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Sonnet Nr.02 Cricket-Football-Rugby
The batsman hit the ball as hard as hell
it flew beyond the line, a certain six
the umpire signalled both hands up to tell
as crowds applauded calmly pleased to bits
The centre-forward dribbled past the backs
and thwacked the ball, off-side, in back of net
the referee was blind or rather lax
or maybe bent the rules to win a bet
The fly-half took the ball and ran the pitch
a sprint of fifty yards, touched down to cheers
the try converted straight without a hitch
and local pubs got stocked with many beers
Who wins who cares its how you play the game
but money tempts with fortune, greed and fame.
it flew beyond the line, a certain six
the umpire signalled both hands up to tell
as crowds applauded calmly pleased to bits
The centre-forward dribbled past the backs
and thwacked the ball, off-side, in back of net
the referee was blind or rather lax
or maybe bent the rules to win a bet
The fly-half took the ball and ran the pitch
a sprint of fifty yards, touched down to cheers
the try converted straight without a hitch
and local pubs got stocked with many beers
Who wins who cares its how you play the game
but money tempts with fortune, greed and fame.
Published 3rd Mar 2023
| Edited 27th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Comp entry for "Sonnets Aplenty!", hosted by MidnightSonneteer.
Sonnet Nr.01 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/350621-man-of-the-people/
Sonnet Nr.03 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/496486-tragedy-in-gaza/
(photo credit: ben-hershey-VEW78A1YZ6I-unsplash)
Sonnet Nr.01 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/350621-man-of-the-people/
Sonnet Nr.03 can be found here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/496486-tragedy-in-gaza/
(photo credit: ben-hershey-VEW78A1YZ6I-unsplash)
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3rd Mar 2023 7:48pm
3rd Mar 2023 9:18pm
Thank you Crim -- the 'clever' bit was that I mainly avoided all three sports by taking up rowing instead (my school was on the River Severn, and (competitive) rowing was a big thing). You could also take a sculling boat in free-time and row upriver to get away from the place and find some peace and quiet in the countryside.
3rd Mar 2023 8:48pm
You've got me thinking about starting up a sandlot team or two!
I have to do it on my own though since no one around my neck of the woods knows anything about cricket.
Seems like a really cool game though.
I have to do it on my own though since no one around my neck of the woods knows anything about cricket.
Seems like a really cool game though.
Thank you for running the comp; (and thank you for the RL and following me). The comp made me realise that though I've written sonnets in the past, I've never posted one on DUP until now (this is a new one written this week). I like the challenges of form.
Regarding cricket, it's a very English/Australian/Indian/Pakistani thing. I'm not sure if it would take off in American culture, but then again, if there's money to be made ... :)
Best regards, Josh.
Regarding cricket, it's a very English/Australian/Indian/Pakistani thing. I'm not sure if it would take off in American culture, but then again, if there's money to be made ... :)
Best regards, Josh.
4th Mar 2023 2:18am
Josh it's good to see some writing from you and I look forward to what you do during NaPo.
4th Mar 2023 9:09am
Thank you Daniel. I think I did one of the NaPos all in sonnets, but it's not really my fortι. However, an occasional re-visit is always worthwhile to overcome one's excuses. Stay well, best regards, Josh.
4th Mar 2023 8:28am
Dear J,
Im not going to pretend I know a single thing about any of these sports but I enjoyed the form and the message. Money/gambling on these games takes away the sportsmanship behind them. This is a terrific write. Its great to see you!
I wish you all the best in the comp.
H🌷
Im not going to pretend I know a single thing about any of these sports but I enjoyed the form and the message. Money/gambling on these games takes away the sportsmanship behind them. This is a terrific write. Its great to see you!
I wish you all the best in the comp.
H🌷
4th Mar 2023 9:20am
Hello H, thank you for commenting, and RL. Your comment 'great to see you' gave me a boost this morning ... I guess I should don this Zeus outfit more often :)
I'm not really a team-player; I compete against myself, mainly in rowing, although I did row in an '8' at boarding-school, competing against other schools. I hope you are doing o.k; bjs, Josh.
I'm not really a team-player; I compete against myself, mainly in rowing, although I did row in an '8' at boarding-school, competing against other schools. I hope you are doing o.k; bjs, Josh.
4th Mar 2023 6:23pm
I'm not a big fan of sports .. this was a smoothly written poem which I enjoyed much more than watching a game.
Best of luck in the comp Josh!
Always wonderful to read you.
Best of luck in the comp Josh!
Always wonderful to read you.
4th Mar 2023 8:16pm
Hi Jemac; thank you. I'm not a team-sports man at all, (as noted in a couple of my replies above), but when at boarding school I avoided cricket-football-rugby by taking up rowing instead. 50 years on I'm still rowing - it's nice and peaceful.
5th Mar 2023 6:21pm
16th Mar 2023 9:28pm
Strong write Josh, the sonnet form though many times strict also delivers as strong message with this subject. As a football fan (or soccer like how they call it in the U.S., or futbol for me), those bad calls leave us wondering where money is exchanging hands.
Well done sir.
Well done sir.
16th Mar 2023 10:16pm
Hi Wally, thanks for commenting. Me, I'm a keen rower since school-age - it was how I avoided cricket, rugby & football :)) but I rowed in an '8' so it was team-work all pulling together - and a crackin' speed we got up to as well - quite a thrill.
21st May 2023 3:24pm
24th May 2023 3:17pm
Follow the money - it answers 95% of questions.
And I'm honoured by your hit-n'-run commenting on some of my poems of late, many thanks. Best regards,
Josh.
And I'm honoured by your hit-n'-run commenting on some of my poems of late, many thanks. Best regards,
Josh.
