
To answer your question, yes and no.
Humans who are devout in faith may sin.
Your average bear that shits in the woods does not sin.
As for your poem in a non-literal sense, I love it. It's full of passion and it gives life to the questions that we often ask ourselves in our daily lives. And yes, it is easier to love someone when you go in knowing their intentions. Well done!
Humans who are devout in faith may sin.
Your average bear that shits in the woods does not sin.
As for your poem in a non-literal sense, I love it. It's full of passion and it gives life to the questions that we often ask ourselves in our daily lives. And yes, it is easier to love someone when you go in knowing their intentions. Well done!
17th Mar 2023 10:14pm
7th Apr 2023 4:49pm
Oh, you grabbed me with this. Since the human animal was "blessed" with a conscience, I suppose we're quite good at it. Love the line, "cross the lines of fidelity."
8th Apr 2023 8:13pm
I would answer the question by saying animals have weaknesses too depending on the species. Animal behaviour is usually dictated by need for food, sense of violated territory, need to defend themselves or their young, need to mate when in season.. Some species mate for life, some are polygamous so notions of monogamy or fidelity might be alien to them..Unneutered stray dogs and cats will promiscuously mate with any unguarded female cat or dog, hence the existence of feral packs.
